Annabella Watson

Annabella Watson
Topic Started: Aug 28 2008, 12:20 AM (70 Views)
Annabell Watson	Aug 28 2008, 12:20 AM Post #1
Posts: 1 Group: Members Member #8 Joined: Aug 27, 2008	Character Name Annabella Marie Watson Staff or Student? Student Age: sixteen Height:5ft 3 Weight: 130lbs Build and Carriage:to slider, basically a stick with arms Hair Color and Style: Brown in up do Eye Color:copper Race/Ethnicity: white Complexion: clean but at time gets acne In depth Description: Annabella is fairly short person. Sometimes mistaken for a grade school student. Her hair is brown and wavy. She pretty much sticks it up because its occasionally unruly. Shes very thin and has pretty light brown eyes. Country of Origin: England Date of Birth: January 22 1888 Parents:Lord Aaron Watson Lady Elizabeth Watson Siblings and other relatives: no siblings but has two cousins Daniel Harrison 18 Elaine 16 Harrison Close Friends: Elaine and Daniel Harrison Character History:Annabella was the only child of Lord and Lady Watson. When her father dies she inherits all money and land owned by her father. She is the typical daddy's girl. Shes very intelligent and likes to express her opinion when challenged. Shes also very respectful in public. She was taught how to act at a young age by her nanny Gwen. She has no relationship with her mother because all she wants to do is marry her off to her cousin Daniel. Her cousins are very close to her but she would not marry Daniel ever, Same for Daniel. Elaine is her only female friend because Bell as shes called can only socialize with family and other diplomats. Its said she'll marry a very wealthy person, but she just wants to fall in love. Her mother Elizabeth grew tired of trying to change Bells personality, soon she gave up and hired a nanny, Gwen, Gwen fostered Bell at a young age and bell considers her her surrogate mother. When Lady Elizabeth found this out she sent Bell to boarding school, until she was fifteen. Then she attended Pennington School for Girls on her fathers will. Personality:kind, stubborn, sweet, can be boyish, determined, leader, intelligent, opinionated. Strengths: Her leadership and intelligence are two of her strongest points, but she also dosn't care about birth rank Weaknesses:Stubborn, very kind hearted, she is very stubborn and argues her point to anyone that opposes, shes also too kind and is taken advantage of at times Interests: reading, writing, plays, art, socializing, dancing Pet Peeves: bad English, Ignorant people Quirks:Rather read than look at clothes any day. Likes to walk, but its frowned upon by her mother Skills:drawing, reading, piano forte, and sport( also frowned upon by her mother) Sample Post:walking down the long corridor looking for any sign of intelligence. These girls were very silly, even though raised by wealthy people. at least there better than the girls at my other school, they only thought about fashion, and boys. Complete lack of class and intelligence. I've yet to meet anyone of my fancy. I dearly miss my cousin Daniel, he was my confidante. I'm usually don't miss them that much, but Ive yet to make a true friend because of my title. I miss father and Gwen and wish to be with them soon enough.
Posts: 1 Group: Members Member #8 Joined: Aug 27, 2008


antisocialist87	Aug 28 2008, 01:48 AM Post #2
Administrator Posts: 14 Group: Admins Member #1 Joined: Aug 16, 2008	While this is a pretty good app, I'll need you to fix a few things - 1. You should probably utilize proper capitalization and proper punctuation. That matters quite a bit here, actually. 2. The Sample Post, Indepth Description, Personality and Character History will need to be a bit more fleshed out. Why does her mother want to marry Annabella off to her cousin? Why did her father pass away? What was her life like prior to her dad's passing? Did she have a relatively happy childhood before her father's passing? When did her father pass away? 3. You also posted this in a section where the accepted applications are kept. I'll move your application to where the pending apps are kept. This is partially my fault because I didn't specify that very well. 4. Also, your playby is dressed in clothing from the Regency Era, which was 100 years before this RP. Edited by antisocialist87, Aug 28 2008, 10:18 AM.



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