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Suzume; 'Dragon Warrior' [Flagged]
Topic Started: Jun 21 2015, 11:49 AM (845 Views)
Aoi Akemi
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Suzume

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Basic Character Information
"Ugh, I'm too young for this shit..."


Name: Suzume
Nickname: 'Dragon Warrior'
Age: 22
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Affiliation: Bounty Hunter
Threat: 30
Achievements:
  • Landed a single cut on the greatest swordsman she is aware of, Salvatore 'Red Blade' Stark, worth over 300,000,000 beli, with only two and a half years of training.
  • Spent 2 years enlisted in the Marines. Left after service.
  • Arrested numerous bounties on a civil island for a year after getting her bounty hunting license.
  • Fully responsible for the arrest of 'Polygon' Pol Grigory, a devil fruit using pirate worth 30,000,000 right out of the blues.

Profession:
Primary -- Doctor

Secondary -- Weapon Specialist

Jack of all Trades -- Inventor

Jack of all Trades -- Merchant

Position: Bounty Hunter -- Doctor


Physical Appearance
"Stare too much longer and you won't have eyes to stare with."

Height: 5'5"
Weight: 134
Hair: Purple, tied up and hidden away by her hat, two tails falling past her ears, wavy bangs when visible. Very long when down, roughly butt-length
Eyes: Purple, missing right eye
Clothing/Accessories: Suzume's primary and iconic set of attire is a yellow turtle neck under a black vest with white buttons, further under a dark purple longcoat. This is paired with a totally mismatched pair of short shorts, with a belt that she has a sword hanging upon her right hip with. The belt is designed to look loose when fastened, giving onlookers a sense of comfort.

On her head, she wears a cabbie hat, black in color with a white bill, turned towards her right and tipped forward . She wears a black eyepatch over her right eye socket, and a pair of glasses, which she needs for seeing fine details like individual letters, but can take off during fights without hindering herself any. She also wears a white scarf loosely, around her neck, only selling further the mismatch that is her outfit. She wears shoes when necessary, but prefers not to in most situations, defaulting to boots in deserts and snowy wastelands.
General Appearance: By the look of her, Suzume is not what one would expect to see in a primary combatant, and especially not one who hunts down pirates for their bounties. She is petite with a small frame, lacking overall apparent intimidation factor. Despite this her proportions are still in a relative hourglass. Her skin tone is light with a lack of ability to either tan or burn. She has a single purple eye in her left socket, along with hair of a matching color, which when left down will extend to her hindquarters.

Normally she will keep her hair tied up in a massive bun so that she can hide it beneath her incredibly fashionable cabbie hat, leaving twin tails dangling from just in front of her ears, as well as the left half of her bangs, which appear quite wavy. Asides this, her body is covered in scarred-over injuries that she attained throughout her training, some pretty mild, others rather brutal. Her dense upper body attire is what hides most of these.

Suzume


The Character
"Hey did you know that you have the right to remain silent, even when I'm not arresting you?"

Personality: Out and right, she doesn't seem to come off as a 'pleasant' person to be around. She has an air of professionalism about her that makes for a great work partner, but more-or-less she isn't one for socialising. People have a tendency to not be able to hang out with her because she is very cold, doesn't say much, and what she does say stings a little bit. This is the persona that she masqerades about wearing all the time, because it's easier to be a cold pessimistic bitch than it is to be a sad sack who hates life.

Suzume has a pessimistic world view, and is outright sarcastic most of the time. Her cold demeanor may be offset by a decently humorous person, especially someone who shares her interest in satire and sarcasm. The best way into her heart is through her funny bone, that is to say. Though don't expect to be making many mutual friends, the most she'll do is hold back crippling insults to their personality. No, not all the insults, just the ones that make them try and hit her.

The cold bitch is rude, this is for certain. As one of her defining features, she is not only very receptive to anger, she is very violent as well. She gets a lightly sick pleasure out of beating people into the ground, this goes especially for people who deserve it, such as pirates, jackasses at the bar. She is a bit of an alcoholic, easily spotted by the first place she ever wants to go when she lands on any shore is to the tavern, and when she finds it, she gets outright plastered.

