Recently the Heartless have started to appear in the worlds more frequently, the reason is yet unknown why though. If things weren't bad enough, portals have been appearing in each world at random times and random locations that connect them to some of the other worlds. However, due to the lack of Keyblade users these portals cannot be destroyed and the Heartless are continuing to run reckless, some people have been able to defend their homes and towns but others have been ravaged of life. Until the source of this darkness has become apparent nothing can be done to save the worlds from destruction.
Kingdom Hearts Forsaken is a, now open, Kingdom Hearts roleplay featuring some unique systems, first off the Story system. The board will have a Story to shape the plot, so what happens can be up to you if you join a Story Event, be a part of the Story and make your mark. Secondly, there is the death system - yes, that's right your characters CAN die whether it be in a simple RP or during a Quest. There is Darkness out there just waiting to hunt down the Light.
At the moment the board is still in preparation mode and is hoping to be up and running in the next month, all help is appreciated and there is currently a staff hire so if you think you have what it takes then apply!
I'm bored. So I'm gonna criticize. Mainly with traits.
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Unlock* - 4 Trait Points This allows the Keyblader to unlock the Darkness in their Heart and use its power, however this can be very dangerous and if the Keyblader is not careful then they can succumb to the Darkness forever. Overuse of this ability will strengthen the urge to turn to Darkness. When used, the character gains +X to all Stats for one attack, X is determined by your Total Stats / 5. This can only be used ONCE per battle and only ONCE per week.
Ok, first of all, how exactly are you supposed to "unlock the darkness in your heart" and use it to make you stronger? Is darkness some supernatural force or is just "hurr durr i'm evil?" Also, what if the person was already, oh, I don't know, evil? Say they are already "succumbed" to the darkness. Then guess what? They can get free Stat boosts for no downside. Who would want this trait and be a good character? And even if a light character had this trait, whose to say they wont abuse it anyways and still not turn to the darkness? They can say the progression is really slow or that "the good in their hearts always prevails" or make up some other thing to keep them from becoming evil.
Stat traits could be overpowered quickly, especially with your trait gaining system and the fact that your capping idea revolves around to how much you add rather than how much you already have. You could also theoretically have two Legendary(stat) for the same stat, because nowhere do I see a statement that says you can't do that. Heck, the way it looks, you can only have a boost in one stat at a time when you could probably boost in multiples. Also, are you trying to say that, with evolution traits, exactly how many traits remain used up after evolving? Because if I'm going from a 1 trait and pay 2 traits for the evolved form, i immediately lose that first trait forever, or so it seems. So can I use it for something else now or what? Or do I just need to pay one trait to get the 2 trait and use the trait from the non-evolved trait in order to pay for the other trait needed for the 2 trait? Whichever way it goes, it's confusing to say the least; maybe as confusing as how I'm trying to explain its confusing.
Ok, with Element power user, you are saying that you spend the same amount of traits as black magic but are limited in your abilities. Seriously, what the heck? Sure, we can then get Element Proficiency and become stronger in that element, but then we get the confusion of the evolution traits again. Or, EP can be a completely seperate trait from EPU and it's just not clear at all. Though I will give EP one comliment: the fact that it gives you something to work with as far as applying it to the rp. Which, I might add, the other magic traits dont! You say I have control over fire, ice, and thunder now? Awesome, but where are the restrictions? Sure, there are techniques, but whose to say I can't freeform a firestorm or something? You never say in those traits exactly how it affects the rps and how techniques still limit your abilities. And (back to EP) to be honest, after glancing over your tech system, 1 Level upgrade for 4 traits is pretty troll.
I'm not even going to venture into summoning because, quite frankly, i dont feel like it. What I will mention, though, is this:
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Necromancer - 4 Trait Points This trait allows the user to develop techniques related to death and dying. Poison, debuffs, curses (such as sleep effect or mental instability) are commonly found to be used by necromancers. In a number of ways a necromancer can benefit from death, such as leaching the left over life force from the recently deceased (or about to die), and forming nightmares. If the Necromancer summons any type of undead, weather it be skeletons, shambling horrors or anything this trait is treated as a summon, and thus no other summon techniques are aloud.
