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| Kyousho | Mar 28 2012, 01:22 AM Post #1 |
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The Devil Pig is here!
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Edited by Kyousho, Jun 13 2012, 01:42 PM.
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| Kyousho | Mar 28 2012, 01:23 AM Post #2 |
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The Devil Pig is here!
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Mashed Potatoes? Dear Santa, the proof is in the pudding. - Kyou Edited by Kyousho, Mar 30 2012, 06:39 PM.
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| Erin | Mar 28 2012, 08:10 PM Post #3 |
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Now, let's play together...under the clearest of blue skies.
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It's a good profile, I really liked it, but there are a few things that I should point out. The biggest thing is that the in-depth explanation on 'Tapping' is an empty quote block - there's nothing there. So that needs to be put in before it can be approved. I had some questions on that - in particular, Chapter 3 of your story implies that he can go Kenshiro on people with pressure points, which is a little much - but I'll wait until that's in the profile before critiquing it. In terms of power slots, I'm looking at it like this: 1) Paralysis 2) Reinforcement/Enhancement 3) Projection 4) (pseudo)Healing 5) Perception 6) Armor Which I think checks out, as you've been around for a few seasons (or the character has, anyway - it's stated that he was spending the time training, even if he wasn't being roleplayed during that time ICly), but someone else may jump in and say it's too much. Just to confirm - he doesn't carry swords on him, correct? Only the metal rod? A few clarifications: 1) Qi projection states that it "can easily pulverize rocks and concrete even when not used at full-power." What can it do when it is used at full power? Although it's stated that Trystan would be more likely to restrict himself and not fire a killing blow, that sounds pretty fearsome, so I'd like an upper bound of some sort placed on it somewhere. 2) How strong is the physical defense granted by the Rift armor? It appears to be made of metal, so I'd assume it's equivalent to a set of full plate armor? 3) It says that when his body is enhanced with Qi, he can run faster and jump higher than normal humans - how much faster/higher, exactly? Can he run faster than a speeding bullet? Leap tall buildings in a single bound? And a few things that need fixing: 1) In one section, it states that Qi projections take picoseconds to reach the target, being nigh-instantaneous. But in the section describing catching and re-routing Qi projections, it says that "it is also usually simply easier to leave the attack path" - something that was earlier implied to be nigh-impossible. Would it be possible to fix the contradiction by having the Qi projections be a bit slower? Enough that someone with super reflexes and/or capable of Shunpo would be able to dodge it if they saw it coming. 2) Relatively minor thing, but the Wikipedia link to the Jian page needs fixing, you seem to have copypasted the URL twice, so that the link leads to "http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jianhttp://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jian". EDIT: Also, one question, as it isn't really explained I think but seems pretty important. Does he have a limited pool of Qi that he can use for his abilities (assuming that the Qi is drawn from within himself, as implied)? Edited by Erin, Mar 28 2012, 08:17 PM.
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| Kyousho | Mar 28 2012, 08:41 PM Post #4 |
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sorry about the tapping thing disappearing. i didn't notice that it had; i'll put it here so you can see without waiting for me to edit Spoiler: click to toggle while you might say that those are too much, i'd like to offer my POV first. From my perspective, those things that you have listed are coming from the ability to do one thing: master level ability of qi manipulation. as i have based my character off of the chinese wuxia concept of qi in "fantasy" martial arts, these things are pretty much accepted as part of a package as a whole. E.G., once you learn how to manipulate, "tapping", reinforce/enhance/armor, perception and hearing are all commonly used applications of knowing how to manipulate qi, though admittedly with varying effectiveness. Pretty much, after learning manipulation, all these other things branch off from there naturally. The only one that i can concur with you is the projection, ability, as within the context projection is limited to advanced to master class practitioners. However, given that, despite his status as a student, the character himself is the head of and has been practicing and utilizing this one holistic art for the majority of his life in various and frequent combat situations due to his previous lifestyle, i think that this is a reasonable assumption to make. regarding the weaponry - he does not carry any weapons on him. just the dull knife and the pointer.
now onto the other list XD
i think that's everything~ |
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| Erin | Mar 28 2012, 11:00 PM Post #5 |
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Now, let's play together...under the clearest of blue skies.
