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| Narori Nakama; character skeleton thingy.... | |
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| Narori | Aug 18 2010, 06:20 PM Post #1 |
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Personal Information BYOND Key: Rylentless Name: Narori Nakama Gender:Male Age: 12 Rank / Occupation: Academy student Other Information Brief Description: Narori has long light brown hair.His complexion is tanned and his eyes are hazel green.he is slim and is the right height for his weight. Height: 61 inches Weight: 93 lbs Eye Color: Hazel green Hair Style / Color:Short brown spiky hair that leans to the left side more than the right Personality: Narori is a quiet ninja.He hates it when people interrupts his slumber.Narori doesn't know how to make friends he may talk to someone and expect them to be his friend but they never even remember him. Equipment: Plastic kunais,plastic shuriken Background: Narori grew up with his father being a drunkard his mother left due to the fact that she was abused everytime his father got drunk . When Narori turned 12 his father noticed he wasn't able to care for him beacause he spent all his money on buying alcohol. Soon Narori noticed that his father wasn't drinking much like he used to.Narori decided to find out why and followed his father wherever he went eavesdropping on his conversations trying to find out why he stopped drinking and finally found out that his father stopped drinking to save money for Narori to start going to the Yamagakure Academy. Edited by Narori, Aug 19 2010, 05:27 PM.
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| Tai | Aug 19 2010, 11:43 AM Post #2 |
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The Arcane Bullet of Yamagakure
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Mmkay. The background is sketchy. You need to be more defined on why your father was a drunkard, and why he stopped to practice ninjutsu. You need to elaborate on your relationship with your mother. And I don't understand...he stopped smoking to practice ninjutsu? Wasn't he a drunkard? Secondly, you won't know any jutsu to start, and you have to learn them during time in the academy. No smoke bombs, you have to buy those. Elaborate a little more on the personality, I know he's young, but you still need to be a bit more clear, because he is 12, not 9. That brief description, needs to be a little more overall, I want to get more of your character from reading it. Like his apperance, his attitude, and his outlook when he interacts socially with people. All in all, the idea of your character is a little unoriginal, no offense. The scarring was downplayed because he didn't care that his mom left, which I like, but there are too many "boisterous" ninja around, which is just the same as saying you have the same personality as Naruto at times. Please work on the app and try again. |
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| Aoi | Aug 19 2010, 05:35 PM Post #3 |
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The DJ Hero
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Accepted. |
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