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Igneus Porta (15+ Only! This Will Contain Mature Content!); A mildy gothic steampunk fantasy story
Topic Started: Aug 29 2008, 03:06:41 PM (98 Views)
Rael
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This is my new attempt at a steampunk story, although in the first chapters it isn't obvious that it is a steam punk story. It is also rather gothic in some of its content, and it is most definitely a fantasy! Also, I will say this will involves violence, as well as alterations to religions, and relationships between characters that some may find offensive, such as Rheina and Marie's (both being women), as well as Rheina and the Master's (the name of the Master should explain it). I will say, though, I have no intention of including graphical scenes of sex, as I don't see them as a necessary part of the story progression.

Any comments and critique that can help me improve the current chapter or any future ones will be much appreciated, and very much wanted! Anyways, without further ado;

Igneus Porta
Chapter 1
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Chapter 2
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What exactly is a steampunk story?

I've read the first chapter, and I must say it seems to be pretty interesting although I'm kinda confused about how the name ties in the with the story? Igneus Porta? Is that Latin or something?
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Well Igneus is Latin for fire and porta is an opening or aperture, so I guess this steampunk story is called Opening of Fire, or Fire Opening. If I am wrong please tell me, my latin is not so great. Only know some due to school texts for chem. bio. and physics.
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Hi guys. Thank you for reading this. ^_^ Steampunk is a genre that usually involves changing history or making a new world where technology is powered by steam.

For example, there was steampunk story I read once (can't remember the title) that had steam powered space ships. The movie Wild Wild West was an interesting version of steampunk as well, seeing as the giant mechanical spider in it was powered by steam. I will try and make a better explaination later if that one didn't help ^_^

As for the title, Rag42 got it very close. Igneus means both Fire and Flaming (ocording to a latin dictionary I found over here) and Porta means Opening or Gate. The title is actually a reference to the doorway Rheina uses to enter the corridor; the Flaming Gate. ^_^

I will be working on Chapter 3 tonight because, as you know, I have been moving and have only just got my computer set up properly ^_^
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