As a doctor, she is quite... mean. She learned how to treat many injuries early in life, and has a great amount of field experience with actual injuries, especially on her own body. But because of her experience with injuries, she doesn't have the mercy of more traditional doctors. When someone is groaning about pain she simply tells them to shut up or treat their own injuries. When she knows something she's about to do will hurt, she hands them a chunk of wood to bite down on. Suzume basically hates people who get themselves injured for stupid reasons, but more so, she hates people who would injure themselves for any reason.

Suzume can be nice... sorta... when she's drunk. It's not a traditional nice, but for people who know her, she's like a whole different person. She's willing to talk about her life, other people's life, personal stuff, and is far more personable, though that isn't saying much. She's still a sarcastic, satirical bitch, but she's not 'cold' when drunk. Not 'warm' either; closer to 'lukewarm'.

The cold bitch has an absolute hatred of pirates, having well over enough experience with them to outright attack pirates if they so much as breathe in her general direction. Moreover there is a certain man that she wishes to see dead one day, and her goal in life is to strike the blow that ends that man's life. This man is a pirate, and is the sole reason she decided to be a bounty hunter instead of a marine.

That said, she is a far more polite person in general when a well-known marine confronts her. She doesn't understand why she respects them so much without wanting to be one of them, beyond the simple fact that the marine training and professional regimen would just get in the way of her goals. Suzume finds marines nothing less than the utmost of respectable people. On a totally different note, she finds corrupt marines are even lower than pirate scum. Beneath that is any shichibukai, since they are a pirate that uses the government to get away with any crimes they perform. And beneath all that is the one she hates the most.

What exists as possibly her only redeeming quality, is her absolute respect for the law. The law is able to be used against her by pirates that she is hunting, such as running across a street where the light will hold her up, given that ever becomes a thing. She's the kind of person to turn herself in for jaywalking if that were a law she was aware of. Furthermore, she makes it a point to immediately find and study every law present in a new town. If she's been somewhere before, it's likely she knows even the most remote and stupid law. That said, she is prone to turning people in for the dumbest shit. After all, a person who breaks the law is no better than a pirate.

Possibly deducting from this is her sheer focus on vengeance. Whenever she is spited or wronged, she is very focused on revenge. This is also included on when she is bested in combat, or even a chess match. Her angry mannerism of getting even with people is how she tries to get stronger, smarter, in general better than she was before. Where others focus on a goal, and relentlessly follow it, she has a main goal, and winds up setting other goals because people at any point got in her way, or made her feel inadequate, or even just proved they were better than specifically her.

Love for her is not like love for other people. She doesn't treat anyone she 'like likes' any differently. She doesn't expect anyone to notice the difference, because there is none. Suzume is a bitch out and right, she knows it. She keeps her emotions bottled up and doesn't share anything nice. Her mind is as tightly locked as any safe. The most a person can tell is that she won't kill them.

Hometown: Kuroshima, Grand Line
History: "Long story short: Someone lost a bet, now pirates die."
Chapter 0 -- Kuroshima

Chapter 1 -- A Prodigy is Born

Chapter 2 -- The Night The Sky Rained Blood

Chapter 3 -- Hatred and the Lessons Thereof

Chapter 4 -- Training To and From Hell

Chapter 5 -- New Hope

Chapter 6 -- Hope and Melancholy

Chapter 7 -- A New Day

Chapter 8 -- The Devil's Worst Nightmare

Chapter 9 -- A License to Kill
Edited by Aoi Akemi, Jun 29 2015, 03:49 PM.
'Dragon Warrior' Suzume • Medic • Doctor/Weapon Specialist/Inventor/Merchant • Crewless • Threat: 30 • SD Earned: 167 • Beli: 31,900,000 • L: Grand Line

