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Neat. I don't think I'd be able to do anything on a deadline like that. >_> Also where did that nosolution come from in the license?
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I couldn't get the symbol to work so I just put in the words... Today is the most difficult day.
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“Jupiter’s Story” Part 3
Keirkan’s cell phone rang. “Hello? ... Okay, we’ll meet you there. Bye.” He closed and re pocketed the phone. “Becca will have some cash to get us into a hotel.”
“What’s a hotel?” Syla asked.
“It’s pretty much an inn. Only it’s much nicer in my opinion,” he added. “But I’ll be in the closet anyway. I need to catch up on my coffin time.”
Mysteriously, when they got there, Becca was already buying two rooms. One for the guys and one for the girls, of course.
“Where’s your luggage?” asked the bellhop.
“We have none,” Leo answered. The bellhop simply stared at them in shock.
They climbed the long stair case to their floor. Without further ado, the two genders went in to their rooms.
“Wow, this does look comfy,” Syla said as she flopped down on the huge bed that was meant for all three of them.
Becca looked away. “I-I’ll stay up as the night watch. You never know what could be after us right now, all things considered. Where is Guardian, anyway?”
Enni looked at her quizzically. Becca explained, “Guardian is supposed to always follow the Princess very closely. You would think he’d have showed up here by now.”
“I’ve been moving so fast,” Syla said quietly, looking down, “That I’m sure he’s had some trouble finding me. Which is actually not such a bad thing... He will probably show up at some point, anyway.”
Enni squinted at her. “Princess, are you doing okay? You sound like you’re not too thrilled to be talking about this... Guardian.”
“Oh, I-I’m just a bit worried about him,” she said. “He’s even tougher than Keirkan, but this place may possibly have people who are even stronger.”
Enni shook her head. “I told you the USA is the strongest country in the world, right? We just escaped from their greatest stronghold. Jake was right about you guys winning.”
“Wow, I guess you’re right,” Syla said. But she actually seemed a bit sadder now that Enni had said this.
She took Syla by the shoulders. “What’s. Wrong.”
Syla looked straight into Enni’s eyes, surprise filling her own instantly. “Nothing! I just have to wonder... does that mean this place isn’t safe?”
“Only if you think people from outside Earth are coming to... Princess, is there something that you’re not telling me?” Enni asked.
“You mean,” Syla said slowly, “That you haven’t the slightest clue about our world? I... I had thought that two planets filled with human beings couldn’t be so different–especially when they speak the same language. But look at this place! I don’t want anything to happen to it. It’s so unique that, as Jake put it, if it came to war... I wouldn’t want to win.”
Enni nodded grimly. “I see. But I’m sure, if you feel that way, that your opinion would be... you would be able to stop anything from happening. Why go to war in the first place?”
Syla looked down, fearful. “There isn’t a reason. I’m just feeling a bit paranoid.”

“What exactly is the point of all this, anyway?” Jake asked.
Keirkan sighed. “The Princess... may or may not have simply wanted to see this place. I think she got a little sick of her life, perhaps. Truthfully, we had been in contact for a while to plan this a bit. The reason we were so surprised to see you was that nobody should have found out what happened or where she went.”
Leo nodded. “I, of course, have been a close friend of Keirkan’s since we met up here in this world. The reason wasn’t because it was convenient, nor even because this was the location of a sort of teleport point. It wasn’t much of one, anyway, till the Princess used it from so very far away. No, it was because of a girl that we found out was living here.”
Keirkan looked over at Leo. “Do you think we can trust Jake to keep Enni’s identity still a secret? That’s very important, you know. Although not as much considering all the readers know it already. But if this wasn’t so imperfect, they’d have no clue at all.”
“Then what do we do?!” Leo asked. “The goal in all of this was to lose the connection between this and the other series. But they already know my home planet. Which means that hiding my own identity is not actually that important anymore.”
“True,” Keirkan shrugged. “You might as well tell everyone now.”
Noctus dropped his human-skinned disguise and stretched his red and powerful limbs. “I’m back, everyone! Miss me?”

“You were too aggressive,” Becca told Enni, in the hallway outside the room. “I’m not going to lecture you on how to treat royalty. In this world, you two must be considered equal, after all. It’s just that... how much do you know about Syla as a person?”
Enni thought for a moment. “She thinks this whole thing is a fun little adventure.”
“That’s because she was raised by her uncle and with her male cousins. The only womanly qualities she ever learned were... how very beautiful and attractive they’re supposed to be.” I really am hesitant about continuing this scene, which strays far from Mage’s character...
“Are you suggesting that she’s a lesbian?!”
“Not suggesting so much as just... throwing the possibility out there,” Becca said, averting her eyes. “Didn’t you notice how she looked at you, though?”
Enni started laughing a bit. “If she likes me, that’s not something I can change. So, why worry about it?”
Understand that this whole notion springs from the earlier incarnations of this story, in which the main character was a guy. Around this point there were hints about the Princess liking him, and I realized now that I’d changed it that neither really had any likely matches. I also thought about how female-driven this story was, so... why not make a daring move?
