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| Cyberstrike | Mar 15 2010, 09:12 PM Post #1 |
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Character Name: Veritas Stoppable Gender: Male Age: 18 Height: 5"1 Weight: 160 Description or Image of Character Appearance: A red and black version of a ninja outfit is worn by Veritas over a white T shirt that is a muscle shirt. Besides wearing the ninja outfit or the muscle shirt he also wears a set of grey mission cargoes over the pants of the ninja outfit to provide him with difficulty in movement as a test of his capability. Occupation: He would of course be a student but also a master of martial arts. Grade Level: Senior Alignment: Light Powers/ Abilities: He like his father wields the mystical monkey power at his disposal allowing him to use the Lotus Blade and to change it from it's sword form into 5 at the current time other forms of melee or ranged weaponry that he can hold in his hands. Thanks to the mystical monkey power being his, he can teleport, form energy into constructs limited to melee weapons if he doesn't have the lotus blade as well as use it to amplify the skills of whoever he is around. Those are the only techniques he knows of so far using the mystical monkey power. Equipment You Have: He wields the lotus blade which was given to him by Ron when he turned 18. The lotus blade can shift into any weapon that can be held with only 2 hands, such a sword, rifle...etc. It can't transform into imaginary things and it never breaks. 1. Knight Sword 2. Mace 3. Dagger 4. Pocket Knife 5. Hatchet These are the things he mainly transforms the lotus blade into. Super Suit - Will gain later Monkey Ninjas - Will gain later (After an event I have planned) Naked Mole Rat - He has a naked mole rat of his very own which he always keeps with him. The naked mole rat also has some mystical monkey power at it's disposal being affected the same way he was because it was given birth to by a female naked mole rat and rufus. He has named this naked mole rat Avidan. Personality Description: He is not a slacker by nature and more of a man of action. He is suave like his mother was before she died. He is goofy some of the time like his father was before he got killed. He likes animals but hates golfing. He likes to eat fast food since he lives life in the fast lane. Personal History: Ron Stoppable and Kim Possible gave birth to a son named Veritas. They decided to give up doing missions to raise their son up right but that was the mistake they made that would later cost them their life. When he got to be about 7 years old they started leaving him home to go on missions again and when they came home the sitter kept blabbing about random things incoherently as if he had scared her into insanity. Upon noticing that no normal baby sitter could handle Veritas they hired Yori from Yamanouchi. Yori knew that he was the next chosen one and would have to fight more than just Lorwardians and so she spent her time teaching him martial arts such as the Tai Shang Peck Kwar that his father had. When he turned 10 and both Kim and Ron got captured he went on his first mission by himself namely to rescue his mom and dad from Drakken. When Drakken saw him coming at first he was laughing. That of course ended when Veritas used the mystical monkey power and took out 300 Diablo Drones that were human size all in one moment's time. He stopped laughing shortly thereafter for he knew that he had awakened someone worse than either Ron or Kim. He released Kim and Ron under the condition they teach that kid to keep his abilities inside himself instead of on the outside. Veritas moved to shinjayaku after attending Yamanouchi for 8 years and learning how to harness some of his mystical monkey kungfu abilities. He has of course decided that he will not go as far as Monkey Fist did at learning the mystical monkey kungfu, but would rather learn it step by step. Mashed Potatoes? The proof is in the pudding. Edited by Cyberstrike, Mar 17 2010, 09:43 AM.
