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| Brimstone; the ex Dinolfos Stalfos | |
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| Topic Started: Jul 13 2008, 08:35 PM (201 Views) | |
| Premium Chaos | Jul 13 2008, 08:35 PM Post #1 |
Never test the depth of water with both feet!
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Name: Brimstone Race: Stalfos Gender: Male Age: 19(before death) 0(after death) Class: Shadow Reaper Goddess: Farore Instrument: Bone Flute. It was carved out of the bone of another Stalfos. After he had defeated it he carved out some of his bones cause he was 'bored' After many tries he finally got it right. Starting Location: Kakariko Village Guild: Heroes of Nowhere in Particular Dungeon Items:             Armor and Weapons: In life he was a Dinolfos Garo and wielded a sword, and other blade like objects, when he died he lost all of his old items, he was buried as a hero, he died in the war and they buried him with new weapons to honor his noble contribution. He now wields some of those items. He is not agile enough to be a Garo anymore therefore he has decided to take a new path, the path to becoming a Warrior. He was buried with a Lance and a Battle Axe to use in the afterlife. The lance is a silver color and the end has a cross on it and then a sharp blade on the end about three inches long. The Battle Axe is held in two hands and has a grip about as long as his forearm. The axe is duel sided and has a light blue blade. The top of the axe has three spikes sticking out of it, they were supposedly wielded by a great Warrior. Being dead he is very in touch with the realm of spirits, and he was since started studying magic. Techniques/Spells/Alchemies: Shadow Weapon 1 Shadow Manipulation 1 Shadow Hold Appearance: He was once a red Dinolfos that had tattoos on his chest that matches a scar that he got on his eye that was shaped like a crescent moon. Even though he has no skin since being dead, he still has the noticeable scar. His head, or skull rather, is crooked a bit sideways, from the prolonged way his head was kept in the ground. His eyes are red and seem like just imaginary orbs that glow. His arms are just the brittle bony remains of the once great Dinolfos. They seem to be quite strong even without any muscle with him being able to lift the heavy battle axe. His ribs are charred and black because that is where the blunt of his explosion came from. Most of the ribs are cracked and were not repaired when the great fairy gave him his body back. His legs seem to be the same as his arms, quite strong to lift his weight. He found his clothes heavily ripped from the explosion after he exited the ground. He wears a black sleeveless shirt that is open in the chest. On the back of the shirt, it has the symbol of both the moon on his eye and the sun that used to be a tattoo on his chest, that he considers his symbol. His pants are also black and are torn because of the explosion. His shoes are worn over the many years of use. He hates his appearance, and he feels ashamed of his bony exterior. He doesn't even consider himself Chaos anymore, giving himself the darker name of Brimstone. Personality: It would seem that being dead would humble Chaos but his personality is mostly unchanged, although one thing is that he used to be a pyromaniac usually spiting fire into the air and letting it fall onto him, he now has an incredible distaste for fire because of the pain it causes. He also is darker and more stand alone since dying, he has never been a people person but more so now. He is notably kind, being unwilling to watch people get hurt in front of him, and refuses to hurt someone who has not wronged him or someone that he cares about. At times, although he may mean well, Chaos tends to push everyone away, unwilling to let them get close to him, noting that everyone he has ever cared about is no where around him, but when you do befriend him he will be very, very dependable. During the course of their partnership, RuKus acted as a fatherly figure to him, often giving them helpful advice when needed. He believes himself to be very misunderstood. He has quite a temper and he has shown some degree of anger but never lost his composure. He has a habit of trying to end things peacefully, and takes many steps to avoid death amongst his allies and enemies, but if he sees someone wrongfully being attacked he will step in. Chaos is as mysterious a character as he looks, and often acts as though he is hiding his true self. He only shows surprise when opponents prove more powerful or skilled than he had expected. He gets out of many dangerous situations by thinking things out, he believes that if he can keep his composure he will always prevail. He is a strong believer in fatalism. Meaning that he believes that everyone has a predetermined destiny that is chosen before they are even born, and that no matter how much one tries to change something you cannot escape fat. When he is ailing with something he will not get help from a doctor saying, "If I am meant to keep on living then I will regardless if I go to the doctor or not, and at the same time if I am meant not to survive because of this. It will not matter whether I go to the doctor or not, it is impossible to escape death". He is afraid of nothing because of this. He believes that, "fear is only a four letter word, I will die when my time has come to an end." Now seeing the faces of death he knows that there is nothing to be afraid of, it really isn't that bad. Back Story: Chaos loved his childhood. He had a mom a father and even a brother. He admired his mother who was a Dinolfos like him. He wanted to be an Aerolfos like his father and brother, Purpose. His father kind saw him as a disappointment since he couldn't sly. Not completely ignoring him but he did seem to kinda ignore him. Purpose embarked on a Journey being the older brother before Chaos. Even when he is the same age as his brother was when he left, he still isn't allowed to go on a journey like his brother. He wishes to reunite with his brother, so he ran away from home. He traveled completely out of the relative safe environment of his home. He learned how to survive living alone by himself. He lives his life with the lone goal of searching for his brother. He has many hardships