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Topic Started: Apr 14 2010, 11:45 AM (576 Views)
rarehunter_555

Chapter 17: Death

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page 37

Camu: I killed Naoto.

Camu: Just now...

Euro: You lie.

[Chapter 17: Death]

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page 38

Camu: It is true.

Euro: Lies!

Euro: But... If we...!

Euro[in mind]: Are friends...!!

Camu: NGH...

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page 39

Euro: WAH!

Camu: Ah...

Euro: Camu... Why?

[Camu's heartbeat]: TU-TUM

[Camu's heartbeat]: TU-TUM

[Camu's heartbeat]: TU-TUM

Levinas: Camu...

Levinas: Is using illusions.

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page 40

Levinas: Are you hurt?

Levinas: No matter how hard you try to hide it, you can't hide the smell of blood.

Levinas[in mind]: The smell of Camu's blood... and Naoto's too...

[Camu's boot]: SLIZ

[Sweat]: PLIC PLIC

Camu: Heavens...

Camu: Haa...

Camu: Don't say anything more, Levi...

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page 41

Epsilon: In that case...

Epsilon: Let's search for Lucia.

Levinas: Quickly, Camu.

Camu: What?

Levinas: You are in no condition to stand.

Levinas: I will take you, and after that you can mount {Or maybe raise up, summon} the dragon.

Camu: I...

Camu: I...

Camu: I don't want to see...!

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page 42

Camu: I've realized... I have only been following the image of Lotus...

Camu: Always have been...

Camu[in mind remembering Lucia and Lotus]: Camu!

Epsilon: Me too.

Camu: Eh...?

Epsilon: It is the promise I made to Lotus.

Epsilon: I decided to protect Lucia.

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page 43

False words, false smiles...

In the end, the only true thing he said was...

The words...

Of truth {Or something else}...

"Promise me you will protect Coral..."

Epsilon: Because of that I want to protect her.

Epsilon: Maybe I just want to think it's true...

Levinas: Lotus is in my heart as well...

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page 44

Levinas[in mind]: If Lotus had not appeared that night and instead on some other night...

Levinas[in mind]: To rescue Lucia, surely I would have been murdered.

Levinas[in mind remembering Lotus]: "You are..."

Levinas[in mind]: The words of that moment... Was the first time someone told me that...

Levinas[in mind]: And yet I...

Levinas[in mind]: I killed him...

Levinas[in mind]: I killed him? The sword was raised up, but I don't remember anything more...

Levinas[in mind]: If I want to remember, the feeling of inconsistency will help me.

Levinas[in mind remembering Epsilon]: I think that Lotus...

Levinas[in mind remembering Epsilon]: Could still be alive...

Levinas[in mind]: Alive?

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page 45

Levinas[in mind]: It can't be...

Levinas[in mind]: Many years have passed... If he wasn't killed by me, now he would still be

dead.

Camu: huhu

Camu: Entering people's hearts was his specialty.

Camu: Even if dead, he still lives in the hearts of others.

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page 46

Camu: Maybe... Lotus' soul has not returned to the sand...

Camu: And is still wandering in this world...

When the life of a Sand Dust ends...

The body, mind, and soul changes to dust and disappears... But...

...What happend to Naoto's soul?

I have to erase all my memory of him...

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page 47

Levinas: Hey Camu, try not to use more spells.

Camu: AH!

Camu: KYA!

Levinas: Hey don't move.

Levinas: Leave Naoto for later, right now let's search lucia!

Levinas: Since she's the one who summoned!

Levinas: Stop suffering alone! We are your friends.

Camu: T-- That's...

Camu[in mind]: The same as Lotus...

CAmu[in mind]: I can't forget it...

Camu: I don't need to say it...

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page 48

Unknown: The new magic stone isn't working too.

Unknown: How can it be...?

Unknown: Do something...

Unknown: The main body has no more power.

Unknown: I don't know what to do.

Unknown: I give up.

Unknown: Mr. Sladiiis!

Sladis: Me too.

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page 49

Unknown: Do something with your power!

