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Jaos Bralor; Freelance Bounty Hunter
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Topic Started: Jun 24 2010, 06:56 AM (1,025 Views)
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Jaos Bralor
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Jun 24 2010, 06:56 AM
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OOC Info: Name/Alias: Sean Age: 23 Gender: Male Method of Discovery: RPG-Direcotry
I've read the rules and the words are: *ACCEPTED PT*
IC Info: Name: Jaos Bralor Alias/Nickname: Kyle Tavkern (name taken as an alias) Age: 37 Gender: Male Species: Human (Mandalorian Decent) Faction: Unaffiliated Rank: Freelance Bounty Hunter / Mercenary Homeplanet: Mandalore
Force Sensitive: No
Appearance:
 Standing at an even 6'0" and weighing in at 195, Jaos keeps the typical appearance of a soldier. He has well toned muscles, and a slightly tanned skin-tone. His hair is naturally a dark brown, however he keeps it shaven. His eyes are naturally Dark Brown/Hazel in color, though his right eye is Red in color, being a Prosthetic Eye.
Most of Kyle's upper body is covered in scars from his many years of battles & fighting, including his chest, stomach, back, arms, & forarms. He also has a long scar upper left side of his face that runs down past his left eye down to his jaw. A few of his tattoos include a Mandalorian Insignia tattooed around his left bicep in a tribal design, a Tribal Skull tattooed on the lower left arm, and a Tribal tattoo tattooed on his back.
Possessions: Weapons -Secondary Weapons: Equipment -
- Jetpack: Colored Blood Red and Black. Worn only when it is needed
- 2 Comlinks: 1 Installed into his Helmet. Also keeps a seperate on him when he is out of his Armor.
- Security Kit
- Several Anti Security Blades
- 3 pairs of Stun Cuffs
- Security Spike Interface: Carried on belt, helps in overcoming security obstacles
- Terminal Slicer: Carried on belt, helps in accessing restricted computer systems.
- Mandalorian Power Shield: Rechargeable energy shield worn on left forearm inside armor, deflects limited energy and sonic damage
- Medpack(s): Carried on belt, essential in treating wounds of any magnitude
- Magnetic Tracking Device: Carried on belt, tracks fleeing ships
- Holoprojector: Built into armor on right gauntlet, displays incoming holomessages
Personal Belongings -
- His Wedding Band (Worn on a chain around his neck)
- Pack of Cigarras (kept in his pant leg pocket)
- Lighter (kept in his pant leg pocket)
Starship - - "The Reaper" - Modified M22-T Krayt Gunship
Its entire Exterior is painted pitch black with Dark Red stripes down the hull and near the cockpit. On both sides near the cockpit is painted the Emblem of the Mandalorian Clans in gold. The Reaper is heavily equipped with several 'safety' measures, including a Heavy turret mounted by the entrance ramp of the ship to keep away intruders, and a force cage for when he is contracted to capture a Force-User. Several measures have been added to the programming of the ship to keep the ship from being stolen, as well as other equipment to help in Jaos' Profession as a Bounty Hunter and Mercenary.
Clothing / Armor -
- Custom Mandalorian Commando Armor - Kyle's Armor is Blood Red, Silver, and Black in color. A red and Black Kama is worn over his legs for extra protection.
The helmet's HUD (heads-up-display) features information on the surrounding environment as well as a 360-degree field of vision. The HUD's data streams could be controlled by eye movements and blinking. In addition, an advanced penetrating radar allowed his HUD to provide information on nearby rooms. Along with those it is also equipped with several Vision Capabilities; including Nightvision, Radar, Heat Vision and several others as well.
The Gauntlets are equipped with both a Czerka ZX miniature flame projector, which creates a cone of fire five meters long and one meter in diameter, and a Mandalorian Shield built into the gauntlet giving him limited protection from blaster and melee damage. The shoulder pads of the armor have black and red mythosaur skulls painted onto them.
- Civilian Clothing - When he is not on a job, or in some kind of battle he is usually seen in civilian clothing. His Civilian clothes consist of a black leather trench coat, a white Muscle Shirt, black leather Fingerless Gloves, Black Urban Camouflage pants, and Black leather Combat Boots. He is rarely ever seen without Dog Tags hanging over his shirt. He is almost always seen with a pair of Black & Red sunglasses covering his eyes.
Personality: Jaos Bralor otherwise known as Kyle Tavkern is known best as a ruthless and fearless Killer. He isn't a very trusting person, and trusts very few people. He is a skilled combatant through his many years of fighting, and thus has gained quite an ego. He has rarely ever backed down from a fight, even against those that are twice his size. Being a highly trained soldier, he is very confident, sometimes over confident, in his abilities, though he isn't one to overestimate an opponent.
He cares deeply for his friends and family, and is very protective of them. He is known to be very trustworthy and is considered by those who know him, to be very honorable. Like many mandalorians, he has a sense of Honor about him, and lives by it. Outwardly, Jaos is usually seen as cold hearted, but those who get to know him know that his loyalties lie in his friends & Family, and that he is one of the most honorable of friends that anyone could have. He is not one who like to talk a lot, however he is not shy in any aspect.
