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| Master Anthony | Nov 27 2012, 02:22 PM Post #1 |
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The wandering dreamer
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This is not a story pershe but rather a collection of story intros. Ideas I thought might be interesting but are they good enough to be whole stories is up to you to decide. Each post contains a break down and the intro. If one of them catches your interest let me know. (Note if I give you this I expect you to read at least one of them it won't kill you.) These intros range everywhere from a slice of life day to future story stuff so enjoy. |
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| Master Anthony | Nov 27 2012, 02:58 PM Post #2 |
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The wandering dreamer
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Opening 1 Tale of a Could-a been run down: A Could-a been a creature my friend created is what takes the place of a child of destiny should something interfere with that. In our tale we follow the story of Falling star who takes Twilight's Role as the Element of Magic we shall first see how her life played out when she didn't become Celestia's apprentice. Twilight Narrating: It... it should have worked it could have worked... but it didn't... Filly Twilight: *Trying her hardest but can't make the dragon egg hatch on the day of her exam. Instructor: I'm sorry to say but you have failed the enterence exam. Filly Twilight: No please give me one more chance! Instructor: I'm sorry we don't have time for that you there why don't you give it a try. A brown Unicorn with a green mane and a backwards baseball cap was pointed at. He blinked his blue eyes and moves up to the egg. ????: I don't think I'll do much better... Instructor: Go ahead give it a try. ????: Okay then. *he adjusts his cap so his horn pokes through and focuses. Just then Filly Rainbow dash blasted past with her Sonic rainboom and that jolt of extra power make him hatch the egg. Instructor: You did it! ????: I... I did it! Filly Twilight: Wha... no way... ????: *feels a tingling on his hip and looks at it a picture of a comet with a Golden tail appears on his flank* Princess Celestia: Well done young pony. ????: P-princess Celestia! Celestia: Calm yourself little one you show amazing magical abilities how would you like to be my apprentice? ????: Apprentice? Me!? Celestia: *nods her head* Yes I have not seen magic as powerful as yours in a long time and at such a young age you will need proper guidance and a home am I right? ????: Y-you know I'm homeless? Celestia: *pats his head gentely* I won't be the ruler of this land if I didn't know a thing or two about my subjects. *starts leading him away* Tell me what is your name? ????: Falling star my lady. Celestia: Falling star... a wonderful name I know you'll grow up to do great things. Twilight narrating: And with that I lost a once in a life time chance. If only I had gotten that second chance to hatch the egg! He was lucky that's all he was. I spent the next ten years serving under a different master my father home school'd me to take over the family business as my older brother Shining armor attempted to join the royal guard. He failed to get in but made a successful business enchanting clothes and other items with powerful protection spells that recharge themselves. As for me with my training complete my father sent me to ponyville to open a branch of our families business. And you'd never believe what I found a few days after I moved in while dropping off some building permit requests at town hall. Twilight: *Trotting down the street toward her shop when she see's a Canterlot chariot land nearby out of came a purlpe dragon with long spines on the back of her head and a bow on the end of her tail with a small satchel. ????: Come on Boss we got work to do! Falling star: *steps off the chariot with a less then pleased look on his face he wore a alchemist vest which prevented back lash from alchemic reactions two bracers on his legs and the same hat he was wearing the day Twilight saw him it was weathered and faded from years of constant use.* Alright alright I'm coming Spines and don't call me boss. Spines: *puts her hands on her hips* well your normal name is to long and you hate it when I call you Star. Falling star: Then call me Ali like the princess does. Spines: Fine then anyway we got a lot to do Ali lets go. Falling star: *groans* Jeez what a bother I don't got time for this I got to figure out this Nightmare moon thing. *Follows Spines* Twilight: *Following them carefully* (Nightmare moon?) And thus Altered Twilight's quest begins. Will she find out what happened to her destiny? Who is Falling star and why can't she put him out of her head? If you want to know then vote on it! Edited by Anthony, Nov 27 2012, 02:59 PM.
