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| Just A Gust of Wind (Kish poem) | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Nov 29 2009, 11:35 PM (538 Views) | |
| AzureHorizon | Nov 29 2009, 11:35 PM Post #1 |
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Kish Fic Laureate
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This poem is based off of the song Rush by Ingvild Hasund. You can listen to it here, while reading this poem: http://ingvildhasund.com/audio/Rush.mp3 Just A Gust of Wind Did you hear me whispering, "Hello"? All the kisses, all the looks We grew together, both of us Those college days are so far behind us And I still hold on to you as if you were there Tangible, corporeal A part of my world, and no one else's You were my perception You were my sight, my hearing, my feeling, my taste, my smell You were my heart I was nothing more than a breeze Passing through the Elysian fields of Gusting through the meadows of Walking briskly through Your heart, your soul Empty words uttered from your mouth Words you could never take back, but Feelings you could never erase, but You found a way You took everything I knew and shattered it My world cracking and falling apart I could make you fly so high But you never latched on to my wings You kept us grounded in secrecy We could never ascend to the heavens as lovers We could never have our names written in smoke As a small plane flies overhead, ephemeral We were KyleandOliver I knew that, you knew that Why couldn't we both say that? I had to give you the time of day I had to let you know I loved you And only through the narrow hole of a beer bottle could you tell me you loved me back. The more I yearned for you The more of myself that slipped away And when you darted out of my life Fleeing from the truth I knew... Or at least felt... that hope would remain chaining me to this world like a dog on a leash. Did you see me waving goodbye? Did you notice... That I didn't cry? Edited by AzureHorizon, Nov 29 2009, 11:39 PM.
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| appleridge | Nov 29 2009, 11:37 PM Post #2 |
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That Was Awesome |
| TimeToFly | Nov 29 2009, 11:58 PM Post #3 |
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James
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That was really great! I love that someone tried their hand at kish poetry! But those last three lines... so sad... |
| AzureHorizon | Nov 29 2009, 11:59 PM Post #4 |
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Kish Fic Laureate
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The song, which I discovered today, has become incredibly powerful for me. The two couplets about hearing Hello and waving goodbye hit me in the heart like a punch, because those are two things I wanted my dad to do before he died. He was in a coma and thus couldn't do either. |
| natesnates | Nov 30 2009, 12:05 AM Post #5 |
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smile,laugh,cry.
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amazing. beautifully written. |
| 3395233954 | Nov 30 2009, 10:40 AM Post #6 |
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Zach/8675309
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That was amazing. Great work. |
| WhiskeyTangoFoxtrot | Nov 30 2009, 01:12 PM Post #7 |
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The Whore of Babylon
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That is incredible imagery. I love this, especially with my idea of what I think might have happened in college with them. It's got a certain amount of bitterness, desperation, sadness and resignation all wrapped up in it.
Killed me dead. Because that's their whole struggle in college, right? Kyle having to deny them for Oliver, and Oliver's own struggle to come out... or stay in. This was just heartbreaking. I'm horrible with writing poetry, so I'm in even more awe of your talents here. This is so sad, and gloriously so, because it so physically describes Kyle and Oliver during these years. There's no overly-flowery language; it reads very blunt, direct, sharp. Cutting. Which it would have to be, since it's from Kyle's POV. Just... wonderful. Really. Truly. Damn....
C&P'd from the Short Story thread. AH--I've had it up on my screen for about a couple of hours while I finished some work stuff. But I just formulated a few coherent thoughts to comment. Damn, I say, sir... Damn! Edited by WhiskeyTangoFoxtrot, Nov 30 2009, 01:17 PM.
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| AzureHorizon | Nov 30 2009, 05:08 PM Post #8 |
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Kish Fic Laureate
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I'm tempted to write another poem from Oliver's perspective, with a different song in mind. Depends on if you guys would be interested :P |
| rhombus | Nov 30 2009, 05:26 PM Post #9 |
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Let us frankly discuss the mad hot sex we're about to have.
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Go for it! |
| kyboom | Nov 30 2009, 11:06 PM Post #10 |
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Michael
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Simply beautiful! |
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