on the way like being captured and abused by a clan of Yetis, when he escaped he vowed to come back and pay them back for what had happened. He comes across a Lynel that looks distrout. He follows him to see where he is going in such a hurry. The Lynel stopped for a second and turned around and said, "If you think that I don't know your there you are foolish." Chaos came out of the shrubs and said, "I'm sorry I mean you know harm. So who are you." "My name is RuKus I am obviously a Lynel," said RuKus, "the real question is what are you doing out here." "They call me Chaos and I am on a search for my brother," said Chaos, "I will take down anyone in my way and that means you to if need be." The Lynel smirks knowing that it reminds himself of him in his childhood. "You know what kid you have guts," said RuKus. "Now I may be getting in over my head but I once had a mentor that was a Darknut that took me in when I was young. He told me to take on another when I come of age. Now if you want to I can help you find your brother" Chaos looks at him and said, "You really would help me find my brother?" "But one thing, i am also searching for something, I am looking for other Lynels for reasons I wish not to disclose. If I hear of one being sighted then you can come with me or I will leave you," said Rukus. "Come Chaos i want you to meet some people. He knows much he is known the eyes of the sky he might have seen your brother." RuKus takes him on a journey across the land. As they travel they tell each other stories. RuKus told Chaos the mystery of his past and why he needs to find other Lynels. Chaos spoke of his brother. How he was an Aerolfos like his father but he took his mothers genes. How his father kind of shunned him for not having wings. They became close. A closeness that could only be rivaled by RuKus and his mentor. RuKus was like the father that Chaos never had much like what the Darknut did for him when he was younger. At first they were like best friends but despite the differences they have became as close as family. They finally arrive at their destination point, there is a cabin in the middle of nowhere and RuKus just barges in. The Darknut is seen training in the backyard as Chaos also went threw the back door. "Did I not teach you any manors," the mysterious Darknut said. "Same old RuKus I guess. Wait, what is this you have a new little companion?" "I'm sorry Shade," said RuKus. "I missed you and all, you were my mentor and I hate to just pop up and ask for help after so many years." Shade, looked at his pupil then stared over at the Dinolfos and then said, "how exactly do you expect me to help you if you are not even willing to answer my question and introduce your friend." "Just a loser," says RuKus, in a kidding like voice as he looked over at Chaos. "This is Chaos, he is kinda the reason I'm here." "Well," said Shade. "Thank you, you should come bye more often because I never get to see this guy here." "I know how I kind of just popped up, but I am just trying to help him," said RuKus. "Sorry to have to ask you this but, he is trying to find his brother, an Aerolfos have you seen him?" "I have been there and back again through the fields of Hyrule trying to regain the stamina that I had in my golden years," said Shade. "But I have seen nothing of his brother." "Well sorry for being a bother you," said Chaos as he walked away, RuKus just stared at Canyon. "Stop," said the Darknut. "I might have heard something, if it is any help there has been many people that have 'come up missing' around a cave near here. RuKus than asked, "Will you accompany us to this Cave?" "I will accompany you no farther then the opening," said Shade. "Shade," said RuKus, as he looked at the ground and smirked. "You never have been the most trustworthy fellow, I wasn't such a mistake was I?" "Follow," said the Darknut in silence as he led them to the cave. Chaos and RuKus embark on a journey towards Hero's Cave RuKus gets word that there has been a Lynel sighted at a land not to far from Hero's Cave. "Listen Chaos, I know that I told you I would give you the decision to come with me to find the Lynels but I refuse to let other companions get hurt so you will fall back. I will be back in seven days awaiting you at the Hero's Cave. You should go to do something to keep your mind occupied." Chaos reluctantly agrees and waves goodbye as the Lynel rides off into the distance, unknowing if he would ever see him again. "Shade," said RuKus as he stopped his pursuit of the Lynels. "I want you to follow Chaos, make sure he doesn't get in any trouble." "I suppose," said Shade as he looked at the Dinolfos in disgust, "I hope he knows how to fight because I refuse to protect us both. Especially with this nagging shoulder injury." Chaos embarked on his way home, he learned of a serious problem originating from the Spirit Temple. There is a beast that is making all sorts of problems. He arrives in his home town to see his father ill from the battle with the fierce beast of the temple. He goes outside to recruit someone to help him, Shade was waiting and decides to help. The temple was too much and with his injury Shade was re injured. As they were leaving he met a Hylian named Allen Hunter(Zel), Allen agreed to help him traverse the temple. They entered the temple again, but much to the dismay of Chaos Shade has joined the battle and got abducted by the evil of the temple. Torion threatened, "Save him or prepare to lose him." Try as they might, but they still fail to beat the temple and fight the monster Stalfos. He transported Canyon and Chaos out the temple threatening that next time they won't be lucky. As several weeks passed RuKus never came back, talk of a war spread across, not wishing to enter it he just journeys looking for his lost friend. Chaos finally had a realization that RuKus might have joined the army so he too enlisted where he met his demise before his adventure ever truly was done. He reemerges from the ground and rose not understanding exactly how he got here he looks down and realizes that he is only bones. He looks at himself and tells that he is no longer Chaos, he is a new person. He chooses a new name and goes back into the war, hoping to find his mentor and save his brother. Edited by Premium Chaos, Sep 21 2008, 05:30 PM.