Enni went back into the room to see an odd sandy shadow swallowing Syla. “Syla, what–”
“It’s a trap!” screamed the Princess as the mass disappeared into thin air. A piece of paper dropped onto the bed.
If you want to see your Princess again, come up to the roof. Come alone and tell no one.
She pocketed the rather cliched note and went back out. “She’s gone. I went in and she wasn’t there,” she lied.
“Maybe she’s in the bathroom,” Becca suggested.
“I checked,” Enni lied further.
“We need to tell the boys,” Becca said, in a bit of panic.

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A few minutes later, everyone had split up to look for Syla. Enni was free now to head up to the roof. She climbed up the final staircase and onto the hotel’s roof.
Sand slowly erupted from the surface of the roof and formed into a vague shape of a person. “What will you do to get your Princess back?”
“Take me to where she is,” Enni demanded.
“You probably don’t want to go,” said the sand person. “But I’ll take you anyway.”
She heard running footsteps up the stairs as the sand whirled around. Her feet left the ground in the midst of the violent sand storm, as an odd feeling filled her body. It felt like... power.
“Enni!” yelled Keirkan’s voice. “This place that we’ve been taken to... it’s filled with mana! How in the heck did you find this?!”
“The kidnapper told me!” Enni yelled back as the sandstorm died and formed back into the person. An elderly wizard looking man floated nearby on a platform, and the area around looked like the grassy peak of a mountain.
But Enni was only paying to what was in the arms of the wizard–the unconscious Princess Syla. “Let her go!”
“I will not. I need her perfection to complete my utopia,” he said.
“Whatever that means, you creep!” With that, Enni let out the power she could feel, smashing right through the mass of sand towards the wizard.
“I’ll handle the sand lady,” Keirkan shouted, “You have to go on ahead–because I know you have that sort of power.”
Enni jumped towards the platform and felt a huge increase in her leaping power. But the wizard made a rain of spears thrust at her. She grabbed the first and used it to try and block the others, but it soon began to feel red hot and heavy.
She threw it away and grabbed another, but its weight and temperature increased faster, until each one was practically unusable the instant she grabbed it.
“Carrying this little bird around with me is so inconvenient,” the wizard said. With that, he opened up his gaping mouth and ate her!
“Give her back, you big monster!” Enni shouted, dodging as many spears as she could.
“Do a barrel roll!” called Keirkan’s voice.
Enni took the advice and spun in a circle, creating a whirlwind of power that quickly sucked the wizard guy towards her. Keirkan, too, got pulled in, and apparently the sand person was gone.
She stopped when she saw the wizard, without his platform, above her and falling. “I’m not done with you yet!” Enni leapt up and smashed into him, focusing immensely like a missile on how to make this painful. She grabbed him, flipped, and reversed the power. “Say goodbye, you fiend!” With that the fight smashed straight into the ground, blasting a crater into it.
“NO, NO, NOOO!” the wizard shouted.
He was killed instantly, his blood spattering in all directions. His stomach pulsed wildly, his face aging fast and withering. The blood sucked back into his body, which dissolved into a sort of cocoon around the still-pulsing stomach.
It grew into the Princess’s size as Keirkan slid to a stop by the site. “Is... is that Syla? After that thing swallowed her? My scanners gave off the oddest readings...”
The cocoon burst with a clear liquid, Syla emerging with a slight red glow and a pair of bright red butterfly wings. “What happened?” she moaned. “I feel sick.” The wings disappeared as she vomited on the ground next to them.
Keirkan handed Syla his jacket. “Here, put this on. We can’t have you running around in wet things. Do you remember anything that’s happened?”
“No, it felt like I was in a dream. I barely remember anything. First I was just minding my own business, and then I was asleep. I felt like I was in water and couldn’t move, and then it was so dark and wet and...” she broke down crying here.
Enni put a hand on her shoulder. “Don’t worry. It’s all going to be fine now. The guy that did that is gone.”
“I don’t know who he was,” Syla said. “All I know is that he was–he was–” but here she broke into tears yet again.
“That he was what?” Keirkan asked.
“Keirkan,” Enni said, “Maybe we should let her calm down before we ask more questions.”
“No, it’s fine,” Syla said, collecting herself again. “It’s just that... did you see how he created things from nothing? He was so incredibly powerful, I fear he was... a god of some sort.”
“Then...” Enni considered. “If he’s a god, and all it took for me to defeat him was a bit of mana, then what does that make me?”
“He was very, very old,” Syla explained. “He was going to die soon anyway. Speaking of which, where is his body?”
Enni winced. “He... uh... ate you. And then sort of exploded. That’s when you came out.”
Syla looked at the ooze that was all over her. “Oh my God...” She vomited again, the red liquid dissipating further. “That, that’s so sick!”
Maybe I shouldn’t have mentioned that, Enni thought. “Well, um, it didn’t look like you got digested. So it should wash off, right?”
“But it’s so gross,” she said. “Wait, wasn’t I just covered in...?” It all disappeared.
“I told you it would wear off,” Enni said. “Keirkan, we need to get her back.”
“Hold on,” said the vamporg. “According to this, once we leave this area we should pop out back in... um... Canada somewhere. I’ll carry the princess and you can... probably use the remaining mana to keep you going for a while. It would take too long to walk,” he added.
