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| Kaji.Dragon.Jones | May 6 2010, 06:28 PM Post #1 | ||||||||||||||||
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Character Template [-----] Account Name: Kaji.D.Orogan Basic Character Information Name: Kaji “Dragon“ Jones Nickname: “Dragon“ Age: 17 Gender: Male Race: Human Affiliation: Pirate Bounty: 250,000 Profession: ~Martial Artist A Martial Artist is someone who specializes in hand-to-hand combat, completely or very close to unarmed. They usually have good insight in the aspects of weight, balance and movement of the body. Martial artists get one free rank 4 technique that is a stat-altering technique, used on themselves. ~Smith A Smith is a man or woman who makes weapons and tools out of metal. Generally swords, since they fetch the best price, but it is in no way limited to this. Making cannons and parts for inventors is also part of their business, and they also get good knowledge within metallurgy. Position: Captain Physical Appearance Height: 5‘11 Weight: 170 Hair: Black, braided into cornrows. Eyes: Deep blue, almost black. Clothing/Accessories: He’s always wearing blue jeans, with a different kind for every occasion. Blue jean shorts for warm weather, black denim jeans to help blend in, etcetera. He has a large collection of various t-shirts which he wears alone or along with his long black leather jacket. He also sports a pair of black running shoes with thin red stripes along the sides, and a red sash around his waist. He has a chain wristband on his right hand, which he made himself. General Appearance: Dark skin, his canine teeth are just a bit more pointed then normal due to family background. he smiles a lot and always looks full of energy and life, even when exhausted. his expression turns vicious and dark when in a fight, and his look of bloodlust and rage has made most who encounter him in a fight believe him to be evil. He has a medium body frame and a well defined physique due to years of intense training. Spoiler: click to toggle The Character Personality: Kaji is very friendly and trustworthy, and is always in the mood for a good fight. he's got a gentle side, and refuses to kill his opponents no matter how vile. he has a great love of dragons because in the village he grew up in, there are many legends about dragons and even a shrine dedicated to the legendary dragon said to live inside the islands volcano. he has a habit of overthinking situations, which usualy leads to either missing an opprotunity or missing obvious details.. he’s very easy to become friends with and its hard to hate him for any reason due to his kind and compassionate yet fierce and determined attitude. he has a strong sense of moral justice and loyalty, and thinks that betrayal is the highest offence. He greatly despises the system of “absolute justice” that many marines uphold. He also is prone to attempting to get people to join his crew by fighting them, though it usually only serves to get him into trouble. Kaji’s main flaw is that once he starts trusting someone, he may take that trust a bit too far. his near unbreakable faith in others can get him into trouble. He’s also sometimes too forgiving. He’s also a pyromaniac and is prone to setting things on fire for fun, but when asked about it he makes up a reasonable excuse for it. Its hard to tell if he’s trying to cover it up or if he actually thinks its normal behavior. Hometown: Dorogan island, north blue History: Kaji never knew his mother or father, because his father left for the grand line as captain of a pirate crew well known in the west blue and his mother passed away during childbirth. He was instead raised by all the members of the village, living in a tree house built for him by the village carpenter and getting food and money by helping out the townsfolk. He was especially close to Columbus, the town Blacksmith. Kaji suffered many burns on his body by playing around in the forge, but after a while developed a slight heat resistance. Kaji was always fascinated by the most celebrated beast in his village, the dragon. He spent a lot of his time either at the dragon shrine deep in the forests on the vacant side of the island or in the towns Dojo, which taught dragon style kung fu. Over time he became stronger and stronger at a much quicker rate then the other students, and was soon able to surpass even the adults. By the time he turned sixteen he had his second degree black belt. As a birthday present, Columbus hand crafted him a custom weapon, a pair of gauntlets with claw tipped fingers, which went nicely with his fighting style. For most of his life, two pirate crews fought for control over his island. The “black chain” pirates and the “abomination” pirates often attempted to raid the village and cause trouble, but were always eventually chased off by the marines. With a marine base being so close to their island, many wondered why the village was being targeted. Many villagers looked up to the marines, which made them more likely to put up with their ever increasing taxes. One day, as Kaji was headed home from the Dojo, he found that Columbus’s forge had been attacked. He rushed inside only to find Columbus brutally murdered. Filled with rage, Kaji swore to face the pirates and drive them away from the village. He joined up with the marines and was soon considered to be transferred to the grand line. One day while delivering an important letter to the lieutenant of the marine outpost, he heard the lieutenant on the phone with the black chain pirates, discussing their good work at scaring the villagers so they would keep up their protection taxes. Feeling betrayed, he bursted into the room, pinned the lieutenant against