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Sea of Bodies; -A JOURNEY OF DOOM-
Topic Started: Oct 24 2008, 11:24 PM (1,488 Views)
Warlyte
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This was originally something else, I'm editing this post but too lazy to change the rest. So um.

BEGIN IGNORING THINGS HERE.
MESSAGE FROM MY KITTEN


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Oh, it's a SERIOUS novel? See, if it was a novel, but wasn't serious, I would care.

BECAUSE I REQUIRE COMEDY! I'M FINE WITH ACTION AND FRACTION AND FROGULANT, FRAGRANT, FRAPPE! BUT I WANT COMEDY!

So... wah.

Unless by serious you mean it's seriously a novel and there's still comedic comedies.
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There are still some funny moments, but they don't come up often, especially in the beginning. I certainly didn't write it for this audience. I TOLD you that it wasn't your type of thing.
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WELL

BE MORE SPECIFIC, GADDFERN IT

*cries*
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I'm pretty sure there were people around that did appreciate epicness. Such as, um...

Hey, whatever happened to Subsourian? That's the only person I can think of D=
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Apparently his computer is being eaten right now so he won't be able to be on a lot.

He shows up at Top Inc. every so often, but other than that, hasn't been around.

So... ask Sneezier.
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END IGNORING THINGS HERE
I'm doing the second book in my series for the NaNoWriMo, and the sheer rush means I can't make it the way I'll want it anyway so it's now packed with random crap. JUST LIKE TOP LIKES IT, YES?

So, the background story. Um. Three kids, Ein, Lynn, and Seth got lost in another planet. They accidentally started wars, almost killed each other, etc. And now they're all on a pirate ship. There's also a group composed of an overly tall kleptomaniac named Matt, his sister Emily, and their half-Dwarf friend Mark. Finally, the odd duo of Anna and Eibmoz. Anna loves Ein and Eibmoz loves Lynn, but said Ein and Lynn are together and so therefore these two plot to split them up. Oh and the ship is headed down a river that doesn't exist and the other group of three is headed up a huge mountain. I'll post this on the basis of how much I got done on any given day, whether it means cliffhangers or not. I can't start yet because today, the first day, still isn't over. I still have eight hours to write whatever. So during that time, DO YOU HAVE ANY QUESTIONS ABOUT IT?

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WHY!?

I mean um iono.
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GRATE Aether!

What happened to that first guy

You're allowed to make multiple threads you know
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The first guy is Ein from this one. And um I decided there was no point in keeping that one there, especially this being the same series and all. SO UH YEAH AND NOW IT'S TIME FOR

The Part I Wrote On November 1st
Our laughter attracted way too much attention. “Hey kids, what are you doing on our ship?”
Seth turned around. “Well, you see–“ He grabbed his black broadsword and stabbed him in the gut, blood spewing everywhere. “Go!”
He and Lynn, jumped into action, leaving me literally tied down. Two of the pirates came at me and I jumped for the arrowspear that I was roped to, twisting said rope so I had an idea. With a fall back down I cinched it and choked them both.
“Too easy!” Prying it our I slashed the rope and went on along the ship, jabbing at a berserk the way Lynn did at her axe’s lightest. Seth fenced all his opponents at once, besting each easily without breaking a sweat.
“Don’t tell me that’s all,” I chuckled, jumping at the captain. “Finished!” With that I impaled the poor guy and turned around. “By some law I think this ship is ours.”

Anna giggled, watching me in Eibmoz’s crystal. “That’s right, none of you can touch him!”
Eibmoz rolled his eyes. “You really can’t get your mind off him, can you?”
Anna laughed more. “I bet you’re worse.”
He growled. “She is a lovely woman, unmistakably part Elf!”
“Shows what you know about blood. I suppose that makes me something filthy from downstairs, right?”
“I’m suddenly forgetting why I joined such a vile creature in the first place.” He looked back at Lynn on the crystal. “Oh, that’s right.”
“I bet your Volpit guy would really appreciate hearing that, ‘O Master Eibmoz.” Ha!”
“Volpit is different, a respectful and noble sort of being. You’re much happier insulting anything that isn’t your kind.”
“I’m in love with a human aren’t I?” She sighed. “This is getting really ridiculous, I know, but we need to do more than sit here and argue.”
“Like work on pick-up lines?” Eibmoz suggested.
“Like actually catching up to them!” Anna screamed.

“You know, this mountain looks a lot shorter from the outside of the city,” Mark commented.
“Well, this is actually supposed to be right next to a pass,” Matt pointed out. “Only I don’t see any difference.”
Since several painstaking hours of mountain climbing are just plain BORING, we’ll just cut to the chase.
“This is a TERRIBLE cave shelter!” Mark yelled. “I mean–“ He then proceeded to point out various design flaws (which I’m pretty sure nobody built the cave anyway) until he was blue in the face.
Emily shook him hysterically. “How about trying to find some FOOD or something out here?”

