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Topic Started: Jul 17 2015, 02:24 AM (468 Views)
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Basic Character Information
Name: Alex Hide
Nickname: Hide Boy
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Affiliation: Pirate
Bounty: 0 Beli
Achievements: N/A
Profession:

~Martial Artist
A Martial Artist is someone who specializes in hand-to-hand combat, completely or very close to unarmed. They usually have good insight in the aspects of weight, balance and movement of the body. Characters with this profession have access to certain additional traits and may create "Stance" techniques.

~Doctor
A Doctor, on a ship or otherwise, gains large medical knowledge. Suturing and cleaning wounds, making bandages out of various materials and preparing drugs, is all part of a Doctor's job. Doctors are the only ones capable of healing serious injuries on the crew.

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Physical Appearance
Height: 6 Feet 0 inches
Weight: 156lbs
Hair: Alex's hair is a dark black, slightly covering the top of his eyes.
Eyes: His eyes are a lighter crimson. Most of his expressions are used through his eyes.
Clothing/Accessories: Alex often prides himself on speed, so he sticks to going as light as possible. He wears a simple black shirt and sometimes a coat (In the picture) when fighting in the cold, along with some light blue jeans. He has a black tattoo of a key on his arm which he refers to as 'The key to battle'. He wears boots that have a small white stripe on the edge of the opening in the shoe.
General Appearance: Alex is always light on his feet with a joy in his steps. He walks gracefully and lightly. Instead of sitting he usually crouches or kneels, always keeping his head up. He has a slight muscular build, but nothing amazing. When standing still he will also usually cross his arms or rest his hands in his pockets, unless fighting. Alex has a very light beard and a straight scar across his left cheek from a sword practice accident.

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The Character
Personality: Alex will often be happy, but if something bad happens his emotions go wild. He is childish and overly excited with his crew, constantly dreaming up impossible scenarios where he saves them all from death, but when fighting breaks out he will be the first one who wants to take part, unless his opponent is stronger than him. Alex knows when to fight and when to run away. Alex often tries to stay serious to act cool and mysterious, but he often cracks and becomes like a child. He often enjoys fishing, silence, drinking, and sweets. He cannot stand rude people, broccoli, snot, and sea water.While he fights he often talks, whether its to himself or to his opponent. He claims it calms him down.

Hometown: Loguetown, East Blue
History: Alex was born in Loguetown, the execution home of Rogers and his birthplace. Alex always dreamed of becoming a pirate and fighting when he was but a child. His parents did not like this idea, but it was Alex's dream. He often tried to run away from home, trying to join crews left and right, but they didnt want him, for he was too young. Eventually, his parents were tired of the many close calls of where pirates would hold him hostage, only for marines to save him.

On his tenth birthday, he decided to make one final escape to be like Rogers. Alex had gotten roughed up by the town pirates and he went to go home, but his parents were fed up. They left him outside, bleeding, bruised and cold. They avoided him as much as they could and barely left the house. He lived on the streets, stealing, fishing and living in the attic of an old family. The father there once was a swordsman and taught Alex how to fight and the mother in the family taught Alex how to cook and clean become a doctor for his ship, to be a real use.

When Alex turned sixteen, the owners of the attic of which he stayed died, and the house was passed onto him through the will. He then started picking work up as a fisherman, getting enough money so that when he turned seventeen, he could set sail. His birthday was coming up and his parents finally paid him a visit, but not the one he wanted. They told him he was going to die and they no longer loved him and were disappointed for raising their son so poorly. Alex told them that it was his house and they should get out of it.

Alex then set sail on a small dinghy, traveling from island to island, searching for a good crew!


Abilities and Possessions
Combat: Alex often tries to finish a fight instantly with one quick, lethal blow. This style he calls the Glass Cannon. If he cannot finish and opponent this way he will resort to either fighting, cheap tricks, running, or waiting for his other crew, all depending on the situation.

Weaponry: Knuckle Dusters-Iron quality. A silver color with little claws coming out the tips. The claws might leave a slight bruise at most.
One Shot Pistol-Iron Quality. A pure white gun with a green handle. It also has a black tip

Items:
Basic Fishing Tools
Plastic Water Gun

Beli: 430,000
SD Earned: 0
Stat Points: 32
Advancement Points: 0
SD Remaining: 0
Stats:
  • Used for Stats:32
  • Used for Fortune:0

    • Strength: 6
    • Speed: 8
    • Stamina: 8+9 (17)
    • Accuracy: 10
    • Fortune: 8
Traits:

Stance Mastery (1 Trait) - Requires a Martial Profession Primary
The character has mastered the use their stance techniques. All stances the character are always treated as being four ranks higher for purposes of calculating their technique rank benchmark and numerical benefit, though their actual rank is not changed.

Fate of the Mighty (3 Traits) - By placing traits in Fated, you lock them until the next time you earn a trait. You may put as many traits as you have into fated. In the meantime, you get a temporary boost of (3 of traits in fated, multiplied by 3) to your stamina stat.

Devil Fruit
 
Devil Fruit Name: N/A
Devil Fruit Type: N/A
Devil Fruit Ability: N/A


Techniques
Regular Technique Points:16
Used Regular Technique Points:16
Special Technique Points:0
Used Special Technique Points:0

Techniques
Hide Jab!(4)
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats: N/A
Description:Alex focuses, slamming the tips of his fingers into the target with full force.

