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Topic Started: Nov 30 2012, 10:20 AM (94 Views)
doisenpai
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Character: Bronz Scrapmetal
Request: Review Techs
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Technique
Almadena Slam (18)
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats:
Description: Bronz pound his maul into the ground. The impact enough to create a blunt shockwave that would travel 8 meters until it dissipates. A rippling ground, 2 inches in height, trail along the shockwave but does no further damage. If the shockwave hits, an enemy will be knocked back few feet backward, woods will be crushed, and metals caved in for 1-2 inches deep (tier 1).


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Technique
Almadena Gustnado (18)
Type: Offensive
Range: Melee
Stats:
Description: Bronz swings his sledgehammer with both hands holding it in a super fast circular motion while moving towards his target like a top. As he spin a wall of spiraling wind is created enveloping him with a force to blow away any light build materials. If the attack connects, his target and ANYONE who's in his path within 10' (circumferential range= 4'5 length of the weapon+1meter arm+3' wind reach) gets blown away after.
Edited by doisenpai, Dec 1 2012, 09:17 AM.
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I'd take out the part about broken bones and internal damage, at rank 18 its nothing more than a forceful wind based shockwave, so the damage is pretty strength vs stamina related.
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So the tech where I branched off this tech was approved by mistake? Isnt logical for a broken when hit by 80kg hammer and 55 str, but yeah I agree the damage has to do with sta.


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Edited by doisenpai, Dec 1 2012, 09:20 AM.
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im not saying it's illogical in general but there will be cases where it doesn't apply, so it's better to just leave it out of the tech and then adjust the damage to the scenario's.



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