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Life of a scout; this is the real Shadow scouts
Topic Started: Jan 1 2009, 02:17 PM (622 Views)
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Ch 1: the civil war

*Pant,Pant*"shit i shouldn't have volunteered for this."a boy thought as he was running through the forest. As the boy was running a soldier wearing an advanced battle armor comes out from behind the trees and starts firing at the boy."shit" the boy started running faster and starts firing his rifle at the Soldier but the shots bounce off the armor harmlessly."ahhh i can't keep going at this rate" the boy thought as two more suits came to assist the first one."surrender now traitor and we might consider letting you live" the lead soldier shouted."
"I'll never surrender to you" the boy shouted as he turned back and fired his rifle again. Again the shots barely leave a scratch on the soldier's armor."ha! that outdated rifle won't do anything to these suits" the lead soldier laughed as the boy continued his futile attempt to fend off the soldiers. "alright boys lets put him out of his misery" the lead soldier ordered. "Yes Sir!" the soldiers replied. "at that the soldiers started firing at the boy much more accuratly. "crap i can't die here" the boy thought as he is barely able to dodge the solders attacks. "we got him now don't let up" the lead soldier yelled. "man i can't beleive one boy is giving up this much trouble" muttered the second soldier. As the boy was running one of the shots hit his back and he falls over*"gah!" the boy screamed "damn i can't die here i just can't"the boy thought as he fell over. As the soldiers move into kill the boy three sniper shots can be heard and all of the soldiered were downed instantly."huh" the boy thought as he passed out. "hmm maybe this boy could be of use after all" the boy heard his saivior say as he passed out
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OOH this story starts in medias res !!!

I like the amount of action, but if you ever did choose to revise your story I would suggest fixing some of the grammer/spelling/punctuation errors. Other than that nice job, I'm just insane when it comes to that.

I like the style, it's very short and quick like the action that takes place! Very interesting indeed. And obviously it all seems to fit in nicely with the story.
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This one is addicting, I have to know what happens next.
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Ch 2:Waking up

As the boy woke up he could see he was in a small hut and that a blond haired girn was standing over him with a clip board."uhh where am I" the boy said when he noticed he has bandages on his head, back, and arms. The girl the boy saw when he woke up looked over "oh your awake good" the girl said as she hands him a clipboard. "huh what's this for?"the boy asked.
"hm? oh that we just need your information so can you fill it out please" the girl said. "oh okay then let's see...name:Lyon......age:18....Gender:male..desired codename: huh what's that for"
"Just fill it out" the girl said. "okay then disired codename:Punisher sounds cool"Lyon then hands the girl the clipboard. "thank you" the girl said as she hands the clipboard to to a red haired boy wearing a dark green T-shirt and Cameflouge pants. After talking with the boy for a while the girl turned to lyon and said "Kent wants to see you in the training field." "Kent who's that" Lyon asked. "the man i was just talking to he's also the one who saved you from those soldiers" the girl replied."oh i guess i should thank him later" Lyon said. "nah you don't have to he doesn't really like it when people thank him" the girl said."oh well what's you name?" Lyon asked. "i don't really know what my real name is But my codename i divine oh yeah and since your new here Kent would like it better if you called him by his codename: S.P" Divine said. "oh okay then thanks for telling me" Lyon said as he was getting up "uhhh where is the training field?" Lyon asked."take the second door to your left." divine replied. "K thanks" Lyon said as he walked off
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Heh, cool.
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Nice! I like this chapter!
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Nice.
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Ch 3:training already but i'm still recovering<---this is Lyon SHUT UP AND TRAIN <--- this is S.P

