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Roxas.A Silvers; Scoop [Flagged]
Topic Started: Jan 31 2011, 12:33 AM (978 Views)
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Basic Character Information
Name:Roxas A.Silvers
Nickname: "SupaPretteh"
Age:19
Gender:Male
Race:Human
Affiliation:Pirate
Bounty:0

Profession:
~Doctor
A Doctor, on a ship or otherwise, gains large medical knowledge. They also get various other related knowledge in terms of poisons, nutrients, animals, anatomy and certain history. Suturing and cleaning wounds, making bandages out of various materials and preparing drugs, is all part of a Doctor's job. Doctors are the only ones capable of healing serious injuries on the crew. They also do not need to pay upkeep on the drugs/poisons they use.


Weapon Specialist
A much more general fighter-type profession, a Weapon Specialist is someone who has to a large or small degree devoted his/her life to the mastery of a single weapon or weapon type, such as Swords, Axes or Whips. This profession applies generally to melee weapons

~Martial Artist
A Martial Artist is someone who specializes in hand-to-hand combat, completely or very close to unarmed. They usually have good insight in the aspects of weight, balance and movement of the body.

~Smith
A Smith is a man or woman who makes weapons and tools out of metal. Generally swords, since they fetch the best price, but it is in no way limited to this. Making cannons and parts for inventors is also part of their business, and they also get good knowledge within metallurgy.

Position:First Mate

Physical Appearance
Height:6'4
Weight:140lbs
Hair:shoulder length blond hair with a golden shine, his bangs are cut short above his eyes while a longer strands of hair are seen between his eyes and to the sides of his face.
Eyes: A light blue
Clothing/Accessories:Roxas is usually shown wearing a long, black worn out trench coat along over a gray shirt with black cut-sleeved shirt with a thin arm guards on each arm that reaches almost halfway up his arm(covered by his coat). He also wears black pants and a pair of running shoes.
General Appearance:Roxas is a tall and slender, yet muscular caucasian male with a radiant fair skin tone. He seems to have a very youthful appearance, clear that he is in top health. Atop of all this, he is quite handsome with a very well toned body, although he does not seem to notice his dashing features. An ever-present smile of friendliness is seen on his face. Roxas has average-sized eyebrows, as well as sparkling white teeth, blemish free skin, and an average-sized nose. He also has a tattoo of the number 13 in Roman numerals (XIII) on his right shoulder.
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The Character
Personality:Roxas is one of those guys you can just expect to have a good time around. He's always up for a adventure and is utterly fearless, He's one of those guy's who you can always depend on, he'd jump into an ocean full up sea kings to help out a friend or random person in need. He is also very amorous, constantly flirting with any attractive woman he sees. He has sworn to never let women be insulted or injured while he can still stand, regardless of how attractive they are. This is often problematic in his fighting as he can't attack female opponents as he would rather die than hurt them (though that doesn't mean he won't resort to blocking their attacks). Conversely, Roxas is very abrasive and insulting to many other men, Roxas also considers himself handsome and charming, often comparing himself to a fairytale prince.Roxas very loyal to his crew mates and other friends, and can lose his temper quickly if they are harmed in anyway Roxas also believes that all people should be loyal to their friends, and if he sees anyone betraying their own comrades, he would stand up for the victims. Roxas is content and acceptant of life. He is most often seen smiling. Roxas also seems to rarely change personality wise.

Hometown:Orange Village, East Blue

History:How it all began, How the doctor became the warrior. The setting is a forest outside of orange island where Roxas and his mother and father where picking herbs for the village around dusk time. Three years before the current time line.
"Hey Dad can we go home yet..." Said Roxas as sat at the base of the tree while his mother and father searched for medicinal herbs for the village which was a common duty for the village doctors. "Well we would've been done by now if you weren't so lazy.." replied his Father as he picked. "Yeah yeah yeah..." Roxas' stated before he closed his eyes in attempt to rest his eyes for a while.

"Roxas I swear I don't know how you are going to coop without us, you and your laziness, it's such a waste. You have such natural talents as a doctor and a brillant mind." Roxas' mother stated as she moved to another thicket of herbs. "Mother you worry too much, I'll be fine on my own.." Roxas replied as he let off a short yawn. "Which reminds me, have you been keeping up with your training Roxas...?" Roxas' Father questioned because not only was he a doctor but a master swordsman and had taught Roxas nearly everything he know as he raised him and had also given him his two blades Peace and Malice. "Yup..." Roxas replied lazily "Well it's about time we head off I need to get dinner ready.." Said Roxas' mother as she dusted herself off so that her clothes were free of grass. "Yes i agree.." replied Roxas' father "FINALLY..." Roxas stated in a sarcastic tone

