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| hcfwesker | May 2 2008, 02:07 AM Post #1 |
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OK, here's my "kinda" fanfiction on my favorite Resident Evil character. Don't want to overload one post, which i'm sure i did.:D but this is my prologue to my story, and not to interfere with RE Canon, I'm just gonna expand and detail on a certain event in RE2, The 4th survivor. If you do reply and tell me you like it or hate, no problem... just don't quote the story in your reply, I'll know what you're talking about. thanx:) I'll do my best not to ruin the character of HUNK, so don't expect snappy, corny one-liners :cool: For those who haven't played RE2 or just need a brief reminder, here is the cinema my story is based on. http://youtube.com/watch?v=ZCxvlQMNYso I am writing an original story preluding and concludiong events from this cut scene and The 4th Survivor mini-game from RE2 and RE:UC And Author's Note::: there are two stories going on at the same time. When HUNK is in Raccoon city locations, it's the present, when it is a Foreign location RockFort Island, Paris Lab Facility, etc. this is a flashback revealing vague memories HUNK has while on his mission in Raccoon City, just think of the tv show LOST if you've seen it. PROLOGUE Umbrella Evac Chopper ... "So, ever wonder what your life would be like if you never put your name on the Umbrella payroll?", the question runs through the lone survivor's mind as he is safely transported out of the ruins of Raccoon City. The city in blazes, the dead roaming free; and every memory he had going into the city, suddenly vanished and erased by the chaos that has enveloped this once peaceful town. The chopper blades muffle out every sound, even the sound of his own voice. Through his head-set he hears his squad pilot, "Only you survived Mr. Death. Always only you survive." HUNK removes his helmet and head-set piece, closes his eyes and says to himself, "The death cannot die..." HUNK relaxes back in his seat, his eyes fixed on those seats once occupied by his fallen team members. All of them dead. "I should be dead, too", he thinks to himself, "who would've thought the one little thing we went in to retrieve would have been the one thing that would've gotten all of us killed?" Like any mission accomplished, the commando squad leader usually passes out cigars for his partners on a mission accomplished. Tonight is different. There is no celebration, only reminiescances of what happened... and what went wrong. HUNK lights the first cigar, puffing heavily to get the cigar fully lit. He takes a deep puff, and slowly exhales as his mind wanders to the start of this nightmare he has miraculously survived...... UMB underground railway ... The outskirts of Raccoon city. An unpopulated part of the city, where desertland and rural mountains occupy the plateau. Four Military based Commandos stand outside a train rail tunnel as an evap chopper flies away out of the distant. "So, we just go in, rescue the doc, and steal his medicine, right?" the cocky Drake asks. One of Umbrella's finest as far as commando's go, but HUNK still puts experience over his eagerness. A third team member, Jarvis replies, "You could say that. But don't get over your head yet. Don't forget what happened the last time some Umbrella doc flipped out, the Spencer estate, don't wanna see something like that here, not at all. Let's just do the job and get out." HUNK leads the four armed commandoes into the entrance of the tunnel, "We got a long walk. I hope somebody has something interesting to say on the way." The final team member, Grimm, takes the rear and asks the commandos walking in front of him, "So, ever wonder what your life would be like if you never put your name on the Umbrella payroll?" "Yeah, but i probably wouldn't be here to make sure none of you end up dead during this mission.", HUNK replies with a sarcastic tone in his voice. He says nothing more as he leads the team through the darkened tunnel, on their way to the Umbrella Research Facility hidden underneath the peaceful, rural city of Raccoon. |
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| hcfwesker | May 2 2008, 02:12 AM Post #2 |
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CHAPTER 1 Rockfort Island "Tell me what this is all about. No more 'I'm on a need-to-know basis'!", HUNK demands. "I got a line-up of 'wanna be' soldiers with itchy trigger fingers waiting for a mission like this. But I know Umbrella, something about this one doesn't sound right." "You're the best I got. Since when do you question an order, soldier?" Lt. Rodrigo says, pulling out a sealed file labeled 'confidential' from within stacks of files on his desk. He slides the exposed file across the desk towards HUNK. "Go ahead. Read", Rodrigo pleads. The decorated commando sets his palm flat on the file laying before his eyes. He hesitantly slides the file across the edge of the desk into both of his hands. He begins to unseal the file and asks himself, "What else are we going to contaminate Rockfort Island with?" "Before you open that", Lt. Rodrigo suggests, "Make sure you really want to know the information on that file. In