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[Accepted] Setsuna Gokadoin; [Done]
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Topic Started: Jun 17 2014, 07:07 AM (1,824 Views)
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Shuyin
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Jun 17 2014, 07:07 AM
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Killer Lord, The Silencer of Men.
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 | Setsuna Gokadoin "The Twilight Child"
| Nickname: | "Kirei" (Given to her by her twin) "Saegusa" (By the clans) | Age: | 15 | Gender: | Female | Height: | 5'7" | Weight: | 118 lbs | Guild: | Blue Pegasus | Class: | D | Affiliation: | Neutral |
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Physical Description:
Setsuna is the result of top class breeding. Something known within her clan as the fusion of talent a tradition practiced to this day. Both 's parents are considered "Kuremisago" or "Extremely Talented Individual" which could be considered a part of why Setsuna's physical build is so advanced as well as detailed. Put through strict training from when she was young Setsuna's toned and sun kissed skin was molded by sheer hard work and determination mixed in with the yearning to achieve and surpass her limits. Her hairstyle mimics that of her twin brothers, being shagged by layered creating a sort of semi-tamed look to her persona. Jagged white bangs often hide her bright and stunning emerald green eyes which are used to draw away from one of her rather obvious feminine flaws. Due to her intensive training training, Setsuna has not yet developed or rather stunted the growth of her bust keeping them from being as bouncy and visible as that of other females.
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Never going anywhere without her "combat" attire, Setsuna's main articles of clothing consist of the "bread and butter" most martial artists have and use. A plain black skin tight leotard covered oddly around her neck and chest by a creme tainted one piece skirt fitted with a decently fashionable set of markings along the same area. A simplistic light brown waist "coat" covers her sides as is tied and kept in place by a sash of a light turquoise color. Zebra patterns cover her long gloves that are topped off with white cuffs around her wrists matching a pair of leggings that are of equally similar patterns. Due to tradition, Setsuna does not wear shoes like most people, her feet being left barefoot only left to be protected by the slight cloth that covers a part of her feet with a ring attached to the cloth linked to her toes.
| Accessories: A tribal pattern headband and her most beloved tattered black scarf, a legacy from her parents that she wears anywhere she goes, even during bath time. Since obtaining the Vetement de L'esprit de la Nature it seemed to merge with her scarf becoming one in the same.
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 | After much discussion, Setsuna has spoken to many people of various of the "Good" guilds within Fiore. As Fairy Tail seemed to robust, and Lamia Scale not really her taste, Setsuna has settled for Blue Pegasus. After the troubles of the War, Setsuna believes that the Blue Pegasus would be the guild that can help her the most while she works on completing her task and fulfilling her responsibilities. Setsuna has had the guild mark placed inbetween her big toe and index toe on her left foot. |
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| The Personality |
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"Protective to a fault, Caring but in a distant method."
Setsuna, despite all that she has gone through is known as a builder systems, one who can create groups as well as keep them together, one who can control as well as make people do things according to a plan regardless of who's plan it is. This is due of that fact that she possesses the unusual trait combination of imagination and reliability. Whatever she happens to be working on is the equivalent of a moral cause to her. Although both perfectionism and disregard for authority may come into play, Setsuna can be unsparing of both herself and the others whom are focused on the same goal.
In contrast to having an above average intelligence, Setsuna down to her core is a perfectionist with a seemingly endless capacity for improving upon anything that takes her interest. What prevents her though from becoming chronically bogged down in this pursuit of perfection is the application (frequently ruthlessly however) of the question "Does it work?". This is applied to everything from her own research efforts to her prevalence in social norms. This in turn produces an unusual independence of mind, freeing her from the constraints of authority, convention, or sentiment for its own sake.
Setsuna has no real sense of class in term of society other than what she was taught while growing up in the Ten Clans. Being born apart of the 7th(seventh) Clan, she knows that above all she will side with her family in all situations and will deny and renounce any and all ill intent and accusations towards them.
Setsuna likes to keep a calm and collected sense about her. This allows her to create an aura of relaxation for herself and those around her. However this also goes for when she herself is going through personal problems. She has trouble dealing outwardly with actions and situations she finds in conflict with her ideals or morals. This leads her to bottle up the feelings to deal with them when she is alone, refusing to show these "uncontrollable" emotions to others even her friends.
