| The story of Ray Thoren; Thought of this when i made my character | |
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| Sora-Roxas | Tue 22 Sep 2009, 05:52:51 Post #1 |
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PROLOUGE 25 Years ago in a little run down town a very special baby was born. This baby was going to be the greatest hero. That is until he takes the wrong step. As he grows up a war starts. The war was between two tribes. The Corast tribe and the Trantip tribe. The more and more dangerous it gets he wanted to join in. He wanted the Trantip tribe. His mother had one problem with that, and that was that her husband Jack Thoren left her to go join the Trantips'. When Ray turned 25 he left with nothing except his clothes and a bag filled with supplies for his trip. Edited by Sora-Roxas, Tue 22 Sep 2009, 15:08:42.
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Why do you hate the darkness? You accept darkness, yet choose to live in the light. So why is it that you loathe us who teeter on the edge of nothing; we, who were turned away by both light and darkness, never given a choice? What other choice might we have had? Douche Bag INC. How may I help you? | |
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| Zexion | Tue 22 Sep 2009, 08:06:31 Post #2 |
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Well...that is a good start. The only thing I would suggest is adding more detail, about Ray, the tribes...etc. Good job, though. Can't wait to read the rest. ^^ |
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| Sora-Roxas | Tue 22 Sep 2009, 14:57:01 Post #3 |
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Hey thanks for the tip and dont worry more will be out soon kk? |
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Why do you hate the darkness? You accept darkness, yet choose to live in the light. So why is it that you loathe us who teeter on the edge of nothing; we, who were turned away by both light and darkness, never given a choice? What other choice might we have had? Douche Bag INC. How may I help you? | |
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| Sora-Roxas | Tue 22 Sep 2009, 15:25:54 Post #4 |
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Chapter 1 On Ray's journey he soon found an injured boy around the age of 8. The boy soon got up and ran away. Ray decided to run after the boy so he could help. The boy turned a corner and when Ray turned the same corner the boy was gone. Ray said "Where did he go?" But what Ray didnt know is that he had the gift to see spirits. Ray soon would learn about this gift. At dinner with his girlfriend of 2 and a half years that night he saw another spirit and yelled "Ahh Serena do you see him?" Serena then replied by saying "What are you talking about Ray?" Ray then said "That man!" Then Ray pointed to the spirit. She said "If you are gonna' be crazy like this we are over so promise no more craziness." Ray then promised "No more craziness." They then both went to bed worn out and tired. |
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Why do you hate the darkness? You accept darkness, yet choose to live in the light. So why is it that you loathe us who teeter on the edge of nothing; we, who were turned away by both light and darkness, never given a choice? What other choice might we have had? Douche Bag INC. How may I help you? | |
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| Sora-Roxas | Wed 23 Sep 2009, 05:45:30 Post #5 |
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Chapter 2 The next day Ray woke up earlier than usual. He got dressed and went outside. He then decided "This is my chance, I must leave so I can join the war." So then Ray left on the true start of a long and hard journey. He soon found a Trantip camp. He found the leader and it turned out that his dad Jack Thoren was the leader. As of the moment his dad ended the sentences "Son, I'm proud of you for coming here even though you left your mom for it.I'm letting you join the tribe." The invasion bells rang. A man was yelling out "The Corast tribe is coming! Run for cover!" The camp scattered to their positions just waiting for the army of the Corasts'. In all the camp had around 200 members. The Corast army had around 1000 men. The fight would be brutal and a great opportunity for Ray to show his father what he can do. Ray then went back to back with his father. Ray then grabbed his dad's hand and swung him around until the men surrounding them were all down on the ground. |
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Why do you hate the darkness? You accept darkness, yet choose to live in the light. So why is it that you loathe us who teeter on the edge of nothing; we, who were turned away by both light and darkness, never given a choice? What other choice might we have had? Douche Bag INC. How may I help you? | |
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| Sora-Roxas | Wed 23 Sep 2009, 05:57:14 Post #6 |
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Chapter 3 Ray and his father did not notice the one soldier around them that was still alive. The soldier got up, grabbed his weapon and lunged it through Jack Thoren. Ray then heard his dad's pain and yelled to the sky "Flight of the angels!" Which summoned his sword. he then swung at the soldier and cut off his hand. As the soldier's wrist was gushing out blood he gripped his sword in his other hand swung and the two blade collided. eventually Ray's sword (Flight of the angels) broke the soldier's sword in half and Ray's sword kept on going and was jabbed into the soldier's ribs. Ray then pushed it in more and more until he knew all of the man's ribs had damage. Ray had then pulled out his sword and cut off the man's head. The man's head flew into Jack's lap. Ray ran over to his father and held up his head. Jack then said "Son thanks for this gift, but it's my time to go. I'm sorry it has to end like this. I don't want you to see me die." Then Ray says "But father I'm here aren't I? That means it was supposed to happen like this." The Jack becomes lifeless. Ray then cries and yells into the heavens " Why is this happening to me? Just show me what im supposed to do!" |
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Why do you hate the darkness? You accept darkness, yet choose to live in the light. So why is it that you loathe us who teeter on the edge of nothing; we, who were turned away by both light and darkness, never given a choice? What other choice might we have had? Douche Bag INC. How may I help you? | |
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| Zexion | Wed 23 Sep 2009, 16:51:53 Post #7 |
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C.P.G |
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| NinjaPlatypus | Sat 17 Oct 2009, 00:32:32 Post #8 |
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Oh, great. Another fetish for Kyle. |
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| Sora-Roxas | Fri 23 Oct 2009, 07:22:42 Post #9 |
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oh,thanks dillon... |
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Why do you hate the darkness? You accept darkness, yet choose to live in the light. So why is it that you loathe us who teeter on the edge of nothing; we, who were turned away by both light and darkness, never given a choice? What other choice might we have had? Douche Bag INC. How may I help you? | |
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