Forget the last sentence for a momeny, you're giving a person power over all these things through a summoning trait? Umm, what? Summoning the dead is one thing, draining the life from the dead (which is impossible) or near dead (instant kill since you could just say that the character was near death even if they werent) are completely different things. And all of this and more for 4 traits, something a starter could get :|
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Give it all you've got! - X Trait Points This trait allows one of the characters techniques to increase by 1 Level in battle for a certain duration, however the technique they choose to increase by 1 Level cannot be used again in the battle. The user also suffers for using a Technique that is beyond their current limit, and therefore they recieve -X*5 to all Stats per Post the Technique is Active.. X is determined by how many Trait Points you spend (max of 5). The technique will last for X Posts.
So let me get this straight. You are giving a bad upgrade (as said, 1 level isnt that much) no matter how many trait points are invested in this trait. At the same time, for ever post they use this ability, their stats will suffer a great decrease and cannot be regained (or so it seems) and the effect lasts for as many posts as are points in the trait. But let me ask you this question: Why would somebody invest in this trait if you can only use the technique boosted once yet you still get penalties for every post it lasts for regardless of whether you used the technique or not. I mean really, what the hell?
I would continue, but I have no time for it. And quite frankly, I've said enough.
Literally Annie
The Gang
Annabelle Amagi • Muse of Void • Entertainer / Designer / Martial Artist / Merchant • Chaos Weave Bounty: 50 • SD Earned: 478 • Beli: 173,200,000 • Location: Revolution Island, Grand Line [color=#0090D8]
Serana Valdís • Knight of Rage • Martial Artist / Carpenter • Valta Rank: Lieutenant Commander (33) • SD Earned: 229 • Beli: 92,200,000 • Location: Ilusia, West Blue [color=#F3D659]
Marshall "Dark Knight" Stroud • Knight of Heart • Weapon Specialist / Thief • Reaper Pirates Bounty: 27,000,000 • SD Earned: 172 • Beli: 28,150,000 • Location: Gesso Island, Grand Line [color=#506987]
Titus • Mage of Space • Carpenter / Botanist • Sugar Threat: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 500,000 • Location: Blues [color=#329555]
On Hiatus
Daedalus • Prince of Life • Inventor / Weapon Specialist / Marksman / Smith • Ray Solo Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 177 • Beli: 13,500,000 • Location: Salt Island, Grand Line [color=#B0171F]
Dr. Lamar Palmer • Bard of Mind • Inventor / Marksman • No Crew Threat: 0 • SD Earned: 61 • Beli: 15,250,000 • Location: Mirrorball Island, East Blue [color=#4FB44F]
Given we had that one KH board ourselves that was completely forgotten and buried because I was too busy. Quite frankly I don't have motivation for it right now either. Though this reminded me of it.
Someday, I'll make that happen. But not today.
AngelMayLaugh (6/9/14 8:25:03 PM): ICY BRINGING THE FIRE
The Antagonists
Ryan D. Glasgow ♠ Shonen Badboy / Prince of Void Martial Artist / Inventor / Artist / Con-Artist ♠ G.H.O.S.T. Division Shadow 4 Rank: Rear Admiral ♠ Commendations: 255 SD Earned: 665/715 ♠ Beli: 8,525,000 ♠ Location: Grand Line - Other Islands Strength: 90 / Speed: 120 / Stamina: 128 / Accuracy: 120 / Fortune: 107 Kurogami Kiryuu ♣ Cool Loser / Knight of Hope Chef / Thief / Weapon Specialist / Smith ♣ Chaos Weave (Pirates) Fame: Total Nobody ♣ Bounty: 0 SD Earned: 491 ♣ Beli: 96,900,000 ♣ Location: Grand Line - Paradise, Route 2 Strength: 86 / Speed: 84 / Stamina: 84 / Accuracy: 84 / Fortune: 89 Venka Sparks ╬ Yankii Princess / Witch of Heart Assassin / Martial Artist / Courier / Smith ╬ Letter W.O.R.M.S. Rank: Lieutenant Commander ╬ Commendations: 30 SD Earned: 334 ╬ Beli: 15,200,000 ╬ Location: Grand Line - Sky Islands Strength: 85 / Speed: 71 / Stamina: 71 / Accuracy: 71 / Fortune: 74 September Ní Duibhsíth ▼ Kuudere Killer / Thief of Heart Inventor / Smith / Assassin / Marksman ▼ Insert Name Fame: Total Nobody ▼ Bounty: 0 SD Earned: 32 ▼ Beli: 6,900,000 ▼ Location: Blues, who even cares about this kiddie pool... Strength: 12 / Speed: 20 / Stamina: 12 / Accuracy: 20 / Fortune: 19
I'm bored. So I'm gonna criticize. Mainly with traits.