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Brimstone of the Dead Zaber the mischievous Skull Kid Ember the Dodongo Pet RuKus the Horse... Lion... Thing! Seckston Hardcastle the Ladies Man     Brimstone the Stalfos Shadow Reaper Spoiler: click to toggle RuKus the Lynel Ranger Spoiler: click to toggle Sec the Hylian Ninja Assassin Spoiler: click to toggle
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| Premium Chaos | Jul 14 2008, 04:28 AM Post #2 |
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Never test the depth of water with both feet!
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This is ready for grading 
Edited by Premium Chaos, Sep 21 2008, 05:28 PM.
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Brimstone of the Dead Zaber the mischievous Skull Kid Ember the Dodongo Pet RuKus the Horse... Lion... Thing! Seckston Hardcastle the Ladies Man Brimstone the Stalfos Shadow Reaper Spoiler: click to toggle RuKus the Lynel Ranger Spoiler: click to toggle Sec the Hylian Ninja Assassin Spoiler: click to toggle
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| Kage Me | Jul 15 2008, 02:25 PM Post #3 |
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When I read this sheet, one thought went through my mind. "Eh..." It's long and it's detailed, I'll certainly give you that. And the Personality is very good. Armour and Weapons is also above average. Appearance is adequate. Backstory. Let me give you a hint. Too many characters, it gets clogged up. There's also the issue of the random encounters, and all of them being willing to help you fresh off the start for no real apparent reason. That might work with a random Tektite you defeat, but not for actual people. There's also quite a few grammatical issues in your character sheet, and sentences that just seem incomplete. ...This gets Good. Remember, you can revise it anytime you want, and since it's already borderline Excellent, you should have no problem making it there. 5 ranks, 40 rupees and a level 1 Nayru spell of choice. Oh, and you can't start with Circle Guard, you'll have to learn it in the Swordsman's School. |
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Laos Oman, the ghastly Thief. Nealase, the ghastly Thief's raven.       x2
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| Premium Chaos | Jul 15 2008, 02:27 PM Post #4 |
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Never test the depth of water with both feet!
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oh i thought you learn your Primary skill, sorry. |
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Brimstone of the Dead Zaber the mischievous Skull Kid Ember the Dodongo Pet RuKus the Horse... Lion... Thing! Seckston Hardcastle the Ladies Man Brimstone the Stalfos Shadow Reaper Spoiler: click to toggle RuKus the Lynel Ranger Spoiler: click to toggle Sec the Hylian Ninja Assassin Spoiler: click to toggle
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| Premium Chaos | Jul 15 2008, 09:47 PM Post #5 |
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Never test the depth of water with both feet!
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I cut two of the characters(the unimportant ones) And I made them resist me abit. The Darknut and the Lynel are going to be my companions(If I ever get around to writing up a sheet) So this is ready for regrading. |
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Brimstone of the Dead Zaber the mischievous Skull Kid Ember the Dodongo Pet RuKus the Horse... Lion... Thing! Seckston Hardcastle the Ladies Man Brimstone the Stalfos Shadow Reaper Spoiler: click to toggle RuKus the Lynel Ranger Spoiler: click to toggle Sec the Hylian Ninja Assassin Spoiler: click to toggle
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| SilverJ | Jul 22 2008, 02:08 PM Post #6 |
^BTW.. I look like this^
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I'm kind of uncertain about this, but I think deserves Excellent. The appearence is well described and the backstory builds off of your previous ventures, adding more depth. The personaility's pretty great as well. I'm just going to go with Excellent. + 5 ranks |
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SilverJ, the mysterious Hylian ninja Ventus, the pranksterish poe Gwen, the childhood friend of a Wizzrobe Mystery, the mischevious Crow The side of evil!!!!! Alt: Maxiej, the evil ninja Alt's Companion: Chaston Noivilbo, the deku follower Alt's pet: Deathblow, the deadly attack wolfos Spoiler: click to toggle Spoiler: click to toggle OMG!! Reaper Splitters!!! Can you feel it, the moon's power? - Sa'i'x, Kingdom Hearts 2 Time to kick some arse - Ghengis Kant, Timesplitters: Future Perfect One who knows nothing can understand.. nothing - Final Boss, Kingdom Hearts 1 | |
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