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The Bald Animal
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Topic Started: May 29 2010, 06:37 PM (451 Views)
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baldanimal
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May 29 2010, 06:37 PM
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OOC:
Name: James Age: 29 Gender: Male Method of Discovery: I was informed of this site from a fellow soldier; he goes by the name of Perses.
I've read the rules, and the words are: "Polka dots and butterflies".
IC:
Name: The Bald Animal Alias/Nickname: Animal Age: 35 Species: Human Faction: Jedi Order Rank: Jedi Knight Home planet: Kashyyk Force Sensitive: Yes Force Powers: -Force Sense -Force Flight -Force Speed -Mind Trick -Dissipate Energy
Appearance:
The Bald Animal is a very intimidating man to look upon. He stands at approximately 6 feet and 10 inches high; weighing in at 300 lbs. Hence the name, there is not a single hair on his head, or on his entire body for that matter. His eyes are that which resemble pools of liquid silver with subtle streaks of blue. His jaw is thick and squared-off at the chin, and two scars; one under each cheekbone. His neck is thick and tapered which broadens as it pyramids down to his shoulders. His body shape is the epitome of muscular definition, lacking only body fat.
He wears very simple clothing, for the purpose of free movement without restrictions that come with armor. His shirt is sleeveless and solid brown. The belt around his waist has several loops for holding weapons. Two of said loops contain his lightsaber, and blaster pistol. Also located on either side of the belt are small pouches for the use and carry of necessary items. His trousers are that of a simple solid color of brown, only a darker shade than that of his shirt. His boots are solid black with brown leather straps that cross each other in a hex format, starting at the toe tip, all the way up to the top of the boot. A black cloak surrounds his entire body, complete with sleeves, and secures around the waist with a simple strap.
Possessions: [x1] Cloak [x1] Lightsaber [x1] Blaster pistol [x2] Small pouch [x1] Shirt [x1] Trousers [x1] pair of boots [x1] belt
Personality:
The Bald Animal, despite his looks, is very quiet, calm, and focused. When approached with a question, he never hesitates to provide an answer. If he is found in conversation, he will not excuse himself; rather, he delights in the company of others. He enjoys reading during his leisure time, as well as meditating on how to better himself through use of the Force.
On the battlefield, The Bald Animal is swift, and very precise. He seems to almost take on a primitive instinct when he engages his opponents. Each movement that is his, is fluid and moves almost as in a trance. His eyes gloss over, as he gives in to the Force and lets it guide his every movement. Focusing on his offensive and defensive procedures, his face shows no emotion as he engages the fight. After the battle is over, he closes his eyes, only to re-open them so that they return to their normal color, and he is back to his cheerful self.
History:
The place of birth is unknown. During the first few weeks of being an infant, The Bald Animal was dropped off on the planet Kashyyk. Upon finding the abandoned infant, the native Wookies took him in and raised him as one of their own. As he grew the wookies taught The Bald Animal all they knew about peace and war. When he grew into his teenage years, combat training was priority. The wookies trained The Bald Animal in hand to hand combat, ranged weaponry, and melee combat with the use of vibro blades. As he grew, he grew in size and strength. Upon reaching his early twenties, The Bald Animal stood only a head shorter than the average wookie. Due to his intense methods of combat, he was given the name The Bald Animal. The wookies found this name to be very fitting seeing as how they raised him as one of their own, yet he lacked the hair that was so very abundant throughout the wookie race.
The Bald Animal knew that he could not stay on Kashyyk for the rest of his life, and set out to find others that looked like him. The village leader suggested that he seek out the planet Corellia. Stories of a great wookie warrior named Chewbacca, spoke of the great adventures that were had with a pilot named Han Solo. Knowing the stories of the life and death and Chewbacca, The Bald Animal sought adventure just like those stories he had heard all those years. Thus, he set a course for Corellia. Upon landing on this new planet, he enlisted into the Republic Army knowing that there would definitely be some sort of action to be found within. During training, The Bald Animal was like no other soldier. He was faster, more accurate, and had an uncanny relationship with any melee weapon he wielded. He was praised and heralded for his abilities, and was promoted to Sergeant just before they set out to war. The Yuuzhan Vong War was treacherous, and many lives were lost. For The Bald Animal, however, it was a time of realization. A new era. A time to re-evaluate the course of his life. During an intense fight with 5 opponents, The Bald Animal was defending himself a while shielding attacks from his fallen and injured counterpart. From 25 meters behind his melee oppressors, another assailant opened fire with a blaster rifle. In what seemed like slow motion, The Bald Animal could see the actual bolt of fire coming for him. He reached up with his bare hand, and with his fingers spread wide, he absorbed the bolt of energy and then released it right back at his distant enemy.
After the Yuuzhan Vong War was over, tales and stories of The Bald Animal circulated all over the planet of Corellia, and even to neighboring star systems. A few months passed, and The Bald Animal was soon contacted by members of the Jedi Counsel. They encouraged him to seek training to become a Jedi. The Bald Animal was very happy to receive such an invitation, and gladly accepted. While at the academy, he was taught the ways of the Force, and honed his own Force powers. Such powers to include, increased running and movement speed, the dissipation of energy, and even the ability to fly short distances.
Now on his own, The Bald Animal seeks to serve in any way he can for the good of the people, and the good of the Galactic Alliance. He makes his home on the planet of Corellia, passing the time with meditation and the good company of friends. He waits until he is needed, or until a threat of injustice is posed from darker forces.
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I will not relent; never suffer defeat, never falter. I will not choke on failure. The Sith will perish by my hand.
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Drey'Con Shadow
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Jun 2 2010, 11:57 AM
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Hmm, well there are many issues with this profile that need to be addressed.
1. A 6'10", 300lb man cannot move in a swift, fluid pattern even if aided by the force. True he would be faster than normal but he would still fall prey to those smaller and swifter than him (just a thought for ya).
2. I do believe you may need to reread our site's storyline as your history touches heavily upon things that do not pertain to the era we are in nor the canon we are trying to established. There is no Han Solo or Chewbacca here nor are we in the era where Chewbacca was killed; this is pre-clone wars so to speak.
3. You should put a ranking system for your force powers so we know where you stand with them. Speaking of the force powers, I would imagine a jedi knight to hold a little more than what you have there but that's just me.
4. Back to the era issue and your history, as it stands, we are in the old republic and as such, the jedi do not take on older members as this is not their way. As such, a young man would not be inducted into the order due to the fact that his mind has already been molded into the type of person he shall become.
Basically, I would say there is much revision ahead of you but feel free to ask the staff for assistance. The issues I mentioned were the ones that jumped out at me right off the bat.
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