“Thank you so much,” Syla said. “If it weren’t for you two, I’d probably be dead. That thing... that ooze was like his essence. Did you see what happened to it?”
“It disappeared,” Enni said.
“That stuff doesn’t just disappear,” Syla sighed. “It would get absorbed by any living thing near it–that means all of us. There wasn’t anyone else with us? That means we just absorbed his raw power... that’s pretty good, but at the same time, he’s not behind all of this.”
“How do you figure?” Keirkan asked.
“Well,” Syla began... “Mage never really continued this conversation.”
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AKA WHEN I GET AROUND TO IT
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In a few minutes I'm going to give all of this story's parts their own titles. Meanwhile, I've already finished today's part but I'm pretty sure if I posted it this early you'd get scared of reading it. It's one of my longest parts yet, and it sounds like nobody's read yesterday's yet either.

EDIT: TABLE OF CONTENTS THINGY SORT OF
Part 0: The Arrival (Alien Mess)
Part 1: The Difference of the Worlds (Absolute Confusion)
Part 2: Across the Country (License and Registration)
Part 3: The Kidnapping (Lesbians, Explosions, Wizards, Cliched Ransom Notes)

Coming soon - Part 4: A Terrible Subject Indeed (I Hate Vampires!)
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Part 4: A Terrible Subject Indeed (I Hate Vampires)
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“Are we there yet?” Syla asked. “I don’t like the look of that moon.” It was a full moon, with a slight reddish tint especially around the edges.
“It shouldn’t be too much longer,” Keirkan said. “Not much more than a mile or so. I think the name is Tenagami North. Should have a cheap motel and a McDonald’s.” According to the guy who played this character, that’s a real life town. In fact, I don’t think there are any truly fictional locations in this story.
“Well we better get there faster–something’s coming!” The ground started to shake as trees in the surrounding forest fell. Beastly shrieks pierced the night.
“I have a feeling our destination can’t save us!” Enni shouted.
“I couldn’t agree more!” Syla replied, looking back to a huge sandy brown wolf fighting a pale skinned human sort of thing. Suddenly the human sprouted a pair of bat wings.
“Werewolves and vampires?” Enni guessed.
The fighters looked at the group. The bat woman grinned. “Looks like some new victims, to add to the coven.”
“No,” shouted the werewolf, “Victims for the pack!” They wrestled, rolling slowly towards the group in angry lust.
“Let’s escape while they’re distracted,” Syla suggested.
Isn’t Keirkan already a vampire? Enni thought. “Could you hold them off for a second?” she asked as she grabbed Syla out of the vamporg’s hands and took off, trying to see if the mana and the god power could help her.
“Hurry! They’re coming!” But Enni didn’t need any more reminders to know that the things were gaining on them every second. The vampire dove at Syla and barely nicked her shoulder, as the werewolf’s teeth just passed Enni’s leg. Both hit the ground and skidded as Princess Syla summoned a blast of fire, further injuring the two evil things.
Enni used this moment to concentrate on the movement, and her next step blasted her into the air at an unthinkable speed.
“I see you are using the god power,” Syla yelled, her voice distorted by the speed.
“It’s pretty crazy stuff, right? I figure they can’t do much more to Keirkan, vamporg as he is already!” Secretly Enni was having a lot of fun. “I don’t think we’re in Canada anymore,” Enni said, slowing down.
“Then where DO you think we are?” Syla asked.
“Ummm...” Enni considered, not knowing a thing about states. She randomly guessed, “Minnesota perhaps?”
“We should probably head back,” Syla suggested, gripping Enni’s neck tighter.
“Alright, then. Ready?” She turned around and blasted back.
“Okay, we shall be there in a few minutes, miss I am so fast!”
Enni stuck out her tongue. “I’m not trying to show off, it just makes the trip shorter!”
“Sure you’re not,” Syla was saying, her words being caught instantly on the wind.
Enni let go of the speed now, thinking she would slow down at a ‘natural’ rate, but the air resistance was like crashing into a brick wall. She started falling. “Alright, fine, I’m going too fast! Don’t worry, it’s all under–” Enni smashed into the ground. “–control. Or not.”
Syla flipped away from Enni and landed on her feet, not hurt one bit. “That was weird,” she said. “That fall could have killed me...”
Keirkan arrived on the scene very quickly. “That was odd–I could detect where you were the whole time. All of my instruments have to be calibrated again, too. You dirt bags. But I couldn’t have gotten lycanthropy from that. I hope.”
“Quick question, Keirkan. How much of a vampire bite do you need to become one?” Syla asked this question calmly but curiously.
Enni had finally recovered from the fall and joined the conversation. “You don’t mean?”
Syla showed them the rip in her dress on her shoulder, where a small cut was slowly healing. “I think I might have been bit.”
“I-it’s just a scratch, right?” Enni asked. “Don’t they have to actually suck blood?”
“It depends on how it works in this world,” Keirkan considered. “If it’s a disease, then you probably have it by now. If it’s mystical, there’s a whole three day draining thing...”