Jaos Bralor is very thorough, instinctive, and ruthless when it come to his job as a bounty hunter. He is often motivated by money, and as such his loyaltyis to the highest bidder. Not caring much for politics, he rarely ever takes sides, except when it might conflict with his sense of honor or morals. He keeps himself in top condition, maintaining the habit of training often with his equipment. He is also very intelligent, having prudent tactical skills, and is also fluent in Basic, Huttese, Bocce, and Mando'a. He usually always prefers a subtle approach to his hunting, keeping a cool demeanor when calculating his every move, always playing to win or survive
History: Birth & Childhood - Jaos Bralor was born on Mandalore. His mother died during childbirth leaving him and his older sister to be raised by his father, a Lieutenant within the mandalorian Military. When jaos was the age of 4 his father remarried, marrying a young single mandalorian mother, that had lost her husband during a military raid years earlier.
From the marriage Jaos gained a new brother, Modo Thrahrn. After reaching the age of 7 his father started to train both Jaos & his brother Modo in the ways of the Mandalorians, beginning his training with both ranged and melee weapons. He was also taught several forms of Martial Arts, and had trained hard to perfect his knowledge of fighting. Jaos spent much of his free time practicing with his brother, or sparring against each other.
Teenage Years -
When Jaos reached the age of 16 he began his service within the mandalorian clan's military. With his extensive knowledge of fighting, he was able to pass many of the other recruits, and quickly earn the rank of Sergeant. The First time he fought alongside his brother, he was sent deep into the forests of dxun, with a small group of his fellow soldiers. There the mandalorian soldiers were to find out what had destroyed the mandalorian encampment there, and dispose of whatever the new threat was. As they searched the planet they ran across a small group consisting of several squadrons of Stormtroopers, and Storm Commandos. In a ferocious battle, the mandalorian's where able to drive the Imperial forces off the planet. Although they had many casualties they were able to successfully complete their mission there and return with atleast half of the Forces that were taken on the mission.
After returning to Dxun, they were greeted with a warm welcome and celebration for their success. Jaos was chosen to fight in the Battle circle against one of the Captains in his Squadron. Through a fierce battle, Jaos was barely able to come out on top, but not before receiving several deep wounds from his opponent's blade. Many of the older soldiers who had been watching the Battle Circle, realized his fighting abilities, and chose to train him further, and decided to train him as a Mandalorian Commando. Quite pleased in his accomplishments, Jaos agreed without hesitation to the promotion.
Although to the displeasure of both his father, Jaos married the love of his life, a childhood friend, at the age of 19. Though this did not change his willingness to serve, as his father and brother had believed it would, he continued faithfully in the Military, working hard to support his new family. However his wife had different views. She didn't wish to see him end up dead if he were to go off to battle, and begged Jaos to reconsider his position in the Military, However Jaos would not hear it, he was determined to stay in the military.
Adulthood Years -
After Several years of training, he was promoted into the elite Mandalorian Commando Corps along side several other clan members, including his Step-brother Modo "Thrahn" Bralor. 4 Months after his 21st birthday, Julia, Jaos' Wife, gave birth to his only child, a beautiful young girl. Julia had continued to ask him to leave the military life, however she would only ask one more time after their daughter was born. Refusing, Jaos broke her heart. Believing that he loved the life of a soldier more than her, she left him, taking their child with her.
It took months until Jaos would find this out. Heartbroken, Jaos quit the Military, and left his homeworld of mandalor. With nothing there to keep him there anymore, Jaos decided that he was tired of the life of a Mandalorian Warrior, and decided to take on a more 'rewarding' life as a Bounty Hunter and Mercenary. It was then that he took on the alias of Kyle C. Tavkern upon Leaving Dxun. Jaos traveled the galaxy far and wide, gaining prestige as he went from planet to planet. The first few years of working as a bounty hunter, Kyle worked for several different hutts, before going freelance.
His third year as a Bounty Hunter, He was sent after a Trandoshan by the name of Kyrnok, who had killed several businessmen in the republic, and had a large ransom on his head. After a failed attempt to kill a senator within the republic, the trandoshan fled to Kashyyyk where he started into a business as a slaver. Kyle was able to track the trandoshan down to Kashyyyk where the trando had started enslaving the natives and selling them off to the hutts. Kyle was able to kill the Trandoshan, as well as his small crew. Kyle then Left the planet and recovered the money for the Trandoshan that he had hunted. After several more hunts, Kyle was able to save up enough money to buy a ship of his own, and purchased a M22-T Krayt Gunship from a Hutt that he had worked for years earlier. As Jaos continued his life as a bounty hunter, he installed several new, more efficient gadgets and systems into the vessel, customizing the ship to his own liking.