Sladis: Hahaha

Sladis: You're pretty

Unknown: Don't say that! I'll die if we don't do something!

Unknown: That's it, Sladis!

Unknown: Find the dragon of time and do something!

Unknown: How long do you think this strange existence of upper Orgos will last?

Unknown: And we Elphis are supposed to be immortal, so why are there only three of us?!

Unknown: Also we are becoming stone.

Unknown: If we don't do something, we will die. Understand?

Sladis: And what's so bad about death?

Sladis: Isn't it weirder to have immortal life?

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page 50

Unknown: Well, I don't want to die!

Unknown: SO!

Unknown: I don't want to die either!!

Unknown: HAAAY!

[Unknown's boot]: PLAM

Unknown: Ah...

[Sound effect]: CRACK

Sladis: Looks like the impact affected the main body too.

Unknown: That...

Sladis: I want to change to stone.

Sladis: Soon, there will only be the lower Orgos.

Sladis: The transformation will only affect the upper.

Sladis: There are people living well below.

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page 51

Unknown: Lower?!

Unknown: You're saying at the bottom of Orgos?! No joke!!

Unknown: If I had to live with those scum,

Unknown: I'd rather die!!

Sladis: Well, it's a thing of this level.

Sladis: The knowledge of our life...

Unknown: What are you saying, Sladis?

Sladis: Dyura, we are Elphis...

Sladis: We can't die, but we also can't live.

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page 52

Sladis: Sadis and you hate the Sand Dust,

Sladis: But I don't see it the same as that.

Sladis: They "live" despite their short lives...

Dyura: Then...

Dyura: Why don't you go below...

Dyura: Yourself?

Sladis: ... Our life will end soon.

Sladis: The Sand Dust have some words they say once in their lives...

[Somebody in mind]: If I could...

[Somebody in mind]: I would like to know the fate of your Sand Dust daughter, Rukavifeit...

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page 53

Sladis: "I love you," Dyura...

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page 54 and 55

Naoto: Nh...

Naoto[in mind]: What happend to me?

And Lucia?

Where am I?

Dragon: Hi!

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page 56

Naoto: You again, Mih.

Naoto: Tell me something first, this is a real world or fantasy?

Dragon: Neither.

Dragon: We are in a space between two times.

Naoto[in mind]: I don't understand...

Naoto: What do you want?

Naoto: And stop using Chisato's figure!

Dragon: Nothing.

Dragon: I'm just a bit concerned.

Dragon: Nobody else but you can go against God's prediction.

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page 57

Dragon: What fortune the limit of your imagination is an "intensive hemorrhage."

Dragon: Very good...

Dragon: That you can see Lucia, although if only her conciousness.

Naoto: What...

Naoto: What are you saying? I...

Naoto[in mind]: My arms... Legs...

Naoto[in mind]: The wounds have disappeared...

Naoto[in mind]: What happend?

Naoto: I...

Naoto: And I'm wearing other clothes as well.

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page 58

Dragon: It's simple, you haven't noticed your death.

Naoto[in mind]: Death?

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page 59

Naoto: No... It can't be...

Naoto: Death...?

Naoto[in mind]: I died...?!

Dragon: Having that power...

Dragon: You were killed by Camu.

Naoto: ... Then...

Naoto: Then!

Naoto: If I'm really dead!

Naoto: Take me back to the real world!!

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page 60

Naoto: You said if I died in Orgos, I could go back, didn't you?!

Naoto: I'm still not awake!

I'm still dreaming...

[Push sound]: FRUSH

Dragon: Actually...

Dragon: You can go back to your world without any problem.

Dragon: But your soul is strongly tied to Orgos.

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page 61

Naoto: Then...?!

Naoto: That means I can go back to Orgos another time...?!

Dragon: What are you gonna do?

Dragon: Your body doesn't exists.

Dragon: Your hands, feet, and guts are destroyed.

Dragon: Unconciously, you created all of this to continue fighting, but...

Dragon: To leave the mind, this body will disappear without a trace...

Dragon: You don't have a body to go to, and you will only wander with your soul like before.

Dragon: Note that going back to Orgos, you will feel much loneliness.