Strength: 48 Speed: 49 Stamina: 25 Accuracy: 26 Fortune: 64


Musashi • Heavy Combat • Thief/Weapon Specialist • No Crew • Bounty: 5,000,000 • SD Earned: 60 • Beli: 12,500,000 • Location: Blues

Strength: 42 Speed: 17 Stamina: 20 Accuracy: 15 Fortune: 24


Scarlet Carnation • Cook • Inventor/Chef • No Crew • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 13 • Beli: 3,750,000 • Location: East Blue

Strength: 8 Speed: 14 Stamina: 8 Accuracy: 15 Fortune: 11
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Abilities and Possessions
"Try not to struggle too much; there's a 30% markdown on your price if I turn you in dead."
Combat: One part shaolin monk, one part battousai, and one part berserker, Suzume's skill with a blade is in the upper echelon in the world. In combat, she is relentless in her assault, utilizing her sword in any way she can to cause her foe harm, but at the same time, relies almost entirely on absolute coordination and clever use of feints in order to force openings for the final blow. Further, she is fully aware of the power behind a battoujutsu draw-slash, occasionally taking the time to sheathe her sword for the extra 'oomph' she needs to put a particularly nasty foe down. Having learned from someone she can only assume is the greatest swordsman in the world, her style of swordplay is actually insanely well-rounded. She is as skilled at blocking bullets as she is with air cutting, and her familiarity with her sword is unrealistic in the simplest way of explaining it.

Her most skilled application of swordplay is utilized in her personal use of her fighting spirit as a weapon in combat, a method she calls 'qi'. By channeling this fighting spirit with calmness and relaxation, she performs superhuman feats of skill with a sword. This is not necessarily easy for her to do, of course, since her fighting spirit is born from unbridled hatred. It usually requires her to take a few deep breaths and deliberately relax herself, which can leave her open. Nonetheless, the payoff of channeling her qi is quite great, allowing her to up the ante when she's getting outclassed.

While not too infrequent, she is also willing to make use of her Veganium Flamethrower, Chompers. Chompers himself is a flamethrower who ate the Dino Dino no Mi Model: Quetzalcoatlus, and is often confused for a dragon due to the fact that this combination effectively allows him to breathe clouds of fire from his mouth. Chompers, being a flying reptile, prefers to stay aerial in combat, and carpet bomb foes with fire. In odd cases, such as when facing a fireproof foe, or running out of fuel, he can resort to basic attacks, biting and tearing with his predatorial teeth and claws. As a carinivorous zoan, his basic instincts are to hunt and kill, though he's been tamed and is more or less as gentle as a kitten when not ordered to attack.

When disarmed entirely, she is still a medical prodigy and knows a great many things that she shouldn't do to someone if she wants them to be alive. Like a cornered rat, she is quite possibly more vicious without a sword than she is with one. While unarmed, she can't pull off things involving qi, since the sword is a major conduit and a focus point, but she is still capable of striking foes in locations that they'd otherwise prefer to remain intact. She's unafraid to abuse an opponent's weak points, because when she's fighting without a sword, it's not about the hunt anymore, it's about surviving until she can get her sword again.

Defensively, she is highly proficient at long strings of parry-counterattacks, as well as complete dodging attacks when she needs to. She is not afraid of injury, which is why it's hard to keep her on the defensive for very long, since she is willing to add a scar to her collection to win a fight. She hammers on the offensive the moment her counterattacks get a defensive response, and doesn't let up until she can no longer see an opening. Once she is done attacking, she jumps back and readies the defensive once more, generally cycling as such.
Weaponry:
Akisame -- The Cursed Black Jian

Chompers - The Portable Dragon

Items:
Beli: 31,900,000
SD Earned: 167
Stat Points: 32 + 150 + (17*(2/3) = 11.33--) = 193
Advancement Points: 0
SD Remaining: 0
Stats:
  • Used for Stats: 148
  • Used for Fortune: 45

    • Strength: 48
    • Speed: 49
    • Stamina: 25
    • Accuracy: 26
    • Fortune: 64 (37+27)
Traits:
Jack of All Trades (1 Professional Trait) – The character is able to master multiple skills, and has become adept at a number of things. This character gains two additional secondary professions.
Technically Adept (1 Professional Trait) - Increases total technique points by 40% of your fortune score.
Technical Mastery (1 Professional Trait) - Increases total technique points by 100% of your fortune score, but does not stack with Technically Adept (this benefit overrides the previous benefit). Requires Technically Adept and 100 SD earned.