Amazingly, the same vampire from before was trudging toward them. “It is more like a curse. You get bit, you become a vampire! It will only take half an hour for the change. So, it is like a disease after all. There is one cure, but... there’s no way you’ll get it!” she cackled these last words as she died, her body burnt to a crisp.
“I’m becoming a vampire...” Syla repeated. “It doesn’t take much now, does it?”
“There’s still a cure,” Enni was saying, clinging to that hope.
“Not that being a vampire is all bad,” Keirkan muttered. “But royalties with curses tend to get the short end of the stick, so we need to get you cured never the less.”
Enni noticed a red coloring start to spread through Syla’s body. “Keirkan, you know where the cure is?” Enni asked. “Just tell me, and I’ll be there and back in no time!”
Syla sighed. “I don’t have a clue about Earth vampires. From the sound of it, they’re very different from Syllodian ones.”
Keirkan was sweeping the dead vampire’s ashes into a bag. “In addition to this, we’ll need garlic, nightshade, the blood of a monitor lizard, and a rare South American grass called Blood Grass. This is the only one I remember working. Don’t know why.”
“South American,” Enni said to herself. “I’ll take care of that. Keirkan, do you think you can get the rest by the time I get back?”
“Breaking into a zoo might be a little awkward,” Keirkan said, “But I should be able to get that stuff. Just, be careful about the Blood Grass. It’s been known to suck people dry.”
“Well, I’ll pick up something to protect myself from it,” Enni said. “Well, I’ll meet you at... the Binder Park Zoo. That’s where you might find the monitor lizard. Bye!”
“Crap, I forgot to tell her about its sleeping effect,” Keirkan sighed. “She’ll be fine.”
Enni moved more than her senses could tell her. In a few minutes, slowing down for a bit, she picked up a roll of gift wrap in a shop in Texas, then picked up the speed again.
“Hey, you didn’t pay for that...” but by then she was long gone.
Uh oh, she thought to herself, I forgot to ask where to find it, or what it looks like. I’ll just pick some evil looking plants in the Amazon.
She slowed down a few minutes later, coursing through the forest and looking for any sign of the grass. She then spotted a plant that looked bloody. Bloody evil, as a British person might say. She tried with some difficulty to uproot it while wrapping it up.
She then spun on her heel and moved as fast as she could towards the North. This time, she thought, being a few minutes slow isn’t an option, is it?
Good luck and godspeed.

Keirkan ran through the vegetable aisle of a grocery store, the Princess right with him. The other customers gave him weird looks. He grabbed a clove of garlic and paid the guy at the register a twenty. He rushed out with it. “Now where the hell do I find nightshade?”
“She better hurry,” Syla said, licking her lips as she started to change.
“Don’t worry,” Keirkan said, looking around at various herbal shops. “Being a vampire for a few hours won’t kill you. Well, technically it will, but that doesn’t count. Tell me when you start to feel a pain. That’s when you’re starting to fully change.”
“I’ll be sure to let you know,” she said through gritted teeth. “It’s dull right now, but it’s... slowly picking up.”
“If need be, you can stay a vampire for a while,” he said as he spotted some nightshade. “We will get you back. Take it as a learning experience.”
The truth, despite Keirkan’s assurance, as he knew, was that if she transformed, she could never fully be the same again. There was a chance she wouldn’t even survive it.
“What are these ingredients for? And how would you get me back?” Syla asked.
“It’s supposed to be an atonement ritual. Ashes of an evil vampire...”
Syla only nodded as she rubbed her shoulder. “This better work, Keirkan...”
“It should. Just need the lizard. Now come on, Enni might be waiting for us right now.”
The two arrived at the zoo and climbed up the fence with their superhuman abilities, racing for the reptile house. “Monitor lizard...” Keirkan said. “Aha!” He smashed the glass and produced a syringe as a finger, taking some blood. “Now we wait for Enni.”
“She better hurry the fuck up,” Syla cursed, panting. “My neck is literally killing me...”
Suddenly an unfamiliar Earthling guy arrived. “Oh, my god... Hey, if you have a phone you ought to call an ambulance.”
“An ambulance won’t help her right now,” Keirkan answered. He knelt down and started mixing the ingredients he did have. “I suggest you leave, in case Enni doesn’t make it in time.”
The Earthling looked at him oddly, powering up a weird looking weapon. “You’re not doing some sort of Satanic ritual here, are you? Two things. First, I’m sure the zoo wouldn’t appreciate you breaking in here and hurting their animals for your fantasy. Second, it’s just plain sick!” He fired the weapon but suddenly jerked to the side, missing Keirkan.
“What the hell is going on here?” the guy asked, falling against a wall.
“Please, hurry,” Syla was saying.
Keirkan produced some wire cables and started tying Syla up. “In case he doesn’t get back here in time, we don’t want her getting out. Trust me. I’ll explain later.”
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The human guy started babbling on some long speech to himself as he tied the cables to things. His weapon actually was able to fuse some of the cables to make them stronger.
“She’ll be fine. Now we need to talk. Where are you getting that technology? And don’t try anything funny, because a high enough voltage could still short it.”