Speaking of food, Lynn, Seth and I were, um, “examining” the supplies on the pirate ship. And my verdict was that there could not have possibly been a better stack of food. Maybe from starving.
“Well that was good,” I said, stating the obvious. Actually by telling you I had stated the obvious, that’s pretty obvious itself. Obviously. “But something’s missing. Like maybe fresh water since the sea is inedible, I mean undrinkable?”
“We’re not IN the sea, you–“ Lynn flustered, despite flustered not normally being a verb, I think, it just sounded good anyway.
“Well let’s FIND SOME!” Seth suggested. “It’s not that hard to look around.”

Meanwhile, Matt walked into the cave with–
“A mountain goat?” Mark asked.
“It’ll give milk, that’s more than the NOTHING we already have!” Matt said sarcastically.
Emily sighed. “This sucks.”
“So does trying to watch you swim,” Matt said.

Anna summoned Issu. “You can bend light and stuff, can’t you, Issu? Can you make me prettier for, ah what was his name, Ein?”
“You don’t know his name?” Eibmoz chuckled.
She smirked. “At least I met mine.”
“This is getting nowhere!” he exclaimed. “I just want to go see her!” Naked.
“Do you think we should just warp onto the ship and say, ‘Hi, how are you, I’M IN LOVE WITH YOU?’ We have to find out where they’re going!”

“Guys, where are we going? This ship was a great idea and all, but I think this river just leads back to those Azaid people.” My musings went on, “Although these ships did get here in the first place, I guess.”
Lynn shrugged. “We’ll just see where it takes us.”

“I have a better idea,” Mark said. “We could take this over to the Oasis and trade it. I’ve got some fairly valuable things in my pack, too.”
“Are any edible?” Emily asked.
“No. But it’s not that far. We won’t die. I hope.”
And so, several hours later, which I am not going to describe once again, they got to the other side of the mountain and to the desert. I really have no idea how to make mountain climbing interesting in this context. Guess I don’t read enough Lord of the Rings or whatever.

In fact, anything that involves traveling over a long period of time, I’m having trouble with. *insert long self-angry rant* The point is, the people in the ship go down the river for a while. Anyway.
I got up one day to hear odd scraping noises. Getting up and out of my quarters, I realized the other ships were boarding us. Calmly waking my friends, I jumped into another bloody fight which, once again, I have not the originality to describe. Man this is not good for my ego as a writer. Seriously. And I’m talking as both me the character Ein and as me the author. Terrible!
So after that, I went below deck and found some other supplies. With help from Lynn and Seth, we figured out how to fire the LAZER I mean cannon. Which is obviously fun for the purpose of blowing stuff up. Specifically the other pirate ships. More exactly, the ones attacking us at that very moment. The other ships apparently lacked the manpower for cannons. Wait, how was that possible with only three of us and crews of them? Oh, well, I guess the fact that we’re severely outnumbered is a danger point of dramatic doom and such.
And, um, here there would normally be a star thingy. Only I don’t know how. Switch scene.
“Yes, go and destroy all your enemies, my sweet Ein! Let the light of good luck shiiine on you every day as you heroically slay everything in your path! Oh God I’m some sort of rabid fangirl, WHY DID YOU MAKE THAT HAPPEN? WHY MUST I LONG FOR HIM SO?! EIN! COME TO ME! LOVE ME!”
Eibmoz stared. “Are you... quite alright? Actually, I won’t ask. Of course you’re not. I think this mission establishes both of us as insane. Is there anything WRONG with that?”

“Fifty loaves! You must be insane!” shouted the merchant.
“Is there anything WRONG with that?” Matt asked.
“Yes. You need to have enough mental health to pick on a reasonable price.”
“Fine, we’ll take whatever you’ll give us,” he sighed, “As long as we can eat for today. We’ll find some work elsewhere afterward.”
“In what?” Mark demanded.
“Like, I don’t know,” Matt pondered. “A mercenary band? The Tigarn Mercenaries!” he decided, using his and Emily’s family name.
Mark sighed. “That means I’m doing all the work, then.”
Matt shook his head. “I learned a lot of fencing lately. And I’ve seen Emily craft things with those knives of hers, how hard could it be to use them as weapons?”
Emily laughed. “Yeah, I could be the greatest silent assassin...”
Mark nodded vaguely. “Tigarn Mercenaries... as long as it pays well, that should be fine.”

