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Spring Spring Powers; [Flagged]
Topic Started: Nov 13 2015, 03:49 PM (190 Views)
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Character: Alexis D Hao http://s1.zetaboards.com/One_Piece_RP/topic/5891003/1/#new

Request: New Technique

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Technique
Bane Bane No Mi - Spring Snipe x1
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Power: 1
Stats: N/A
Description: Turning both her forelegs into springs, Alexis launches herself directly at her opponent with a punch.
Edited by Kaguya Light1, Nov 30 2015, 02:54 PM.
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I recommend taking a look at the new technique rules as they make it much easier to figure out the rank of a technique than before.

You'll want to change Spring Bullets to only fire a single bullet, or else it will be counted as a gatling effect which I do not believe you're trying to get. I'd say minimum rank for that would be 18 as single (counting it as a damage type change plus short range), 22 for gatling. Tongue gun follows exactly the same rules, and would be no different to Spring Bullets.

Cannon would only act as a large bullet mechanically, so unless you actually specify any extra effects it will only act as such. Rank 18 minimum again, and rank 28 if you wanted to make it about as powerful as a cannon.

However, for these bullet and cannon techniques you'd need to actually purchase the ammunition first.

Hair spring should be defensive, not offensive, and range should be self. That part about flying into the air should be completely removed, because it would be a separate technique. Additionally, the hair springs would only be able to block blunt attacks, because they are not any more resilient than normal flesh. If you want partial blocking of blunt force it can go as low as rank 8, and full blocking would be 28.

Spring Snipe would be melee range and rank 1 minimum.

Spring Hopper does too much for a single technique. It is movement, dodging, disorientation and an attack. You'll want to split it up into separate techniques.

Death Knock would be rank 44 for long range. You shouldn't really reference canon characters either, because they're all dead and no-one on the site can ever have met them or be descended from them.
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Okay Done.
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Your character is only capable of rank 4 at max, so the only technique here you can get at the moment is Spring Snipe. Please remove any techniques that you are unable to get.
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Done.
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That doesn't mean remove the template too...

Range should be Melee, and you'll also need to include the power of the technique beneath the range. In this case, the power will be 1.
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done
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You've put melee under stats, included no reference to Power, and the template is still missing. Doesn't look very done to me :P
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done
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Power goes under range.

Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Power: 1
Stats: N/A

Though, so long as it's included, the layout can be of your choice, so everything seems fine.

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