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| Maquisig Kajil; A Marine, y not? [Flagged] | |||||||||||||
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| doisenpai | Jan 23 2017, 05:13 AM Post #1 | ||||||||||||
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Character Template [-----] Account Name: doisenpai Basic Character Information Name: Maquisig Kajil Nickname: Maki Age: 20 Gender: Male Race: Shandian Affiliation: Marine Rank (Commendations): Petty Officer (3) Profession:
Position: Petty Officer Physical Appearance Height: 6’3 Weight: 180 lbs Hair: Maki has a clean shaven head, except at the occipital area, leaving a pool of unshaven dark orange hair. He has been sporting the particular hairstyle since childhood, always excluding the occipital part from scissors that it has grown long, up to his tailbone, though some trim has been done to it over the course of time. The dark orange hair is worn in a tightly woven french braid. Eyes: Almond shaped eyes, with heavy “fat” eyelids where the eyelid appears to have an extra fold, giving away a sleepy yet alluring appeal to it . On contrary, the steel muted grey orbs are distant and cold, piercing, as if a glimpse can peek into someone’s soul. Clothing/Accessories: Maki wears the standard marine uniform, even if he’s allowed to wear his own style of clothing being a Petty Officer. A short-sleeved shirt emblazoned with the Marine emblem at the back, it is slightly modified so that his wings is jutting out. A blue neckerchief, dark blue trousers, and a baseball cap also with the word marine across the front. His braided hair comes out from the space above the strap. Down below, he’s wearing a black high cut, knee-high, combat boots that is strapped with orange shoe laces. It is only part of his uniform that doesn’t follow the standard. Around his forearms, are black leather bands, with orange lining. A leather belt, also in the same colour motif, wrapped around his waist, and attached to it, are the sheaths for his batons. If doing undercover operation, Maki wears anything but he puts extra effort to hide his wings to avoid unnecessary attention that may hinder his mission. General Appearance: Maki’s has mesomorph body type. His muscles are well-toned but not as ripped as one of those gym aficionados, just sinewy. He has broad shoulders and long limbs, which giving away somewhat lanky fragile impression, yet he’s actually lithe and surefooted, movement like that of grace of a cat. His skin is naturally bronze in complexion. About his face, angular in structure, high cheekbones, a large beak nose, a thin masculine lips, and large heavy earlobes, studded. His shaven head is tattooed with tribal lines. Also, his left chest all the way down to the elbow, inked with tribal designs from animals and various things. And an armband tattoo on his right arm. With facial hair, he doesn’t really have a go to style, just depends on what kind of mission he’s in, anything that is convenient for his chosen persona. Future Admiral The Character Personality: Being the eldest of six, Maquisig has always been reliable. Very hardworking even at a young age, helping his parents earn money to provide food for his siblings, especially that his parents are only having modest salaries doing blue-collar jobs. After school, he goes running around for errands or doing part time in restaurants and bars etc. Growing up with oddity, having wings, has proven life a little bit tough for him with all the prejudice, but his parents never encourage to fight it back with rage. Acceptance, embracing one’s self, be comfortable with yourself, show you’re better than them, just be kind and true, those are the values his parents instilled in his young mind. But being young, those concepts has only done minimal impact, become timid and shy, low of self-confidence, though it has taught him resiliency. He is very receptive to people’s emotions and behaviors. He developed it when observing people, trying to determine whether they’ll give him trouble or not, and uses it to immediately avoid from the first sign of trouble. Giving away impression that he’s aloof, when he’s not. He actually love to connect to people, he has friends in Jaya, it’s just his defense mechanism kicking in first. After joining the marine, he has gained plenty of confidence because of his achievements, and also because his Commander is always giving him encouragement and all, and his fellow marines are finally acknowledging him too. In the marine, he has finally taken his parent’s advice into heart, embracing his race, showing his wings proudly and filling his skin with shandian tribal tattoos. Hometown: Jaya, East Blue. Born and raised. History: Exodus, Movement of Ska People A time after the visitation of Monkey D. Luffy and his crew, and the shot to fame of Urouge the monk, between then and now, Sky people, especially the shandians, came down to the great blue sea to get closer and rediscover their roots and to get the chance of stardom themselves. Some wreaked havoc, armed with their dial technologies, some went for just a simple fun adventures, some were unlucky enough got caught and made into slaves, some settled in islands afar, a lot in Jaya, the motherland. Get up, Stand up… don’t give up the fight Living amongst ground-dwellers was bitter sweet, that much Maquisig knew. It had been couple of decades, more or less, since sky people had descended, roamed and lived together with humans. Particularly in Jaya - where their once great empire Shandora was belt and their ancient predecessors roamed - sky people, Shandians and Skypieans, were growing in numbers. Despite the exponential growth, ignorance and the flat out necessities of some who just wanted to feel superior didn’t decrease a single notch. Prejudice was human tendency, so as intolerance, Maki learned that later in life. But as a young kid, he got soaked in it, neck deep, just enough to sigh despair. Unfazed by unrelenting cruelties of life, Maki ploughed on. He had his family, a very happy and contented one, His shield and armor. His anchor. Nothing could possibly stand against them. Unlike others who retaliated with hatred, his parents never did, even though they were highly capable of fighting if they should decide to use their dials. Yes, his parents had nothing but pure goodness in them. Some of their folks would say they were incredibly meek but would counter that there was nothing good to fight violence against violence, it’d generate more violence, rippling on and on, and on. Kindness and truthfulness, those were his mantras. Sometimes though he’d wonder, why did sky people ever come down if all they’d experience were sufferings? Well… not totally, as some were thriving. Still, he couldn’t understand, not now. Just as long as, people wouldn’t resort to physical bullying he was fine. Days and nights passed, countless of them, Maki stood still, weathered the storm of younger days, and now battling anew, manhood and a whole great world. He didn’t come out unscathed, naturally, dents were on his personalities.Then a time came when his father got sick, being the eldest, he took the responsibility of provider. Regardless of being shy and other personality issues, he applied in the Marines, as it was the only way he could earn a steady decent income to support his family. Also feeling he’d fit in, since he was brought up on the righteous track. And so, to the Marines he applied. Buffalo Soldier, fighting on arrival, fighting for survival Oh boy… Nothing was righteous about men clawing each other, playing politics as to who would get some official’s acknowledgement and liking. No one told Maki that was the case. Rotten. Just as how he was brought up, and just as how he had handled things, he ploughed on. But it wasn’t the same, unlike in Jaya where he was born and raised, the bullying never really had gotten way over the wall, it was just a matter of things got stuck on you, recognition, familiarity, validity that you were part of the community. In the Marines, it was a different monster. Aside from prejudice, men, strangers to him, felt inflicting pain and fear were essentials to prove they were superior to others. The initiation never stopped. The field never stilled, forever shifting, clashing of self-interests, a rat-race. Maybe it was just among recruits, establishing connections as such, he thought. And he also thought of his family. Side-lined, Maki worked as chore boy. The work never bothered him, he was used to hard labor. No one liked it among recruits, he relished it, and he didn’t need to please some officials. He thrived on solitude. Training, guns, martial arts, principles, pffff… plates, brooms, soiled clothes, and errands, repeat. That was his routine. It changed when, a certain Commander, Dan Olrack, pulled him out from obscurity and took him under his wings. The Commander was apparently observing him closely for a long time and got interested his peculiarities, noted how hardworking he was, how inclined he was to always do the righteous, even searched his background and found out his reason of joining, sacrifice, it was a plus plus, and being receptive to other’s demeanors which he developed unknowingly to avoid trouble when he was young, lastly, he was comfortable to be alone. He was told that he had making of a great marine undercover, if properly nurtured. Who was he to turn down the officer? So Maki jumped in. This was his break …or curse. An extensive and a very intensive special training started. It included a martial art called Kali, said it was very handy doing undercover, since its principle fitted the job he’d be making, especially empty hand skills as it could supercharge attributes such as coordination, perception, and awareness. And the system was supposed to give him the ability to pick up everyday objects and use them to his advantage, such as keys, an umbrella, a chair someone’s sitting on, or even the jacket he was wearing could become an effective means of self-defense, as there was always the possibility of losing his weapon or getting caught off handed by the situation. Also part of the training was pulling a disguise, apparently he was good at it, realized his years working in different establishment in Jaya taught him trick or two about behaviors. And of course, there was his prejudice alarm, unintentionally heightened his senses. Just as what his parents told him, every ounce of goodness would definitely get its payback. It certainly did, in big way. With all the skills he was learning, Maki stayed the same, all humble and shy. Along with it was the growing hostility of his fellow recruits. The only good thing was the physical assaults completely vanished, maybe because he was able to outgrow them physical or maybe because they were afraid he’d whoop their asses if excessively hard-pressed, maybe afraid of the Commander. But a dog who couldn’t bite always resorted to barking. And barking they all did. That was the curse. He was mocked in every possible way. Kindness, taking the high road, those were his counters. He did just those all training season long. Might’ve work because at the