your line of work, soldier, ignorance is a virtue." Rodrigo stares HUNK coldly, then waves his hand for the commando to proceed, "This information doesn't leave this room." Without hesitation, HUNK slides the files out of the broken sealed folder, flips the first page over. "Raccoon City", he say to himself, and begins to read....... UMB underground railway "We should be about halfway through this tunnel by now.", Jarvis says. The tunnel is pitch black, caved in darkness. The four commandoes walking in single file, with night vision goggles lining their commando masks. "Remeber, we have six guards awaiting our arrival at the evac train's gate.", HUNK explains, "There's no other way in around it. We're going to have to go through the front door on this." "Sounds like usual Umbrella territory to me", Drake replies, his cockiness always ready to break the tension. Grimm, the uneasy of the four ask, "So, why the rescue mission on this doctor?" HUNK, leads the way, and explains, "Umbrella knows there are others in this world that would want Birkin and his project for other purposes and they would do anything to retrieve it." "But why are we sent in to extract him and his family?", Grimm questions his squad leader. "Why not just increase security here. Or evacuate the family through proper channels? Why us? Why are we sent in?" Hunk continues forward. Silent. Then, in a cold, darkened tone he adds, "I don't know the details, Grimm, you have to learn in this line of work, ignorance is a virtue." |
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| Allyson | May 2 2008, 04:30 PM Post #3 |
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It's an interesting piece of work. The first thing I noticed was that everything is in present tense, which you meant it to have, and I like it.I think this should be Hunk "Continues forward, silently." or "Hunk continues forward. Silence." But good job. :) And you're the first member to post in Fan Fiction. |
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| hcfwesker | May 2 2008, 07:46 PM Post #4 |
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Hey, thanx for taking the time to read this story. I understand what you mean by the changed sentence, and i know what i did, it's just, this character is based around "avoiding the radar" and i wanted the Silent to stand out. I hope you continue to read and check in as i post more. It may get a little confusing if you've never played the Resident Evil games. But i try to write as if you're seeing the material for the first time. And, i know, i got some typos in there, i really need to fix those. thanx, again. :) Edited by hcfwesker, May 2 2008, 07:56 PM.
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| hcfwesker | May 2 2008, 07:55 PM Post #5 |
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CHAPTER 2 UMB Undergrund railway Four security officers stand side by side at the train's access gate. A dim light leaking through the top of the sealed gate gives little light for the officers to see. One of the officer's, making a routine check in, "This is Daniels. All clear in sector B4", the patrolmen announces through a com radio. At that moment, the four guards see four separate sparks coming from the darkness in front. The last thing each man will ever see. Four direct head shots coming from the skilled commandos, the dead bodies fall limp at the access gate. "Not bad, boys", Drake commends the squad. "Grimm?" HUNK calls to his teammate. "I got it", Grimm replies, moving to the switchbox for activating the railway's gate. Jarvis drags the bodies out of site and returns to his squad, "Four down. I wonder how many more hostiles we'll have to deal with before we find and rescue the doc and his family?" ........ RockFort Island "So, i take it this isn't a rescue mission?" HUNK asks Lt. Rodrigo sittting before him. "Rescue. Yes" Rodrigo answers, then adds, "A doctor. No. There's something bigger. Bigger than you and i could possibly imagine." "And that's this 'G-virus' research of his?" HUNK asks. "No. Not research. An actual completed sample.", Rodrigo steps out of his chair and walks in front of HUNK, leaning in to talk to his face, "this is the day this corporation has been waiting for since Birkin signed on. Birkin has just become collateral damage." HUNK leans in closer to Rodrigo, "And this sample, that's what we're sent in for, the hostile take over and rescue mission is just a cover story?" "There's more. Everyone in that facility is to be eliminated.", Rodrigo turns away and sits back in his chair, "This means all personal, researchers, and most importantly, the Birkins. The entire family" |
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| hcfwesker | May 2 2008, 07:57 PM Post #6 |
