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HUNK: The 4th Survivor (REmake)
Topic Started: May 2 2008, 02:07 AM (1,200 Views)
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Chapter 8


Umbrella Research Facility ...

Annette watches the video monitor pointed on the Rigging Platform, and notices the platform rising, as one commando operates the controls from outside the platforms station. "Where did you come from?", Annette stares in horror as she realizes they are taking the same route as her daughter, "No, Sherry."

Annette makes her way down through the facility, fumbles for her access card and stands in front of a sealed room. B.O.W. Experimental Containment. ...

Umbrella Rigging Platform ...

"Echo-1! Repeat! Echo-1. This is Alpha leader. Do you copy" HUNK yells into his com radio, but all that is picked up through his end is empty static.

"What's going on?", the young inexperienced Grimm asks. "Everything's going wrong, i don't even know why we're in this mess. This was suppose to be an in and out mission."

Drake has heard enough from Grimm's unsoldier like conduct, "Do you want to go home. Do you want to live. Then shut up! Get your head in this, and maybe try and produce some results instead of sitting here making poor sad excuses on why you can't move on!"

HUNK interrupts, "Enough! Nobody expected this. There was no plan B going into this," he turns from the argument, "Echo-1, this is alpha leader! Respond."

Jarvis holds his weapon ready as the Rigging Platform ascends to the ground level, "Oh, yeah, this is getting better by the minute."

The Virus is Moving ........

The 9 foot monstrocity Birkin has stopped in his footsteps. Birkin is fighting the virus, aching and catching his breathe. He spits up blood continuosly, his eyes and nose profusely pouring of blood. How much more can i bleed til i die, he think to himself. William Birkin can't speak anymore, save for the excruciating moans and screams from something within, eating his body and his soul. All auditory and most of his sensory nerves are shutting down on him. He's losing a grip on everything, but has one last effort before he is completely inhuman .....

Umbrella Research Faciltity ...

Annette is inside the hidden laboratory of Umbrella's facility. Where only herself and a select few know of. A research room full of stasis tubes, housing experiments, mostly failed experiments. These weren't just any subjects, they were human test subjects. Test subjects that weren't capable of dying.

Zombies. That was the term they would've been labeled days ago. But these are different. They have developed a stronger hunger for flesh, and their skin has turned a dark, crimson red since the days they have developed in the tubules. The researcher's at the Spenser Mansion in Raccoon had labeled these advanced creatures Crimson Heads. But these had become more advanced, and wrapped around their bodies within the tubules protruding out of there mouth was a seven foot tongue ....

Umbrella Rigging Platform ...

The Platform comes to a screeching hault on the ground level. HUNK orders the commando squad, "OK, there may be personel and city workers here. Anyone, i don't care how old, young, or pretty. Noone can witness our presense here. Take them all out"

Drake looks in the direction of Grimm and Jarvis, if only they could see the smirk on his face, "With pleasure boss."

Umbrella Research Facility ...

Annette activates the tubules in the dark laboratory. A timed coding that will give her plenty of time to find safety, and threaten any living thing that stands in their way. The Umbrella codenamed: Lickers. ....

The Virus is Moving ......

William Birkin follows some sixth sense, luring him in the path the commandos went, there is no rigging platform for the monster to ride. He slumps to the ground, agonizing pain takes over him, he grips his right shoulder as he feels something growing, something massive, and hemmoraging out of his right arm ...

Umbrella Reseach Facility ....

As Annette Birkin steps away from setting down the released codes for the B.O.W. tubules, she begins to exit the lab and turns to take one last look before seeking shelter, and says to herself, "You have secrets, Umbrella.", Annette walks away, realizing everything her life had ammounted to will soon be coming to an end, she adds "You wanted it? Steal my husband's work? You're fixing to get it, along with everyone and everything within this precious town." ....
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Thanx for all the wonderful replies and critiquing , Allyson :)

And if you wanna see a Licker in full forum, here he is

http://youtube.com/watch?v=ZztWhlQNc5c

And, I'm trying not to post too many for you at one time, but i just want to let you know, that girl will be back, and plays a HUGE role in the next coming chapters.
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Chapter 9


Umbrella Research Faciltity ...