Keirkan looked down, thinking. “I might as well tell you. We’re from another world. It’s not like this place. We have many technologies, but I’m very advanced for my world as well. I suppose it helps that I was going out with a goddess of technology. We came here because that woman there, Princess Syla, fled an attempt on her life through a portal here. I was stationed here a sort of... scout, you could say, and I helped her a bit.”
“We recently came upon one of this world’s more vicious creatures,” he continued, “Namely a vampire. We have those too, but our process is much less... painful. Syla was bitten by one of your vampires and we are trying to cure here before she changes.”
“Alright, for the moment I'm going to assume what you say is true and that a vampire, an Earth vampire, attacked her,” he said, staring off into space, looking towards Donn but not at him or anything in particular. “That would explain why she was so pale,” he mumbled to himself. “So who was the one that was dead? I didn't see his face and nothing was really identifying. If that was the future I saw, and that's a big if, then it would only be a future, a single outcome of many possibilities. I never thought I'd say this but, this is heavy... And that arm of yours, is there any chance that you can form it into an energy weapon?”
Keirkan stared. “How did you know that? And what’s this about the future? You’re not giving off any clairvoyant readings.”
Suddenly Enni slammed into the middle of the conversation. “Here it is, Keirkan,” she said, handing over the package. “Sorry I’m late.”
“What took so long?” Keirkan asked as he grabbed the Blood Grass and stewed into the concoction with a blow torch.
“Um, gee, I don’t know,” Enni said sarcastically, “Maybe it from traveling a distance that’s NEARLY THE CIRCUMFERENCE OF THE EARTH! Including the return trip, that is.”
Meanwhile, the other guy was still rambling on about psychic stuff. Finally, he sighed, “This is crazy, really crazy.”
Enni shrugged. “Join the club. I was a normal kid once, you know. I think. And then I met a bunch of aliens, saved a princess, absorbed some of the powers of an otherworldly god... none of it seems real but I’m learning to accept it.”
“Join the club?” he said. “Now that doesn't sound like a bad idea. If I'm right, this weirdness is going to be happening to me from now on, whether or not I hang around you guys. It will probably be better to have some friends who know what’s going on. To put it in terms my kind can understand, another member has joined your party.”
Enni nodded. “Alright. You’re either all in or all out, after all. Now, we ought to leave this vamporg to whatever it’ll take to save the Princess.”
“Right. Listen, I’m going to need to get a few supplies from my house. Do you mind coming to help me get some things together?” he asked. “You know what? I forgot to introduce myself. I’m Chris. Chris Ansler.”
-Chris Ansler created by Avidgamer
“Right, whatever,” Enni sighed. “I’m just praying that Syla makes it okay.”
Take that, word count.
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Aaa missed yesterday.

Anyway those two were some of the best parts yet. I dunno if it was just trying to get word counted or what, but keep it up.
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Sorry for no part yesterday. Here's the one I wrote yesterday, and I'm working on today's like... some... rabid fiend.

Part 5: Unleash the Power (OH NOES)
Keirkan fed Syla the potion.
Nothing happened.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LPPwdlgv2cs
Then, suddenly, all the red coloring convulsed into a blob in her middle that traveled up and out of her mouth. A blood red bat.
Syla’s eyes opened, focusing on it. The bat slowly changed its shape into a human form, her blood red hair and eyes dangling out. She wore no clothes, but didn’t seem to mind. She was an exact perfect copy of Syla, she grinned to show her razor sharp teeth.
“What the...?” Keirkan stared at it. “What is she? I’ve never heard of anything like this happening before. What is your purpose?”
She glared back. “What do you think I am?” she asked, her voice the same as Syla’s as well. “I am a vampire as well. It seems that you are, too. My name is Arucar. I am the vampire that she would have been.” She licked her lips. “It seems I am born into a well populated town. And I am simply ravished!” She vanished, and in the distance screams were audible.
“Oh, fuck,” Keirkan said.

Ansler handed Enni something that looked like a business card. “Catch up with me later,” he said mistakenly. “Please knock on the door and wait for me to let you in. My security system can get a bit sensitive depending on his mood.” He ran off out of the reptile house and climbed the fence, leaving the zoo. He sprinted towards his place, entering an area with warehouses and other industrial storage facilities. He arrived at what appeared to be a small semi-rundown warehouse facing the street. Slightly out of breath, he walked up to the door.
“We-welc-welcome home, Mist-mister Ansler,” said the stuttering robotic voice. He walked into a large loft area that looked as if it had more electronic components littering the floor, tables, couch and even bed than NASA put in one of its rockets.
What Ansler hadn’t counted on was Enni getting into his house too fast to notice.
“Sir, w-w-we seem to have an intr-intruder,” said the robotic voice named Max. “Should I act-activate the def-defense protocols?”
“It’s alright, she’s with me,” Chris said, walking up to her. “I'd ask you how you got past Max but I feel a that there would be a lengthy explanation. Well now that you're here, could you go down the stairs and there should be a door on your right leading to the garage. Next to the Trans-Am there should be a desk and on the desk should be a tablet PC connected to a black box about the size of a Wii. Could you please carefully get the computer and everything attached and bring it to me?”
He then started putting on a bunch of fancy equipment that I would describe except that some of it, even I don’t know what this guy was talking about. Something about a baldric or something. And this program says baldric is a word but WHAT IS IT?! And, this is the worst part. He has all this fancy technology but decides to take his sword.