As they walked toward the village the sky now dark Roxas heard a rustle by a far tree in the distant by payed no mind to it since it was a usual sound heard in the forest "You know son, you really should start thinking about you futu-" Roxas never heard the ending of his Father's sentence because within the next two minutes Roxas witnessed the most terrifying and painfully things he had or ever will see in his lifetime. As his father stopped in mid sentence his eyes went blank and he crumbled to the ground with a arrow stuck in his back "Roxas RU-.." was all that escaped Roxa's mothers lips before she repeated the same fate as Roxas' late father "FATHER..MOTHER!!! Roxas exclaimed into the dark night sky before he turned around to see a sole male archer a mere 15ft away "YOUR GOING TO PAYYYY!!!!!" Roxas' roared as he unsheathed peace and Malice and Dashed at a very high speed towards the assailant. As he ran towards the killer,his foe shot three arrows towards him, all where deflected and as he strung the forth Roxas was already upon him and with one fell swoop had sliced clean through the bow that had killed his parents. And as Roxas Stared at his parents murderer tears running down him face but a look of pure hatred he stated one word to his now terrified opponent "I just wanted your cash! Please don't kill me!" The Killer manage to choke out. "Die.." and with that Roxas swung his blade Malice at the murderer's neck and decapitated him within a blink of an eye. "AHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!" Roxas roared again into the night sky before he began to walk back to through the forest until he came upon his parents corpses. Roxas then crumpled to the ground and cried over the bodys of his parents for a entire hour. Roxas then stood to his feet and wiped his tears, his facial features devoid of all emotion, and began to collect fire wood. Within a another hour Roxas had created a small circle around his parents bodies with fire wood."To think it would come to this..." Roxas stated in a cold heartless tone yet there was a hint of sadness in his voice before he lit the match he had returned to the village to receive and set the ring of wood on fire .

As Roxas looked at the corpses of his parents catch a flame his entire childhood flashed before his eyes.
"Roxas get out here hurry!" Yelled his father from the front yard of their small dainty house in the middle of the night "Yes your going to miss everything dear..." His mother said who was also outside "Yeah yeah yeah..." replied the now nine year old Roxas lazily as he walked outside with his hand Inside their pockets and his eyes focused lazily on the ground "Now what it that you wanted me to see..?
But that question was quickly answered as Roxas looked up at his parents and then the night sky because what Roxas seen blew his mind. There in the plain old Orange island night sky where billions of colorful flashing lights that lit the sky up light a Christmas tree."Wow..." was all Roxas say as he joined his parents where his father lifted him up onto his shoulders and his mother held his right hand. As he stared at the sky In wonder he lifted his left hand in attempt to touch the beautiful colors."This is the work of pirates son..." Said his Father as if he was reading Roxas' young mind "Pirates huh...?" Said Roxas in complete wonder "Yes, what a life they live, no rules, no bedtime, and they can sleep all day."Really!!!" Exclaimed Roxas "Wow thats the life I want to live then! And while I'm at it, I'll become the greatest swordsman that will ever live!!". "Sure you will son.." said his mother and father said In unison before they laughed together and for the first time it really seemed like they were the perfect family truely at one with each other..."

That memory was soon over and Roxas collected the ashes of his parents remains with the empty medicine veils he had found on they're being, his demeanor had completely changed and he seemed happy. Roxas then walked to the shores of Orange Island where the Sun was raising and emptied the veils letting the gentle breeze carry his parents ashes along with it and at that moment Roxas decided to become a pirate and lead a life without rules and a life of freedom and set sail the same day on his parents small sail boat. And for the first time since his parents death he smiled as he layed on the deck of the small ship and let the winds take him where ever they pleased.

Abilities and Possessions
Combat:When in battle Roxas is like an animal, fighting with his instincts and He can easily adapt to hindering situations. Though he has dual swords Roxas rather fight with his legs and feet due to the fact hates having to use his swords and will only do so when handling a worthy opponent but he will still try to kick as a form of habit.

Weaponry:Peace and Malice. Peace and Malice are two low quality steel twin 5 ft Kusanagi grass cutters, the Kusanagi is a straight blade with no guard and the scabbards are made of iron , the Kusanagi is ment to portray that the blade is an extension of oneself. The scabbards are located in on his back around the waist area in a X formation.The reason he chose these weapons is because since they lack the general length and thickness of a longsword, they are amazingly light, very sharp, and amazingly durable which suits his style of combat and lifestyle. Malice is black with a red stripe running down the middle while Peace is white with a black stripe.
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Smokebomb(s): A hollow, cherry- sized sphere of colored clay filled with a smoke- generating composition that produces a forceful jet of black smoke for 10 to 15 seconds that will help make a quick get away. (3 per SL)

Shuriken(s):Constructed from thin,
flat plates of iron, Shurikens are small hand held star shaped ninja tools used for generally throwing, though can be used for stabbing and slashing. (25 per SL)

Roxas' arm guards: Roxas's rather thin arm bands made of a low quality silk can now hold up to 3 Shurikens each in a thin hidden compartment under his arm, the arm guards are customized to have a very small yet easy to access string that when pulled by his middle finger, a Shuriken is released into his palm. Other than that the guards are completely for show offering no protect whatsoever.

