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Topic Started: Jul 21 2012, 04:49 PM (56 Views)
HugoStrange
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hey guys any thoughts on my rps any last time i will ask.
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SwitchBlade
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You've improved. Spelling and grammar got better along with being able to present a basic story that can be understood. I like how you used Ashley in the last one. She seems like a fun character i'd like to read more of.

Maybe it's just me, but the extra spacing between lines and paragraphs irks me. It gives the impression that you're trying to make it look longer than it actually is.

That's about it for the time being. Keep on doing your thing.
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