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| Master Anthony | Nov 27 2012, 03:22 PM Post #3 |
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The wandering dreamer
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Opening 2 Down in the Bayou... Rundown: It's the first Cutiemark Crusader sleepover! The girls take turn telling spooky stories but when it's Scootaloo's turn her tale of horror sounds so scary so detailed Apple bloom and Sweetie bell wonder if it's really a ghost story at all. It was a dark and rainy night as the CMC were well into their first sleepover all by themselves. Apple bloom had just finished telling the story of Tirac the conquer of light and now it was Scootaloo's turn. Scootaloo: Okay girls get ready for the spookiest story of all I've been practicing this one. This story is about a pony only a few years older then us... And thus her story begins enjoy A bright navy blue earth pony was taking a walk by a lake. The air was crisp and clean and it was going to be a wonderful day. In her saddle was some snacks and a book she planned to read by the lake. After finding the perfect spot she sat down and started to read. While she read she had no idea she was being watched. ????: That's a good one don't you think so Bubba? *A Redish Orange pegasus with a missing wing asked* Bubba: That is is Shelby that is is. *A huge Unicorn with a soot colored mane and a half melted horn grinned showing several missing teeth.* The Filly totally unaware of her watches heard a splash nearby and put her book down in the lake she saw some colorful fish swimming around just under the water. As she watched them she noticed the shadows of the large ponies behind but as she turned around the unicorn knocked her out with a spell. The next thing the little filly knew she heard frogs croaking but she couldn't open her eyes she was blind folded. Filly: W-what's going on!? Bubba: Hey Ma she's awake! Ma?: Well don't just sit there you ijiot bring her here! The poor filly was lifted up into the air but her rear leg and landed on a pile of dirty hay as her blind fold was removed. Ma: Ah... would you look at her she's perfect. *A overweight Zebra covered head to two in bangles piercings and a tribal looking vest made out of a burlap sack* Put her in the pot. Filly: The what!? *she struggles to get free from Bubba who was moving her over to a pot of boiling goo. Ma: She will do just fine well done boys once I absorb this little darlings good looks my plan can finally begin! Filly: No stop it! *she is placed into the pot but much to her shock and relieve she wasn't burned if anything the goo was kinda cold then Shelby put a lid on top of it* Let me out of here! Ma: *begins to chant in her native tongue as the goo inside changes color the filly feels light headed and passes out.* There that should do it pull her out for the stupid thing drowns. Bubba: *pulls the filly out and looks her over she was pure white both her flank and her mane and her eyes flittered open they were red now* Look at that momma all her colors are gone! Ma: Of course you moron ah drained them along with her magic. *she scoops a ladle into the good* and now Mama's about to get her groove back. *she drinks the goo and her body slims the wrinkles on her face vanish and she becomes beautiful* Hmm~ And only from a taste too. Shelby: Wow momma you sure are pretty. Ma: Yes and I plan on staying that way but it will take more then a filly to do it. *puts the ladle down* Bubba put her in that chicken cage over there Her magic will recover after awhile and I'll need it to make more of my potion keep her feed and don't let her escape I'm sure some pony will come looking for her sooner or later. Bubba: What should we do if they get to close? Ma: Show them why no one messes with Mama's boys. *She cackles and leaves the shack* Shelby: *guffaws* land sakes we'll get outselves some good eats if that happens! Bubba: *Grins* Heh yeah... eats. The filly looks behind Bubba and gasps softly there was a pile of pony skulls behind him that he hides with a curtian. Filly: (I'm in a lot of trouble why did I have to go to the lake today?) And that's the end of this opening what will become of the Filly? Only votes and time will tell. |
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| Master Anthony | Nov 27 2012, 03:39 PM Post #4 |
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The wandering dreamer
