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| Rath Wrath | Feb 19 2013, 11:03 AM Post #1 | ||||||||||
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Character Template [-----] Account Name: Rath Wrath Basic Character Information Name: Rath Stevens Nickname: N/A Age: 18. Gender: Male. Race: Human. Affiliation: Pirate. Bounty: 0. Achievements: N/A Profession: ~Weapon Specialist A much more general fighter-type profession, a Weapon Specialist is someone who has to a large or small degree devoted his/her life to the mastery of a single weapon or weapon type, such as Swords, Axes or Whips. This profession applies generally to melee weapons. A weapon specialist will be allowed to start with more melee weapons than normal. ~Smith A Smith is a man or woman who makes weapons and tools out of metal. Generally swords, since they fetch the best price, but it is in no way limited to this. Making cannons and parts for inventors is also part of their business, and they also get good knowledge within metallurgy. Position: N/A Physical Appearance Height: 6’1” Weight: 145 lbs Hair: Black, crewcut. Eyes: Dark brown almost looks black. Clothing/Accessories: Black boots, black pants, a white ribbed tank top, a black overcoat, and glasses. General Appearance: Normally looks pissed off and serious. He always stands straight never slouches. Has a scar that starts above his left eye and ends at the right side of his lower lip and scars all over his body from his training to be a swordsman. He has big hands and big feet (About 13.5 in shoes). He is muscular compared to most people, but not to some. White with a slight tan for skin tone. Spoiler: click to toggle The Character Personality: Most people think he is always mad or serious- natured,but he really is a fun loving guy and only serious when in battle. He loves meat and potatoes. He hates bandits, corrupt people and also annoying people. His dream is to become a pirate, maybe even the King of the Pirates. He enjoys to make weapons and to fight with swords. He thinks the world is evil place run by evil people. He is a perfectionist when is comes to making weapons. He is also short-tempered, loud, intelligent, and helpful. He has a hard time trusting people. If he has to kill someone he feel no regret later. Hometown: Shimotsuki Village, East Blue. History: He was born in Shimotsuki Village. His parents were killed by bandits when he was he was roughly nine but before they were killed, he was spoiled by his parents, since he was an only child. His parents never allowed him to do anything dangerous and/or risky. They were always giving him gifts, which he didn’t like more and more as the older he got. He went from getting anything he wanted to scraps, to making a living. After his parents were killed he went to the Grand Dojo, which he heard his parents talk about one day, so he could become stronger, and so he would be able protect his loved ones. He survived by doing any job that paid and sometimes eating garbage, since he had no living family. He lived nowhere, but everywhere. He got training at the Grand Dojo to become a swordsman. The training consisted of lifting weights to gain muscles and punishment to learn respect. He started out by learning simple techniques to harder techniques, and etc. He also learned to be a smith while at the Grand Dojo. At age 14 he started selling weapons to make a living. When he heard the fellow swordsmen tell stories about the Straw Hat pirates, was the first time he had ever heard of pirates and how he found out about Santōryū, when Rath heard about Santōryū he said he would master it to the other swordsmen. The other swordsmen just laughed and Rath vowed he would master Santōryū. The reason he wants to be a pirate is simple he wants a life full of adventure and danger. Abilities and Possessions Combat: He fights using every opportunity to his advantage. He watches every attack his opponent does and takes data from them to find a weakness in them, and to predict their next move. He uses three katana. He is still working on mastering Santōryū, a style of sword fighting that a swordsman uses three katana, one in each of their hands and another in their mouth, created by Roronoa Zoro of the Straw Hat Pirates. Weaponry: Three regular katana made of iron. Items: Five basic medicines for stopping infections and one roll of bandages. Beli: 500,000 Upkeep: 0 SD Earned: 0 Stat Points: 32 SD Remaining: 0 Stats:
Great Speed (1 Trait) - This character's speed is boosted by 20%. Bear Stamina (1 Trait) - This character's stamina is boosted by 20%. Weapon Mastery [Katana] (1 Trait) – The character masters the use of a specific weapon type. All techniques involving the weapon get a free one rank upgrade, and the max rank for techniques involving this weapon is two higher than the natural maximum.
Techniques Regular Technique Points:16 Used Regular Technique Points:16 Special Technique Points:0 Used Special Technique Points:0
Development History Gains/Losses: Edit Log: Spoiler: click to toggle
Edited by Rath Wrath, Feb 20 2013, 08:07 PM.
