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[Finished] Chapter 1: The Duo Begins Their Journey! The Lush Island Santa Reia
Topic Started: Oct 24 2012, 10:34 PM (290 Views)
Tyberius W
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Finished on 10/24/12

Chapter 1: The Duo Begins Their Journey! The Lush Island Santa Reia!
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Kyto
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Review:

Well this story felt like it rushed to the action a little quickly and wrapped up even faster. Even so, there were some interesting things overall. I like how you to use your Devil Fruits, especially since they were both random rolled. I'm also interested in seeing what you guy are planning for an overarching story after the mystery in this chapter. Most importantly, I really like the chemistry between Deus and Bruca. Those two look like they will make a great pair. If I had to make any suggestions I would say flesh out the next chapter a bit more but overall a good read.

Grades:

Deus:
5 SP

Bruca:
5 SP

*edit: removed beli until bounty is turned in*
Edited by Kyto, Oct 27 2012, 05:27 PM.
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