Items:A small pouch on his hip in which he carries his medical supplies such as a scalpel,bandages, pain killers, and whatever other medical supplies he can get his hands on. As of now he only has a scalpel, bandages, pain killers, healing ointment ,and his notebook in the pouch.
Beli:4,590,000
Upkeep:225,000
SD Earned:60
Stats:92
  • Used for Stats:92
  • Used for Fortune:0

  • Strength:20
  • Speed:44(32+12)
  • Stamina:20
  • Accuracy:20
  • Fortune:20


Traits:
Fate of the Swift (4 Traits) - When the character next earns a trait point, they gain X+1 trait points instead, where X is equal to the number of traits points spent. 3X is added to speed.

Jack of All Trades (1 Trait) – The character is able to master multiple skills, and has become adept at a number of things. This character gains two additional secondary professions. A character may not have Weapons Specialist, Marksman and Martial Artist.

Devil Fruit
 
Devil Fruit Name:N/A
Devil Fruit Type:N/A
Devil Fruit Ability:N/A


Techniques
Regular Technique Points:40
Used Regular Technique Points:13
Special Technique Points:0
Used Special Technique Points:0

Techniques
Be afraid(1)
Type:Offensive
Range:Arm+Swords length
Stats:N/A
Description:Roxas dashes swiftly toward his opponent and quick aims a diagonal slash at his chest. Though It is ment as distraction.

Too Weak(4)
Type:Defensive
Range:Melee
Stats:N/A
Description:Using Peace and Malice Roxas holds them in a X formation to block incoming attacks

Raikiri Slash(4)
Type:Offensive
Range:Arm+ Swords length
Stats:N/A
Description: Roxas aims a strong yet quick diagonal swipe with Peace at his opponent.

Kaze Strike(4)
Type:Offensive
Range:Arm+ Swords length
Stats:N/A
Description:Roxas aims a quick yet strong Diagonal swipe towards his opponent.






Development History
Gains/Losses:41+ SD + 6,240,000 beli + Peace and Malice from Old Roxas A.Silvers from Dissenters of Cresent Moon Island, Trouble in Paradice, and One is all and All is one
Minus 2,010,000 beli for New Toys for Roxas and Weapon Upgrade for Roxas
Gained 6SD + 600,000 Beli from The Quest
3SD + 750,000 Beli Murder on the Red Line Express
-6,000,000 beli for purchase of Cresent Moon
1+Two Year Anniversary!
+10 SD and 3,500,000 from End of the Golden Age and from selling Peace and Malice
Edit Log: Changed Appearance, personality, and switched to fated traits

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Edited by PrettyfulRoxas, May 7 2011, 04:31 PM.
Posted ImageStrength:
30
Speed:
50
Stamina:
50
Accuracy:
58
Fortune:
43
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Grey G.Trimalchio
• Navigator/Martial Artist
Bounty: 0
SD Earned: 143
Beli: 50,000,000
Location: ???

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Go ahead and in your edit log say what all you changed from your old profile, easier to see from profile to profile what was changed and such.
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Posted ImageStrength:
30
Speed:
50
Stamina:
50
Accuracy:
58
Fortune:
43
Theme Song
Grey G.Trimalchio
• Navigator/Martial Artist
Bounty: 0
SD Earned: 143
Beli: 50,000,000
Location: ???

Ace D.Richochet <:D

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I'm counting you using 72 stats overall. You can add in that one stat though, 'cause I'm a nice guy and everything.
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Posted ImageStrength:
30
Speed:
50
Stamina:
50
Accuracy:
58
Fortune:
43
Theme Song
Grey G.Trimalchio
• Navigator/Martial Artist
Bounty: 0
SD Earned: 143
Beli: 50,000,000
Location: ???

Ace D.Richochet <:D

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Fran C. 'Bull-Skull' OsgraveArtisan Pirates • Navigator/Chef • Bounty: 57,000,000 • SD Earned: 208 • Beli: 78,800,000 • Location: Grand Line
Strength: 55 / Speed: 30 / Stamina: 118 / Accuracy: 35 / Fortune: 55

Jager 'Hitman' Foon • ??? • Chef/Assassin • Threat: 30 • SD Earned: 187 • Beli: 58, 200,000 • Location: Blues
Strength: 101 / Speed: 40 / Stamina: 30 / Accuracy: 50 / Fortune: 51

Cobalt Cross • Merchant/Weapon Specialist • Rank: Lieutenant • SD Earned: 102 • Beli: 17,755,000 • Location: Blues
Strength: 53 / Speed: 24 / Stamina: 30 / Accuracy: 30 / Fortune: 33
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  • Update the account name.