near end of their training the psychological assaults significantly dwindled. Who wouldn’t? Anyone would feel bad after treating someone badly and then be given with kindness in return. Finally, Maki finished and passed the training. He was now a full pledge marine, ready to be sent into the vast sea to scour enemies of justice. To be continued…. Abilities and Possessions Combat: Maki is a practitioner of Kali, a weapon-based martial art, primarily using sticks or batons and knives, and the ability to transition to fight using empty hands fluidly, as there is always the possibility of losing or being without a weapon. A Kalista believes that hand-to-hand combat moves are similar to those with weapons; thus, these skills are developed concurrently. The principle of the fighting style is that it uses (1) the six angles of attack and defense, (2) a system of footwork, and (3) covered blast strategy, during a fight. With those three in mind, practitioners closes in on their opponent’s space without getting hit, lands the initial strike to disarm, followed by a power shot, and last, exits unscathed. In the end, Kalista are known for their fast movements and efficient footwork in wielding weapons. Maki prefers using the empty hand technique when fighting. As much as possible, he doesn’t want to use any weapon, specially sharp ones, just too brutal for his own taste. Basic 6 Angle Footworks Covered Blast Weaponry: Nada Items: Pair of iron forearm armor Regular den-den communication system Vision and Tone dials Beli: 20,800,000 SD Earned: 87 Stat Points: 129 (87+32) Advancement Points: 0 SD remaining: 0 Stats:
Development History Gains/Losses: Edit Log:
Edited by doisenpai, May 18 2018, 02:47 PM.
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| ♥ treize | Jan 25 2017, 02:09 PM Post #2 | ||||||||||||
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Max rank with mastery is 4* or 8. So the rank 12 and 14 will have to go. Also techs cannot be multipurpose so choose batons or unarmed for each of your techniques. With Martial Artist your Mastery wouldn't really apply to batons anyway. Choose an appropriate rank on the Commissions line. Pair of forearm armor will be priced at 50,000 beli. |
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| doisenpai | Jan 26 2017, 04:08 AM Post #3 | ||||||||||||
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Fixed. Focused on empty hand skills. As for the rank thing, I thought, I can choose any of those infantry/sailor division ranks listed on Faction thread if a character still has 0 commendation. | ||||||||||||
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| ♥ Bright | Jan 26 2017, 08:33 AM Post #4 | ||||||||||||
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I'm a little wary of the wording of spy. Just remember that without primary you can't make stealth techs beyond rank 8 And hit you again! is more a displacement than a disorient, but honestly its not enough to hold back a flag Topic is flagged for approval. |
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| ♥ Tengu | Jan 29 2017, 01:29 PM Post #5 | ||||||||||||
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The way Trieze worded his review was kind of wonky. If your tech falls under your mastery, just put a * on it and treat it as having 4 more ranks, instead of spending more TP to make r8 equivalents. Update your techs accordingly, and I'll approve you lickity split |
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| doisenpai | Jan 29 2017, 08:39 PM Post #6 | ||||||||||||
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Right. They all fall under mastery. Got a free tp so I used it. Tnx Gu <3 | ||||||||||||
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| ♥ Tengu | Jan 30 2017, 07:22 PM Post #7 | ||||||||||||
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Just put them as 4*, the * indicates that it's been boosted already, so putting the rank it counts as is confusing. Sorry, just change that, and you're good, the techs themselves are fine. | ||||||||||||
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| doisenpai | Jan 31 2017, 06:04 PM Post #8 | ||||||||||||
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Fixed. It's fine Tengu, it's on me, didnt quite get the trait but now i do, tnx | ||||||||||||
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| ♠ RainingBlades | Feb 1 2017, 08:43 AM Post #9 | ||||||||||||
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Man, I have some little fixes for you, but you can edit them after approval since it's so minor. Up top, replace "Commendations: 0" with "Rank (Commendations) : Petty Officer (0)" For your techniques, "And I Jam You" is still listed as "4+4" instead of "4*". Also it would be helpful if you distinguished that it was using your Special TP from your Anti-Weapon Specialist trait, whether it's by putting it in a separate table or just denoting it with a footnote. So just make those small fixes and in your edit log, just say to refer to this post for the changes you made. Your character has been approved. From here on, you can go find some people to RP with, and start getting into some Storylines. Make sure you enter the appropriate information into your signature, the details of which can be found here. |
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| doisenpai | Feb 1 2017, 09:25 PM Post #10 | ||||||||||||
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Fixed. Missed the tech when I edited the rest. | ||||||||||||
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