a wall and demanded the truth, managing to flip on the intercom system in the process. the lieutenant revealed that he and the black chain pirates were working together in secret, and that Columbus had discovered this and was killed to keep the truth hidden. Kaji beat the lieutenant to unconsciousness and may have killed him had two other marines soldiers, who heard the announcement, not came in and restrained him. After discussing the troubling news, the three hatched a plan. They gathered as many of the marines soldiers who had heard the confession and used the only battleship at the base to attack the black chain pirates ship while the crew was in town. The enraged crew stole enough fishing boats to hold the entire crew and headed for the marine base seeking revenge. After returning to the base, the corrupt lieutenant was tied up and reported, and a celebration was held in Kaji’s honor, and many spoke of nominating him to be the new lieutenant. But after what Kaji had seen, his desire to be a marine had been extinguished. He decided that the only way for him to be sure that what he was doing was right was for him to be in control. Even if he was promoted to lieutenant, there would still be people above him that could force him to do whatever they wanted. With that in mind Kaji went home, packed his things, and left on a small fishing boat. After about a week of sailing Kaji arrived on an island and decided to stay there for a while. He heard a lot of rumors about one piece, and that whoever owns it would be king of the pirates. The pirate life appealed to Kaji, and the promise of a great treasure and freedom was just what he wanted. And with that he set out to become king of the pirates. Abilities and Possessions Combat: As a second degree black belt in dragon style kung fu, Kaji’s fighting style revolves around using the hands as claws and ferociously attacking the opponent, much like in tiger style kung fu, however this style incorporates many powerful and effective blocks and throws, unlike tiger style. It also requires a higher level of flexibility and speed. Kaji enjoys challenging others to fight, but not out of anger. He loves a challenge and isn’t phased by being clearly outmatched. However, if someone attempts to provoke him into attacking out of rage he will refuse to fight back. In a fight he often uses a very direct approach at first and adapts as the battle changes, however if he can find out the opponents fighting style before hand, he can plan out his attacks accordingly. Weaponry: Kaji always wears his clawed gauntlets unless training, due to the fact that in his martial arts style the conditioning of the hands is very important. The gauntlets are made of iron and mean a lot to Kaji. Spoiler: click to toggle Bronze Dagger w/Silver Plating.A simplistic Dagger which is colored bronze which has been plated in a rather cheapish silver Spoiler: click to toggle Items: canteen of lighter fluid and lighter, for emergencies or just for fun. Speak's goodie bag [/b] Beli: 6,800,000 Upkeep:50,000 SD Earned: 30 Stats:
Fate of the Strong (2 Traits) - When the character next earns a trait point, they gain X+1 trait points instead, where X is equal to the number of traits points spent. 3X is added to strength.
Techniques Regular Technique Points: 30 Used Regular Technique Points: 30 Special Technique Points: 4 Used Special Technique Points: 4
Development History Gains/Losses: 12/5/2010 earned 20SD and 4,950,000 from The dragon and the giant. Speak's goodie bag earned Edit Log: Spoiler: click to toggle Edited by Kaji.Dragon.Jones, Mar 28 2011, 06:53 PM.
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| Kaji.Dragon.Jones | May 7 2010, 05:42 PM Post #2 | ||||||||||||||||
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and now we play the waiting game.
Edited by Kaji.Dragon.Jones, May 7 2010, 05:42 PM.
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| Versesai | May 8 2010, 12:35 PM Post #3 | ||||||||||||||||
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Bumps don't work well because we start from the bottom up. Just saying. Secondary profession needs it's description too. Ignoring his tendency to develop a spontaneous bloodlust look in combat, this ditty in his profile stands out: he has a habit of switching from being too impulsive in some situations and over thinking others, but usually makes the right decision. This is a weird little personality blip that feels like it's just there so you can never make the 'wrong' choice in a situation because of rashness or over thinking. I call this a magic personality switch and it's not acceptable. Please either explain it better or focus on one aspect. I was fine with the history until we got to a point. Now, this turning point is very crucial because it steps into another area I don't like. See if you can spot what I might wish you to change in this paragraph.
While I don't mind so much the implications that an entire island full of marines would be corrupt bastards, which by the way I'm sure another mod will, a few things need to be corrected or explained. Like... 1: Why a man who would not kill his corrupt superior would then go off and immediately sink a pirate ship with no remorse. 2: How a marine, a single marine, with little training, managed to hijack an BATTLESHIP, one of the most heavily manned kinds of ships the Marines possess, then managed to operate it -by himself-, THEN managed to out-maneuver, out-gun and defeat an entire pirate ship. When he has no skill with ships above those of an ordinary man. ...Oh, and 3: How did he managed to escape a full marine pursuit and float around the sea on a Battleship which he will not be allowed to start with btw? Whoo boy weapons.