Dragon: No one will notice your presence, everything will be forgotten.

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page 62

Dragon: Or is it necessary for you to see the death of Lucia until you're satisfied?

Naoto: That's it...

Naoto: I only have to materialize.

Naoto: If I could materialize my arms and my feet...

Naoto: Then I can make my entire body...

Naoto[in mind]: That's it! I should still be able to see Lucia...!

Naoto[in mind]: I can feel it very well... The link between her and I...

If it is this world...

If it is this world where anything can be, Then I only have to imagine it...!!

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page 63

Dragon: It is impossible.

Naoto: Why?

Dragon: It can be done...

Dragon: But by yourself it is impossible.

Dragon: Do you understand?

Naoto: Can I ask you something... one more time?

Naoto: Always I had that doubt...

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page 64 and 65

Naoto: This place... including you, the world of Orgos...

Naoto: Is it real?

Naoto: Is it my dream?

Naoto: Which of the two?

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page 66

Dragon: I don't know.

Naoto: What can I do?

Naoto: I...

Dragon: Come on...

Dragon: Let's search for the answer...

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page 67

Dragon: In your incomplete past.

Dragon: Lend me a bit of your back.

Naoto: Ah?

Naoto: UWAH! [Falling]

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page 68 and 69

Naoto[in mind]: Light!

Naoto[in mind]: The same as in that moment... The same light when Lucia summoned me...!

NAoto[in mind]: I'm falling...!!!

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page 70

Lotus: You are the incarnation of the dragon of time...

Lotus: The god that rules over the time of this world...

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[End Chapter 17]
Edited by rarehunter_555, Apr 14 2010, 02:15 PM.
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Chapter 17: Death
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page 01
1st panel Camu's though: I was gonna...
erase all memories related to Naoto, then disappear... [you could ignore the translation for panel one if you want]
Levinas: Camu...
Levinas: Naoto...
Levinas: How's Naoto?
Camu: I have already...
Camu: kill Naoto!
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page 02
Camu: I killed Naoto.
Camu: Just now...
Euro: You lie.
[Chapter 17: Death]
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page 03
Camu: It's true. [would sound more fluent in spoken terms]
Euro: Lies!
Euro: But... If we...!
Euro[in mind]: are friends...!!
Camu: NGH...
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page 04
Euro: WAH!
Camu: Ah...
Euro: Camu... Why?
[Camu's heartbeat]: TU-TUM
[Camu's heartbeat]: TU-TUM
[Camu's heartbeat]: TU-TUM
Levinas: Camu...
Levinas: is using illusions.
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page 05
Levinas: Are you hurt?
Levinas: No matter how hard you try to hide it, you can't hide the smell of blood.
Levinas[in mind]: The smell of Camu's blood... and Naoto's too...
[Camu's boot]: SLIZ
[Sweat]: PLIC PLIC
Camu: Heavens...
Camu: Haa...
Camu: Don't say anything more, Levi...
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page 06
Epsilon: In that case...
Epsilon: Let's search for Lucia.
Levinas: Quickly, Camu.
Camu: What?
Levinas: You are in no condition to stand.
Levinas's face narrative on the 3rd panel: how troublesome...
Levinas: I will carry you, until we get to the dragon mounts.
Camu: I...
Camu: I...
Camu: I don't want to see...!
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page 07
Camu: I've realized... I see Lotus in her...
Camu: Always have been...
Camu[in mind remembering Lucia and Lotus]: Camu!
Epsilon: Me too.
Camu: Eh...?
Epsilon: I will protect Lucia...
Epsilon: Because I've made a promise with Lotus.
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page 08
False words, false smiles... [you could use fake smiles if you want]
In the end, at least he said one thing...
That is...
true...
"Promise me......"
Lotus: you will protect Coral.
Epsilon's thought: Maybe I just want to think it's true...
Levinas: Lotus is in my heart as well...
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page 09
Levinas[in mind]: If It was someone other than Lotus that appeared that night...
Levinas[in mind]: To rescue Lucia, could I have murdered someone unrelated.
Levinas[in mind remembering Lotus]: "You..."
Levinas[in mind]: The words of that moment... Was the first time someone spoken to me like that...
Levinas[in mind]: And yet I...
Levinas[in mind]: killed him...
Levinas[in mind]: I killed him? I raised the knife, but I can't remember anything after that...
Levinas[in mind]: If I try to remember, the feeling of uneasiness overwhelms me.
Levinas[in mind remembering Epsilon]: I think that Lotus...
Levinas[in mind remembering Epsilon]: Could still be alive...
Levinas[in mind]: Still alive?
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page 10
Levinas[in mind]: That can't be...
Levinas[in mind]: It's been long... even if he wasn't killed by me, being a Lucavifate he couldn't have lived long.
Camu: hehe
Camu: Leaving an impression on people's hearts was his specialty.
Camu: Even if hes's dead, he still lives in the hearts of others.
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page 11
Camu: Maybe Lotus' soul has not returned to the sand...
Camu: And is still wandering in this world...
When the life of a Sand Dust ends...
The body, mind, and soul turns to dust and disappears... But...
...What would happened to Naoto's soul?
I have to erase all everyone's memory of him...
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page 12
Levinas: Hey Camu, try not to use stange spells.

