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| [Denied]Dayton Keishi; My Character | |
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| Topic Started: Oct 31 2009, 02:32 AM (59 Views) | |
| DaytonKeishi | Oct 31 2009, 02:32 AM Post #1 |
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Username: DaytonKeishi Points: None Yet -------------------------- Name: Dayton Keishi Nicknames: Day Age: 13 Gender: Male Height: 5"9' Weight: 150 lb Hair: Spiky, White and Unruly. Eyes: Brown Body Build: Skinny Traits: Keishi Clan's Triple Rioka Clothing: Dayton wears a white unbottoned button down long sleeve shirt with no t shirt under and a shark necklace, he also wears headphones to keep his hair up and green and some sandals. Forhead Protector: Suna Personality: Calm and Easy Going never feels the need to panic when in danger Picture: [img][/img] <a href="http://s274.photobucket.com/albums/jj241/LanN1/?action=view¤t=yoh-7.gif" target="_blank"><img src="http://i274.photobucket.com/albums/jj241/LanN1/yoh-7.gif" border="0" alt="Photobucket"></a> Rank: Genin Village: Suna Weapons: Katana and Kunais Stats: Strength: 70 Speed: 90 Charisma: 20 Agility: 90 and Intelligence: 40 Ninjutsu:9 Taijutsu:10 Genjutsu: 2 Stanima: 10 Control: 9 Strength: 1 Speed:9 Wit: 4 Jutsu Specialty: Ninjutsu and Taijutsu Chakra Affinity: Curse Mark Second Chakra Affinity: Regular Bloodeline Limit: Triple Rioka Jutsu: 10 History: he pretty much was an orphan his whole life Sample Post: None
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| ΩOrius | Oct 31 2009, 03:30 AM Post #2 |
The dread Elder lies dreaming, not dead.
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K, normally I'd just deny this and pm it to you to post later (since it's incomplete and we don't allow those), but you have some major errors that you need corrected on. <o> Points: None Yet <- Just leave that at the 0/0 Picture: [img][/img] <a href="http://s274.photobucket.com/albums/jj241/LanN1/?action=view¤t=yoh-7.gif" target="_blank"><img src="http://i274.photobucket.com/albums/jj241/LanN1/yoh-7.gif" border="0" alt="Photobucket"></a> <- Multiple problems here. Forums use BBC code, which would be the [img] tag you see, not HTML which is what you are trying to do with the second part. In addition, we don't allow people to use characters from popular media, such as Shaman King, so you'll have to find a new picture, if you want one. Strength: 70 Speed: 90 Charisma: 20 Agility: 90 and Intelligence: 40 <- None of these are stats from our system. You don't need them at all. Now for the stats that ARE in our system, you need some work there. Genin start out with 24 stats. You clearly have way more than that. Chakra affinities are elemental types, not cursed seals or anything like that. Plus, cursed seals (like what are on Sasuke/Kimimaro/etc) aren't really allowed, due to their godmoding potential. For the Bloodline limit, since it appears custom, you will have to register the clan for that first. Lastly, the history and personality are kinda bare bones. You'll want to fatten them up. <o/ |
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| ΩOrius | Nov 7 2009, 10:15 PM Post #3 |
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The dread Elder lies dreaming, not dead.
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Time. <o> Sorry, but your application was not accepted for reasons stated by the administration. You can always try again and ask a mod or an admin for help! This is an automated message. |
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