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[Approved] [Ready for review]Ban't Orodreth[Archived]; Hey, its finished XD
Topic Started: Sep 25 2013, 04:04 AM (623 Views)
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× General Information

Name: Ban't Orodreth
Gender: Male
Age: 22
Height: About 5'8
Weight: about 64 kg
Species: Human
Appearance: He often wears his striped shirt with long sleeves and black gloves, he has strange eyes, grey with a black center, surrounding the center are black rings. He is usually pale almost grey-ish. His hair is originally black but he dyed half of it white/light grey. When needed, he carries around a sort of roll of thread about 2 and a half feet wide, able to carry a few hundred feet of thread (depending on size)

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Profession:He wanders around doing odd jobs not staying in one place.
Reputation: 0 (Rank H)
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Aura: 15
Might: 5
Agility: 10
Endurance: 10
Accuracy: 10

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Hatsu Affinity: Reinforcement


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Hatsu Theme: Trap
General Hatsu Description: He uses kunai like blades and tosses them around certain areas of the location where small but strong threads are attached to the handle of the blades, he then strengthens these threads with Nen and when the enemy passes through said threads, they receive major injuries ( such as loss of a limb or even decapitation) where he would then finish them off from a distance. ( He uses Shuu to envelop and strengthen the threads , also sharpen them enough to cut through flesh and bone)
General Hatsu Conditions: The user must stay completely still otherwise the nen flow would be distrupted, Also, the longer it is used the weaker the threads become, also wearing out because of the amount of nen flowing through it. Also, the longer the thread the weaker it is.


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Edited by beast, Sep 27 2013, 09:29 PM.
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Totally ready for review.
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Tiger Lord aka Star Lord aka Vigo aka Chocolate Thunder

Ok, lets start with the easy stuffs ;D

1. Appearance: Lets get a little more going, you know, some facial features, body type, hair color, etc. Just make it a little more, dattebyo.

2. Detailed History: Self explanatory, we just need to know more about you're character's upbringing and what led him to his current path....more or less

3. Personality: I wanna know what makes Ban't tick, what makes him mad, happy, content. I wanna know fears, weaknesses, strengths, strong points, hobbies. etc (you can exclude weaknesses and stuff, just tell me more about him)

Lets get these before we start to the hatsu
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Kain
Sep 25 2013, 03:11 PM
Ok, lets start with the easy stuffs ;D

1. Appearance: Lets get a little more going, you know, some facial features, body type, hair color, etc. Just make it a little more, dattebyo.

2. Detailed History: Self explanatory, we just need to know more about you're character's upbringing and what led him to his current path....more or less

3. Personality: I wanna know what makes Ban't tick, what makes him mad, happy, content. I wanna know fears, weaknesses, strengths, strong points, hobbies. etc (you can exclude weaknesses and stuff, just tell me more about him)

Lets get these before we start to the hatsu
This better? And now the hatsu.
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I don't see much problem with it. Make the hatsu rank 3. I think you should specify how long each thread is and how many you have. Are they normal string or metal wire? I would also make note that the strength of the wire should decrease the longer/more wire it is used on at a time, since the character would be spreading the aura out over larger distances.

Beyond that, I'm not sure why increasing durability of wire would do damage like cutting off limbs unless the target is running into it at high speed or something. Perhaps you should consider changing it transmutation, and change the effect to giving them cutting properties? Unless you were hoping to use them like nets or rope.
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Asylum
Sep 25 2013, 08:24 PM
I don't see much problem with it. Make the hatsu rank 3. I think you should specify how long each thread is and how many you have. Are they normal string or metal wire? I would also make note that the strength of the wire should decrease the longer/more wire it is used on at a time, since the character would be spreading the aura out over larger distances.

Beyond that, I'm not sure why increasing durability of wire would do damage like cutting off limbs unless the target is running into it at high speed or something. Perhaps you should consider changing it transmutation, and change the effect to giving them cutting properties? Unless you were hoping to use them like nets or rope.
The fact that most of them would be running and also, I would use shuu (hopefully) to sharpen/ strengthen them enough to cut limbs?
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Alright, all edited and what not,
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Tiger Lord aka Star Lord aka Vigo aka Chocolate Thunder

If I'm not mistaken Asylum, couldn't he use Transformation as a sub-category and get a sharper wire?
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Kain
Sep 25 2013, 08:50 PM
If I'm not mistaken Asylum, couldn't he use Transformation as a sub-category and get a sharper wire?
Asylums offline :(
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Just making sure people get it :) , When the user moves or is moved, the ability basically stops. much like gaara if he wakes up from his trance.
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