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Time For Upgrades; iJst Reached 50SD[Flagged]
Topic Started: Mar 28 2015, 03:07 PM (437 Views)
Zavy-Sama
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Character:Kay. T. Law
Request:Approval For New Techs And Traits
Changes:New Techs And Traits

New Gen Trait:
Super Sense (1 trait) - Requires any Zoan Devil Fruit
This character has achieved mastery over their heightened senses, gaining a single sense on par with Observation Haki. They gain special Technique Points that can only be used on this sense, of the amount of a quarter of their fortune.

New Pro. Trait:
Kay Slay Style Mastery (1 Trait) - The character has attained mastery in his own martial arts, The Kay Slay Style, which focuses on no wasted movements with precise and powerful strikes. This style focuses powerful strikes that stem from a fighter that is already using a consistent motion(IE bouncing on toes, leaning left to right etc). From that consistent motion, by using the momentum, the fighter can shift their body into any strikes in a punching or kicking motion or counters. (can make techniques greater than rank 14) . All techniques using this weapon or form of attack are always treated as being four ranks higher for purposes of calculating their technique rank benchmark, though their actual rank is not changed. This benefit ceases to apply for techniques higher than rank 28.

New Zoan Techniques
Animistic Sense: Hearing (5)
Type:Support
Range:Self
Stats:
Description:Using the power of the Zoan Sense, Kay can now hear the intricate sounds that a regular person cannot. He can distinguish sounds and anomalies around him.

Yell of The Beast (11)
Type:Support
Range:Self
Stats:+4 Strength, +4 Speed, +3 Stamina
Description: Using the power of the Zoan Fruit, Kay transform into a complete bull standing on all fours, 6'5 long, From horns to tail, Weighing over 200lbs

Grunt of The Beast (11)
Type:Support
Range:Self
Stats:+7 Strength, +4Stamina
Description: Using the power of the Zoan Fruit, Kay transform into a bull-Hybrid standing over 8 Feet covered in fur with a bulls head with big thick human-like arms and hands and large human-like feet covered in fur


New Techniques
Kay Slay Style: Taurus Charge (4*)
Type:Offensive
Range:Close
Stats:
Description: Kay utilizes the fruits of his training training and start bouncing on his toes in place Leaning On The Left Or Right Side (Depending The Flow Of Battle). Kay Then Lunges Forward On A Single Bounce Towards The Opponent And Twist His Body And Strikes The Opponent. A Successful Attack Can Leave The Opponent Knocked Off His Feet

Kay Slay Style: Taurus Turn (4*)
Type:Offensive
Range:Close
Stats:
Description: Kay utilizes the fruits of his training training and start bouncing on his toes while leaning from left to right which allows him to be more faster and fluid in his motions in battle. Kay waits for the opponent to come close before side stepping out the way. If Kay successfully counters his opponent, he can knock his opponent off his feet as he side steps by kicking them with as he bounces on his toes.

Kay Slay Style: Mighty Taurus ChargeBranched From Taurus Charge (10*)
Type:Support
Range:Self
Stats:
Description: Kay utilizes the fruits of his training training and start bouncing on his toes in place Leaning On The Left Or Right Side (Depending The Flow Of Battle). Kay Then Lunges Forward On A Single Bounce Towards The Opponent, Twisting His Body And Strikes in a punching motion. A Successful Attack can break Tier 1 Objects.


*= Style Mastery Is In Effect
Edited by Zavy-Sama, Apr 20 2015, 02:14 PM.
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Taurus Charge And Psych-Up Will Replace The Old Tech That Are Already On The Character
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Only Psych Up is a stance. The charge and mighty charge would need a specific mastery trait to get bonus ranks.

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Aww iCant Change It Now To A Stance ? *Insert Sad Puppy Dog Face With Emotional Music In The Background*
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Animistic Sense: Hearing's range is "Short", practically only a few yards. Remove the part about 500 yards.

You can make one of your zoan techs a signature technique and get it to maximum rank for free. In this case, your maximum rank is 11.

Kay Slay Style: Taurus - It's rank 8. Rank 4 for the strike and 4 for the knockback. You should also specify what he "strikes" the opponent with. Is it his fist? His palm? His foot/hoove? His weapon? His head? chose one and only one.

Kay Slay Stance: Mighty Taurus Charge: it's rank 18, rank 14 for an iron breaking strike and +4 for knockback. So you can't afford it right now.
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Edited:

1) Edited Animistic Sense...

2) Not Sure If iGet To Raise All Two Of Them To The Max, As Franky Said, In Any Event, I've Edited All Two Of The Transformations

3)Changed My Pro. Trait To The Specific Mastery and Changed My Techs Name To Get The Bonus

4) Took Out The Knockback Out Of Mighty Taurus Charge, So I can get the Rank Up To 14 Via The Trait

Let Me Know Where iWent Wrong (If Any)

Also A Side Question ... Does My Animistic Sense Only Works When iAm In My Zoan Forms Or Can It Work When iAm In My Regular Form As Well ?
Edited by Zavy-Sama, Apr 2 2015, 05:16 PM.
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2000 lbs is an obscenely high weight 200 would be fine though.

Mastery - Need to post a revised description of his combat style, it's really vague. Just have it describe like 3 different types of move it focuses on, i.e. shoulder tackles, punches, elbow strikes.
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I might be missing it but it seems like you still havn't fixed your combat description of what the style actually does. You need to narrow it down so it's clear what the mastery applies too.
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Am not sure what you mean but I edited it more...
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The combat section of your app describes what is involved in the "Kay slay style" which is what your mastery covers. Your current description is too broad, make it more limited and clearer what the mastery applies too.

Something along the lines of: Mastery - Need to post a revised description of his combat style, it's really vague. Just have it describe like 3 different types of move it focuses on, i.e. shoulder tackles, punches, elbow strikes.
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Kazuki • Crew Position:N/A • Assassin • N/ACommendations: 88 • SD Earned: 356 • Beli: 165,500,000 • Location: Little Garden

Xavros • Crew Position:Fool • Entertainer • Theme tuneBounty: 103,000,000 • SD Earned: 406 • Beli: 191,000,000 • Location: Machine Island

Anthrax • Crew Position:N/A • Inventor • N/ABounty: 0 • SD Earned: 186 • Beli: 74,000,000 • Location:Gesso Island

Kuma • Crew Position:N/A • Smith • N/AThreat: 30 • SD Earned: 181 • Beli: 16,900,000 • Location:Custom Island
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Ok I added 3 typed of attacks
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* Your Mastery is far too vague, it shouldn't be applying to buffs either (you needs stance mastery for that). Punches and kicks are a bit too catch all imo. Could you be a bit more specific? For example kick boxing focuses on quick movements in a punching motion; coupled with knee / shin strikes. So far it seems like you're looking for a power producer.

* Rest seems fine.

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1) I've edited the mastery a bit more

2) since the buff isn't included in the mastery, I've changed it to 'Taurus Turn'
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If you just edit the wording of taurus turn to "side steps and aims a harsh kick at the opponents legs with the aim of knocking them off their feet" then you're good. Since your mastery is stated as focusing on powerful strikes you can't really apply it to a tech where you just trip someone up.
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Xavros • Crew Position:Fool • Entertainer • Theme tuneBounty: 103,000,000 • SD Earned: 406 • Beli: 191,000,000 • Location: Machine Island

Anthrax • Crew Position:N/A • Inventor • N/ABounty: 0 • SD Earned: 186 • Beli: 74,000,000 • Location:Gesso Island

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