  • Switching to fated traits requires a scoop. Switch back. Use the correct process for profile changes.

  • You italicized the wrong line in the profession description.

  • Put a source for the 900,000 upkeep.

  • First Roxas has an SL, but no link. Put it here or remove the SD and Beli.

  • First to second Roxas has an unsourced 31 SD and 5,740,000 Beli. This Beli falls to 2,090,000 Beli in current Roxas. Put a link to all changes in Beli and SD in this profile or remove the SD and Beli changes.

  • Remove 'any' from the description of the Too Weak technique.

  • Fix the underlining in the bottom two techniques.
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Ok everything seems to be in order now, and pretty sure that the profile description says Scoop up to the top if that is what you mean by using the correct way to change stuff in a profile. (Also couldn't really do anything about the underlining in the techs without messing up my code.)
Edited by PrettyfulRoxas, Apr 6 2011, 10:07 AM.
Posted ImageStrength:
30
Speed:
50
Stamina:
50
Accuracy:
58
Fortune:
43
Theme Song
Grey G.Trimalchio
• Navigator/Martial Artist
Bounty: 0
SD Earned: 143
Beli: 50,000,000
Location: ???

Ace D.Richochet <:D

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Sourcing, Weapon and SD problems:

  • I'm assuming you didn't take any beli from the general pool in the Crescent SL.

  • You also didn't include a link to the appreciation thread, which I'm assuming is where the extra 1 SD came from.

  • You don't have smoke bombs or throwing stars on this character, so you should of refunded their price. Even including this error, your beli is still off by 1,510,000. This is because you subtracted the buying thread twice, and also didn't include the starting 500,000 Beli in your calculations.

  • Missing 4 Technique points.

  • Fate of the Swift should be giving you 12 points.

  • Peace and Malice are two handed swords. You have to pay for one of them, as weapon specialist is not your primary. You can send me the purchasing thread once you have made it.

  • They are also not mythological swords, remove references to Kusanagi-no-Tsurugi. They are average iron swords. Remove the references to being very light, amazingly durable; blah blah blah.

  • Change the scabbards to iron.


Coding issues:



[c][b]Kaze Strike[/b](4)
[u]Type:Offensive
[u]Range:Arm+ Swords length
[u]Stats:N/A
[c][u]Description:Roxas aims a quick yet strong Diagonal swipe towards his opponent.
[/u][/u][/u][/u][/u][/u][/u][/u][/table][u][u][u][u][u][u][u][u]

[/u][/u][/u][/u][/u][/u][/u][/u][spoiler]Edit Log goes here[/spoiler]



Where there is a [u], where they end should be marked with a [/u]. You're always welcome to change the template, but this particular version is annoying to read.

I'm not fixing this for you. You need to learn how to do it yourself. Good typing discipline will save you and the mods time in the long run. As will sourcing all your SD and stuff correctly the first time.
Edited by JOLS, Apr 14 2011, 12:27 AM.
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Replacing the [u's with [/u's just messed up the coding, and I paid for the swords a while back (Included the link in pro) thought I have no Idea where you got the idea that the swords were mythical.
Edited by PrettyfulRoxas, Apr 13 2011, 10:37 PM.
Posted ImageStrength:
30
Speed:
50
Stamina:
50
Accuracy:
58
Fortune:
43
Theme Song
Grey G.Trimalchio
• Navigator/Martial Artist
Bounty: 0
SD Earned: 143
Beli: 50,000,000
Location: ???

Ace D.Richochet <:D

Taylor Hawtner >;O
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  • You missed several of my points. Re-read my previous post.

  • You have an unsourced 50,000 upkeep.

  • Every computer comes with an ALU. That's just a fancy acronym for something that does math. Use yours with the calculator program of your choosing and perform the following:


    • Add 500,000 (Starter Beli.)

    • Add 3,750,000 (Beli from Trouble in Paradise.)

    • Add 3,500,000 (Beli from One is...)

    • Add 600,000 (Beli from The Quest.)

    • Add 750,000 (Beli from Murder on...)

    • Subtract 1,010,000 (Purchase of the silk arm guards, smoke bombs and throwing stars.)

    • Subtract 1,000,000 (Purchase of Peace and Malice.)

    • Subtract 6,000,000 (Purchase of Crescent Moon.)
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