Lyon walks into the training room."you wanted to see me" Lyon said as he walked in."yes,you seem like a good fighter so i want to recruit you to our organization" S.P replied
"woah ... really :foxwtf: ?" Lyon asked. "I don't kid about this kinda stuff" S.P replied seriously "oh yeah since we're short on people you have to start training right now" S.P added. "Wait NOW! but i'm still recovering" Lyon exclaimed. "Yes now normally we would wait until your well enough to fight but we're really low on personel so we need as many new recruits as possible sorry" S.P explained as he leads Lyon into the training field "now you have a choice here for your weapon armor powers Ect. but you have to make them all" S.P says as a computer screen appears in front of Lyon. "man i have fill out more stuff..and make a whole bunch weapons" Lyon whined. "yeah pretty much" S.P said. "fine" Lyon said flatly. Lyon goesto the computer screen and fills out a bunch of questions then afterwards a bunch of blocks fall down and Lyon starts building an armor and weapons and after about 30 minutes he crafts twin sabers,a spear, a gun and a short sword with is hidden in his left arm that has 2 guns attached to it and he masters the ability to use Fire and lightning based spells as well as the ability to morph his body into any shape he wanted and summoning."wow you set a new record for building your equipment and learning your ability" S.P said impressed. "heh thanks" Lyon said."now that you've got all your equipment you can start training" S.P said as he pushed a button for the training bots to come out."woah" Lyon shouted as the training bots come out and started shooting him. Lyon then moves in and cuts the first one in half with his sabers and kicks another one's head off then he puts his sword away and pulls his gun out and shoots down 3 more then he pouts the gun away and he takes out a spear and runs 3 more through then he burns the rest with a fire spell."wow he made the second best time for this course on his first try" S.P exclaimed as he flew down onto the field "alright now your final test you have to defeat me!" S.P announces as he lands. "uh okay"Lyon says and dashes at S.P . S.P takes out 2 guns with axes for bayonetts and dashes at lyon and swings down at him him with his pistols then shoots him. Lyon blocks the first attack but gets hit by the second one head on but doesn't flinch and dashes in and starts slashing at him with his twin sabers. S.P dodges the attacks and shoots Lyon. Lyon dodges it then casts a lightning spell and stuns S.P and holds his sword to S.P's throat. "you lose" Lyon said smiling. "heh i sure did" S.P said chuckling "welcome To the Shadow Scouts and from now on you can just cll me Kent you've earned my respect and i for some reason i feel like we've been friends or a while" Kent says smiling but confused at the same time. "huh weird but thanks" Lyon said confused but also smiling
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Not bad I like it
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This is probably your best chapter so far, keep up the good work!
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Ch 4:Vanguard Vs. Al ????????

"damn it i promised myself this wouldn't happen again" Al said as he was running away from an unknown pursuer."give yourself up resisting arrest won't help your case you know" Al's pursuer called out."F*** you b****" Al called back at his pursuer. <.< "well i tried now i'll have to use force" the pursuer muttered as she said as she took out a blaster "this i your last chance give yourself up and maybe we won't kill you for your crimes"."I DIDN'T DO IT man why don't you belive me" Al yelled at his pursuer."you were the only one at the crime scene and you were covered in blood" his pursuer yelled back at him."ahh why'd you have to kill that man" Al muttered to himself."because i felt like it" a shadow like beast said to him in his mind."ahhh man you know muh trouble i've gotten into because of you?" Al said annoyed. "well Sorry...ass" the shadow beast muttered."let's just find a good dark place to fight that girl" Al said."finnally something i wanna do" the shadow beast said happily. After 5 minutes of running Al runs into a dead end."finnally a dead end *materializes a pair of bladed tonfas*" Al said(and did)."oh so your gonna fight now" the pursuer said."heh you don't know who you're dealing with" Al said as he dashed at is pursuer. "ah!" the pursuer ducks and starts firing."heh lame attack" Al said as he blocks all the attack then dashes back up to the pursuer and stabs her."guh" the pursuer falls over but doesn't die "why didn't you kill me". "i could but it just seems like a waste when i could wait until you're a better fighter" Al said "oh yeah before i forget can i get your name it helps me find you for a rematch."it's blair" Blair said as she staggers away before Al desides to kill her.
"heh i think i'm gonna go back to work it feels good to fight again" Al said as he also walks away
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The dialouge coincides with the action. Nice! I really liked this chapter, the story keeps getting better and better. This is my favorite chapter so far!
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Love it! More more more!
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Ch 5:The Original Scouts Return YAY ^^