Skyward Blaze! (4)
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats: N/A
Description:Alex throws a single punch at the opponents jaw, attempting to knock them out.

Hide Charged Kick! (4)
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats: N/A
Description:Alex charges up like a bull, running at the opponent and kicking them in the jaw.

Hide Face Cannon!(4)
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats: N/A
Description:Alex charges wildly at an opponent, slamming their head into the ground by resting his hand on the back of his opponents head and pressing down towards the ground.


Development History
Gains/Losses: -70,000 http://s1.zetaboards.com/One_Piece_RP/topic/5844494/1/#new
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Edited by Dylzor, Jul 22 2015, 06:22 AM.
[url=insert character URL here]Alex Hide[/url] • N/A • Martial Artist • [url=insert pirate crew link here] N/A [/url] • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 430,000 • Location: East Blue, Orange Island
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Can someone move this please ^.^
[url=insert character URL here]Alex Hide[/url] • N/A • Martial Artist • [url=insert pirate crew link here] N/A [/url] • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 430,000 • Location: East Blue, Orange Island
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Hey Dylzor, welcome to the site!

Instead of leaving Achievements blank, please put N/A next to them.

Please remove the italised section of your Doctor profession, that's the Primary bonus and you have it under Secondary. This means you can making mending techniques, but nothing that buffs/debuffs.

You have yet to add in any traits. You start off with 3 General Traits and 1 Professional Trait.

Your techniques aren't placed within the proper bbcode settings. It should look like [table=2,Techniques][b]Name[/b] (Rank)
[u]Type[/u]:
[u]Range[/u]:
[u]Stats[/u]:[c][u]Description[/u]:
[c][b]Name[/b] (rank)
etc.

For Hide Killing Spree!, Alex doesn't possess a pistol, feel free to add one into your weapons and I'll price it, otherwise please remove the technique.

For Skyward Kick (an odd title for a punch tech,) you're gatling maneuver would be considered as a rank 8 technique. You won't be able to take it now, but if you continue to rp, you'll be able to obtain the required amount of fortune to purchase such a technique.

I hope you enjoy your stay here! ^^

Edit: you get the knuckle dusters for free.
Edited by Dusk, Jul 18 2015, 05:31 AM.
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Okay, i edited it all. Btw, the pistol is free and i just payed for the knuckle dusters if thats alright ^.^
[url=insert character URL here]Alex Hide[/url] • N/A • Martial Artist • [url=insert pirate crew link here] N/A [/url] • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 430,000 • Location: East Blue, Orange Island
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Yes, you're pistol is free. Unfortunately though, you've broken the ending italics tag for your Primary Profession. Upon further inspection, please place [/i] at the end of "Stance" techniques.

I figure there'll also be a [/i] tag right next to the spoiler where you keep your character image, I fiddle around with apps enough to know that, so you may as well remove that now. ^^;

Your first technique lacks a name and you also have the name of another (if not the first) poking out at the end.

For gains and losses, it's better if you provide a minus along with the name of the item you purchased, and a link to the thread where the purchase was made/the post where it was priced.
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Okay Dusk, i think i fixed everything.
[url=insert character URL here]Alex Hide[/url] • N/A • Martial Artist • [url=insert pirate crew link here] N/A [/url] • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 430,000 • Location: East Blue, Orange Island
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Your General Appearance section is stuff that would be better suited in personality. General Appearance includes stuff like facial features, postures, expressions, build.

Techniques:
Hide Jab! - 'target' not 'user'.
Hide Charged Kick! - this is actually strangely vague when you say it like this. Might as well just say you're kicking them in the nuts.
Hide Face Cannon! - without being an assassin or a thief, you can't mechanize techniques that involve stealth. This will be an attempted (attempted being the operative word) to grab someone and slam them in a downwards motion.
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Okay fixed
[url=insert character URL here]Alex Hide[/url] • N/A • Martial Artist • [url=insert pirate crew link here] N/A [/url] • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 430,000 • Location: East Blue, Orange Island
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I highly recommend you just make that last technique "Alex attempts to slam a fool's head down at full force". My reasoning is because, as you are neither Thief or Assassin, your particular 'sneaking' has no technical benefit (which is a primary reason I'd prefer it gone), and would only be useful in an RP context.

This is not to say that you can't sneak, just that its almost superfluous writing it in the technique.

Therefore, by removing that superfluous part from the technique, you actually have a much less situational and overall better one! Pls consider.

otherwise, I can almost flag.
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Okay, i eliminated all the stealth in the "Hide Face Cannon" technique.
[url=insert character URL here]Alex Hide[/url] • N/A • Martial Artist • [url=insert pirate crew link here] N/A [/url] • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 430,000 • Location: East Blue, Orange Island
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It'd help if you actually mention how his targets head reaches the ground, the way you've word "Hide Face Cannon" it just seems like he runs into someone, and they're face will meet the floor.

Anywho, I'll give you a flag, so finish that up real quick.

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Your character has been approved.

From here on, you can go find some people to RP with, and start getting into some Storylines.

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