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Topic Started: Jun 7 2009, 03:02 AM (229 Views)
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Summary:
It’s the year 2313. All natural resources for fuel were used up in the early 20’s. By then the world was dependent on machines to keep them alive and the world started to crumble. Those cities that survived were left to deal with the bodies and lack of fuel. They came to the solution that the bodies would be disposed of as the fuel for those remaining alive until they could find new fuel sources. When the bodies were gone they dug up graveyards and started burning them to turn the gears of the cities. Slowly they ran out of the old dead and turned on the fresher ones. Murder is no longer a crime but anyone committing such an act without being in a team known as death squadrons is sent to the prisons which are dangerous places where they work the machines and more often than not fall into the furnaces. We follow a Death Squad who call themselves C.A.T.S (Castro Assassination Team Service) they kill those that they are asked to fuel the city.

Characters:

Toby ‘Cheshire’ Jerren
21 years old
Spiked hair, Mohawk, dark colour
Blue, cyber-like markings from his left cheek, down his arm and torso on left side
Leader of team, he likes daggers and knives as weapons and is son of Carlotta. Hates his mother and is childhood friend of Jazz. Protective of two women he loves.

Jazz (Jasmine) McKenna
20 years old
Dark brown hair tied up in high tail, wavy at ends kind of frizzy.
Three red stripes down her left cheek.
Dealer of anything, occasional singer in clubs, a gun with a razor edge (only for defence) Believes in fate and hates the world they live in.

Rockwell (other name unknown not sure if it’s first or last)
35 years old
Dark hair with a few flecks of grey, beard, neatly cut.
A green mark from his eye to chin
Member of the team, ex-accountant and family man till Toby caught him in the act of his 14th murder and recruited him. Likes money and torturing and acts as father figure for the crew.

Hayley Marino
27 years old
Blonde dreadlocked hair
Grey marks from her either middle finger that meet up on her chest.
Originally an artist into sculptures but had a bad habit of making her victims part of the artwork. Toby recruited her and her pieces are now worth millions.

Cristina Lightbound (Kirk)
23 years old
Black naturally curly hair usually tied up in a bun, dark skin
White patterns along her neck just showing on her chin.
A ballet dancer known as the Dancer of Death. She has very powerful legs and can snap bones with a kick. Usually your dance with her will be the last. It’s entertainment for the rich to see her performances.

Lidia and Leo Abbot
19 years old
Brown hair with red streaks, opposite side partings.
They have matching red markings that spiral from opposite hands.
Twins of unknown origin. They have a tendency to speak at the same time and finish sentences of the other. If one is around the other usually is. Both are acrobats presumably from the circus but left it to go on a killing spree.

Kat Weston
20 years old
Short brown hair in a bob type of thing often has a ribbon in it.
Pink marks that go up her inner arms
She is the other woman that Toby cares about. A drug addict but Toby believes she’s quit but has really moved onto something that makes her weak and dainty making him more protective. She lives with the crew.

Carlotta Jerren
60 years old but looks 16
Brown hair styled differently through out
Gold marks on her hands and cheeks
A very wealthy woman who takes drugs that keep her looking young forever. She hasn’t aged since she was 16 and can’t stop or she’ll die horribly. Vain and possessive, she is the financer of Toby’s team and is his mother holding control over him though she gave him away at birth.

Opening scene:
[Toby is strapped to a gear at the back of the stage. It slowly turns making a loud clanking noise/ other characters are in the dark positioned around the stage/spotlight appearing on each actor as they speak]
Toby: I can hear it. That endless infuriating noise. The grinding. The churning!
GEARS!
Hayley: Life [Laugh]
Cristina: Death [Sigh]
Rockwell: Money [Firm]
Lidia and Leo: Po~ower [melodic]
Jazz: Fate [Bitter]
Kat: Drugs [Breathy]
Carlotta: Sex [Giggle]
[From Gears they repeat themselves until they are shouting over each other and slowly walk off until Toby’s left on stage laughing/ Lights go off and Toby gets loose and runs off stage]
Jazz: [Standing on a pile of crates] this is what happens when we waste our energy and our fuels. This is what happens when the rich rules. This is what happens when we don’t fight back.
Toby: Jazzie calm down or you’ll not get a snack. [Walking past, reading paper] Hayley’s sculpture made the front page.
Jazz: These are the people we have become! Skulking round corners for fear of a gun. Weak and useless oh god, Fate must laugh.
Toby: Well we could be dead do you prefer that path? [Jazz crosses her arms and sits down. Toby notices and goes up behind her holding her in his arms and kissing her neck trying to relax her] Jazz my baby if we weren’t who we became. I might not know you and you might not know me and if that happened angel where would we be? Married off or in university suckering up for some phoney degree.
Jazz:[Smiles] I can’t see you with a ring on your finger.
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this looks well cool. very cool indeed, I is impressed.
You've obviously thought out the characters, I'm looking foward to seeing the plot, nice begining.
How do you plan to explain the history smoothly mid story?