When it comes to magic however, Setsuna can be compared to that of a curious child. She will fawn over magic she thinks is cool, beg to see magic she finds interesting and ask a billion questions about magic she does not understand. Amongst her Clan, the magic has come in a variety of forms but it is very rare that it can in any other form of usage than to eliminate demons.
According to relationships and the like, Setsuna seems to lose all knowledge and intellect she has gained over the years. Her current crush, is a boy who is the representative of the 4th(fourth) Clan. Having worked with him once, Setsuna was able to see him in action and despite being of the same age she felt completely outclassed by his ability and confidence in using his magic as well as leadership of the group. When around cute guys, Setsuna cannot seem to keep a steady head and will often find herself tripping and stumbling over her words. As much as she would like to be lifted and picked up off her feet by a good looking, strong willed man, Setsuna would rather leave that trope to those of her sex, her ideal partner being a male whom can challenge her physically, mentally and magically.
"This is a battlefield. There are only allies and enemies. Enemies whom must be trampled upon brutally by any means necessary."
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“As history dictates”
The child, the man, the prophecy The Clan of Gokadoin the Seventh of the Ten Clans, are well known amongst those who dedicate their lives to defeating the darkness as Exorcists or Purifiers of the the Night. Long standing is this Clan's history, bloodied by the work it has done and hardened by the things they've seen, both men and women of the Main and Branch families of the Gokadoin Clan have made great strides in pushing back and defeating the darkness of Fiore, and by extension, Earthland.
Off in Caleum, in a small village temple a mother gives birth. A daughter is welcomed into the world with smiles and laughter the name Setsuna being whispered in a kiss by her mother and father. Years pass and Ssetsuna grows up in the ways of the temple, learning about nature and its power, balance and benevolence. Other than holding regular meditations and prayer, the patrons were also known to handle and exterminate the small appearances of demons and troublesome spirits that plagued the village and mountainside nearby. Setsuna grew up learning about the world from books and about spirits from her parents, her goal as a young girl being to become strong both spiritually and magically so that she may represent her family amongst one of the Ten Clans.
When she became of age, Setsuna was told that she had to journey around the world, to learn as much as she could so that she could continue being a smart, and well educated shrine priestess. Deciding to take it upon herself to see the world with her own eyes rather than continue learning via books, Setsuna traveled from Caleum towards the seemingly center of the land, Fiore on foot. When foot was inaccessible she used other natural methods of transportation, only resorting to boats, wagons etc useless absolutely necessary. This way Setsuna was able to come in contact with many different areas of natural scenery, documented or not. It was these sort of things she wanted to preserve in the world from whatever may appear to destroy it, no matter what form it may take. Her first mission? To visit the other Shrines within the land of Fiore to check on their stability and upkeeping. For as a Shrine Maiden her first and foremost job was to act as caretaker to not only her Shrine but the Shrines of the world.
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- The Onmyouji Maiden
Since being born, Setsuna has been drilled and trained by other skilled Onmyouji, as part of her families heritage. These range from basic survival tactics to demon communication as well as hand to hand combat. Having the raw talent of harnessing the tip of the iceberg of her powers, Setsuna advanced far in the ways of the Onmyouji gaining much respect from her peers as well as her elders. When not using her magic, Setsuna resorts to hand to hand combat, with her knowledge focused around small one handed weapons, Setsuna aims to get close and personal with her target to deliver quick and precise stabs/cuts to her opponents allowing the damage add up over time. Resulting in the opponent misjudging their injures and realizing they are in trouble after its too late.
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Shuyin
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Jun 25 2014, 06:49 AM
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Killer Lord, The Silencer of Men.
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Weaponry/Equipment
not yet bought Name: Sprig of the Jeweled Tree - Yōryū/ Branche de L'abre de Bijoux Class: C Description: A branch from a unique and mystic tree hidden deep within a maze. Considered to be similar to a labyrinth, it is rumored to even glimpse this tree is to give enormous luck and good fortune. Light and easily held within someone's hand or hidden within a coat or sleeve the sprig weighs 40g at the length of 30cm. Effect/Function: The jeweled sprig acts as an artifact that represents one of the several elements that are one with the planet. Drawing upon the element that it represents, Shizuka while holding this item is able to send forth a beam of concussive wind energy colored in a light green hue. 5 beams can be shot out before the branch needs 3 posts to recollect the energies that make up its magical power.
