Phoenix

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Phoenix
Topic Started: Mar 15 2009, 09:21 AM (152 Views)
UnknownSoldier	Mar 15 2009, 09:21 AM Post #1
iBelieve Posts: 435 Group: Writers Member #57 Joined: Oct 25, 2008	Quote: Phoenix, will you teach me? Before the ashes bury me. The stumbling legs that carry me. Trying not to let them let me- Don't let me fall and break me. Be left for the monsoon to take me. Holding fast to the thread within me. Nothing more to be taken from me. Won't let the doctor bleed me. I just need me to believe me. Phoenix, will you teach me? At least will you remember me? I wrote this for English on Friday, poetry unit.. I'm just hoping my teacher understands it. First impressions, anyone? Spoiler: click to toggle I realized what it was about after I wrote it.. basically, a storm survivor in critical condition, wanting to move on, but feeling like there's nothing left for him/her. Edited by UnknownSoldier, Mar 15 2009, 09:21 AM.
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Allyson	Mar 16 2009, 01:43 PM Post #2
Observer of all Posts: 2,337 Group: Root Administrator Member #1 Joined: Jan 29, 2008	I didn't really understand it...and I didn't like the end part. What was the poem about? ^o)
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UnknownSoldier	Mar 16 2009, 01:46 PM Post #3
iBelieve Posts: 435 Group: Writers Member #57 Joined: Oct 25, 2008	It's in the spoiler. Would you say it's one of those poems that totally makes sense once you know what it's about? Quote: I didn't like the end part. Expand, if you will?
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Allyson	Mar 20 2009, 08:53 PM Post #4
Observer of all Posts: 2,337 Group: Root Administrator Member #1 Joined: Jan 29, 2008	I just thought it was kind of irrelevant...maybe it's just me though. (Oh, and I also commented on your other poem that you posted after this, just encase you didn't click on the Poet and Songwriter's Handbook first. :) )
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UnknownSoldier	Mar 22 2009, 11:12 AM Post #5
iBelieve Posts: 435 Group: Writers Member #57 Joined: Oct 25, 2008	Thanks. I'm hoping my teacher sort of understands it. She's admitted she's not that into poetry and is intimidated by poems that aren't commonly structured.. I went a little out of the box with it.
	Faith. Hope. Love. Vengeance. Heart. Pain. Charisma. Fate.


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