He picked it up as Enni arrived with the computer, putting all of that stuff into his bag. “You know, Enni, this sword has been in my family for generations. Perhaps it is my destiny to join your cause and do something for someone other than myself. I don’t know, but this will be interesting for sure,” he said, sheathing the sword.
“Alright Max, take care of things for me here,” he said as he and Enni left.
“Will do sir sir sir,” the robotic voice stuttered. “Have a safe trip trip.”
“We should probably sit tight,” Enni suggested. “Keirkan will probably contact us when he needs us back anyway.”
“You’re right, my bad,” Ansler said. “I have a crap load of video games. You can check those out while I upgrade my systems and such.” He went inside and did some stuff, but Enni stayed outside. She had a lot to think about, as usual. They needed to meet up with the others that had been left behind back at the hotel. They’d gained someone, but lost a few.
Ansler came back out of his house. “I know we were supposed to stay here, but I... have a bad feeling. We should probably check on them, anyway. They might be in trouble soon.”
“Alright, I’ll meet you there,” Enni said. “Good luck and godspeed!” With that, she leapt back towards the zoo, making it to the location in seconds.
Keirkan was helping Syla out of the chains. “Come, quickly. Something strange happened. The vampire that she would have been sprouted from her and is running amok. We need to get the Princess into a safe place, then stop the vampire.”
The three hurried back towards Ansler’s house, and as the man himself arrived they tried to explain it all to him. “This is why I wanted you to stay a way. A new vampire’s thirst in night insatiable.”

AN EXCERPT FROM REKIDAISHI VITA [Ansler’s point of view]
"I might not be as experienced as you are with these things but I'm a capable combatant and I got my technology on my side, although silver bullets might be helpful," We reached my place and I opened the door to let Keirkan in with the girl, "Put her on the bed upstairs, I'll be right up in a minute."
"Is some-something wrong Mr. Ansler? I am detecting-ing high stress levels from you-you-you."
"Yeah, I activated the police scanner, what have you got so far?" I went into the garage and accessed a hidden panel within the wall near the door.
"There have been sev-several mysterious attacks in an alarmingly-ly-ly short time. The distance between the attack-acks indicate multiple assailants,"
I rummaged through my backpack until I found a flash drive, "Yeah, its just one... thing, that's attacking these people. Hey pal, we've had good times don't you agree?"
"I-I-I would think so. Why do you ask?"
"A while back I finished the upgrade to your system that would fix the speech program."
"That is-is-is great news."
"The only problem is that I took it a bit further and in the end you might not be you anymore."
"I understand-and."
"I wanted to know if it would be alright with you if I installed the upgrade."
"I assume this upgrade would be-be-be beneficial in our current sit-situation."
"That is correct. I don't know how big the change will be or if there is any at all to your personality but there is a risk that you would be rebuilt as someone entirely different, its a side effect of A.I. that I haven't been able to figure out."
"Do-do it Mr. Ansler, and know that I will always consider you a-a-a good friend,"
"Thank you Max, goodnight," I shut down his program from the panel and inserted the drive to start the download. I solemnly went up the stairs to check on Keirkan and the girl, "How is she?"

NOW BACK TO ME WRITING THE PART
“I’m not sure,” Keirkan said. “Her vitals are going up and down at random, wildly. Nothing stays constant, so we can only hope she will be okay. Where is Enni, anyway?”
“I have no clue. She should have gotten back here before any of us,” he considered. “Do you think she saw the vampire and chased after her?”
Suddenly his odd gauntlet beeped, and a female voice rang through the house. “Hey, handsome.”
“Max?” he asked.
“Max isn’t home right now,” it answered. “You can call me Veronica.”
“Alright, you’ve got all of Max’s memory files right?” Ansler made sure.
“Correct. I’m already calculating where that vampire should be,” Veronica added.
“Alright. As soon as we leave, initiate lock down,” Ansler told her. He started walking out. “Time to slay a vampire. Too bad Buffy isn’t real, huh?”
“You’re referring to that occult show?” Keirkan asked, heading out with him. “Vampires are not that easy to kill, actually. I should know.” He grinned, showing his own fangs.

Enni landed with an abrupt stop near the vampire. “Hey, you! Over here!”
Arucar eyed her, licking her lips. “My do you look tasty. But you are not at perfection yet.” She jumped out of the alley and into the road, drawing boggling eyes from random people. Who wouldn’t stare? A naked teenage girl, standing in the middle of the road with a bloody mouth!
She turned and smashed open a car window, draining the blood of the passenger as quickly as she could manage.
Enni blurred into action, slamming Arucar into the car door. The vampire tore at her foe with bloody claws, breaking free. Arucar crouched down and stared at Enni, looking for another, less vicious victim, instantly finding one and latching on.
Enni responded by smashing the enemy upward, away from the people. Arucar grabbed Enni’s arm, twisting it backward and unfurling a pair of bat wings. She escaped and poofed into a puff of dark red smoke.
Keirkan and Ansler finally caught up with Enni. Ansler was shouting, “Veronica says that the vampire just appeared two miles south of here.”