Advanced Sword Mastery (2 General Traits) - Requires 100 SD earned. This replaces Sword Mastery if the character already possesses the trait.
The character has attained supreme mastery in the way of the sword. All techniques using a sword are always treated as being four ranks higher for purposes of calculating their technique rank benchmark, though their actual rank is not changed. Additionally, all techniques which gain this benefit have their focus cost reduced by half.
Tough Bargainer (1 General Trait) – Ever the successful businessman, merchants know how to extract money from people and to keep as much as they can from leaving their pocket. Thus, they will always earn 20% more Beli in their Storylines.
Beast Handler (1 General Trait) - Characters with this trait have a natural affinity for getting along with animals. Wild animals tend to behave either neutrally or friendly towards the character, unless they are very strongly aggressive. These animals, with proper approach and care, may be made to be merely distrustful and may sometimes refrain from attacking. The user also gains one NPC pet, who may possess humanlike intelligence, behaves as a crew NPC and is controlled by the player of the main character.
'Tis But A Scratch! (1 General Trait) - Weapon specialists are often used to fighting against other weapon specialists in close combat. Thus their chances of being injured by such weapons increase drastically compared to others. These particular characters are used to fighting so much under those conditions that they can actually ignore the effects of pain much better than their sissy counterparts and fight on.
Skill in Upgrades (1 General Trait) – These fellows are amazing at what they do, such that they can do it for a much lower cost. All technological upgrades that they make to weapons get a 20% discount. This discount applies only to the inventor themselves, and not weapons made for others.

Devil Fruit
 
Devil Fruit Name: Nope
Devil Fruit Type: Nu-uh
Devil Fruit Ability: Nada


Techniques
"Alright, looks like today's the day bitches die."

Regular Technique Points: 224
Used Regular Technique Points: 146
Special Technique Points: 0
Used Special Technique Points: 0

Techniques
* - Denotes a benchmark benefit from Advanced Sword Mastery
Zanzou (Afterimage) (28*)
Type: Supplementary
Range: Self
Stats: N/A
Description: Taking a deep breath, Suzume channels her hatred with relaxed, deliberant calmness. This causes her motions to appear slightly blurry, as if her outline is slower than her body, leaving motion blurs. Using her fighting spirit, or as she likes to call it, 'Qi', for a single post, she can cause each of her sword attacks to appear visibly quicker, though not actually any faster. This is done by leaving behind an afterimage in the wake of her attack, regardless of actually hitting, as she performs another attack. These afterimages cannot impede or harm the foe in any way, and are merely distractions left as she quickly repositions herself after each attack in order to strike from an 'unexpected' angle. The afterimages are immediately dispelled into thin air whenever they are attacked, or when Suzume ceases the offensive in order to back off or block. After each time this is used each thread there is a slightly longer cooldown, one post after one use, two after two, and on like that. After 5 uses she requires rest, and after 6 uses in a single thread, she'll be completely unable to move.

When in use, offensive techniques have the prefix-adjective "Taishoku no" ('Fading') tacked onto their name, as the afterimage visibly fades away.


Kawasu (Parry) (28*)
Type: Defensive
Range: Self
Stats: --
Description: Suzume rapidly angles her sword in such a way as to cause bullet-speed projectiles to land on the blade, and then redirect off of it in some random direction. This can be done with non-ranked shooting attacks, ranked single shots of rank 32 and less, and gatling gun techniques of less than rank 28. Obviously, she must see the attack coming, and it must at some point be in her sword's range. in order to parry it.


