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Topic Started: Aug 25 2015, 02:32 PM (446 Views)
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Name: Kaze Long
Nickname: N/A
Age: 19
Race:human
Affiliation: Pirates
Bounty: 0
Achievements: N/A
Profession:
Carpenter
A Carpenter is someone who makes a living crafting things such as ships, submarines, buildings and other physical structures with expertise and s. Carpenters are the only ones capable of creating ships with techniques. A carpenter is proficient in the use of the tools of their trade as weapons, and have no maximum rank limit for martial techniques involving these tools. Furthermore, carpenters are able to use techniques that enable the rapid construction of basic, temporary structures such as walls, bridges and ladders.
Marksman
The profession of Marksman provides sound experience and insight in calculating range, distance and wind elements and their impact on the path of a projectile. It is a general trait that applies to guns, slingshots, cannons, rifles and the like. People without this profession will have little to no luck in firing cannonballs where they are supposed to go under normal battle conditions.
Position: N/A
Physical Appearance
Height: 5'7"
Weight: 175 lb
Hair: Long pitch black usually braided to small of back. When upbraided it's wild.
Eyes: Deep green
Clothing/Accessories: Kaze prefers simple cloths.
Dark red, blue, and black shirts.
Loose fit dark gray and black pants.
Lightly tinted sunglasses.
Foot and hand wraps wears black shoes only if there is no other option.
A gold chain necklace with a red oval stone
His rifle is slung on his back butt stock over right shoulder ammo poach on left hip.
His tool kit is a large dark gray metal box with warnings of being shot if touched on it.

General appearance: Kaze is a average looking guy a runners build and dark tan he keeps his long black hair clean and pulled back. His hands are rough from years working with wood and hunting for food. He likes to move slow and somewhat crouched as if tracking prey. He is always scanning the area and he tends to look shifty but when talked to he is as friendly as can be. Only when working does he seem to focus completely on one thing and can be caught up in it for sometime.

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The character
Personality: Kaze is pretty laid back on deck with nothing to work on he likes to take naps and enjoy the view. When working on a project he is like a kid at Christmas fixing problems, trying new ideas, and trying to improve performance. When on an island he falls back to keep an eye on his friends and help when needed. his prized possession is his mothers necklace. Overall an easy going guy but endanger his friends, damage his work, or touch his necklace and he will do everything he can to make you regret it.

Hometown: Orange Town in the East BlueBlue

History: His mother was a farmer named Hukana his father a marine who had a one night stand he grew up with his mother in his early years. Living on a farm he helped by taking up hunting and fixing up around the house. When he was 12 he was returning from a hunt to find a bandit had attacked his mother and gravely injured her as she lay dying she gave him her necklace and told him to keep it safe as it all she had left.
A few days later he found out who killed her and started his greatest hunt. It took 3 years to track him down due to his quarry always moving but now it was finally over one shot from 30 yards and the monster that took his mother was gone. With nothing left to keep him going he wandered in to the nearest town called Orange Town. Still shocked from his first kill he stumbled in to a workshop surrounded by wood work and crafting he decided to try to work there. With memories of his work at home he found he was a natural carpenter and whenever he was struck by grief would dive into his work to get thru it.
Crafting building in time his works began to give him peace. Choosing to hunt for his food he saved his profits for an emergency. While there he began hearing tails of corrupt marines, savage pirates,and bounty hunters that were worse than their bounties. While others showed fear he grew excited and longed to hear more. One day late in the evening a stranger came in and when he talked about the new age it was with disgust "Pirates use to be about adventure and freedom now all they seem to do is care about money. If the old kings could see us now what would they think."he said. With that proclamation a thought was formed like a flame from struck match he would see the world like the pirates of the the last great age. Four years passed and after spending so much time planning and preparing for his journey he was ready. Setting out on a small boat in the search for adventure, freedom, and the chance to be something great his adventure begins.
Abilities and Possessions
Combat: Kaze prefers to stay back and eliminate targets at range with his rifle. he scouts ahead when possible and when in the open he watches his allies back. If in close quarters combat he relies on his carpenter tools such as a hammer, saw, and nails.

Weaponry: Hunting rifle iron quality single shot, iron hammer, and an iron hatchet

Items: Carpentry tools Hammer, nails, saw, and a hatchet.
Beli: 300,000
SD earned:0
stat points32
  • used for Stats: 32
  • used for Fortune: 0
    • Strength 8(7+1)
    • speed 9
    • stamina 7
    • accuracy 12(9+5)
    • Fortune:8

Traits: Gen 3 Pro 1
mighty strength cost 1this characters strength is boosted by +20%
flawless accuracy cost 3 this characters accuracy is boosted by +60%

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devil fruit name N/A
devil fruit type N/A
devil fruit ability N/A


techniques

regular technique points: 16
used regular technique points:8
special technique points0
used special technique points0



Techniques
SWING FOR THE FENCES (4)
Type:offensive
Range:Melee
Stats: N/A
Description With no time to load Kaze swings his rifle With all his strength like a bat.

WORKING MANS RAGE(4)
Type: offensive
Range:melee
Stats:N/A
Description: With all his strength Kaze strikes out with hammer and hatchet.