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| Nickle | Mar 16 2010, 11:57 AM Post #2 |
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Wow. 0-o I can honestly say this is the shortest profile I have EVER seen. Alright, you're going to have at least another paragraph and a half added to the history and also, please explain exactly how he got Wade's intellect. I can understand being taught by him, but was he also born a genious? These are things that would be helpful to know. Also, these two companions that were brought with Veritas, who are they? What purpose do they serve? Cause I'm saying now that if you're thinking these two people are going to be assisting in combat, then you're not going to get them simply by mentioning them in this profile. Who are they? What do they do? These are all things that are helpful to know. Also, please extand on your powers. Great you can do martial arts, but what does the martial art entail? What kind of feats does it allow the person to perform and what's so special about the Lotus blade? Take some time and make some well thought out edits please. =O |
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| Cyberstrike | Mar 16 2010, 01:57 PM Post #3 |
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There, my post is fixed. |
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| Nickle | Mar 16 2010, 04:21 PM Post #4 |
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Ok, seriously, same problem going on here. You're not fixing it, you're just adding to it. Ok, let me just say it all here so that you can seriously put some effort into this: Character Description: Assume I have no idea what Ron Stoppable wore. Describe the clothes, the type of pants, the colour, the fashion in which they are worn etc. Powers: This is big one as unspecified powers and loose descriptions give room for a lot of godmodding and this will cause discomfort amongst the members. Please specify any specific benefits of him using 'mystical monkey power' like what does this do? Does it make him stronger? More flexiable? What? As for getting the Powers of everyone from Team Go, I'm sorry but that's already pushing it. Start with a specific power, not a whole array of them that have no real relation to each other. Equipement: Ok, so the blade can shapeshift. Into what? What are the limitations? As for the power suit, what kind of extra weapons does it have? Does it have any weaknesses? How can it break? How much stress and damage can it take? These are all thing you have to consider. History: Use a set of paragraphs, not just 1. Also and let me make this clear now. Your character does not get clones to assist him in combat. EVER. Rather than making your own allies, why not first try making allies with other memebers on the board. Also, reconsider how long it took him to train. He would not have been able to learn martial arts by the age of 5. A child is still learning primary motor skills by that age. If anything, he would have probably started learning martial arts at the age of 8 and only gotten proficient at it by the time he was a teenager. You have to consider these things. And don't say that mystical monkey power is the cause of him learning martial arts so quickly. At most it would give him the potential to be good at it. Also, just as an idea. Stop ripping off the entire Kim Possible series and trying to roll it into one character. If you want to take aspects of it, then fine, but seriously, its just going back to Monkey Power and Team Go Power. That's like someone trying to say they can control the elements of water, fire, ice, lightning and earth. Without a valid and thought out reason, something like that would not get approved and neither would what you've come up with so far. Please, once again, think your edit through carefully. Edited by Nickle, Mar 16 2010, 04:35 PM.
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| Cyberstrike | Mar 16 2010, 05:50 PM Post #5 |
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Corrected. |
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| Nickle | Mar 17 2010, 01:24 AM Post #6 |
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U___U Dude.... You're making the same mistakes. The profile is certainly starting to look better, but please listen to what I'm telling you now. I'm telling you that you cannot control or summon ANYTHING with your current ower set and to have a blade that mirculously allows you to control ninja monkeys is not going to slide. Let me just say this. This is not Kim Possible's world. And once again, stop comparing things to it. For personality description for example, you're going to need more than just a line. I'm not going to accept this as long as I see things saying: "He is like Ron, but" or "He is like Kim but" Why not try saying he's easygoing, yet knows when to work? That already sounds better. Also in regards to the powers, you're still not hearing me with this. YOU'RE TRYING TO HAVE TO MANY. Now that you've actually explain the powe suit's powers and even added more of your own, I'm going to say you need to choose. I'm perfectly ok with allowing invisibility and teleportation, because those are common things with a ninja. However, I want you to put limitations on it. How long can he stay invisible for? For 2 posts? For 6? How long before he starts getting tired from overuse of this power? The same goes for teleportation. How far can he teleport? I'm fine with energy manipulation, although I'm assuming it is limited to charging his sword and doing the previous skills I just went over. Secondly. I want a FULL list of things the lotus blade can transform into. Not an etc after mentioning just 2. Hell, that's giving you the freedom to create a tank out of it. I'm going to say that this blade, just at the start, can transform into 5 different things. That's a fair starting amount. Now on the flip side. If you the power suit, then you're going to have to ditch the teleportation, invisibility and energy manipulation ninja powers. The power suit description is fine, but now it's time to choose which one you want. I'm not going to allow you having both. On a final note in regards to his character appearerance. Well done. Secondly, you are not going to use that link. Hot-linking is not accepted here. So save the picture to your computer and then upload it to a Photobucket account. One it's up there, upload it here using the Photobucket link. |
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| Cyberstrike | Mar 17 2010, 02:29 PM Post #7 |
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There. The correction is made. I have nerfed his power level down quite significantly and if you want, next time I will erase the 3 powers he does have. |
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| Hiro_Tsukasa | Mar 17 2010, 07:17 PM Post #8 |
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NICE DRIVE!
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APPROVED Just contact me or someone on the Staff in the future about doing that event you spoke of. |
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