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| brigadier | Jan 6 2009, 06:38 PM Post #1 |
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Hi! i came up with an idea yesterday for a story and so began writting a brief summary of different parts. i haven't managed to get that far yet but i'll post what i've done so far. Before i do though just note that Name's of characters, name's of place's, settings ect can all be changed to make it much cooler like a standard RPG in a fictional world yet the story will still be very functional. Plotline The year is 1520*. South America was discovered by Europe barely 10 years ago. Not long after, in search of unimaginable wealth, the Spanish begin a conquest for gold. Destroying all in their path, entire civilisations are being annihilated by the foreigners. A young conquistador Luis Thiago decides his cause is unjust after witnessing the slaughter of an entire village of innocent natives. Upon a guilty conscience he vows to fight for what is right and teams up with his childhood friend, and comrade, Mikel Ortega and the only survivor of the village he witnessed destroyed Tok’Po (whom he helps to evade the army). Together they decide to go right for the jugular and go straight for the commander of the Spanish. Finding only a metaphorical impenetrable wall, the trio decide they can’t do this alone. Tok’po suggests going to his birth town Tchaka, a hidden city deep within the jungle that only natives could ever find, and gather arms and unite the land to go against the invaders. Although sympathetic, the King of Tchaka decides the best decision for his country is to remain undetected. He believes any involvement would surely alert the Spanish to his kingdom’s whereabouts. Despondent, the trio begin to lose hope. Until, however, the princess of Tchaka named Tala defies her father and declares she will travel with you and ask the other kingdoms for aide under her father’s name without his knowledge. The quartet now begins the trek to the northern kingdom of Tulak, the biggest port in all South America. Here they are rejected council with the king who only cares for his own profit and not the troubles of those around. Secretly overhearing them, a near broke Dutch trader by the name of Yohann Pieterzoon offers them a proposition. He will give them the kings ear if he is allowed to travel alongside them in their cause. (His ulterior motive which is gradually unravelled is to find all the best trading routes in this land and also eradicate any Spanish rivals so he can dominate the highly valuable America-Europe trade routes). The quartet confers and agrees to his proposition but the king wants proof that they are worthy of his time. The king’s brother went missing while exploring a nearby cave. He and his troops haven’t been heard from since. Luis, Mikel, Tala and Tok’Po set off in search of the missing prince. Upon finding the cave they find it full of mischievous spirits. Both Tala and Tok’Po truly fear the spirits and know it means trouble... The two Spaniards think it’s just childish ghost stories and naively continue on with the natives reluctantly in toe. Throughout the cave they find bodies of the guards scattered around and upon inspection their souls awaken from the bodies (To the terror of the Spaniards) and each give clues to what unfolded here. When they arrive at the main chamber they see the prince standing their... he pleads for help. The team rush to his aide only to be repelled by a bright flash of light. The prince begins metamorphosis’s into a demon and they battle it to it’s demise. The monster turns back into the prince where upon he collapses on the floor. He recounts the events of what happened just before he passes away. The second largest kingdom in South America, Nanchi’ha, is one of the most needed allies. Without it, their quest would be in serious doubt. Upon their arrival in an optimistic mood they are distraught to find the kingdom flame and ruins. In a hasty retreat they are spotted by a Spanish unit and are hunted for miles upon miles. In desperate attempts to escape the 5 are split into two groups. Luis and Tala in one and Mikel, Tok’Po and Yohann in the other. Story forking: 1) We find Luis and Tala together in a ditch by a large river. As the coast clears they waste no time in trying to find the others... failing in their attempts they begin to suspect they are dead. They decide to carry on with their quest nonetheless and head for their next destination with a faint hope the others may do as well. To get there they need to cross the treacherous Mountainous region, but before that they decide to camp the night at the foot of the hills. At this point the two characters begin to get closer. The next day they cross the mountains into the Valley kingdom of Shi’nok where upon their presentation to the king the Spanish begin to lay siege. Desperate, the king declares he will only join their cause if the two help fend the enemy off. ................. and that's as far as i managed to get so far. Obviously there's no depth here, i'm just cramming idea's in. Tell me what you think honestly. Personally i think a change a setting is needed. Maybe the historical stuff isn't interesting enough. |
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| SmashesCupcakes | Jan 6 2009, 06:44 PM Post #2 |
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I do like it and i could use it in an offline version (this is aiming at the mmorpg type) as for the setting i think your right im really not into the historical genre also could you help advertise the forums are pretty dead XD Edited by SmashesCupcakes, Jan 6 2009, 06:45 PM.
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| brigadier | Jan 6 2009, 06:49 PM Post #3 |
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I can do my best (i know how hard it is to get one of these up and running). Btw- what does MCO stand for? Also are you just wanting to only do and MMORPG? |
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| brigadier | Jan 6 2009, 07:00 PM Post #4 |
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Well don't worry it's not the worst i've heard before. Last rpg i worked on was called 'the search for my sisters potatoes' XD Though we were taking the piss with it! |
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| SmashesCupcakes | Jan 6 2009, 07:02 PM Post #5 |
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I would so steal that name ROFL want to help me make the forums better? Edited by SmashesCupcakes, Jan 6 2009, 07:06 PM.
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| brigadier | Jan 6 2009, 07:10 PM Post #6 |
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I could try, not sure how much help i'd be though. ![]() How would you suggest i go about that? Edited by brigadier, Jan 6 2009, 07:18 PM.
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| SmashesCupcakes | Jan 6 2009, 07:20 PM Post #7 |
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ill make u a forum admin so you can add topics and such |
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| brigadier | Jan 6 2009, 07:23 PM Post #8 |
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Sweet! That's well good. I'm trying to think of places where to advertise this place... |
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