“As long as we get somewhere, that should be fine,” I told Lynn. “Say, can’t we look for stuff in the–no wait we already sank those. But you’d think there would be more.”
Seth sighed. “Quit talking the way you do where it ends up sounding like... I dunno, you’re just always analyzing every single bit of everything that happens. Cool off a little, it’ll be worth it in the end. Seriously.”
I sighed. “Alright, if you say so.”
Just then the other ships came into sight, firing on us. Of course we’re not unhittable, so our ship took some heavy blows. “You can’t reverse that, can you? We’re gonna sink!”
Lynn smiled. “Leave this to me, boys.” She jumped off the side, magically having the water carry her onto the other ships. She singlehandedly took them over and sailed them over to us, allowing us to board.
“What do you say?” she teased.
“Thank you, Lynn,” Seth and I said in unison. “Looks like we’re leaving the island now.”

“Looks likes they’re leaving the island now,” Eibmoz observed.
“That’s exactly what your girl just said, moron!” Anna tried to control her temper.
“I know. It just sounded so great I had to repeat it myself,” he explained.
Anna shook her head. “I suddenly feel normal. Listen, we ought to be trying to get over to the port on the Pama side to catch them there.”
“Right. Well, then...” Eibmoz cast a spell and created a vortex on the floor. “I’ve got a certain trick up my sleeve.”

“This ‘trick’ to get customers wouldn’t be a sign, would it?” Matt asked.
“Yeah, how’d you know?” Emily replied.
“Because... I knew you’d come up with something like that,” he answered carefully.
Mark sighed. “We need more than a stupid sign to get going on something like this. Seriously, it would take a MIRACLE for anyone to want a–”
“Excuse me, I’m looking for a few people to guard this gold while I’m not there. Interested?”
Mark blinked. “Looks like miracles do come true.”

“I can just see it, the day I come in and wrap my arms around him, like a miracle. It’ll actually come true after all!” Anna sighed dreamily.
The gatekeeper was not impressed. “Your story makes me uneasy about what you’ll do when you get there. I don’t think I can let you through.”
“You’d keep me separated from the love of my life? What kind of sick freak stops people from pursuing their deepest dreams? Huh? YOU, my friend, are an absolutely heartless creature that knows nothing of true love, I’m sure. That’s why I think my determination ALONE can defeat you utterly. That and my father’s power.”
She pulled out her Gladiator Weapon and sliced the gatekeeper’s head open. “Yes I’m cruel like that, get over it.”

“It’s a long way, get over it,” Seth told me.
As usual, I have not the patience to write something about long ways. In fact, the things I edit in later will make this first draft a long-forgotten, terrible bad dream, I suppose. I will tell you that Lynn, Seth and I got to Pama Continent with absolutely NO supplies. Meanwhile, Anna and Eibmoz continued arguing all the way through their trip through Hell. Specifically, the border between two territories was giving them problems, and apparently the warlord rulers didn’t like them. Oh, and the Tigarn Mercenaries didn’t get paid well enough for the two very boring jobs they took, so they decided to come up with a new plan.

“What is this new plan?” Mark asked.
“Glad you asked,” Matt said sarcastically. “The people who live here don’t really go on so much trade as self-sufficiency. We know how to hunt in the forest, so the desert can’t be too much more difficult, right?”
Emily sighed. “But the forest has our house and the distinctive looks of the trees. All this sand is just about the same, you know?”
Mark shook his head. “You could argue that, rather than your home, this Oasis serves as a base point. Also, the shapes of the rise and fall of the land have their own special traits. I believe the people here call them dunes.”
“Dunes, huh?” Matt said aloud. “Then I’ll race you to the top of that dune!”
All three tore off running, yelling and laughing. Matt, the tallest and therefore most long-legged, pulled ahead, Emily holding her own in second. Mark, despite having left much of his armor behind, was still slowed terribly by the weight of his pack alone.
Matt looked up at the sun and said, “I bet we’ll find food before we know it.”

Lynn lay on the deck and said, “I bet we’ll see land before we know it.”
I nodded and headed up the long ladder to the Crow’s Nest. Never liked that name. I mean, crows certainly aren’t the highest-flying birds. I think falcons are, right along with the fastest-flying. Or maybe I’m way off. Maybe it’s a hawk or an eagle. Hawk’s Nest sounds the coolest, I think. So, anyway, that’s what I was thinking about as I got up to the Hawk’s Nest as I was now going to call it. I looked out at the horizon.
“Holy crap, what’s that green and brown thing?” I said to myself, since nobody else was up here. “Wait, isn’t that usually... LAAAAAAAND!”

“WAAATEEER!” Emily screamed, running towards the water.
Only it was a mirage.
“Emily, we’ve barely been out a day. You need to conserve more,” Matt suggested. “Besides I thought you were afraid of water.”
She growled. “Just because I can’t swim...”
Mark jumped up and down. “We need a location! Near any good watering hole, I’m sure many wild creatures roam, after all. Thus we could hunt them.”
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