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Scene drafts; Scene drafts will be posted here
Topic Started: May 11 2010, 03:15 AM (547 Views)
Kevin
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This is a rough draft of scene 7, "The Deed." tell me what yall think; to view it click here
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Blake
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THAT"S AMAZING KEVIN!

Good job!!!!!

Now I'm really excited for the rest of the movie... :D
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Kevin
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ok so this is the trailer for our movie tell me what ya think:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W4Da8pAcM48
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Kevin
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also a draft of scene3 "The Office" is also available at:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kpqDU9J7l5M
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Chaffin

isn't the very first scene of the Office is supposed to be after CEO visits his office the 2nd time? cuz he promotes him above Macduff and then he comes in there and brings the coffee after CEO promotes him.
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uh, well the script listed the Macbeth-Macduff scene first, then Mac unpacking in his office, then the exchange between Macbeth and employee 2, then Macduff and employee2, then the janitor and Macbeth.
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Scene1 "The Rooftop" is now uploaded check it out at:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Kpuau631qRE
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the "After Party" scene has also been drafted, however due to copyright issues i cannot upload it to Youtube, sorry.
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Chaffin

i found some really good background music that doesn't have any words, it's just kinda soft and makes for good filler if you need any
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_j54fbSmCKM
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SkTXWWf2TJ8
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BwXlzy9k7jI
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Blake
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Kevin, I couldn't ask for a better editor. :D You're doing an AMAZING job, man.

I have a few notes, though.

I was rereading what we'd discussed on here about the script earlier, and I remembered that scene 1 (The FIRST rooftop scene) was going to be set to "Running Up that Hill" by Placebo. Then it would rewind and to into The After Party. Then the SECOND rooftop scene at the end was going to be set to Johnny Cash's "Hurt". I think it's important to have two different songs for each rooftop scene, so as to convey to the audience that something is different (the fact that they know the story now makes it different). I muted the youtube video and set it to each of the songs, and the way it is, it should fit "Hurt" perfectly as far as timing goes. It just needs to be a little longer (but you can add to the length with the graveyard stuff I shot). And "Running Up that Hill" is about 1 minutes and 30 seconds longer than the video, but you can just fade the music.

The second thing: I LOVE the shots you put together on the rooftop scene. But when I zoomed in and out, that was me not wanting to stop recording and frame another shot, so the shots with the zoom are supposed to be several different cuts. I'm mainly talking about the part at 2:20. If you could just delete the couple of seconds worth of the camera moving and zooming so that it only shows when the shot is still, it'd be fantastic. :D

And Mrs. White said the rewind thing was one of the coolest things about our movie. If we could keep it in, I'd kind of like to. If the rewind is longer than 10 seconds, it'll probably bore or confuse the audience, but I think it'd be cool. And without any music. If you could add that in, we could at least see how it looks and decide what we want from there.



I REALLY hope that's not too much to ask. You're doing an awesome job, Kevin. Seriously. B-)
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