"man the poster said the it was around here...oh here it is" Al said as he walked into a circus tent and as he walked in the lead juggler drops one of the chainsaws on his...head."Al"the juggler said as he took the saw out of his head"how are you doing man?"."eh not that great Mike i miss the life when we were scouts" Al replied."oh is that why you came here" mike said."yeah..." Al said."hm you know i miss it too" mike said"Let's go find Pyro and Kent and restart the Gang"."Sure" Al replied happily and after a few minutes they leave and go to Pyro's house.At Pyro's house he's married but it isn't working out so they had gotten divorced and he's been camping in the backyard."man i hate this place and that stupid B****" Pyro grumbled when Mike and Al come to his...shack."hey guys" Pyro grumbled."Jeez you look terrible i heard what happened.... u willing to re-join the scouts?" Al asked."more than willing but the B**** gave her new boyfriend my uniform" Pyro grumbled."oh well i'll be right back" Mike said and after a few minutes some screaming and fighting can be heard and after a while he comes back out with Pyro's uniform."here" he said as he tosses it to him."thanks now lets go find kent" as he transforms and it comes onto him magically."alright" Al said as they walked off.At the S.S base Kent looks at a pic. of him with everyone else after their last mission before the group broke up."ahhh man i miss those guys i feel like their wandering somewhere lost because of Al" Kent said.Somewhere in the desert everyone is lost because of Al."i told you i still suck with maps" Al said as they were wandering around."it's okay we still got here" Pyro said."oh cool" Al said as they went up to the base."hey who are you agh" the guard said then screams as Al stabs him."glad we put on our uniforms first"."yeah" mike said as he took out the other guard."hey Kent we need you outside NOW" a guard screamed."what no"kent wondered and as he gets outside he sees everyone fighting Al,Mike,and Pyro."WHAT THE HELL!" Kent screamed as he got outside."oh hi kent" Al said as he knocks out another guard"your trainees haven't rely been good lately". "hey what's going on...holy shit!" Lyon siad as he came out."hey Ly" Al said. "huh Al why are you here" Lyon Asked."same old same old...also i got bored at home" Al replied. <.<" better come in then we cantalk more inside" kent said. "still good to see you again". "same" everyone else replied."heh i have a good feeling about this" Mike said as they went inside
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OMG this story gets better by chapter. This one is now my favorite!
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Ch 6: man I can't even avoid causing huge fights at the mall?

"man out of all the places we could have gone we had to come to the mall" Al complained "not only are almost all the Vanguard members here but a lot of demons are here too"."sorry i forgot how much you hated malls after what happened last time"Kent said apologetically. "eh it's okay still those Vanguard members make me uncomfortable especially the one i ran into a while ago" Al said. While they are talking Blair and some of her friends go up to Al and Kent."Hey guys ^^ why do you look so uncomfortable is it because of all of the Vanguard members are girls?" Blair asked."piss off B****" Al said angrily."jeez what's with you" Blair said. "nothing...it's nothing what do you want anyways" Al asked."oh nothing it's just boring on duty so most of us are going around with random people" Blair answered."..... oh" Al said flatly."jeez your rely down" Blair said"hmmm maybe dragging you around shopping will help" she added as she drags Al away."aw crap not this again(I'm starting to wish something would happen)" Al said as he got dragged everywhere around the mall and in about an hour and a half he's bought almost $300 worth of stuff."i can't believe i got dragged through another mall"Al said when he sits down holding almost all of Blair's stuff."hey what the hell is that" Blair said." hm?" Al wondered as he looked up and saw a creature similar to the shadow beast he was talking to the other day exept it was white instead of black and when it see's Al the beast goes nuts and starts going on a rampage."oh shit i am not fighting that i barely survived the last time i fought one which was you btw of those you do it" Al suddenly said."fine" the shadow beast said and Al transforms. *growls*."huh what just happened" Blair said slightly confused. "hey didn't think i'd ever see another elemental again looks like i was wrong" the beast said as he charged at the other one. The white beast moves out of the way and at the same time many Vanguard members appear."Freeze demon" the leader yelled."i don't have time for this" the beast said as he roars and fires a dark blast at them."Get down" the leader yelled as the blast came."that should take care of them" the beast said as he charged at the other beast."heh idiot: the other beast whispered as it gets the beast in the shoulder with it's claws."gah" the beast cried out as he gets stabbed in the shoulder."your too direct maybe if you planned your attacks this wouldn't happen" the whit beast said as he Combo's him and the shadow beast turns back into Al."shit" Al said as he took out a sword that is made of 2 blades (one saw tooth blade and one blade that is like Riku's Darkwing seperated in the middle about an inch apart by a bunch of small spikes)"i hate fighting the smart ones especially" Al said as he fires off a giant dark blast at the beast and after the beast is gone."man i hate explaining thing even more" Al said as he is surrounded by Vanguard members and leading them is Blair."
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I like.
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I'm gonna redo the story for this my original idea was based around a war it ended up deviating from that idea
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