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Opening 3 Changing the rules NSFW Break down: A young changling who was collecting love energy from a loving family whom she had replaced the child of which died is blasted out of Canterlot with all the others doing the royal wedding. Forced into her true form for the first time she is caught by a Stallion who finds her to be the perfect oppertunity to fufill of his greatest desires and if she complains he'll turn her over to the guards who are less then friendly after what her queen did to their guard captian. Can she keep up with her new masters requests? Or will her inexperience cost her everything? Changling narrating: I can't believe how quickly my life has changed. Just yesterday I was celebrating my 6th birthday. My mother taught me a new magic spell she's surprised I learned it so easily boosting to my friend's mothers that I'll be Celestia's next apprentice at this rate. I may only be 6 but for what I really am that makes me an adult now. I am a Changling we mature quickly but our bodies grow at an average pony rate. Well we drones do our queen ages very slowly in fact she still looks the same as far as anyone else can remember. Anyway my party was going great I was about to blow out my candles when there was a bright flash of light it sweep over the house and passed harmlessly over every pony... but me. *it hit me like the ponyville express and shredded through the party dress my father had brought me. I screamed as I was rocketed into the air and I saw my true form for the first time. I may be an adult now but I was never taught how to shift that was suppose to be taught to me sometime tomorrow by my mentor but I watched in horror as he was squished against a wall in Canterlot he didn't break free like a lot of other changlings that day. The barrier was burning my tiny body like the sun it's elf and my frail wings started to burn away. Finally the barrier stopped expanding and catapolted me far far away from everything I held dear would I ever see them again. My name is Facade and this is my story. Facade: *groaning in pain miles from her home in canterlot.* Having landed in a garbage dump the soft goshy muck cushioned her fall far better then the poor changlings that had splatted or worse nearby. She laid there for hours unable to move until she heard someone nearby. ????: Hmph more changlings. *Chicks one of them* Damn things should have known better no mare would hit on me like that unless they were desperate. Facade: (He's really angry I need to stay away from him.) Picking herself up and blinking through the pain she starts to slowly move out of his sight as he looks through the trash. ????: Come on there must be something good in here. If my father Topper hatsworth Senior saw how poorly his son was doing he'd laugh oh he's laugh hard right now. *he digs through the garbage more and finds a large piece of steel that would sell for something in town but it was stuck he yanked on it hard and pulled it free but the jerking made the hill Facade was hiding behind collaspe on her. Facade: help! *she had been flipped unsidedown and was starting to sufficate. A few moments later Topper yanked her free and gasped. Facade: *waves at him sheepishly while he held her by her rear leg* Umm heh thank you. Topper: Well well... isn't this interesting. Facade: *her tail droops* (Uh oh this isn't good...) Topper: Your no piece of steel... but you'll do just fine. *he looks at a nearby pile and pulls out a chain and wraps it around my neck making a makeshift collar and leash* Lets get you home shall we? *he yanked me away from the pile and I fought against him but he was to strong.* Facade Narrating: After awhile I gave up I mean what was the point? He was stronger he was bigger. we soon arrived at a small house on the outskirts of a town I couldn't make out the name on the sign welcoming ponies in as he yanked me inside. Topper: This little Changling is going to be your new place of work. Facade: W-work? Topper: Oh yes I'm going to put you to work your going to be my slave. Facade: Slave!? Topper: *grins like a devil* Oh yes slave because I know all your little secerts. *he scoops me up and carries me to the bathroom* but first things first lets get you cleaned up you smell like shit. Facade: *struggles to get free as he runs a bath* Ah wait don't get me wet I hate water! Topper: Yes I know all drone changlings hate water only the royalty is capable of holding their shape when splashed or dunked in water lucky for you your already in your true state and I won't have a smelly slave around this house. He grabbed me and trust me into the hot water. I always took sponge baths at home making sure to carefully and slowly clean myself water doesn't hurt but I don't like how it feels on my skin he however could care less as he started to scrub me down. He was doing it so hard I thought my exoskeleton was going to come off! Facade: *gasps for air as he finally finished cleaning her* No more please! Topper: Eh your clean enough. *he pulls her out of the tub and wraps her up in a blanket so tightly she can't move* There we go. Facade: Let me go I can dry myself off! Topper: Nah this is the perfect time to test my theory. Facade: Theory what theory? Topper: *he carries her into the other room and puts her on the table struggle as she might she couldn't do more then free her rear legs but he held her legs down then spread them apart* Facade: W-what are you doing!? Topper: Testing my theory of course. *He holds each of her legs and starts to rub them* Facade: *blushes hard* Stop it! Topper: Hmm... a reaction interesting. *He rubs her inner thighs making her squirm more and flick her tail.