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Chapter 3 Umbrella Research Facility... "Why don't you talk to her? She's trapped down here for her own safety and she doesn't even know why? She had a normal life before all this research became reasons our lives are now in danger." "Our lives are in danger. My reasearch, my whole life, is finally complete, we have to be more prepared than ever , now." "William? Sherry is alone down here. I don't know how much more i can stand it.", Annette Birkin protest, the wife of head researcher for Umbrella, William Birkin. William Birkin responds, "Please, Annette, i think you and Sherry should get out of here, they'll be coming soon. I have to get this to the one person i can trust"..... RockFort Island ... HUNK skims through more of the classified documents in his hands, "OK, tell me. Why do you fear he won't just hand over this 'G-virus'? Doesn't he work for this corporation?" Lt. Rodrigo enterlaces his fingers from each hand and props his chin on them, "I wish it were that simple. But we've been deceived before by one of our own just months ago." Rodrigo pulls out another document and passes it to HUNK. "Here, there's a missing page, you may need to know this." HUNK takes one glance at the page and is speechless. "How can this be?", HUNK questions Rodrigo. "Apparently, Birkin made strands of the t-viurs even we were not aware of. We picked up a conversation between him and Birkin just two days ago. That's why we must hurry and intercept.", Rodrigo explains. "Says Wesker will be there before the 1st of the month?", HUNK notices. Rodrigo concludes, "Thats three days from now. We're moving first thing in the morning, we'll have a two day head start." .... Umbrella Reasearch Faciltiy ... Birkin is on a satellit phone, conversating in private, "Why are you sending a woman? I trust you, only." "We've been in contact for sometime. Seems she has the same goals as you and I. And she's a very persuasive ally.", the voice on the phone adds, "I'm a deadman, remember? I can't risk exposure, not yet." "OK, just that tomorrow just seems so far away. I'm almost in a panic.", Birkin worridly explains. "You're just paranoid. You always are.", the voice adds one more thing before hanging up, "the woman's name is Ada Wong, she has all the access she needs to get to you. She's very good at what she does, security shouldn't be a problem for her.", click , the other end of the conversation hangs up. Birkin paces his steps back and forth, awaiting for the final sample of the virus he has completed to be tranferred in stasis tubules. I know Umbrella is sending someone, Birkin thinks to himself, and adds to his last thoughts, don't let me down, Albert. |
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| Allyson | May 3 2008, 05:34 PM Post #7 |
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Commenting on chapter two. I havn't read chapter three yet (because I have to go somewhere soon), but I think since both two and three are so short, you could add them together to be one whole chapter. Just a suggestion. :) Also, you're the kind of writer who puts periods were commus could be, such as: I think it could be, "Rescue, yes." Rodrigo answers, then adds, "A doctor, no." That my oppinion, but you could just leave it the way it is. That's about all I have for you right now, until I read the next chapter. :) |
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| hcfwesker | May 4 2008, 10:31 PM Post #8 |
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Good suggestions. You are right. And, to comment on my short chapters, this was originally posted in a videogame Forum, and i've read other's stories there, and they didn't get many replies, because some people are turned off by huge long posts to read, especially on a computer screen. so, i used a strategy to maybe get people interested in reading a couple of chapters, since they're not so long, and it worked. My fanfic on that site is the most viewed and replied to. Thanx so much for giving my story a try, i promise, when you get to chapter 5, or 6 i think ... there's a phrase repeated, and this is everyone's favorite thing i did in the story. When the Birkin's finally come in, they're the black & white characters in my stories Sig, things get moving faster, and hold on tight ;) Once i get some free time, i'll defnitely read yours and comment. I always repay the favor when someone gives my work a look. |
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| Allyson | May 7 2008, 01:04 PM Post #9 |
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Chapter 3: I think you could be a little clearer on who's talking. That's always important. :) Other than that, it's a good 3ed chapter. In case you want to see the grammar errors, I've put that in the spoiler tag. Some people don't want to know, but if you do, it's down there. :) Good job. Spoiler: click to toggle |
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| hcfwesker | May 9 2008, 02:28 AM Post #10 |
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oh, it's cool to correct my grammar. I'm a neat freak when it comes to spelling and grammar. but, you see, i don't think and write my story down on paper. I freestyle. i don't know what i'm going to write until i click the reply button and post my Chapter # heading. My mind runs a million milea a second. once my fingers start tapping keys, i can't stop them. and, yes, i make typos, and am too lazy to go back and correct them. i need to, i know. next chapters i post, i will edit and correct what i see, I'm sure you'll find more, lol. |
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