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| Topic Started: Sep 6 2011, 04:55 PM (1,167 Views) | |
| Luffy1045 | Sep 6 2011, 04:55 PM Post #1 |
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Let the flan flow through you.
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Here you can comment and critique my story "Dragon Soul". Criticism of all kind is welcomed, but decency is as well. |
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| 栄 Gale | Sep 6 2011, 05:17 PM Post #2 |
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Assassination Extraordinaire
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AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! And just a thought here, but could you make it so that the dialogue is a separate line? It's kind of easier to read it that way. |
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| Zen | Sep 6 2011, 05:28 PM Post #3 |
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Quite impressive! Detailed, yet to-the-point. I see a lot of potential in this story. |
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| Castiel | Sep 6 2011, 05:52 PM Post #4 |
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I see you ^.^
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I like it I'm curious to see where you take your creativity to when it comes down to his powers, and his overall appearance. Seeing as so far we've just read about fire breathing and a little of his appearance. It only makes me wonder what his other powers (if he has any) and his complete appearance will be (if that isn't it, though i doubt it is). |
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| Zen | Sep 8 2011, 01:45 PM Post #5 |
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Whoa, it's getting better and better! |
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| 栄 Gale | Sep 8 2011, 01:56 PM Post #6 |
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Assassination Extraordinaire
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Kung-Fu all the way! |
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| Kawaii | Sep 10 2011, 08:37 AM Post #7 |
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get bruce lee |
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| 栄 Ravendark | Sep 11 2011, 05:13 AM Post #8 |
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Logan Paul Dragon Slayer
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Very good, i see potential in this story; coming from a guy who has taken creative writing twice for the fun of it. This has the potential to go a very long way in terms of plot. The font is a little hard to read at times however, even though it adds to the stories authenticity. Overall keep doing what your doing, and remember D.A.R.C! D.rama A.ction R.omance C.omedy Know this and you will have th empower to write a good story. Side effects may include but are not limited to: hair loss, suicidal thoughts, and in some countries severe want of a social life.....Something to keep in mind 'cheers!' |
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| Luffy1045 | Oct 12 2011, 07:00 PM Post #9 |
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Let the flan flow through you.
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Thank you all for your comments and criticism. I read every one of them and am happy that you guys like it. Chapter 4 has now been posted. |
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| Zen | Oct 12 2011, 07:30 PM Post #10 |
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![]() Once again, quite impressive! Edited by Zen, Oct 12 2011, 07:33 PM.
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