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| Inventing Polyamory | |
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| Topic Started: Apr 7 2009, 04:19 PM (76 Views) | |
| UnknownSoldier | Apr 7 2009, 04:19 PM Post #1 |
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I need some serious help with this. I generally don't bother with rhymes, and if I do, it's a song. I just don't feel as comfortable with rhyming poetry. It's hard to say what it's about exactly, as I wrote this a while ago, but it's either about: a perfect image this girl has invented of herself, that is in her, yet she is content with not being it; or a broken past. Feedback? |
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| BlackOpal | Apr 8 2009, 08:45 PM Post #2 |
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I wish I could critique it... But I can't, really. I love the rhythm. It flowed well for me, and had that nice up and down sort of feel that one usually only gets when reading strict iambic pentameter. I can't say that I'm good at recognizing meters, but I don't think this was meant to be strictly iambic pentameter? It's good, I really liked it. |
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| UnknownSoldier | Apr 8 2009, 08:48 PM Post #3 |
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iBelieve
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Iambic meter? Oh, no. I can't really do strict forms. And thanks. |
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