Kotoken (Flying Sword) (14*)
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Stats: --
Description: With a flick of her wrist, she swings her sword with enough skill to send out a cutting shockwave, extending her usual cutting range a good deal. This shockwave cuts like a normal sword swing.


Kotoken: Ishi no Uta (Flying Sword: Stone Song) (16* (14+2))
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Stats: --
Description: Branched from Kotoken. With a flick of the wrist, she swings her sword with enough skill to send out a cutting shockwave, extending her usual cutting range a good deal. This shockwave can go through untiered materials like stone with no impedement.


Kotoken: Tetsu no Uta (Flying Sword: Iron Song) (20* (16+4))
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Stats: --
Description: Branched from Kotoken: Ishi no Uta. Gripping her sword firmly, she whips the blade with deliberate force, and unleashes a cutting shockwave extending her usual cutting range a good deal. This shockwave is capable of sawing through tier 1 materials like iron within its effective range.


Kotoken: Hagane no Uta (Flying Sword: Steel Song) (28* (20+8))
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Stats: --
Description: Branched from Kotoken: Tetsu no Uta. Gripping her sword firmly, she whips the blade with deliberate force, and unleashes a cutting shockwave extending her usual cutting range a good deal. This shockwave is white in color, and is capable of sawing through tier 2 materials like steel within its effective range. Has a pleasant whistle as it soars through the air.


Harinezumi (Porcupine) (4*)
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats: --
Description: Reeling in her sword so that the handle is close to her chest while the blade's tip points directly at her foe, she proceeds to unleash a great many strikes at the general direction of 'forward' appearing to make a cone of furious stabbing attacks.


Momiau (Shove) (4*)
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats: --
Description: A thrusting attack which actually doesn't intend to do much damage, but instead merely causes the foe to topple onto their rear or back by lightly shoving their upper body backwards with the tip of her sword, disbalancing them.


Taihou (Cannon) (6* (4+2))
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats: --
Description: Branched from Momiau. A more potent thrusting attack, which aims to knock foes backwards and onto the ground with roughly the same sword-tip thrust. Good for gaining distance when she needs it.


Senkou (Flash) (4*)
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats: --
Description: An iai drawing-attack, which starts from a sheathed position at the hip, and slices diagonally upwards from there, using the momentum of the draw to deal damage. This momentum also knocks a foe upwards towards the sky.


Hirameku (Flicker) (10* (4+6))
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats: --
Description: Branched from Senkou. An iai drawing-attack which starts from a sheathed position at the hip and slices diagonally upwards from there. This attack is performed with high speed, appearing blurry.


Toppi (Offbeat) (24* (10+14))
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats: --
Description: Branched from Hirameku. A slash which can be performed in the iai mannerism or with sword already out. Requiring that she channel her qi calmly and deliberately, this slash is performed at ludicrous speeds, such that an observer of such an attack would not normally be able to perceive the fact that it even happened. When performed, Suzume appears to simply walk past her foe without attacking, though blade is out now even if it weren't an instant ago. She then sheathes the blade, and upon it clicking into place, the attack finally kicks in, her foe being cut.


Suzume Panchi (Suzume Punch) (4)
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats: --
Description: A punching attack in which Suzume smites her foe with the mighty force of her sheer physical might! ....Alright, she just punches them really hard in the face.


Dragonbreath Canister (14)
Type: Offensive Invention
Range: Short
Stats: --
Description: A canister full of more effective fuel for her flamethrower. When fired from the flamethrower, it has an extended cone, now reaching a slightly extended (though still short) range with its flames and hits with more intensity, causing flammable materials to catch fire within its cone. This canister can fired 4 times in a thread, and is refilled between threads.


