Welcome Guest [Log In] [Register]




Creating A Character

Profession, Rep, and Missions

Stats

Mission Forum

Misc. Info

Non-Nen Techniques

Nen Guide

Nen System






Current News

Hullo World!

Summer is officially here! Whether you prefer to spend it tucked away indoors, or bathing in the sun, or just enjoying an extra excuse to eat ice cream, have we got a fantastic event for you! The bells for Togashi High ring out, and while you may be out of class for summer, there’s stil one month left to go for stuents there. Sign up by creating a high school aged profile for your characters and enjoy some fun freeform RP!

And, as a regular reminder of how we feel about all you fantastic people, Summer Appreciation is here! Don’t forget to thank you favorite mod or admin for all the fantastic work they do, with an extra bit thank you to Roy for putting together the ultra creative Togashi High!

Stay cool everyone!

~ :)Westborn ~



































Posted Image

You're currently viewing our forum as a guest. This means you are limited to certain areas of the board and there are some features you can't use. If you join our community, you'll be able to access member-only sections, and use many member-only features such as customizing your profile, sending personal messages, and voting in polls. Registration is simple, fast, and completely free.


Join our community!


If you're already a member please log in to your account to access all of our features:

Username:   Password:
Locked Topic
[Approved] Grey Einstein[Archived]
Topic Started: Jan 10 2015, 02:05 AM (367 Views)
Kortopi
Member Avatar
Leorio x Kurapika

× General Information

Name: Grey Einstein
Gender: Male
Age: 15 Years Old
Height: 5'0"
Weight: 104 Pounds
Species: Human
Appearance: Grey is a thin built, small and fair-skinned man. He has a hair that is has the length up to his shoulders. He also wear a white short sleeved-shirt with matching blue pants on the bottom. He also wear black suspenders because he feels that he's cute with it. He can also be cross-dressing whenever he feels bored. His wearing black shoes with tied laces that are designed for that shoes.


Image


Profession: Candy Shop Owner
Reputation: 27 (Rank H)

Background

Backpack


× Physical Statistics

[0/11]
[0/61]

Aura: 11
Might: 12
Agility: 12
Endurance: 15
Accuracy: 11


× Nen Techniques

Basic Nen Techniques

Hatsu Affinity: Emission


[3/6]
[0/3]


Hatsu Theme:
General Hatsu Description:
General Hatsu Conditions:


Hatsu Abilities


× Non-Nen Techniques

[16/21]
Techniques
Edited by Westborn, Apr 28 2015, 08:32 AM.
Offline Profile Goto Top
 
Asylum
Member Avatar
Prone to Madness

For Angelic Kiss: Give a duration in posts for this to work, rather than just saying that it takes some time. I'd also like to see more conditions and limitations to it, because while kissing and touching the target's pulse is a decent activation requirement there's no real drawback to the ability as far as I can tell; which is necessary for a hatsu. Archangel's breath, for example, had limitless healing potential but was an extremely hard to obtain card and was limited to GI unless someone won the game.

Maybe you could define the ability as a way of greatly speeding up their natural recovery abilities, but with the drawback of rapidly consuming the target and user's stamina in the process - just to throw out an idea.

-Animal Aura: As long as it doesn't really have any real combat/field effects, this is fine as a rank 1. Stray dogs or such taking a liking to him and following him around similar to Knuckle is alright, taming wild beasts like bears or lions that would normally try to eat him for breakfast is not.

-Fast Swimmer: Saying he's a good swimmer is alright for r1, but holding the breath for longer depends on how long. Morel-level breath holding would obvious be high ranked, but anything upwards of a few minutes should cost something.

-Dragon Kick: I'd like to see more information on this. If its based off a real-life kick, at least tell us how it is performed.

-Spin: Same as above. How does the spin help him defend? What kind of attacks might he use with it?
Offline Profile Goto Top
 
Kortopi
Member Avatar
Leorio x Kurapika

Done adjusting my Nen and I deleted Spin as I made Fast Swimmer into an 8-ranked. I also made some new description to my Dragon Kick. I hope it is good for your liking. I also point out the examples type of animals who will be attracted to Grey. Thank you for your hardwork! :no1:

Edit: I also placed the drawback effects of the nen in the Effects section. Didn't know really where to put it. :hmm:
Edited by Kortopi, Jan 10 2015, 07:59 PM.
Offline Profile Goto Top
 
Asylum
Member Avatar
Prone to Madness

Add in that it can only be used to heal injuries that a person can recuperate from naturally (for example, no regenerating lost limbs, but it can close the wounds), and that the longer it would take for an injury to heal normally the more tired it leaves both target and user. For example, you could say a wound that would normally take a month might leave him needing 2 posts of rest.
Offline Profile Goto Top
 
Kortopi
Member Avatar
Leorio x Kurapika

Noted and done. :no1:
Offline Profile Goto Top
 
Asylum
Member Avatar
Prone to Madness

[X/6] should be [3/6]. Give us more for personality. Try for at least a paragraph.

Do that and I'll 1/2.
Offline Profile Goto Top
 
Kortopi
Member Avatar
Leorio x Kurapika

Done!! Yay!! Can't wait to start roleplaying.
:Jump:
Edited by Kortopi, Jan 13 2015, 04:21 AM.
Offline Profile Goto Top
 
:)Westborn
Member Avatar
The Most Responsible Adult in your Living Room

Just to be nit picky, for the time it takes for the ability to work, lets just say 1 post for basic cuts, while 2 posts for more severe injuries, like broken bones, deep cuts, ect.

Reguardless You have my approval. 1/2
Offline Profile Goto Top
 
Kortopi
Member Avatar
Leorio x Kurapika

Done! *^_^*
Edited by Kortopi, Jan 13 2015, 04:21 AM.
Offline Profile Goto Top
 
Asylum
Member Avatar
Prone to Madness

Approved 2/2.
Offline Profile Goto Top
 
1 user reading this topic (1 Guest and 0 Anonymous)
« Previous Topic · Archived Characters · Next Topic »
Locked Topic