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As for the Tapping, I think the "Instantaneous movement techniques of any type are blocked from being activated due to an extremely disrupted flow of energy within the target." thing should be removed. I kind of don't like the fact that the power imposes a debuff, and then simultaneously blocks any counters to getting around that debuff. It's enough that he has full-body paralysis - if someone has a power that lets them get around full body paralysis somehow, they should be able to use it, I think. It's only fair. The artillery tank Qi shells might be a little much, but I'll let Cap handle that one. |
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| Captain | Mar 28 2012, 11:33 PM Post #6 |
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Talked it over with Hiro. You're not getting power ups. You're allowed to go with what you were approved with through S3, but even then, I want clarifications. I want to know how strong the Qi blasts are at maximum. |
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| Kyousho | Mar 29 2012, 01:49 AM Post #7 |
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modifications to be made to what is currently in topic:
these are all the changes i believe should be made to the current pending version of the profile in accordance to the verdict given. please tell me if there's anything missing/won't fly~ |
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| Captain | Mar 29 2012, 11:00 PM Post #8 |
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Alright. I've had a day to think this over. So I'm going to reiterate what was said and do a bit more in terms of clarification. I can't find the spot where you talk about regeneration and the like, can you please highlight and quote it for me? I'm willing to let the charging go since it means dropping all dodging capability. Willing to let the 3 attacks per post fly. Not willing to let each one of those 3 be split into 5 sections. Way too much. What kind of armor can the kenki projections cut through? Just saying armor isn't good enough. Like I said last night, several pounds of C4 is far too much. I'd at most say 1 pound of C4, and that's being generous. I wouldn't let that fly with just 1 turn of charging, I'd need like 3, or some great cost. Please avoid minutes and hours when describing powers. Please describe time limits in terms of Posts. ie: Lasts 5 posts, lasts 10 posts, things like that. Going back over your profile something popped up at me:
Several Picoseconds? Maybe our math is wrong but according to what Erin and I ran, it looks like you're attacking at well over 100x the speed of light. Not going to allow that. Edited by Captain, Mar 29 2012, 11:05 PM.
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| Kyousho | Mar 30 2012, 12:34 AM Post #9 |
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Spoiler: click to toggle
please tell me if any further clarification is needed, or if i missed anything you were asking about~ |
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| Kyousho | Mar 30 2012, 01:01 PM Post #10 |
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update: the first post has been edited, including all the fixes and changes that have been requested~ |
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| Erin | Mar 30 2012, 02:46 PM Post #11 |
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You still have the stagnating energy thing on Paralysis...I kind of requested that to be removed =/ |
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| Kyousho | Mar 30 2012, 04:50 PM Post #12 |
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sorry, forgot to take it out. i have edited the first post, changing the lvl 3 tapping no movement thing to "breaks any maintained buffs, spells, area of effects, or etc. that were maintained by self-generated energies" |
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| Erin | Mar 30 2012, 05:14 PM Post #13 |
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So wait, it went from Immobilization to Mage's Disjunction? >_>;; I honestly don't think full body paralysis should be allowed at all. Hyakuji isn't a 1-player game, and it's pretty difficult for people to RP if their characters can't move or speak or do anything meaningful. Your power basically boots people out of their own threads by taking away their ability to make a post. But even though I thought that, I didn't ask you to remove the power completely, just one facet of it. I'm not trying to be mean. I'm trying to be lenient here because you have other mods on you, but you're making it really difficult for me...I've had to ask you to remove this feature three separate times now. |
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| Kyousho | Mar 30 2012, 05:33 PM Post #14 |
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the "mage's disjunction" has been removed~ anything else?._. |
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| Erin | Mar 30 2012, 07:07 PM Post #15 |
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I'll give it a probation stamp. Like Cap said, if anyone complains, we'll bring it back to square one, but a powerful character is fine if you use it responsibly. So we'll just be watching your threads to see how it goes. Not moving it though until Cap's response. |
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