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Amelia's new techniques; [Flagged][Flagged]
Topic Started: Aug 28 2011, 09:29 AM (382 Views)
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Character:Amelia D. Boa
Request: update techs
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Big Time 12 (4 free + 8)
Type: buff
Range: self
Stats: +8 strength
Description: Amelia cracks her knuckles and lights up her cigar as she prepares for a good flashy fight. To her combat is just another chance to show how big she is, as such she always starts off with bang pulling out nonstop max power straight off the bat. She uses a style of combat that relies on singular powerful blows to blow away her opponents. It was a style of combat refined by the legendary Marine Garp the Fist of Love. With the use of a special breathing technique and controlled clenching and flexing of her muscles to store potential energy in her arms and legs. She releases this energy to give her a boost in physical strength for 3 posts. However the physical drain on her body prevents her from using this technique rapidly and she must rest 2 posts between each use.

Big Driver (12) branched from Big Punch
Type: melee
Range: melee
Stats: -8 strength against 1 target
Description: Amelia winds back her fist and slams it hard into her opponent. As she strikes she winds back her fist and strikes the same area rapidly for 6 blows. The built up damage from being repeatedly struck in the same area weakens and pulverizes the muscles reducing the targets strength for 3 posts as well as knocking them back as each of the 5 blows hit and impact one after another in rapid succession.
Edited by geomease, Sep 10 2011, 09:19 PM.
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Seem fine to me. Just acknowledge that each blow will probably have less power behind it.

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Sorry but increasing muscle mass through sheer will power is a rank 14 ability, either change the method and make it a stance or something that gives her added power, or just wait a couple more ranks.

Also just a minor thing but you said amelia D boa but gave the link for cheryl barrel, which meant when checking your techs i was like "wheres the crit hit trait" its not a major thing obviously since the link is in your sig, but might make it a little easier for the next mod if you alter it pl0x.

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damnit that technique for increasing her strength was already approved at rank 9, why do you guys keep putting me though this. All I was doing was upping the rank to 12.

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Yeah well idk why those techs were approved at that rank unless they were made long ago. While we arent going to force you to change the original tech, we can't let a tech like that be upgraded unless it's at the right rank.

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well how can i reword it so that it makes sense and fits for that level?
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You would need some logical way to increase your strength by normal means at that rank such as drugs for example. Focusing your muscles to a point where it increases your strength is considered supernatural since your stat in strength represents the maximum of what you can do by normal means.
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can i get like an example of a possible working tech description? It's a martial artst self buff so how is that even supposed to be able to be described?
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Something like stances to get your body ready for certain actions would work at this level of technique.
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ok how is that. Changed the description to basically relay that it's a controlled breathing and storing of potential energy in her arms and legs, something which is fundamental in many forms of martial arts. Think like Bruce Lee's one inch punch which has little to no wind up for momentum but still hits like a heavy punch.
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Yeah I guess I'm fine with this. Just know that when she stops her "controlled breathing and clenching" it will end her buff early.

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Then Tommy tries to think up a plan to defeat this guy and after a few seconds, thought of the perfect plan to knock him out which was to punch him in the back of the head. He then out maneuvers him by side stepping to the back of him and punches him right on the back of his head perfectly which then knocks him out for the rest of the bar brawl. "That took care of him, now who next?"

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