For the next few years of working as a Bounty Hunter, Kyle had worked under several different contracts, with many of the different crime syndicates of the Criminal Underworld, and even for a few political figures in both the republic and the Empire. Though he didn't care much for the work itself, or the people who he worked for, he did enjoy the pay of the job and especially the ability to do his job freely, without anyone looking over his shoulder, or continually taking orders from his superiors.
On one of his many hunts, he was sent to the moon Dxun, chasing after a Rogue Mandalorian Soldier who had caused trouble for a crime lord, and had made off with over 100,000 credits. Though the search was long, and tedious, he had managed to track the soldier from dantooine to telos and then to Onderon and finally to Dxun, where he was able to finally confront the soldier for the last time.
The fighting was fierce, and at times, the soldier himself had sent his own pets into the fight as he would flee farther into the jungles. Shooting the man in the knees, he crippled the old soldier, and before the man could plead for his life, kyle ended the man's life with a shot between the eyes.
It was then that he found the man's ship, only a few hundred meters from where the man was shot. He searched through the ship, finding little of value or interest, but a wolf pup. Taking this pup with him, Kyle taught the pup to be a cold blooded killer like himself, and when he had gotten old enough, Kyle began taking the pup alongside him on many of his hunts.
Several years after the hunt on dxun, Jaos found evidence that led him to believe that his wife and daughter were still alive. Making a vow to find them, Jaos begin to use what funds he earned from his hunts to finance his searches, and after several months had tracked down his daughter on Telos, where she was working as a smuggler under several shady characters. Deciding to investigate more into her past, he followed her, learning every thing he could about her from contacts, and research over the holonet. As time passed, Jaos finally approached his daughter, introducing himself as a friend, not willing to let her know that he was really her father. Over time, Jaos had managed to gain the friendship of his daughter, but much to the displeasure of her employer.
Her employer, a rather shady crime lord, saw jaos as competition to him, since he had his eyes on jaos' daughter since she had started to work for him. Not willing to let anyone get in his way, the Crimelord sent several of his own men to kill jaos, but was unsuccessful. Jaos managed to cripple the would be mercenaries sent after him, and tracked down the crime-lord responsible for the attack. Jaos followed the man to Nar Shaddaa, where he broke into the ware house where the crimelord had his head quarters, and quickly disposed of the man's guards. Enraged at this man's attacks on his life, Jaos tortured the man, and though the man begged for mercy, Jaos ended his life, leaving the bloodied pulp of a body behind as he left Nar Shaddaa.
It wasn't long however that Kyle found that he had a bounty placed on his head by one of the Crime Lord's friends. Leaving Nar Shaddaa, Jaos went back to telos where he found his daughter, and explained everything to her. Confused at the new light that was shed on her past, Jaos' Daughter was angry that he had killed her employer, leaving her jobless, and demanded he leave her.
While Kyle still works as a Bounty Hunter and Mercenary, He continues his hunt to find his wife, and to gain a fatherly relationship with his daughter, since he never really knew her. To tell her how sorry he is for choosing the life of a soldier over them. He has never given up hope of seeing his wife again, and the hope that he could finally be a father to his daughter, that he never got to know.
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Drey'Con Shadow
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Jun 26 2010, 12:27 PM
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A great story indeed. I am quite interested in seeing how things will play out with Jaos and his daughter but in the meantime, let us get to Reviewing.
Now then, more or less the history and everything else looks in order but then we start getting into the niddy-gritty.
I do not mind the mandalorian armor and all its equipment save for the face that it is made up purely of Mandalorian Armor. I was under the impression that said metal is quite heavy so if you don't mind the slightly limited mobility especially against foes whom use speed then I will not penalize you for that one and we can leave it on.
When we get into the Ship, I am not really the guy who knows much on vessels but such a craft should be explained further. As it is heavily modified and the stock vessel is quite pricey, you should perhaps explain how you came about such a vessel either under the ship or in your history. From there, one can easily begin to build up the idea that as Jaos continued his life as a bounty hunter, learning the ways of the galaxy, he would install new, more efficient gadgets and systems into the vessel. Just a thought but it would help your case more in getting the ship.
Other than that, I don't see any other major issue. Slight thing that bugs me though is going into past tense with the third paragraph of your personality. Kind of throws off the flow of the profile as I don't know if it is a means to begin your history or part of his personality listing. Just throwing that out there.
Anyway, again welcome to Echoes in the Night.
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Braxis Montra
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Jun 27 2010, 06:33 AM
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Thank you, I will get onto changing those things later today...
Edit: I have finished the points that you have asked me to revise, and i believe that it is now ready to be approved, unless there is anything else that needs to be revised.
((This is Jaos, just with a new account, sorry for any confusion))
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Drey'Con Shadow
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Jul 4 2010, 01:28 PM
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Hmm, well then after the revisions, I personally don't see anything else wrong with it. I shall approve but should the other admins have anything to say, they shall PM you I guess. Anyway, welcome to Echoes and may you enjoy your stay .
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