Annette makes her way into the security office. Desperately fastening the locks, she rushes to the surveillance monitors, scanning for any sign of her husband who is now missing. All the monitor's show is dead faculty members, all Umbrella researchers and personel.

"Oh, my. How did we not see this coming?" ...

Raccoon Ground Level ...

The platform, already reaching the ground level, stays in position. The commandos all exit and are already faced with sewer maintenance personel.

"What's the meaning of this?", a maintenance employee asks the commando intruders.

Pfft! A single suppressed shot comes from Drake's silenced weapon, as he answers "Don't mind us, just passing through."

HUNK replies to Drake's eagerness, "Cool it, we don't want to alarm anyone to our presense. But, lethal force will be necessary once we're spotted."

"Yeah, i think we all got the picture after Drake's display.", Jarvis replies.

"There's a cablecar system that'll carry us to the city's sewer maintenance facility. We'll face more personel there," HUNK says and turns to Jarvis and Grimm, then adds, "Be ready, and do not hesitate." ...

Umbrella Security Office ...

Annette manages to dial out through the facility's hard lines, she contacts a known acquaintance through Umbrella's payroll in Raccoon.

"Bryan? Listen to me!", Annette pleads, "I'm sending my daughter to you. There's been a situation here. Listen to me..."

"Annette? What's going on down there?" Chief Bryan Irons asks, Chief of Police for the Raccoon Police Department, with blood money tied through Umbrella's secrets in his own town; hush money.

"Listen! They're out! I let them all out. Take Sherry, and get out of the city. I can't leave! Listen..." Annette begs Chief Irons, but the line goes dead. ...

Raccoon Ground Level ...

Grimm strips the last of blue and red colored wires from a terminal box. "That should do it for all the hardlines to and from the facility."

"Good. Now, let's get on our way.", HUNK says, "At least William or anyone left alive won't be contacting for help. Don't see how William could've survived, doesn't explain the lockdown, though."

Jarvis says, "What about the wife? We saw no sign of her or the daughter."

"Doesn't matter. Got what we came for.", Drake comments, and concludes, " I'm sure Umbrella has plans for this place once we're long gone." ...

Umbrella Security Office ...

"Bryan? Bryan?" Annette's desperate attempt to get Bryan back on the phone falls on a dead receiver on the other end. Her desperate motion catches a glimpse of movement on a monitor. "What the ...?" ...

The Virus is Moving ...

William is face down on his stomach. His body is lifeless, all but sudden twitches and muscle spasms. His right arm slings out to his side, palm down. there's a large 2 foot slit down the side of his right bicep, with a tint of yellow hidden behind the open scar. His left arm slams down and pushes his body up, as his right hand suddenly bursts open with three large two foot razor claws.

He stand to his feet. The enemy within, awakening. A victim to his own obsession and experimentaion... The G-2 mutation has taken over, and William Birkin is no more ....

Umbrella Security Office ...

"Oh my!" William, no!" Annette can only watch in horror as she knows what her husband has done to himself. "William, why?" she questions his actions to herself, and realizes in horror the G-virus's characteristics of passing embryos, "William, no! No, no... Sherry!" ...

The Virus Is Moving ....
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I'll do a chapter at a time. :)

Ok, about chapter 8. I like the first part of The Virus in Moving..., but I think you need to add a little more description to how he is changing. Does he develope something, but then it pops in order to do something? Things like that.

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"What the hell? We were used," Jarvis questions. "Just another set of expendable pawns for Umbrella to dispose of."
I don't thing "questions" is a good word. Maybe, "comments" or "suggested" or something like that. :)

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