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xoSammyRoxxo	Apr 27 2008, 02:01 AM
Favourite phrase: Sexi beast Posts: 23 Group: Admins Member #2 Joined: Apr 21, 2008 Gender Female Mood Thoughtful What Browser are you using? Other	7/10 Couple of mistakes but I like the plot. I literally struck me when the note said that his father was dead because I thought J would get busted soon enough. The errors are your spelling and punctuation. It is, also, a bit of a Mary-Sue since this character is named after you and his features are practically yours (you told me a time ago that you were African-American). And you didn't put enough expression-description and detail. ~Sammy


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