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Joseph Edward Niemi
Topic Started: Aug 20 2011, 05:04 AM (519 Views)
Jethro McCrazy
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Name: Joseph Edward Niemi
Gender: Male
Age: 18
School: Alderbrook High School
Hobbies and Interests: Running, ultimate frisbee, video Games, amateur film making, movies.

Appearance:
Joe is short and wiry at 5'6, 150 pounds. A member of the cross country team, there isn't a scrap of fat on him, nor is he overly muscular. One would not know by looking at him how much in good shape he keeps himself.

He keeps his black hair nearly shaved, and takes pride in his muttonchop sideburns, which creep past his jaw. His small blue eyes are equally as likely to twinkle with mirth as they are to furrow in frustration. When he smiles, his toothy grin stretches wider than you would would expect on such a small face.

Joe can usually be seen wearing a short sleeved button down shirt open over a wife beater. The color of the shirt man vary, but he enjoys hunting for strange or colorful attire at thrift stores. His blue jeans are belted, with the buckle a large metal 4-leaf clover with a bottle opener in the center. Not being a drinker, this is worn simply to be silly. Scuffed and dirty running shoes complete the attire.


Biography: The third child of John and Veronica Niemi, Joe was born some five years after his older brother. His sister, who would have been oldest, died of cancer at the age of 13 before Joe was born. Adored by his parents, but not smothered, Joe grew up with an air of independence about him.

Joe is quick to make friends, due to his friendly manner, his sense of humor, and his variety of interests. He is also prone to black moods, being very competitive and holding himself to high standards. He tends to get depressed if he doesn't stay physically active, which is why he took up running.

Joe does well in school; being quick to learn new things. A favorite of his teachers, his Film Studies teacher was the one whom suggested he try for the cross country track team, sparking Joe's love of two of his favorite activities.

Joe is a leader despite himself, frequently getting frustrated that nothing seems to get done among his group of friends unless he rallies them to do it. From seeing a movie to making one, playing frisbee to shooting zombies online, everyone seems to shrug it off unless he does the leg work and makes the calls. At the same time, everyone has gotten so used to Joe doing all the work, that they now expect it of him, and the cycle repeats, much to Joe's irritation. He hates the pressure that this behavior puts upon him, often deciding that this time he wasn't going to be the one to do the work. Inevitably he loses this battle, preferring to battle the apathy of his friends over his boredom.

However, when Joe does organize an activity, he goes at it with zeal. His enthusiasm is contagious, as is his cheerfulness when he is excited about something. Joe enjoys coming up with inside jokes with his friends, not because he likes excluding people, but because he loves explaining the bit and watching it get bigger as more people are included.

Overall, Joe is someone that people are glad to know, with only his close friends seeing his more pessimistic side. Rarely one for confrontation, if Joe has an issue with a person, he would rather grouse to his friends about it than get in that persons face.

Advantages: Joe may not like it, but he is a natural leader, willing to make decisions when others will not. Though small, he is physically fit, and does not tire easily. A cross country runner, he is quite quick, able to run for distances as well as speed. He also possesses a sharp mind that is quick on the uptake.
Disadvantages: Joe does not do well under pressure, falling into pessimism when under stress. Gets frustrated with others but does not make attempts to rectify the situation. Small of stature.
Edited by Jethro McCrazy, Aug 20 2011, 06:04 AM.
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MurderWeasel
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Hiya!

First off, before we do a full critique, please adjust Joseph's profile so it fully fits the template, including heading text and number of lines skipped. Also, please do not leave OOC notes in the profile; they are confusing and can cause problems when profiles are moved.
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Jethro McCrazy
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What doesn't match the template? I had the template open, as well as other approved characters as I was writing it.
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Hi, Jethro!

Joseph's profile is looking pretty good, but he is DENIED pending a few more edits.

First off, while you've mostly fixed up the formatting, there is still an extra line skipped between Appearance and Biography.

Joseph's appearance is pretty good, but I'd like to know what ethnicity he is, as right now that is fairly unclear.

Also, Joseph's age seems a bit high; characters in Virtua are 11th graders, which means 16-17 are more typical ages. If there is a reason for a higher age, it should come up in the bio.

Next off, Joe's bio looks pretty good, but I'd like to know more about his hobbies. All of them should come up in his bio, along with a little bit about what attracts him to each of them. Simple stuff, mostly. I'd also like to know a little more about his life before now. Were there any key experiences growing up that helped shape his personality? Has he always had interests like he does now, or have they changed?

Finally, Joseph's disadvantages should all be complete sentences.

Post when you've got him updated, and we'll give him another look. Thanks!
Current characters:

The Program: V3 Prologue:
Mina Mashall - Digital Voice Recorder - Making a good impression - "I didn't know you felt so strongly about me."
Erik Bell - Jericho .941 - Having lunch - "May I?"

SECOND CHANCES: V2:
Assorted flora and fauna

SOTF-TV V2:
EW4: Jewel Evans - Chatterbox Communicator Headsets (0/5) - Online - ELIMINATED - "Scars are just reminders to be better next time."

Past characters:

If you want an honest assessment of your character's storyline, feel free to PM me and I'll whip one up as soon as I am able.

Thanks to Bear/Frogue/Kotorikun/Ryuki for the avatar art.
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Jethro McCrazy
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I think I've decided to scrap this character. It's too much work to rp a real person, especially when you don't know all of their motivations. I'm sure my friend will be relived I didn't end up leading him to his death.

I'm going to try and come up with something new.
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