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Rath Stevens • Crew Position:N/A • Profession Name:Weapon Specialist/Smith • [url=insert pirate crew link here]Pirate Crew[/url] • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 0 • Location:South Blue. | |||||||||||
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| Rath Wrath | Feb 19 2013, 03:09 PM Post #2 | ||||||||||
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Rath Stevens • Crew Position:N/A • Profession Name:Weapon Specialist/Smith • [url=insert pirate crew link here]Pirate Crew[/url] • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 0 • Location:South Blue. | |||||||||||
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| AngelMayLaugh | Feb 19 2013, 09:13 PM Post #3 | ||||||||||
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Someone might ask you to put a little more under general appearance. Should go ahead and do that just in case. You're going to have to flesh out history. Try to make two or three paragraphs out of it. Maybe write out about what his family life was like before the bandits came? Talk about his life training at the dojo? No Nidai Kitetsu or any of those named swords. Fortune is the average of all stats added together divided by 4. So it would be 8. Regular Technique Points is Fortune x 2, so 16. put 0 for special and used special points for now. Where it says TECHNIQUE NAME, you should delete that and put the name in there. Also fill in the area where it says (Rank Number). I suggest looking over this thread some more. Killzone 2 is better than 3. Edited by AngelMayLaugh, Feb 19 2013, 09:14 PM.
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✉ Head Courier ✉ Weapon Specialist/Courier ✉ WORMS Division Beli: 50,750,000![]() Location: Skypiea, Grand Line [Sky Islands] Ϯ Enlightened Servant Ϯ Weapon Specialist/Martial Artist Ϯ Hot Rockets Ϯ Beli: 90,000,000 Ϯ![]() Location: Raijin Island, New World [Row One] ✄ Fashion Star ✄ Inventor/Designer/Merchant ✄ Fiore ✄ Beli: 61,105,000 Location: Couture Island, Grand Line [Sea Train Zone] | |||||||||||
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| Rath Wrath | Feb 20 2013, 03:52 PM Post #4 | ||||||||||
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Edited, tell me if I need to change anything else. | ||||||||||
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Rath Stevens • Crew Position:N/A • Profession Name:Weapon Specialist/Smith • [url=insert pirate crew link here]Pirate Crew[/url] • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 0 • Location:South Blue. | |||||||||||
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| Namine | Feb 20 2013, 06:06 PM Post #5 | ||||||||||
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★ Clothing and General Appearance appear to be a little on the short side, but I suppose they should suffice for now. ★ Not much of a big deal, but what colour is his skin tone? I don't want to be imagining the Hulk in miniature form, now. ★ I still feel as though the history is a bit lacking. After his parents were murdered by the bandits, how was he able to live? Who took care of him? Where did he live? How did he hear about the Dojo? How was his training? Did he start off from zero and work his way up? Just things to help you expand upon it. ★ Combat is too short. In a duel, does he keep track of his opponent's movements and devise plans or does he attack like a rampaging rhino? Does he use his environment to his advantage or does he not care where he fights? Even though we know of Zoro's three-sword-style, I'd like to hear your description of it. ★ Mention that those 3 Katanas are made of iron quality. ★ 5 Medicines? What medicines are these, exactly? ★ We don't use decimals for stats. If the percentage of the stat ends up becoming a decimal, round it down to the nearest number even if it exceeds 0.5. Your strength, stamina and speed should end up being 9 (8+1). ★ Fortune is 8. Don't calculate the bonuses from traits. ★ Regular Technique points is 16. ★ Your techniques, when in tables, should look like this: Techniques Coding: Code ★ Your first four techniques are fine, but Tatsu Maki, the rank 8, won't be allowed because of the fact that your character's maximum technique rank is 4 and you've already spent all of your technique points. ★ Used technique points is 16. Everything else seems okay. Report back when you've made all the changes. |
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| Rath Wrath | Feb 20 2013, 07:57 PM Post #6 | ||||||||||
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Okay I believe I have changed everthing you told me to change. | ||||||||||
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Rath Stevens • Crew Position:N/A • Profession Name:Weapon Specialist/Smith • [url=insert pirate crew link here]Pirate Crew[/url] • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 0 • Location:South Blue. | |||||||||||
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| Namine | Feb 20 2013, 08:04 PM Post #7 | ||||||||||
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★ Note that your medicines won't be able to do much - at the least, they're very basic and are inferior to the medicine of a doctor's. Other than that, everything checks out okay. Topic is flagged for approval. |
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| Rath Wrath | Feb 20 2013, 08:06 PM Post #8 | ||||||||||
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Okay thanks. | ||||||||||
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Rath Stevens • Crew Position:N/A • Profession Name:Weapon Specialist/Smith • [url=insert pirate crew link here]Pirate Crew[/url] • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 0 • Location:South Blue. | |||||||||||
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| C0nMoney | Feb 21 2013, 01:14 PM Post #9 | ||||||||||
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