“Two miles? Piece of cake!” Enni said, blurring off.
“You’re taking my dinner!” Arucar shouted as Enni slammed in again, knocking her away and pushing the people in different directions. Arucar dragged Enni out of the building with her, the two attacking each other rapidly.
She forced Enni’s grip off again. “Damn you for ruining my dinner!”
Enni leapt at her, tackling her straight back to the ground. “You aren’t escaping this time!”
“I’m hungry!” The vampire screamed. “If you won’t let me go anywhere, then I’ll just have to get my dinner right here!” She bit Enni’s arm viciously, draining blood.
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Part 6: The End of a Thought (Farewell, NaNoWriMo)
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Enni jumped up and raced back towards the zoo, her heart pounding with the blood it still had to work with. She felt a little weak, but it wasn’t as important as the fact that she had just been bit by a vampire and knew full well what would happen.
“I just hope there won’t be another one running around,” she sighed as she climbed up the zoo fence and jumped off the top, towards the reptile section of the zoo. The potion was still there. She grabbed it and gulped what was left. “This... might not be enough?”
That was all she could do. It was either going to finish one way or another, and she had to do what she could to stop Arucar, anyway. Nothing guaranteed... anything anymore.
She jumped back up over the fence and towards the place she had last heard of Arucar being. Without warning, a car screeched past her face, filled with faces she was pretty sure that she knew. If she wasn’t mistaken, Becca and Jake and Leo had made it back.
“That should help,” she said, as cheerfully as she could muster. But inside, she was already wondering what it would feel like to die.
She skidded to a halt as Arucar appeared before her yet another time. “What have you been doing for the last few minutes? Certainly you don’t think that tiny amount of potion left will have an effect? Soon enough, you will be just like me.”
Enni stared at her, the fear sinking in the rest of the way. She could feel it starting to take her inside, a fierce burning. “Why must this happen?”
“It is only for a time,” Arucar said, “Before you become simply another one of us. But I am not at that point yet. Come. I’ve grown bored of this place. Take my hand, and I will show you a place where the fate of your world is being battled out. The people who are fighting there will surely be a very tasty treat... for both of us.”
Don’t do it, Enni.
But something about it was... so enticing. So powerful. So... attractive.
She could not control herself as her hand grasped Arucar’s. “Yes, my girl,” the vampire said, grinning at her. “You are mine now. Thank you.”
A gust of red smoke engulfed them, but her eyes were fixed on those of the woman that may or may not have been her enemy. It became hard to think of her that way.
What could this feeling be? It certainly wasn’t some sort of affection, as this was a vampire, after all. A blood sucking, bat winged, somehow dead sort of fiend. And yet she was becoming the exact same kind of being. Fear tugged at her insides as much as the burning feeling did, the oddly both painful and soothing burning.
“What do you mean, I’m yours?” she asked.
Arucar laughed. “You’ve given to me enough of your free will that, in only a few minutes, you will become slave to me completely. There is nothing... that can save you...” she whispered the last few words as she moved her mesmerizing lips towards Enni.
Enni closed her eyes and felt the kiss take her. She could not feel anything but the dark, sick pleasure of the kiss.
Okay, that was just messed up. I need to stop letting myself work too much of this really creepy stuff into it. I mean, I knew there was going to be a lesbian bit, but... sheesh.
Enni opened her eyes to see the bright sun coming down from a narrow slit far above. Rock sheer walls stopped her on two sides. She realized this was a ravine or canyon.
Arucar was several feet away on another outcropping in the canyon wall. “Dammit! And I was so close there. Oh, well. With any luck the potion will fail anyway, and you’ll come crying back to me when you realize how hard it is! Anyway, I have dinner to catch!”
The vampire leapt up the outcroppings, one by one, scaling the apparently endless wall, slowly but surely. This drew Enni’s eyes to the people that she occasionally attacked, the ones she had meant before. These were large numbers of fighters that had flight implements, and they were already beginning to clash.
Enni tried using her speed to move up the wall straight. This proved only mildly effective, when she could concentrate a lot. She suddenly realized that she didn’t have a lot of energy left. It was between the lack of sleep lately, no decent meals recently, and the loss of blood.
Well, severely weakened as she was, there was still no reason to let Arucar get her way. She thought maybe now that there was some hope for the potion to work. The girl didn’t know much at all about vampires–after all, why should she? Until now, that is.
And just two minutes ago, she had almost... well, now was different from then. This served as a reminder that every second counts. With that, she focused back on catching up to Arucar, the vampire who had started this whole thing.
“Your first meal will be your last!” Enni yelled, leaping straight at Arucar and tackling her. The two tangled in a mess that was even more tightly bound than before. “Oh, wait, this is how I...” She felt the burning in her veins already.
What she doesn’t know, Enni thought, Is that I’m already going to become one of those. Her bites can’t have any effect now!
“Scared of a little food, eh?” Arucar taunted, biting down again.
Suddenly the two bite marks released an ethereal power, its existence unthinkable in a world with no mana. Arucar strained her jaw to keep the teeth embedded and suck some blood as the two careened down towards the bottom of the canyon, the river below.