I like first interaction between toby and Jazz. it feels right.
Edited by babblefish, Jun 7 2009, 03:28 AM.
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Thanks. Not quite sure yet. I think there will be a narrator of sorts. Originally it was meant to be Jazz but it didn't turn out like that.

And Jazz and Toby are meant to be good with each other.
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Jazz would make a good narrator, but having a narrator in play format sounds difficult, I wouldn't know how to do it. She has the character for it, what with the beleif in fate, and the relationship to main character. Because she's close to "main" character it makes sense for her to share his views, but because she is not the "main" character herself it gives her just that little bit of distance which can be usefull.

Note: currently assuming Toby to be main, seems best guess at the moment.
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Toby is pretty much the main one. Poor guy. I'm a sadist to the main ones.

Jazz may end up being the narrator. I'll probably have her talk to the audience at some point or keep noticing them and interacting with them.
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Yeah, the other advantage of having the narrator seperate is it means you allowed to kill toby off, or have him tortured or brain damaged or whatever, while still having narration. Jazz will be a very cool narrator, I can just imagine her turning to the audience once all the other characters have wandered off stage and going:
"Now what are you looking at? bloody gawpers!" or something to that effect. That is of coarse if you choose to act like the audience is present. If her narration is more of an internal monolouge then you'll have to play it differently.
She already seems prone to talking out to the streets, to no one in general. :)
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she's a bit bitter about the whole thing. And Toby won't die i love him too much. Your opinions on the character info? The whole marking thing?
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Marking's are very cool, I think they will really help with character regonition... although... that probably isn't such an issue in a play. Character info is good, you've provided enough info that we get a basic idea of each character, but not so much as to tie you down or overload the audience.

possible think christina and Hayley don't BOTH need to be in story, as at the moment they seem to fill similar, and none to important roll (token non central female character).
Other characters all seem very distinct, each filling distinct rolls. The fact that I'm pretty close to knowing them all after only one and a half run throughs of description is very good sign

(toby, jazz, rockwell (old guy) twins (leo and lidia), Toby's mum (freaky unaging chick) Kat (ex druggy, non fighting sort) and other two)

I'd possibly recommend higher percentage of non-fighters, or at least define some fighters as being average, some as being great.
I know this may seem nit picky, but whenever I watch T.V. shows with any sort of fighting group, its very cool when you can go:
"oh yes, so and so kicks ass, as usual, Jimmy is fighting okay, and Bob has run away and hid in the corner, again"
It adds continuity.
For instance, I would suggest that Jazz be able to fight, but not nessisarily be that excellent. (actually you seem to have mentioned that briefly already with the "only for defence" comment.)
Rockwell pretty average, Toby should be good, but possibly not the best in the team, and then have at least one character with absolutly insane fighting skills.

I dunno, after re reading stuff I suspect you've already thought about this kinda thing and just not marked it down, and unless you are having numerous fighting scenes it probably doesn't matter.

Maybe have at least one major distinguishing characteristic between twins (other then gender) alternativly maybe they could grow more distinctive as story progresses? I dunno, just tossing ideas around.

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Toby is meant to be the best fighter. And i know that Hayley and Cristina aren't both really needed but its sort of meant to be a musical so i thought they would be good for it. And the Twins are meant to be eerily similar but i think they will alter as the play goes on.
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sounds good. Very cool. look foward to seeing how it progresses.

one random question, don't answer if you like:
why hasn't toby killed his mother yet?
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