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| Fall to Pieces [R] + Ofer Winda Fiþerum [Upon the Wind's Wings] (Short story); Ficlet + real writing double feature! | |
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| Trish1974 | Dec 26 2009, 01:44 PM Post #11 |
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If you're a bird, I'm a bird.
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Oh, AH, that was wonderful! I haven't written anything useful since college, but someone I met through the board has inspired me to start writing again, and I have been writing something for the past couple of months. So if we do start a non-Kish thread after the new year I might become brave enough to contribute. Wish I could write Kish stuff, but I could never do it justice like ya'll do. |
| WhiskeyTangoFoxtrot | Dec 26 2009, 09:13 PM Post #12 |
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The Whore of Babylon
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Brave, sir! So, what I'd like to know is if this the start of your original story? If you've got more written out? Because, damn. Angsty, beautiful, evocative language. Just... wonderful stuff, and I want to read more. And, by the way, your Kish fic? Awesome. I like that you gave us some nice fluff, with just enough Fishangst mixed in. I will only say this; even in fanfiction, I'm not a huge fan of author's notes/interruptions in the middle of the fic. Here, it was the only thing that jarred me and temporarily took me out of the story. But then I fell right back into it. By the way, this chapter has a lot of themes that I was developing in my next chapter of And So it Began... which is great and awesome in and of itself. PSYCHIC LINKAGE FTW!!! Great, great work, AH! ETA: Gah! I'm stupid and didn't read the title totally. Okay, so this was the short story and not the novel you were talking about? For some reason I thought you were talking about posting a couple of chapters of your novel... or maybe that was the voices in my head saying that. Edited by WhiskeyTangoFoxtrot, Dec 26 2009, 09:19 PM.
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| AzureHorizon | Dec 26 2009, 10:27 PM Post #13 |
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Kish Fic Laureate
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The interjection was meant to be an ironic parody of authors who do that, which is why it's written in a somewhat cavalier tone. No, this is not my novel, it's a retrospective short story of my own life -- I'm currently in the process of editing the novel, itself, which is so completely different from anything else I've ever written that I hesitate to put up excerpts. |
| WhiskeyTangoFoxtrot | Dec 26 2009, 10:34 PM Post #14 |
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The Whore of Babylon
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Hm. It may have worked better for me had the piece felt more... ironic. Like a parody, maybe? The tone is your really unique brand of fluff/angst--flangst???--that it did sort of take me out. But like I said, I fell right back into the story you were telling. Your Kish piece is so lovely, though, so the Prose-us Interruptus jarred me. But seriously, that's all. I really thought it excellent work! Ah! I see. You know, reading your short story, it had such a personal feel to it, I did wonder if it was autobiographical. The novel -- I hear you about putting up excerpts and stuff about your original work. I really should do one-shots of my own novel in order to get a better feel of the characters, but it's so dependent on the crazy-ass plot that... hm.... yeah. Don't know. I've got to finish ASIB so I can refocus on my original writing projects. Edited by WhiskeyTangoFoxtrot, Dec 26 2009, 10:36 PM.
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| rhombus | Dec 26 2009, 10:34 PM Post #15 |
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Let us frankly discuss the mad hot sex we're about to have.
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The interjection was one of my favorite parts, but I like breaking the fourth wall, when done in small doses. Your fic was self-aware! That's hot. Okay, now I'm going to put off writing our joint masterpiece for another hour or two as I inculcate my sister in the inappropriate glory that is It's Always Sunny in Philadelphia.... |
| 3395233954 | Dec 26 2009, 11:02 PM Post #16 |
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Zach/8675309
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I wish I could write anything as well as you wrote these, or just use the vocabulary I know I have but refuse to use in what I do write. Simply fantastic. |
| rhombus | Dec 27 2009, 02:45 AM Post #17 |
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Let us frankly discuss the mad hot sex we're about to have.
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I'm trying to get the term "flungst" going. Who's with me? |
| kyboom | Dec 27 2009, 08:10 AM Post #18 |
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Michael
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Amazing. Simply amazing on both pieces. You are super talented! :wow: |
| jw723 | Jan 4 2010, 10:36 PM Post #19 |
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AzureHorizon, I came back here in the hopes of finishing up the rest of the poems that were nicely linked for me somewhere... and then, I couldn't remember where they were. :dunno: Luckily, I managed to find this little piece of awesomeness. I don't know how coherent I'll be after being stuck in meetings all day, but I'll try. Your first piece was like an emotional rollercoaster ride. It started off a bit dark (I gotta say, I liked the darkness) but your winter festival section helped to lighten the overall tone. I don't know if we've ever seen Oliver shoot a gun on the show, but I kinda like how you linked it to a bit of his past (using things his dad taught him and showing his underlying anger). I also kinda liked your interjection, I'm going to have to agree that it did pull me out of the story for a bit but I liked the overall effect on the piece. Oh boy, now it's time for me to say that as much as I liked the first piece, your short story? WOW! It was an intense read but honestly... so well written! Your second last paragraph? So powerful! In fact, I'm going to quote it:
Oh, but even better yet is the fact that the very last bit manages to bring a little bit of an uplifting note to your story:
I am now left in awe of your talent... care to share just a little bit of it? :grin: Okay, in all seriousness, you've got an amazing way with words and the way you put them together.... WOW! |
| AzureHorizon | Jan 4 2010, 10:38 PM Post #20 |
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Kish Fic Laureate
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thanks a ton I could share some other pieces |
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