* Facade: A-ah...~ *she twitches and he pulls away satisfied.* Topper: Hmm you are very sensitive good that changes things. Facade: Changes things how? Topper: Oh you'll see soon enough. *he leaves room leaving her still tied up in the towel she struggles but can't break free a few minutes later he returns with a white maid's dress* Lets get you fitted shall we? Facade: *Gulps* Facade narrating: And so began my life as my master's pet slave can I escape this life? And if I ever do... will I even want to go back to my old one? All I know is someone anyone please... help me. And that's the third one Darker and NSFW so yeah heads up on that. Here are 3 basic ideas I had. I doubt I'll ever use them but sometimes by writing them down you can let them go or remember then better either way I feel better so see ya. Edited by Anthony, Nov 27 2012, 05:02 PM.
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| Master Anthony | Nov 28 2012, 03:27 PM Post #5 |
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The wandering dreamer
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Opening 4 Binkies and bullets Break down: A international assassin has just taken his 1000th life in his 7 year career at 29 he has finally decided to retire. Returning to his safe house off the gulf of mexico he relaxes on the beach as he burns his target files on a beach fire. Once he finished tossing the last one in he fell asleep in front of the fire as he slept a bad storm rolled in and a massive wave burst out of the ocean and shucked him up into the ocean tossing and turning he soon came up into the light before he drowned. ????: Come on just one more push. A burst of light and the assassin breached the surface his ears were ringing and his head was throbbing he couldn't see anything it was all blurred jostled about he was soon cleaned up and wrapped in a blanket then placed on a table had he been hurt when the sea claimed him? ????: Here is your baby. ????2: Oh thank you so much. Assassin: (baby what baby? Ah my throat hurts.) His eyes started to clear up and he saw a horse looking down at him he jumped a bit but couldn't move still. ????2: Oh look at him he's so precious. Assassin: (Did that horse just talk!?) ????: Oh strange... he isn't crying *checks him over and the assassin pushes the nurses hoof away with his hoof? Assassin: (I'm a horse! What is going on here?) ????: Oh my I think he'll be just fine. *she smiles* Now then what are you going to name him? ????2: He's very spirited and his eyes are so intelligent I can see that he's already soaking up everything we are saying so well. I'll call him Lexicon. Assassin: (Lexicon? Huh... I've had worse code names.) ????: Excellent okay then I will take him to the adoption clinic now. ????2: yes that is for the best I can't raise a child. Lexicon: (Adoption!? Oh hell no I'm not going through that again.) *as the nurse tries to pry him off he grabs her hoof and pinches a nerve on it that makes her pass out* ????2: What the!? Lexicon: Look lady I've been quiet long enough I'm not about to be given up for adoption. ????2: You can talk!? Lexicon: That's not all I can do get me out of this blanket. ????2: *unwraps him and he pulls himself to his legs* Your standing! Lexicon: I'm a horse it's what they do now then tell me what's going on? And so the assassin started his new life with his "mother" Why was he here and what was going on? With his mother at his side he will try to figure out how he was reborn as horse in a strange land. |
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| Ulthor | Nov 29 2012, 06:01 PM Post #6 |
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Immortal Multidimensional Mercenary.
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I really like the last two, the first one feels somehow wrong to me, although I don't know why, probably because Twilight didn't get to be her student or something like that, and the second one could go either way. |
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