Hellfire Canister (28 (14+14))
Type: Offensive Invention
Range: Medium
Stats: --
Description: Branched from Dragonbreath Canister. Improving upon the previous formula, Suzume's figured out how to make a petrolium-based fluid which burns with sufficient intensity so as to melt through iron quickly. This fuel, when fired from the flamethrower, it can reach a whopping medium range with its flames, causing anything even remotely flammable caught in this cone of hot death to be set ablaze the instant it makes contact. This canister can be fired 4 times in a thread, and is refilled between threads.


Development History
"I hate math."

Gains/Losses:
Amity's Stuff

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Edited by Aoi Akemi, Aug 3 2015, 05:59 PM.
'Dragon Warrior' Suzume • Medic • Doctor/Weapon Specialist/Inventor/Merchant • Crewless • Threat: 30 • SD Earned: 167 • Beli: 31,900,000 • L: Grand Line

Strength: 48 Speed: 49 Stamina: 25 Accuracy: 26 Fortune: 64


Musashi • Heavy Combat • Thief/Weapon Specialist • No Crew • Bounty: 5,000,000 • SD Earned: 60 • Beli: 12,500,000 • Location: Blues

Strength: 42 Speed: 17 Stamina: 20 Accuracy: 15 Fortune: 24


Scarlet Carnation • Cook • Inventor/Chef • No Crew • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 13 • Beli: 3,750,000 • Location: East Blue

Strength: 8 Speed: 14 Stamina: 8 Accuracy: 15 Fortune: 11
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Any footwear? If not say so in the app.

That personality. You called her a bitch like three times.

That guy is like an evil Mihawk.

Jians are one of my favorite weapons.

Guessing your starting in the Grandline.

Jian - 20,000,000

That's right reader? How did you know I was reading?!

Tis 4 uses per reload and good for at least 20 reloads is confusing, you may be getting charged a bit more or less, but the reload thingies are all accounted for. I don't even price zoan weapons on the regular. You didn't even provide how big this weapon is, gosh. Shit looks huge, I'ma say somewhere around a rpg. Anyways, take the price or roll the dice.

Veganium Flamethrower - 44,000,000

For the record you can't ride it or have it fly you around.

SD Remaining is 0

Fortune should read as 62 (35+27)

We only use whole numbers. When it comes to stats we round down to the nearest whole number.

I rather Zanzou be 32* but what do I know. See what the next mod says. That said, I'm totally not okay with this accuracy check. Remove it from the tech description. There's a whole bunch of weirdness here, another first time for me. Yippy.

Er. No. So much no. Redirecting the flames with a shockwave for one attack, perhaps.

Which reminds me. Discounts! 51,200,000 Total for Jian and Vega Flamethrower.

Pick up Rokushiki Master if you want to change Rankyaku description. With or without it, mastery does not affect it.

And you're branching with it. You can take Rokushiki techs up to Rokugan but you cannot alter them in anyway with out Rokushiki Master.

Mention what you are thrusting with in Momiau. And its successions.

Remove accuracy check from Hirameku.

I wonder if this app was skipped for so long because it made everyone uncomfortable...

Remove speed check from Toppi. Tidbit: if those checks were allowed, branching an accuracy check into a speed check would be a no go.

Just short for Dragonbreath Canister, replace 14 meters with short too.

Replace 28 meters with Medium in Hellfire Canister.

Now that I think about it I forgot what limitations inventors had as secondaries. Oh hey look a quote...Wow! I hate math too!

Speaking of math time to do Beli standardization.
60M + 20% + 6.6 = 78.6M on my end.

And that's about it, pm if you have any questions or bug a gmod/admin. Don't tell em I sent you tho.

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Hmm...

Edited in shoes-optionalness

Needed to keep it clear, she ain't pleasant.

Evil Mihawk. Probably not actually the best swordsman in the site canon.

Glad you like Jians, I thought it was pretty cool too.

Yep. Starting in the Grand Line.

Noted Akisame's price.

I AM PSYCHIC! MUAHAHAHA!

I'm fine with the price, and I noted that it's roughly the presumed size, because I'm lazy and don't want to write out actual measurements.