Quote:
Unlock* - 4 Trait Points This allows the Keyblader to unlock the Darkness in their Heart and use its power, however this can be very dangerous and if the Keyblader is not careful then they can succumb to the Darkness forever. Overuse of this ability will strengthen the urge to turn to Darkness. When used, the character gains +X to all Stats for one attack, X is determined by your Total Stats / 5. This can only be used ONCE per battle and only ONCE per week.
Ok, first of all, how exactly are you supposed to "unlock the darkness in your heart" and use it to make you stronger? Is darkness some supernatural force or is just "hurr durr i'm evil?" Also, what if the person was already, oh, I don't know, evil? Say they are already "succumbed" to the darkness. Then guess what? They can get free Stat boosts for no downside. Who would want this trait and be a good character? And even if a light character had this trait, whose to say they wont abuse it anyways and still not turn to the darkness? They can say the progression is really slow or that "the good in their hearts always prevails" or make up some other thing to keep them from becoming evil.
Stat traits could be overpowered quickly, especially with your trait gaining system and the fact that your capping idea revolves around to how much you add rather than how much you already have. You could also theoretically have two Legendary(stat) for the same stat, because nowhere do I see a statement that says you can't do that. Heck, the way it looks, you can only have a boost in one stat at a time when you could probably boost in multiples. Also, are you trying to say that, with evolution traits, exactly how many traits remain used up after evolving? Because if I'm going from a 1 trait and pay 2 traits for the evolved form, i immediately lose that first trait forever, or so it seems. So can I use it for something else now or what? Or do I just need to pay one trait to get the 2 trait and use the trait from the non-evolved trait in order to pay for the other trait needed for the 2 trait? Whichever way it goes, it's confusing to say the least; maybe as confusing as how I'm trying to explain its confusing.
Ok, with Element power user, you are saying that you spend the same amount of traits as black magic but are limited in your abilities. Seriously, what the heck? Sure, we can then get Element Proficiency and become stronger in that element, but then we get the confusion of the evolution traits again. Or, EP can be a completely seperate trait from EPU and it's just not clear at all. Though I will give EP one comliment: the fact that it gives you something to work with as far as applying it to the rp. Which, I might add, the other magic traits dont! You say I have control over fire, ice, and thunder now? Awesome, but where are the restrictions? Sure, there are techniques, but whose to say I can't freeform a firestorm or something? You never say in those traits exactly how it affects the rps and how techniques still limit your abilities. And (back to EP) to be honest, after glancing over your tech system, 1 Level upgrade for 4 traits is pretty troll.
I'm not even going to venture into summoning because, quite frankly, i dont feel like it. What I will mention, though, is this:
Quote:
Necromancer - 4 Trait Points This trait allows the user to develop techniques related to death and dying. Poison, debuffs, curses (such as sleep effect or mental instability) are commonly found to be used by necromancers. In a number of ways a necromancer can benefit from death, such as leaching the left over life force from the recently deceased (or about to die), and forming nightmares. If the Necromancer summons any type of undead, weather it be skeletons, shambling horrors or anything this trait is treated as a summon, and thus no other summon techniques are aloud.
Forget the last sentence for a momeny, you're giving a person power over all these things through a summoning trait? Umm, what? Summoning the dead is one thing, draining the life from the dead (which is impossible) or near dead (instant kill since you could just say that the character was near death even if they werent) are completely different things. And all of this and more for 4 traits, something a starter could get :|
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Give it all you've got! - X Trait Points This trait allows one of the characters techniques to increase by 1 Level in battle for a certain duration, however the technique they choose to increase by 1 Level cannot be used again in the battle. The user also suffers for using a Technique that is beyond their current limit, and therefore they recieve -X*5 to all Stats per Post the Technique is Active.. X is determined by how many Trait Points you spend (max of 5). The technique will last for X Posts.