First of all, please learn to paragraph. My rule is if there is not a space every, I dunno, three sentences or so, I stop wanting to read it. As a non-WS and non-Marksman, you get two one-handed weapons or one two-handed weapon. Your gauntlet counts as your two one-handed weapons. If you want a flintlock, you can have one for subtracting 50,000 from your starter money and adding 50,000 upkeep. You don't have the room to start with anything else and those grenades would need armory pricing.Also, this: A canteen of lighter fluid and a cigarette lighter, for emergencies or just for fun. is kind of iffy to start with. Technically, that's a weapon. How about you choose between the flintlock or these for 50,000 and 50,000 upkeep. Oh, and They're made of iron and are simple, basic gauntlet-style claw gloves. Cause anything more extensive and you have to buy it. You also get a profession trait. Re-read the Traits topic from the first paragraph onward. And... Dragon Scales : No Tekkai wannabes. How about you just say he does something with his breathing and his body is able to endure more for a brief period of time? |
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| Kaji.Dragon.Jones | May 8 2010, 02:07 PM Post #4 | ||||||||||||||||
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changes made magic personality fixed, decided to go with overthinker. i also fixed the things in the history. After looking at it i decided all the marines being evil was a bit much, so i switched it around so that it was just the captain. i also moved things around so that Kaji not killing the captain was more believeable. since i can't start with the battleship, i just took a small fishing boat. and patched up how he managed to escape capture. if possible i would like to ditch the ligfhter fluid and lighter in favor of having my suped up gauntlets, but if the price for them is too high ill settle. changed my free rank four completly, less tekkai more oni giri but with the legs, which i hope is acceptable. traits should be fixed too. |
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| The Almighty J | May 10 2010, 10:14 PM Post #5 | ||||||||||||||||
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Okay... his history now makes more sense in someways, and is much more confusing in others. Basically, I have no idea what happened after they attacked the ship. Presumably, the Marines would then report the corrupt captain to highers up, who would go arrest him, and Kaji would get like, a commendation. Instead, he has a bounty put on his head and he flees? This is far too confusing, and since he actually cannot start with a bounty, it's also impossible. As for the gauntlets... if they're just iron, claw-tipped gauntlets, then they're starting weapons. Is there something in particular you want to soup up? Depending on what kind of 'awesomeness' you want, you might be able to pay for it now... or you might have to upgrade them over time. |
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That WIP Failmaid I have a DeviantArt. You know you want to see it, so why deny yourself? Also chillin' like crazy over on Tumblr, if you're into that. | |||||||||||||||||
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| Kaji.Dragon.Jones | May 11 2010, 03:22 AM Post #6 | ||||||||||||||||
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alright, i seem to be tripping up a bit on what i can and can't start with, so i apologise. i figured i would get a starting bounty based on my history, but if not i can do another change. and the gauntlets, i wanted them to be made of a very high grade metal and with thinner plating, so while they were stronger then iron they weren't as bulky and made hand and finger movements eaiser. because my charecter wears them all the time. oh, and one last thing, for some reason i can't edit my template. i click the button and i get an error message from my computer. could i somehow re-post it? |
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| Kaji.Dragon.Jones | May 11 2010, 03:44 PM Post #7 | ||||||||||||||||
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nevermind, everything should be fixed now. | ||||||||||||||||
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| Versesai | May 12 2010, 04:40 AM Post #8 | ||||||||||||||||
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Separate your professions. Like, srsyly, they're both stuck together. Also, remove Smiths will get a 20% discount on any weapon upgrades or new weapons that they buy for themselves. from the bottom of Smith. You don't get the bonus aspect of your secondary profession, has to be Primary. Fortune is 8, not 0. |
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Ovae Sevault Dachrinne • Doctor/Weapon Specialist • This Man's A Doctor • 5,000,000 • SD Earned: 77 • Beli: 16,700,000 • Location: God Only Knows. These Other Inactives
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| Kaji.Dragon.Jones | May 12 2010, 02:44 PM Post #9 | ||||||||||||||||
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okey, i seperated my professions and took off the smith bonus. i also added eight to my fortune and added some more techniques. | ||||||||||||||||
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| Versesai | May 13 2010, 01:07 PM Post #10 | ||||||||||||||||
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Ovae Sevault Dachrinne • Doctor/Weapon Specialist • This Man's A Doctor • 5,000,000 • SD Earned: 77 • Beli: 16,700,000 • Location: God Only Knows. These Other Inactives
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| ♠ Shamma | May 16 2010, 03:56 PM Post #11 | ||||||||||||||||
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Fixed the bold issue and added the account name for you. The other thing I did was make the 'Captain' a 'Lieutenant' just for feasibility sake. Your character has been approved. From here on, you can go find some people to RP with, and start getting into some Storylines. Make sure you enter the appropriate information into your signature, the details of which can be found here. |
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| Kaji.Dragon.Jones | Jul 9 2010, 07:08 PM Post #12 | ||||||||||||||||
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changes made, please review. | ||||||||||||||||
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| JOLS | Jul 19 2010, 05:08 PM Post #13 | ||||||||||||||||
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Put all the changes you made in a reply. | ||||||||||||||||
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Assuming it's approved Official OPRP collectable trading card.
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| Kaji.Dragon.Jones | Aug 7 2010, 06:58 PM Post #14 | ||||||||||||||||
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added recieved points to my states, and put in the two free ranks from my martial arts mastry trait into the dragons claw technique. That is all. Incorrect. |
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| Kaji.Dragon.Jones | Sep 28 2010, 07:27 PM Post #15 | ||||||||||||||||
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Added 3 SD from two year anniversery. thats...freaky, i have no recelection of posting incorrect beneath the above post, theres no way one of you mods could have done that... is there?
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