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Likur	Jul 10 2009, 02:31 PM
Frogs and Penelope (a title of something yet to come) Posts: 83 Group: Writers+ Member #18 Joined: Apr 20, 2008	Thanks for the crit. I was working on this with someone on another site, so I have a second draft, except stupid, stupid me forgot to save a copy of it, so I'm waiting for that person to send it back. In the meantime, though, I have a couple comments: I didn't use capitalization because I find it annoying in poetry and it pastes a big red sign across the period at the end of a sentence saying END OF SENTENCE! which interrupts the flow for me, especially when the sentence ends in the middle of a line. Quote: Mercury is SILVER, the fact that blisters indicate burning and trouble connotes RED. Bad comparison. Mercury from the thermometer. It's red. Leastways, all the thermometers I've seen have red mercury.
	'People want to know why I do this, why I write such gross stuff. I like to tell them I have the heart of a small boy... ...and I keep it in a jar on my desk.' 'Both Rowling and Meyer, they're speaking directly to young people... The real difference is that Jo Rowling is a terrific writer and Stephenie Meyer can't write worth a darn. She's not very good.' - Stephen King

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