Name: Cloth of the Nature Spirit - Vetement de L'esprit de la Nature Class: C Description: A magical item rumored to be able to take on whatever form the wearer wishes. Whether it be a cape or a cloak, a vest or pants, this cloth is said to be sewn together and created by the spirits of the forests themselves for someone whom was deemed worthy...or so the legend tells. The wearer of this cloth is said to develop a strong sense of discernment to aid in their life's choices. Effect/Function: The cloth acts as an artifact that represents one of the several elements that are in unity with the planet. Drawing upon the element that it represents Setsuna while wearing this item is able to shroud herself in a mist. This mist acts as a defensive maneuver camouflaging her from her enemies. Those with less accuracy than 15 will find her invisible to the naked eye. Visionary techniques of equal rank(2) or higher will allow them to see Setsuna while within her shroud.
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| Power | Speed | Accuracy | Endurance | Toughness | Magic | | 5 | 61 | 15 | 30 | 10 | 62(99) | | SP Earned | AP [GP] Earned | Jewel Bonus | Jewels Earned | Base Jewels | TP Earned | | 0/166 | 9/9 [3] | +30% | 37,971,000[38,180,000] | 37,971,000 | 17/19 |
Sources
Sources Storyline N/A Regular Thread N/A Site Event
- Nov Questionnaire 2015 -
11SP 2,200,000
- Present Anyone -
10sp (Site Event)
- December Shipping Ex -
5sp + 950k Jewels(Site Event) [190,000]
- Mother May I -
5SP//1,000,000(Site Event) [200,000]
- Looking Back -
5SP and 1,000,000 jewels [200,000]
- Bosco War Phase #1 The Kasper Pass -
3 SP, 450,000 Jewels, 1 AP, 1 GP [90,000]
- Caption #3 -
5SP 800,000 jewels [160,000]
- Caption #2 -
5SP 800,000 jewels [160,000]
- Caption #1 -
5SP 800,000 jewels [160,000]
- Yueltide Memories -
2SP 400,000 jewels
- FTG Lottery -
2SP
- Bosco War Phase: Part 3 Operation Undine -
7SP//1,050,000//2AP//2GP [210,000]
- FTG Birthday Appreciation -
10SP and 5,000,000 Jewels
- April Monthly Event -
8SP
Personal Arcs N/A Other People's Arc N/A Harvest
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Shuyin
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Sep 28 2015, 07:33 AM
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Killer Lord, The Silencer of Men.
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 "With senses five I sense the earth, But delude me not, I know my worth. My sense is one, I sense the All On my demand. I beck and call."
| Magic Name: Aegir - Quintessence
| Magic Type: Elemental Protection Projection
| Tier of Magic: 1
| Rank: 7
| Magic Description: Amongst the world there has always been war. Country against country, race against race, family against friends. Most for selfish wants and desires, men and women die for the ambition of a select few. Within countries around the world small villages sign themselves to a pact and unite under a banner known as the Ten Clans. Together they strive for the betterment of mankind as they fight their wars against each other. However, they do not aid mankind in the way that most would think. Those of the Ten Clans aim to fight the war against the shadows, spirits and demons who have been proven to be the lead causes of major events across Earthland.
Born into the Ten Clans, Setsuna was trained from a young age to fight. Not to attack, but to protect those she cares about as well as those who cannot defend themselves against the forces of Shadow. Believing that Nature is an overwhelming component within the world and something that should not only be protected but also respected and honored, those of the Ten Clan's understand this, but none more than Setsuna's father, leader of the 7th Clan. Taking it upon himself to bring the teachings of Onmyōdō to his family, Setsuna being his daughter picked it up and loved every second of learning her father spared to give her.
Setsuna's magic blossomed in such a unique way that none of the Clan Heads have ever seen. Considered to be in the realm of "Unique" Magic rather than something that has been Lost to the ravages of time, Setsuna's magic takes the form of utility and defense techniques that have merged with her attraction to the art of Onmyōdō. These shields can be used to protect herself as well as her allies with the special touch of Onmyōdō adding a bit extra flavor to the defenses she creates. Setsuna can also combine shields together to make a multi-layered defense to further protect those she cares about.
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Techniques: (17/18)
 | Elibe - 2 Type: Defensive Range: 0 - 15m Effect: This is a spell meant to take effect prior to any of Setsuna's other skills. With this, Setsuna is able to chain/link two of her Onmyōdō techniques together. By doing this it allows her to protect both herself and/or her allies to the utmost limit of her ability.
Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Cooldown: | Duration: | Range: Maximum | Range: Minimum | | 2) | Elibe allows Setsuna to combine the effects of two of her Onmyōdō techniques, sending them both immediately on their respective cooldowns once activated. The techniques must be at the same level as this technique in order to be used by this technique. | 3 posts | Instant | 15m | 0m | | | | | | |
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 | Magvel - 2 Type: Defensive Range: 0 - 15m Effect: This is a spell meant to take effect prior to any of Setsuna's other skills. With this, Setsuna is able to chain/link two of her shielding techniques together. By doing this it allows her to protect both herself and her allies to the utmost limit of her ability.
Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Cooldown: | Duration: | Range: Maximum | Range: Minimum | | 2) | Magvel allows Setsuna to combine the effects of two of her shielding techniques, sending them both immediately on their respective cooldowns once activated. The techniques must be at the same level as this technique in order to be used. | 3 posts | Instant | 15m | 0m | | | | | | |
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Physical Defenses  | Bern - 1 Type: Defensive Range: 0 - 10m Effect: By focusing on her magic, Setsuna can create a rectangular shield that appears and blocks physical attacks directly above of her target. The shield appears at 55cm(21inches) in diameter, blocking an attack of equal rank before dissipating, shattering like glass. |
Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Cooldown: | Duration: | Range: Maximum | Range: Minimum | | 1) | Frelia, Bern creates a shield that blocks a physical attack above of the shields target that is equal to or less than that of this techniques rank. | 2 posts | Instant | 10m | 0m | | | | | | |
 | Etruria - 1 Type: Defensive Range: 0 - 10m Effect: By focusing on her magic, Setsuna can create a circular shield that appears and blocks physical attacks directly infront of her target. The shield appears at 55cm(21inches) in diameter, blocking an attack of equal rank before dissipating, shattering like glass. |
Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Cooldown: | Duration: | Range: Maximum | Range: Minimum | | 1) | ???, ??? creates a shield that blocks a physical attack/technique infront of the shields target that is equal to or less than that of this techniques rank. | 2 posts | Instant | 10m | 0m | | | | | | |
 | Lycia - 1 Type: Defensive Range: 0 - 10m Effect: By focusing on her magic, Setsuna can create a shield that appears and blocks physical attacks directly behind of her target. The shield appears at 55cm(21inches) in diameter, blocking an attack of equal rank before dissipating, shattering like glass.
Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Cooldown: | Duration: | Range: Maximum | Range: Minimum | | 1) | Lycia creates a shield that blocks any attack directly behind of the shields target. | 2 posts | Instant | 10m | 0m | | | | | | |
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 | Sacae - 1 Type: Defensive Range: 0 - 10m Effect: By focusing on her magic, Setsuna can create a shield that appears and blocks physical attacks directly beneath of her target. The shield appears at 55cm(21inches) in diameter, blocking an attack of equal rank before dissipating, shattering like glass.
Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Cooldown: | Duration: | Range: Maximum | Range: Minimum | | 1) | Sacae creates a shield that blocks any attack directly beneath of the shields target. | 2 posts | Instant | 10m | 0m | | | | | | |
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Magical Defenses  | Renais - 1 Type: Utility Range: 0 - 10m Effect:By focusing on her magic, Setsuna can create a rectangular shield that appears and blocks magical attacks directly above of her target. The shield appears at 55cm(21inches) in diameter, blocking an attack of equal rank before dissipating, shattering like glass. |
Renais's Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Duration: | Cooldown: | Range(Minimum): | Range(Maximum): | | 1) | creates a shield that blocks a magical attack above of the shields target that is equal to or less than that of this techniques rank. | 4 posts. | 2 posts. | Self. 2m. | 2m |
 | Frelia - 1 Type: Utility Range: 0 - 10m Effect:By focusing on her magic, Setsuna can create a rectangular shield that appears and blocks magical attacks directly infront of her target. The shield appears at 55cm(21inches) in diameter, blocking an attack of equal rank before dissipating, shattering like glass. |
Frelia's Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Duration: | Cooldown: | Range(Minimum): | Range(Maximum): | | 1) | creates a shield that blocks a magical attack infront of the shields target that is equal to or less than that of this techniques rank. | 4 posts. | 2 posts. | Self. 2m. | 2m |
 | Jehanna - 1 Type: Defensive Range: 0 - 10m Effect: By focusing on her magic, Setsuna can create a shield that appears and blocks magical attacks directly behind of her target. The shield appears at 55cm(21inches) in diameter, blocking an attack of equal rank before dissipating, shattering like glass.
Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Cooldown: | Duration: | Range: Maximum | Range: Minimum | | 1) | Jehanna creates a shield that blocks any attack directly behind of the shields target. | 2 posts | Instant | 10m | 0m | | | | | | |
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 | Rausten - 1 Type: Defensive Range: 0 - 10m Effect: By focusing on her magic, Setsuna can create a shield that appears and blocks magical attacks directly beneath of her target. The shield appears at 55cm(21inches) in diameter, blocking an attack of equal rank before dissipating, shattering like glass.
Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Cooldown: | Duration: | Range: Maximum | Range: Minimum | | 1) | Rausten creates a shield that blocks any attack directly beneath of the shields target. | 2 posts | Instant | 10m | 0m | | | | | | |
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Onmyōdō Techniques
Techniques 5  | Scorching Vermilion Wings - 1 Type: Utility Range: Self Effect: "O Suzaku of the East grant me to the flames of Summer!" By focusing, Setsuna calls upon the flames of the protector of the South and the creator of fire, Suzaku. By using this skill first, Setsuna is able to buff a defensive technique of her choosing with these flames. The flames hold the same damage/strength of this technique's rank. At later ranks, this Onmyōdō skill may grant additional buffs to its target that lasts for a set amount of time in the form of a coloured aura. |
Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Cooldown: | Duration: | Range: Maximum | Range: Minimum | | 1) | Forblaze enchants the next shield/barrier technique Saiya uses. Enemies that come in contact with the shield suffer superficial wounds. | 4 posts | 2 posts | 2m | Self | | | | | | |
 | Kyōka Ziusdra - Shimmering Wave - 1 Type: Utility Range: Self Effect:"O Genbu of the West wash onto me the harsh waters of Winter!" By focusing, Setsuna calls upon the guardian of the Northern waters, Genbu. By using this skill first, Setsuna is able to buff a defensive technique of her choosing with water/ice. At later ranks, this Onmyōdō skill may grant additional buffs to its target that lasts for a set amount of time in the form of a coloured aura. |
Ranking Table for Kyōka Ziusdra | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Duration: | Cooldown: | Range(Minimum): | Range(Maximum): | | 1) | Kyōka Ziusdra enchants the next shield/barrier technique Setsuna uses. Allies that are protected with the shield. Received attacks of equal rank to this skill (as well as the shield technique used), are deflected back to its user while the range of the attack reflected is not refreshed | 4 posts. | 2 posts. | Self. 2m. | 2m | | | | | | |
 | Fimbulvetr - Maelstorm Lux - 1 Type: Utility Range: Self Effect: "O Byakko of the South-East don onto me the guise of Fall!" By focusing, Setsuna calls upon the metal element of the curator of West, Byakko. By using this skill first, Setsuna is able to buff a target of her choosing with metal. The metal holds the same damage/strength of this technique's rank as well as holds reflective properties. At later ranks, this Onmyōdō skill may grant additional buffs to its target that lasts for a set amount of time in the form of a coloured aura. |
Fimbulvetr's Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Duration: | Cooldown: | Range(Minimum): | Range(Maximum): | | 1) | Fimbulvetr enchants the next shield/barrier technique Setsuna uses. Damage done to the shield is dispersed along it rendering the attack ineffective. If the attack is stronger than the shield, it is weakened by this techniques rank. When pit against barrier piercing effects, this technique is treated as rank + 1. | 4 posts. | 2 posts. | Self. 2m. | 2m | | | | | | |
 | Katen - Flower Petal, Heavenly Swirl - 1 Type: Utility Range: Self Effect: "O Azure Serpent of the North bequeath onto me the power of Spring!" By focusing, Setsuna calls upon the wood element of the Protector of the East, the Azure Serpent. By using this skill first, Setsuna is able to buff a defensive technique of her choosing with wood. The wood holds the same damage/strength of this technique's rank. At later ranks, this Onmyōdō skill may grant additional buffs to its target that lasts for a set amount of time in the form of a coloured aura. |
Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Cooldown: | Duration: | Range: Maximum | Range: Minimum | | 1) | Katen enchants the next shield/barrier technique Setsuna uses. The wood encased shield also heals the ally it protects, of superficial wounds. Grants protection against superficial damage. | 4 posts | 2 posts | 2m | Self | | | | | | |
 | Aurelia - Superior Light - 1 Type: Utility Range: Self Effect:"O Golden Lion of the Sky bless onto me the power of Light!" By focusing, Setsuna calls upon the light element of the Guardian of the Sky, the Golden Lion. By using this skill first, Setsuna is able to buff a defensive technique of her choosing with light. The light holds the same damage/strength of this technique's rank. At later ranks, this Onmyōdō skill may grant additional buffs to its target that lasts for a set amount of time in the form of a coloured aura. |