There was no way to survive that sort of fall, Enni realized. It was time to make her sacrifice for her cause: her life.
A fraction of a second before impact, several things happened at once, in a blur that made Enni not sure what was going on for quite a bit. Hitting water at a certain speed, in case you don’t know, is like hitting concrete. So not being dead sort of tipped her off to some of it.
Enni felt an immense burning pain in her shoulders as she had before, and the pair of tooth marks where Arucar had bit her glowed with an otherworldly light.
She realized that she was hovering in midair, nothing supporting her except... that thing in her shoulders. It felt like it was pulling up on her.
She looked around carefully, and, horrifically, realized that she had just now grown a pair of wings. The wings of a hawk.
She screamed and felt herself plop down onto a nearby ledge. Getting up and dusting herself off, she turned around to see a man sitting in a deep alcove. His wings looked like hers.
“Excellent work against that vampire,” the man congratulated her. “I do not recognize your clothing–it looks like something a normal Earthling would wear.”
Enni bit her lip. “What makes you think I’m anything more? I’m just here because of... the fiasco with Princess Syla of Syllody.”
The man nodded, his face masked. “Are you with or against her?”
“I’m with her,” Enni answered.
“I see,” the man said. “That would make us enemies, then.”
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Great, she thought. The fight isn’t over yet. Hey, I still haven’t finished it very well, nor have I gotten that word count. I’m coming dangerously close. I hope you recognize this music. I used a different version in Pure in Fight (Sea of Bodies) and am using it again here...
The man jumped at her and attacked with an incredible skill in martial arts, focused by an odd device that was attached to him. It augmented him even further.
Enni, on the other hand, was relying on a combination of god and adrenaline power in a big last ditch rush that she wasn’t entirely aware of, her actions finished before she could think about them, before the end of a thought.
Suddenly a kick Enni pulled off managed to break the device in half, slowing her opponent down and bringing the battle closer to fair. Which it never would be.
The two eventually became equally tired. Enni’s last ditch turned into a last breath, and her opponent was wearing down just as quickly. They stood there for several seconds, several very long seconds, staring and panting.
“What are you?” the man asked.
“Me? I’m just one of the girls in this world whose life turned out interesting.” Her answer was filled with confidence that she didn’t have.
“Well, you have definitely managed to get to me. But, I won’t lose here. As we speak, I have called for reinforcements. They will destroy you,” he added with a grin.
“I have some coming too,” she lied. “And some of them are tougher than I am.”
She wished with a pang of regret that Keirkan and Syla were here. Or at least just one of them. Leo was a very strong fighter as well (she didn’t know his true identity) and it seemed that Becca had her own tricks. Jake? Who knew? That kid would always be a mystery.
She stared at the ground beneath her, knowing she would miss every last one of them. To die now was not something she had prepared for. Even becoming a vampire with Arucar would not have been such a bad thing in comparison.
Suddenly she felt a -!=!- boost of power. She looked up to see the last person she was expecting. “Syla, you’re okay!” she shouted.
“Yeah, but this guy won’t be once you’re done with him, right?” the Princess asked.
Enni felt as if she was filled with mana once again. So it came as a bit of a nostalgic shock when she heard Keirkan’s voice shouting, “Do a barrel roll!”
As she spun around, the way she had done a while ago, the rocks of the canyon wall dislodged and swirled around her. The huge clouds of brown dust made it impossible for her to tell what was truly going on, until finally she landed down on a sandy surface.
Keirkan patted her on the back. “Well done. You just saved the Princess, again.”
“I did?” Enni asked.
An unfamiliar red-skinned person joined the group. His voice was exactly that of Leo, and she knew him instantly. “Before most of us were born–Keirkan an obvious exception–these people were already plotting to cut off the Syllodian line at this generation. No idea why. By the way, my real name is Noctus. Finally revealed that bit.”
Becca and Jake probably would have had their own little lines to put in there, but I can’t think of any to give them. No, the most important was Syla.
The two girls looked at each other intently. Syla looked down, a bit nervously. But Enni knew, because of Arucar, the way Syla really felt. The Earthling girl went over and embraced the Princess, whispering, “It was more than worth doing. Not for royalty, but for... you, Syla.”
Suddenly the man climbed out of the rubble. “That was... that’s not possible. There is no mana here. Who the hell are you?!”
“I’m Enni Hedginton,” she proclaimed fiercely. “And who might you be?”
The man stopped in surprise. “Then... the daughter I’ve been looking for all this time. It was you, after all, wasn’t it? You’re aware, I think, that your true parents didn’t raise you, but you didn’t know what happened to your mother, or to me, your father... Ein. Ein Hedginton. That is my name...” What, did you think I wasn’t going to show up?
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Hmmm...

Neither Sea of Bodies nor Jupiter's Story have brought their characters to the ends of their quests, if you really think about it. I also have a story that focuses around Eli (don't worry, this is another dimension so time doesn't matter at all) and a short one that I have to have done in February whose main character, has met Enni in that one's timeline point but not yet in this one.

Out of all of this, I'm asking YOU, my (very few) readers, to give me your opinions on which of the several adventures I should continue. This thread will continue to be the home of my post-NaNo work.
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