Second panel
Camu: AH!
Camu: KYA!
Levinas: Hey don't move.
Levinas: Leave Naoto for later, right now let's search lucia!
Levinas: Since she's the one who summoned Naoto!

Levinas: Stop shouldering all the burden alone! We are your friends.
Camu: T-- That's...
Camu[in mind]: Like the time with Lotus...
CAmu[in mind]: I can't seem to forget it...
Camu: I know even if you don't to say it...

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page 13
Sardis: The new magic stone isn't working too.
Sardis: How can it be...?
Sardis: Do something...

Sardis: The main body is running out of power.
Sardis: There's nothing more I can do.

Dura: I give up.
Sladyis: Me too.
Sardis: Master Slaydiiis!
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page 14

Sardis: Slaydis, please do something with your power!
Slaydis: Hahaha!
Slaydis: You're pretty cute like that!
Sardis: Don't say that! I'll die if this goes on!

Dura: That's it, Slaydis!
Dura: We have to find the trans-dimensional dragon, to counteract this!

Slaydis: How long do you think this dimensional problem of upper Orgos will last?
Slaydis: And we, Elphis, are supposed to be immortal, so why are there only three of us left?!
Dura: Also we are turning to stone faster.
Dura: If this goes on, we will die, Understand?

Slaydis: And what's so bad about death?
Slaydis: Isn't it weirder to have immortal life?
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page 15

Sardis: I don't want to die!

Dura: Right!
Dura: How can we die like this!
Sardis: Ughh!
[Dura's boot]: PLAM

Dura: Ah...
[Sound effect]: CRACK
Sladyis: Looks like that stomp... did him in...

Dura: Noo...
Dura: I don't want to turn to stone.

Slaydis: You should go to the lower levl.
Slaydis: At the moment, the curse only affect the upper level.
Slaydis: There are people living well below.

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Dura: Lower level?!
Dura: You're telling me to go to the lowermost region of Orgos?! Stop joking around!!
Dura: If I had to live with those ants of Sand Dust,
Dura: I'd rather die!!

Slaydis: hahaha...
Slaydis: The knowledge of life for us, the Elphis...
Slaydis: are only at this level...

Dura: What are you trying to say, Slaydis?

Slaydis: Dura, we, Elphis...
Slaydis: do not die, but we also do not live.
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page 17

Slaydis: Even though, both Sardis and you hate the Sand Dust,
Slaydis: But I see them differently!

Slaydis: They "live" despite their short lives...

Dura: Then...
Dura: Why don't you go to there...
Dura: Yourself?

Slaydis: ... Our life will end soon.
Slaydis: The Sand Dust have a saying...
Dura's Thought: If I could...
Dura's Thought: I would like you see how the Sand Dust, the girl with Lucavifate blood, Lucia, dies...
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page 18

Slaydis: "I love you," Dura...
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page 19 and 20

Naoto: uhh...
Naoto[in mind]: What happened to me?