Ranking Table | Rank: | Damage/Effect: | Duration: | Cooldown: | Range(Minimum): | Range(Maximum): | | 1) | Aurelia enchants the next shield/barrier technique Setsuna uses. The light engulfs the shield and heals inner and outer ailments such as paralysis and poison. It also grants an aura over the target of the shield that lasts an additional post after the shield dissipates. | 4 posts. | 2 posts. | Self. 2m. | 2m |
Guild Spell Visionary - 2 Type: Utility Range: 20 m. Effect: The user and any allies permitted gain magical power in their eyes, causing them to shine for 3 posts and see through natural effects such as dust and the like. During this time, all sensory inhibitors of equal and lower levels have no effect on them, and accuracy debuffs of equal or lower ranks lose their effect on them.
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栄 Zaber
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Oct 9 2015, 07:01 PM
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Water Dragon Slayer
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Hey there. Stating that this character sounds awesome and I like the story and personality of her. Really nice. Now on to the critiquing.
First off in your magic, some confusion. To state you say energy manipulation. It is a very complex issue as you have multiple element, despite using a more shield oriented theme. That being said, is your magic multi element OR energy manipulation. You give a good magic description in terms of its lore. What I need to know is the full range of the magic's abilities. You have talismans to enchant and alter spells. That is fine, but i need to know what powers your magic will have at their peak and stuff you have yet to written so I know if it is allowable or not.
YOu use multiple elemental references. That is multi-elemental, not energy manipulation. So I need a clearer definition of your magic potential.
Second: Seimei's Birthright & Unite Shields. You are using a technique to use both at the same time. That is fine, however, you need to state a clear rank limit. Otherwise you are using both at varried ranks at once. To do this, you should state what maximum rank both main techniques need to be to use them both at once. ALso I would give them a bigger cooldown. 3 posts for use of using both simultaneously.
Feel free to check with the other staff to clarify.
Also your 'weapons not yet bought. Are they approved yet on Item creation? If so you can just minus the jewel amount if they are approved. Please provide links and put them into sources if so. Thanks.
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Oct 10 2015, 11:54 AM
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some important points to add: 1 - you dont get the 100k jewels from character creation since its already included on the amount u havested 2 - you only have 109 sp unless you are missing some sources 3 - remember, the magic stat increases with a 2 for 1 rate after 30 so u only have 35 with this distribution (30+10) 4 - ... no thats about it for what i could see.
On a side note: why harvest Amelia? She was cool!!! :(
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Oct 12 2015, 01:33 AM
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Killer Lord, The Silencer of Men.
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I think I got everything although Liberty I harvested her because Iunno, guess I just felt bored with her
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Oct 12 2015, 08:35 AM
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Stats/Sources - SP Earned should be what you gained from the Harvest as well - Please remove the Character Creation source from your sources, you do not gain it again through Harvest.
Magic - Is this purely just defensive magic? - With your techniques can you add in which ones are Onmyōdō please.
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Shuyin
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Oct 14 2015, 05:21 PM
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edited
the techniques are listed within the spoiler of the same name
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Oct 19 2015, 05:21 PM
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Oct 20 2015, 12:25 AM
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No.
Right now there's one huuuuuuge issue, I want to see if you spot it (this will be mostly rhetorical):
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Hresvelgr, Moonshadow creates a shield that blocks any attack above of the shields target.
See it?
How about:
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Hresvelgr, Moonshadow creates a shield that blocks any attack above of the shields target.
So many nopes. Just all of them. Literally every single one.
Please reword your techniques to enforce that they only block magical OR physical attacks and please restate it so that it only blocks things of an appropriate level.
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