Noted Chompers' price.

I figured it couldn't. I'll make sure to avoid freeforming flight until I bother actually taking Rokushiki mastery.

Back when I was writing the app up, I'd assumed since I was working with fractions (1.5 SD to 1 SP) I could keep the .5 SD noted so I don't throw myself off later. It'll be okay though.

I kinda feel like that kid who claims that they're 9 and a half when I put down the decimals. I also feel like the staff is the teenager who tells me there's not a difference.

I... Wait no the previous block covers that rounding bit. Jerk.

I would change it to 32* but I'm pinned at a 31* cap so I'll have to hope the staff will accept it as is... or maybe as a 30*.

Meh. Blowing away flames is lame. I'll wait a while for that.

Noted discount pricing.

Screw it, I just wanted material breaking shockwaves. #workingthesystem

Yeah I got you Strength bro.

At first I didn't realize that I didn't specify a sword was used, so I was all like '???'

Hirameku nooooooo! *pushes the backspace key a few times*

Uncomfortable? Yeah I can see it. But you won't skip me again, right Strength? Right? RIGHT!??????

Toppi too? Oh the humanity! *holds down the backspace key for a couple seconds*

Almost missed that 'just short' bit. Good thing I'm responding to each detail.

Noted.

You hate math too? OMG! Twinzies! *is shot*

You just said you hate math, but you standardized anyways. This is dedication to the job. #Strength4GlobalMod

Questions? Nah.
'Dragon Warrior' Suzume • Medic • Doctor/Weapon Specialist/Inventor/Merchant • Crewless • Threat: 30 • SD Earned: 167 • Beli: 31,900,000 • L: Grand Line

Strength: 48 Speed: 49 Stamina: 25 Accuracy: 26 Fortune: 64


Musashi • Heavy Combat • Thief/Weapon Specialist • No Crew • Bounty: 5,000,000 • SD Earned: 60 • Beli: 12,500,000 • Location: Blues

Strength: 42 Speed: 17 Stamina: 20 Accuracy: 15 Fortune: 24


Scarlet Carnation • Cook • Inventor/Chef • No Crew • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 13 • Beli: 3,750,000 • Location: East Blue

Strength: 8 Speed: 14 Stamina: 8 Accuracy: 15 Fortune: 11
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Oh it’s the Amity replacement scoop. I’m not sad at alla bout it. I am ;(

Anyways, time for the mod hat. Pretty much just covering little tech stuff. Unfortunately gotta be nit picky with this.

For your shockwaves with color, namely Kotoken, Kotoken: Ishi no Uta and Kotoken: Tetsu no Uta… please lose the color on those shockwaves. I know, I know it’s dumb but apparently it shouldn’t happen until its rank 28 as I just found it. It’s pretty lame. So, Kotoken: Hagane no Uta is fine with it, but the others are not unfortunately. Sorry.

Honestly, that’s the biggest thing I saw with your Techs. Strength is good at combing out history stuff so I just skimmed it. The rest seems fine, if I don’t see it pm me and I’ll give you a flag if you can fix that.
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B-but... Mi culur... Q.Q *highlight deletes the colors*

Edited...
'Dragon Warrior' Suzume • Medic • Doctor/Weapon Specialist/Inventor/Merchant • Crewless • Threat: 30 • SD Earned: 167 • Beli: 31,900,000 • L: Grand Line

Strength: 48 Speed: 49 Stamina: 25 Accuracy: 26 Fortune: 64


Musashi • Heavy Combat • Thief/Weapon Specialist • No Crew • Bounty: 5,000,000 • SD Earned: 60 • Beli: 12,500,000 • Location: Blues

Strength: 42 Speed: 17 Stamina: 20 Accuracy: 15 Fortune: 24


Scarlet Carnation • Cook • Inventor/Chef • No Crew • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 13 • Beli: 3,750,000 • Location: East Blue

Strength: 8 Speed: 14 Stamina: 8 Accuracy: 15 Fortune: 11
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