Development History
Gains/Losses
Thr, Aug,27 2015
-200,000 beliBougth hammer and hatchet
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Edited by acesburned, Aug 28 2015, 10:40 AM.
Kaze Long •crew position:none •profession name: main carpenter/secondary marksman •pirate crew:nameless piratesbounty0 •SD earned0 •Beli300,000 location:south blue
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  • Please italicise your primary profession bonus.
  • A lot of your general appearance appears to be about personality. This section should be a description of his body, including scars and build.
  • Please specify the Hunting Rifle in your weapons to be of iron quality, and one-shot.
  • Specify the carpentry tools in your items section.
  • Your traits and techniques sections appear to be missing. These need to be added.
  • Without knowing your traits, I am unsure where you are getting the stat bonuses from.
  • You also might want to fix everything from the devil fruit section, because it is in layered spoilers and appears to be unintentional.
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Thanks for taking a look turns out the spoiler box was the reason so much was not seen I didn't place a / at the end and some how it stopped everything else from showing.
By the way the rules say we start with 2 one handed or 1 two handed weapon do my tools count towards that or are they a bonus???
Oh techniques are blank right now because I'm having trouble thinking of some is that okay or do I have to have them up right away?
Edited by acesburned, Aug 26 2015, 04:51 PM.
Kaze Long •crew position:none •profession name: main carpenter/secondary marksman •pirate crew:nameless piratesbounty0 •SD earned0 •Beli300,000 location:south blue
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  • You have 2 traits left unspent. If you wish to save them, you can put then into one of the Fated trait lines.
  • Include the full descriptions and costs of the traits you have. Just copy them from the rules section.
  • Your tools do not count towards your weapons, and can remain free so long as they are untiered. So, as long as they are of less than iron quality. If you wish for any of them to be useable as a weapon, to gain the bonus of your Carpenter primary, they will count as weapons and will need to be paid for with your starting beli. If you wish to do this, just say so and I can price them.
  • You're free to start with no techniques.
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Done but I would like to know the price of iron hammer and hatchet
Kaze Long •crew position:none •profession name: main carpenter/secondary marksman •pirate crew:nameless piratesbounty0 •SD earned0 •Beli300,000 location:south blue
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You have a bold tag broken within your app, it's completely necessary but it makes things much easier to read.

For techniques;
Steady Shot: While I appreciate the shonen enthusiasm, you won't necessarily be finishing off everyone with just one shot. This technique really just strikes me as something you can do free form anyway.

Swing for the Fences: This is a rank 4 melee ability, or could just as easily be freeformed. As a Rank 4, you may add, "hits with all of their strength." It should also be noted that you may only create techniques of a rank that is equal to your fortune/2. So in this case, your limit is 4.

Working Mans Rage: This technique is okay, but it means that what you've listed in your items section are, in fact, weaponry. I'd be cool with them being items as long as they weren't used for fighting purposes, but if you intend to use them to fight and use as weapons, please list them as such and someone will price them in a jiffy.
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Alright made corrections got rid of steady shot just not sure how to make a shot more damaging with out killing at only r4 think I'll wait till I get special ammo or something. What do you mean bold tag broken in app?
Kaze Long •crew position:none •profession name: main carpenter/secondary marksman •pirate crew:nameless piratesbounty0 •SD earned0 •Beli300,000 location:south blue
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He means this


Also, removing that technique has broken your techniques table. Replace the first [ c] with [ table=2, Techniques] should fix it. Ignore the spaces I added to stop it from counting as code.
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Alright fixed the table and removed the broken bold. All that's left should be the price for the iron hammer and hatchet I believe.
Kaze Long •crew position:none •profession name: main carpenter/secondary marksman •pirate crew:nameless piratesbounty0 •SD earned0 •Beli300,000 location:south blue
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I actually meant the bold tag you have for race. It affects the rest of your profile. You have two opening bold tags, when in fact you have misplace /. If you'd like to rectify this, it'd be [b]Race:[/b]

Too clarify, the wrench and drill won't be useable as weapons, you also may as well remove them from the items section. The hammer and wrench will cost 200,000 Beli, costing 100,000 each. Please link this post in your gains and losses along with the items purchased, the date of purchase and how much you've paid for.
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Added gains and losses. It sounds like you want me to link your post to my gains a d losses to not sure how to do that. I wrote post#10 though any more advice is appreciated
Edited by acesburned, Aug 27 2015, 02:30 PM.
Kaze Long •crew position:none •profession name: main carpenter/secondary marksman •pirate crew:nameless piratesbounty0 •SD earned0 •Beli300,000 location:south blue
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Code:
 
-200,000 beli, [url=http://s1.zetaboards.com/One_Piece_RP/single/?p=1956705&t=5865773]Bought hammer and wrench[/url]


Something like that. Assuming you do this,


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Okay should have noticed this earlier why do you write wrench when I list as hatchet multiple times just want to make sure there's no confusion
Kaze Long •crew position:none •profession name: main carpenter/secondary marksman •pirate crew:nameless piratesbounty0 •SD earned0 •Beli300,000 location:south blue
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In fact dusks comment in post 10 even said wrench would not be used and in same post gave me the price for a wrench??????
Kaze Long •crew position:none •profession name: main carpenter/secondary marksman •pirate crew:nameless piratesbounty0 •SD earned0 •Beli300,000 location:south blue
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My mistake, I was just copying what I saw in Dusk's post. Everything is still fine.
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