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| [unibot] | Dec 6 2009, 08:40 PM Post #11 |
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Yellow Matter Custard
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Oh, I thought you said both had contacted you. Did one of them say they want a liberation? |
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| sedge | Dec 6 2009, 08:42 PM Post #12 |
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Sedgistan
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Acacallis did and Ocean Pride did, but I haven't heard back from Debenture. |
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| sedge | Dec 6 2009, 08:56 PM Post #13 |
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Sedgistan
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Spoken to a former member of the ALL, 'defensive alliance' is probably the best term to describe them. |
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| [unibot] | Dec 7 2009, 02:25 AM Post #14 |
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Yellow Matter Custard
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Okay, I've updated the proposal. |
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| Trav-Coch | Dec 7 2009, 09:10 AM Post #15 |
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How so? 'Historic' doesn't begin with a vowel, spelling-wise or pronunciation-wise. Edited by Trav-Coch, Dec 7 2009, 09:10 AM.
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| Trav-Coch | Dec 7 2009, 10:08 AM Post #16 |
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There. I've put some of my suggestions. That Light Blue coloured section needs to be reconsidered. It could come across as, "The SC is trying to impose Democracy on all! So Vote NOEZ!!" And I also present a modified version of the operative HEREBY clause:
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| [unibot] | Dec 7 2009, 09:14 PM Post #17 |
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Yellow Matter Custard
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Okay, I've made you're edits. I think. Thanks Trav! |
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| sedge | Dec 7 2009, 09:20 PM Post #18 |
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Sedgistan
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For sake of acuracy, I'd make it The Alliance of Dictators. Also, this probably needs rewording:
Because the obvious claim is that the other invaders are residents, and that they know the password. While I'd love to see a definition of 'natives' in a WA resolution, its probably best just to add something like 'nations participating in an invasion' at the end. Finally:
Would that not be 'whom'? I can't remember the rules on who/whom, so I'm asking a question, rather than saying it should be 'whom'. |
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| [unibot] | Dec 7 2009, 11:39 PM Post #19 |
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Yellow Matter Custard
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I've edited the rest of your suggestions into the proposal, except who/whom because that's turned into a snowball of grammatical inanity (subjective, objective, perjective... blahblahblah)... I think I'll wait to ask my pedantic girlfriend..
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| sedge | Dec 7 2009, 11:43 PM Post #20 |
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Sedgistan
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I'm not too bothered by it, but this resolution is so good, I wouldn't want it to have some basic grammatical flaws ![]() I'm fine with it now, so once you've got the grammar checked over, it should be ok to post on the WA forums. |
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