And Lucia?
Where is this place?
Dragon[Mee]: Yo [music symbol]
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page 21

Naoto: You again! Mee!
Naoto: Tell me something first, is this a real world or a fantasy?

Mee: Neither.
Mee: We are in a space between two dimensions.

Naoto[in mind]: I don't understand...

Naoto: What do you want?
Naoto: And stop using Chisato's face!

Mee: Nothing.
Mee: I'm just a bit interested in you.
Mee: Onl you would go against Trans-dimenional dragon's prediction.
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page 22

Dragon: What fortune the limit of your imagination is an "intensive hemorrhage."
Dragon: Very good...
Dragon: That you can see Lucia, although only your conciousness.

Naoto: What...
Naoto: What are you saying? I...

Naoto[in mind]: My arms... Legs...
Naoto[in mind]: The wounds have disappeared...
Naoto[in mind]: What happend?
Naoto: I...
Naoto: even my clothes have changed.
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page 23

Mee: It's simple, haven't you noticed you've died.

Naoto[in mind]: .........................Died?
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page 24

Naoto: No... It can't be...
Naoto: I... died?

Naoto[in mind]: I have died...?!

Mee: Even thought you have that power,
Mee: You were killed by Camu.

Naoto: Then...

Naoto: Then!
Naoto: If I'm really dead!
Naoto: Take me back to the real world!!
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page 25

Naoto: You said if I died in Orgos, I could go back, didn't you?!
Naoto: Why haven't woken up yet!

I'm still dreaming...

[Push sound]: FRUSH

Mee: Actually...
Mee: You can go back to your world without any problem.
Mee: But your soul is strongly tied to Orgos.
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page 26

Naoto: Then...?!
Naoto: That means I can go back to Orgos?!

Mee: So what?
Mee: Your body doesn't exists.
Mee: Your hands, feet, and organs are destroyed.

Mee: Even thought you have unconciously replaced those to continue to fight...

Mee: When your conciousness disappear, so will your body.

Mee: It isn't possible for you to return to your body, it's only your conciousness that is left.
Mee: If you go back to Orgos like this, you will only feel alone.
Mee: No one will notice your presence, and you will be forgotten.
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page 27

Mee: Or... you won't be satisfied until you see Lucia die?

Naoto: That's it...
Naoto: I only have to materialize.

Naoto: If I could materialize my arms and my feet...
Naoto: Then I can make my entire body...
Naoto[in mind]: That's it! I still want to see Lucia!
Naoto[in mind]: I have to feel it... the link between Lucia and I...

If it is this world...
If it is this world where anything can happen, Then I only have to imagine it...!!
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page 28

Mee: It is impossible.

Naoto: Why?

Mee: It isn't that it can be done...
Mee: But by yourself it is impossible.
Mee: Do you understand?

Naoto: Can I ask you something... one more time?
Naoto: Always I had that doubt...
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page 29 and 30

Naoto: This place... including you, the world of Orgos...

Naoto: Is it just my dream... or Is it real?

Naoto: what is the truth?
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page 31

Mee: Even I don't know! [music symbol]

Naoto: What can I...
Naoto: do?

Mee: Come on...
Mee: Let's search for the answer...
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page 32

Mee: In your incomplete past.

Mee: Lend me your back! [music symbol]

Naoto: Ah?

Naoto: UWAH! [Falling]
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page 33 and 34

Naoto[in mind]: Light!

Naoto[in mind]: this light... just like when Lucia summoned me...!

NAoto[in mind]: I'm falling...!!!

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page 35
Lotus: So, you are the incarnation of the trans-dimensional dragon...

Lotus: The god that rules over the time of this world...
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[End Chapter 17]

I did a complete revision of the text with the adv name of the characters and terms,
they use time and dimension interchangably
Mee is the trans-dimensional dragon
Dura is the Elphis female
Slaydis is the the Elphis male
Sardis is the Elphis nobody
Lucavifate is the race of Lucia's ppl

i also change the wording to make it more fluent.
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