Atomic Antistrophes

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Atomic Antistrophes
Topic Started: Apr 17 2009, 09:52 AM (146 Views)
God.	Apr 17 2009, 09:52 AM Post #1
GOOGLE, IS, GOD. Posts: 182 Group: Writers+ Member #90 Joined: Apr 14, 2009	Don’t plunge a catalyst into nuclear __fusion, especially never with atomics – not the luminous ones. It’s a catastrophe. __A little dust, and a little quarts, the antistrophe can burn the dull___ dreary___ technomics; __not to mention that___sudden___disappear.
	Everybody loves the universe. If you can look past the black holes, the rogue asteroids, the gym teachers, and that paper boy who keeps throwing your magazines into the bushes, it's a simple place most of us can call a happy home. It's a good thing. However, even the obviously non-sentient universe has a sense of irony. You see, the universe is going to end. Maybe not today, maybe not tomorrow, maybe not 10120 years from now, but it will happen. One of the ways science predicts our inevitable demise is by pissing off God. But that's another story. Instead, another way that science predicts the universe will cease to function is through the "heat death of the universe" theory.


Allyson	Apr 17 2009, 05:43 PM Post #2
Observer of all Posts: 2,337 Group: Root Administrator Member #1 Joined: Jan 29, 2008	Cool. I've never heard something quite like that before. B-)
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God.	Apr 18 2009, 05:22 AM Post #3
GOOGLE, IS, GOD. Posts: 182 Group: Writers+ Member #90 Joined: Apr 14, 2009	Uh ... is that good or bad?
	Everybody loves the universe. If you can look past the black holes, the rogue asteroids, the gym teachers, and that paper boy who keeps throwing your magazines into the bushes, it's a simple place most of us can call a happy home. It's a good thing. However, even the obviously non-sentient universe has a sense of irony. You see, the universe is going to end. Maybe not today, maybe not tomorrow, maybe not 10120 years from now, but it will happen. One of the ways science predicts our inevitable demise is by pissing off God. But that's another story. Instead, another way that science predicts the universe will cease to function is through the "heat death of the universe" theory.


God.	Apr 23 2009, 10:57 AM Post #4
GOOGLE, IS, GOD. Posts: 182 Group: Writers+ Member #90 Joined: Apr 14, 2009	Yes. This is a bump. And while I may be cursed to literary hell for this, Core-y no care. BUMP.
	Everybody loves the universe. If you can look past the black holes, the rogue asteroids, the gym teachers, and that paper boy who keeps throwing your magazines into the bushes, it's a simple place most of us can call a happy home. It's a good thing. However, even the obviously non-sentient universe has a sense of irony. You see, the universe is going to end. Maybe not today, maybe not tomorrow, maybe not 10120 years from now, but it will happen. One of the ways science predicts our inevitable demise is by pissing off God. But that's another story. Instead, another way that science predicts the universe will cease to function is through the "heat death of the universe" theory.


RedHead97	Apr 23 2009, 04:44 PM Post #5
Writes 50 Words Per Chapter Posts: 276 Group: Writers Member #81 Joined: Feb 21, 2009	This is pretty cool, CoreCorrection. In a good way. :)



Allyson	Apr 23 2009, 05:17 PM Post #6
Observer of all Posts: 2,337 Group: Root Administrator Member #1 Joined: Jan 29, 2008	Oops! Sorry...forgot that you had posted. Anyway CoreCorrection, to your question about is it good or bad: I think it's good because first of all, I like reading things that I've never heard before...and I like it when people are creative, and that's something that seems creative to me. :)
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Tempest	May 3 2009, 10:15 AM Post #7
Gasp! Posts: 63 Group: Writers Member #19 Joined: Apr 23, 2008	Ten days isn't too far away for a critique, is it? I shall guess not. Quote: Don’t plunge a catalyst into nuclear __fusion, especially never with atomics – not the luminous ones. It’s a catastrophe. __A little dust, and a little quarts, the antistrophe can burn the dull___ dreary___ technomics; __not to mention that___sudden___disappear. Personally I find pointless quoting in a crit stupid, but alas, I have to have it up there so I can think. The format is too much. It's an overload, and lessens the impact of the actual words. You seem to be experimenting, which is good, and I'd take this piece and re-formatting/structuring it a million different ways, but I would use less and less underscores each time. Try different punctuation, moving things around on their lines. WILL FINISH LATER.



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