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Katsuo Funaki
Topic Started: Jan 20 2018, 05:57 PM (207 Views)
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Name: Katsuo Funaki
Gender: Male
Age: 16

Class: 2-3

Clubs/Occupation: None

Personality: A bit timid. Cares more for friends than himself, leaving him weaker due to not caring for himself. Has a hard time making making friends, but the he tries to stay friends with the ones he has. He usually spends his free time watching the newest episodes of his favorite TV shows. He has a great fear of spiders and giant bugs, although he has no real reason to. He just thinks they look creepy and dangerous.

History: He usually moves from place to place, Neighborhood to city to wherever his parents took him. Due to this he has trouble keeping friends. He moved to Nagashima (6th time moving) and is hoping he can stay here despite what he's heard. His family moved to Nagashima because his father found a business opportunity and took it. His mother hasn't been able to move yet due to job reasons. Due to his father working overtime at his job and his mom being in a completely different state, he's usually home alone.

Appearance: He has slightly messy black hair and brown eyes. Wears a Second Year Taiyoutono Uniform during school days and a Jack Frost T-Shirt with pants on days off. Occasionally, he accidentally forgets to put on his vest and just wears the shirt. He's roughly 5'11". He's skinny but not overly skinny. He constantly seems tired and his face is usually a bit pale. His posture is upright But seems like he's trying harder then he should be.

Current Weapon/Combat Skill: None
Mask: Similar to the cartoon like robber masks. ( Mask Example)

Persona: A seemingly human like ape covered in leaves and vines. When it uses any stat boosting moves it pounds it's chest. When attacking it rapidly swings it's arms.
~Name: Bigfoot
~Arcana: Hanged Man
~Drain: None
~Weak: Fire
~Null: None
~Reflect: None
~Resist: Electric
~Skills: Garu, Bash, Rakukaja


Have you read all the stickies? Y-Yes Sir!
Edited by TruePotato, Jan 21 2018, 02:56 PM.
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Alright, let me see. There's a couple of really big things that need to be taken care of before we go further.



  • Could you fix the bold tags to be closer to the app template?

  • This is far, far too short to be seriously considered. I'd like to see at least a decent paragraph or two for both personality and appearance. Personality is pretty bare. The former tells us nothing about what it would be like to interact with him would be like? His likes, dislikes, goals, fears, hopes, dreams? We don't have nearly enough to work with. The latter is way too bare bones.


There's also things that should be taken care of while you edit the big things:


  • The name isn't a Japanese one, is it? If so, where was he born and raised, and how did he end up living in Nagashima?

  • His occupation is mentioned as a cashier? Where is he employed as one?

  • It would be simpler if you didn't have him start with an axe and simply acquire one in play. There's several people who supply persona users with these kinds of equipment. But that would have to be after he got his Persona.

  • I'm not sure about the mask? Could you describe what you're going for, or find an example of a picture of it? I'll source it for you, since I did ask for it, after all.
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