So let me get this straight. You are giving a bad upgrade (as said, 1 level isnt that much) no matter how many trait points are invested in this trait. At the same time, for ever post they use this ability, their stats will suffer a great decrease and cannot be regained (or so it seems) and the effect lasts for as many posts as are points in the trait. But let me ask you this question: Why would somebody invest in this trait if you can only use the technique boosted once yet you still get penalties for every post it lasts for regardless of whether you used the technique or not. I mean really, what the hell?
I would continue, but I have no time for it. And quite frankly, I've said enough.
Is your KH RP better than theirs? If not stop bashing if you can't do better. That's not a critique that's blatantly bashing in hopes that you'll get attention or laughs for it.
The Official G. Fist Topic Sacrilegious - The Official OPRP Manga. "I don't know!~ Crimson makes me think of red, which makes me think of that our previous captain, Daisuke. I'm a little uncomfortable with that considering as I cringe often when I remember what a disgusting person he was."
Hana Matsui • Sniper • First Mate • Bounty: 15,000,000 • SD Earned: 215 • Golden Fist Pirates • Location: Grand Line.
[Rin's Report on Takuya] "Takuya doesn't seem very much like a marine. Anger issues, lieing about his age, drinking problems, and a potential rapist, yet somehow he gets shit done."
this trait has inspired me to make my own dark trait and it will be epicness.
happiest day ever
Hainen: That would be too easy Mon Dec 15, 4:07:30pm Hainen: Dark usually has very well-thought out and rational opinions Hainen: I shall defer to his superiour judgment
Neon is a prophet
the characters
Colin G. Fist • Martial Artist • Frostbite Pirates • Bounty: 370,000,00 • SD Earned: 1009 • Beli: 215,400,000 • Location: Grand Line Ivan• Assassin • Marksman • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 228 • Beli: 88,000,000 • Location: Grand Line
Is your KH RP better than theirs? If not stop bashing if you can't do better. That's not a critique that's blatantly bashing in hopes that you'll get attention or laughs for it.
Get that sand out, bya. If you actually read what Ice said, you would have figured out that it was discontinued for the time being. So technically, it cant be better nor worse.
Annabelle Amagi • Muse of Void • Entertainer / Designer / Martial Artist / Merchant • Chaos Weave Bounty: 50 • SD Earned: 478 • Beli: 173,200,000 • Location: Revolution Island, Grand Line [color=#0090D8]
Serana Valdís • Knight of Rage • Martial Artist / Carpenter • Valta Rank: Lieutenant Commander (33) • SD Earned: 229 • Beli: 92,200,000 • Location: Ilusia, West Blue [color=#F3D659]
Marshall "Dark Knight" Stroud • Knight of Heart • Weapon Specialist / Thief • Reaper Pirates Bounty: 27,000,000 • SD Earned: 172 • Beli: 28,150,000 • Location: Gesso Island, Grand Line [color=#506987]
Titus • Mage of Space • Carpenter / Botanist • Sugar Threat: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 500,000 • Location: Blues [color=#329555]
On Hiatus
Daedalus • Prince of Life • Inventor / Weapon Specialist / Marksman / Smith • Ray Solo Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 177 • Beli: 13,500,000 • Location: Salt Island, Grand Line [color=#B0171F]
Dr. Lamar Palmer • Bard of Mind • Inventor / Marksman • No Crew Threat: 0 • SD Earned: 61 • Beli: 15,250,000 • Location: Mirrorball Island, East Blue [color=#4FB44F]
Normally I would be like, "I'm so down for this, leggo." But the I realized that their will be one thousand and one million other Roxas claiming to be the "Original" so now I'm like "lolpass:("
lolz. this is a freshly made site so i hope you guys would care to take a look or suggest any thoughts or critics to the mods in the site. in any case, i dont believe that anyone would be claiming to be Roxas since it isn't canon.
Raz • N/A • Entertainer/Martial Artist • White Beard Pirates Division 3 • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 13 • Beli: 3,250,000 • Location:North Blue Strength: 8 • Speed: 12 • Stamina: 10 • Accuracy: 10 • Fortune: 14
The Cast
Jagan Rousey • First Mate • Weapon Specialist/Carpenter • Davy Jones Pirates • Bounty: 0 • SD Earned: 0 • Beli: 500,000 • Location: South Blue Strength: 8 • Speed: 9 • Stamina: 6 • Accuracy: 9 • Fortune: 8