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RaresTrans: V4Ch16
Topic Started: Apr 11 2010, 01:02 PM (487 Views)
rarehunter_555

Yeah I know chapter 16 has already been translated, but I'm just trying to get the feel ya know? B-)

Comments in {.........} are my own commentary.

IMPORTANT NOTE: The Spanish version doesn't seem to have page numbers, so I had to make them myself. Page 1 begins with the start of chapter 16.



Chapter 16: What Should Be Protected

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page 1

The forgetfulness of the strong sorrow that tore my body... That left me without breath...

On the bottom of the sea... around resplendent bubbles...

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page 2

I'm not sure, but is that...

Coral?

Am I at the bottom of the sea?

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page 3

I can't talk...

... So strange. I can't talk...

Lucia, at last I've found you... I never thought I would, but I have finally found you.

But always I believed that we would be together,

Because you and I are connected...

In the vast desert, in this vast sea bottom...

If we lose, the chance of meeting again will be none.

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page 4

Because of that... I can't do anything.

I can't do anything more than what is happening.

I'm sorry for what happend just now. Whatever you do, I will follow...

Damn... No voice...

But it's alright that we are both here, besides, me...

Levinas, Epsilon, Euro, and camu too... All love you very much.

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page 5

Lucia...

Why always in the critical moment?

We are so close, but why can't you hear my voice?

Lucia, please...

Please be more than an illusion that said...

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page 6 and 7

I love you...

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page 8

So wonderful... at the bottom of the sea...

The tears she cries turn into bubbles.

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page 9

Euro: Come on.

Euro: It's filled with sand.

Euro: Naoto...

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page 10

Euro: I'm an idiot.

Euro: Good for nothing...

Euro: The only thing I can do is hinder the others.

Euro [in mind]: At the end, I couldn't find Lucia...

Euro [in mind]: And when I went back home, there was nobody...

Euro: Definately... Something has happend...

Euro [in mind]: Everyone is seperated...

Euro [in mind remembering Naoto]: "If one day I go missing..."

Euro [in mind remembering Naoto]: "Don't look for me."

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page 11

Euro [in mind]: Naoto that's something I can do.

Euro: Let's find them!

Euro: Please, take me to them!

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page 12

Levinas: You said that Lotus...

Levinas: Wished to destroy this world?

Levinas: I wasn't aware that kind of person existed...

Levinas [in mind]: Why? Maybe Lucia too?

Epsilon: Lotus hated everything...

Epsilon: That exists in this world, except his sister...

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page 13

Epsilon [in mind]: I too...

Epsilon: That's how it was.

Unknown: HIII! {Scream, I guess}

Unknown: Fight there's a fight!

Unknown: But you said we got thrown out of the other place!!

Unknown: Idiot, can't you see that the show is starting?!

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page 14

Unknown: This bug thinks he can fight me?!

Unknown: Brother, what should we do with him?

Unknown: How are we gonna cook him?

Epsilon: First...

Epsilon: I will kill you three.

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page 15

unknown: Pity, that boy is still young...

Unknown: He just had to mess with those three brothers...

Unknown: Let's see what tragedy we have today... hehehe.

Unknown: h-- Hey...

Unknown: Maybe that young guy is?

Unknown: T-- That is him, I'm sure!

Unknown: He is "The Swordsman of Death"...!

Unknown: Silver hair and a black cape...

Unknown: A handsome guy with a cold look...

Unknown: Then we have a big problem. What if we get involved and we get killed?

Unknown: fascinating

Unknown: heh... So what if he is "The swordsman of Death"?

Unknown: It is said he kills in a cruel fashion.

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page 16

Unknown: I know he is a handsome young man, but...

Unknown: The swordsman of Death has a... Hey...

[Lotus smiles]: Smile

Unknown: GYAAA!!!

Unknown: W-- What's happening?

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page 17

Unknown: Bro...!

Unknown: Bro...!

Unknown: Brother?!!!

Unknown: An...

Unknown: Instant death...

Unknown: EEK!

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page 18 and 19

Unknown: GULP {Unknown gulps}

Epsilon: SLURP {Epsilon slurps}

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Page 20

Unknown: Wow, you are great!

Unknown: How about...?

Unknown: Ah...?

Unknown: HIGYAAA!! {Unknown screams, duh}

Epsilon: You all have three seconds to get out...

Epsilon: I will kill whoever that stays.

[Countdown]: 3

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page 21

[Countdown]: 2

[Countdown]: 1

Epsilon: Do you want to die?

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page 22

Lotus: Hello, nice to meet you.

Lotus: My name is Lotus.

Lotus: I see that the rumor of the handsome boy was true.

Lotus: But it will be much more when you are older...

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page 23

Lotus: ... You have precious eyes.

Lotus: Eyes... That hate everything in this world...

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page 24

Lotus: You are like me.

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page 25

That was my meeting with Lotus...

After that, I was living with him...

And slowly I knew I could change bit by bit.

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page 26

Epsilon: Lotus, have you seen Rune? I haven't seen her all day...

Lotus: You are like me...

Lotus But with something distinct.

Epsilon: Lotus?

Lotus: Do you know what this is?

Epsilon [in mind]: That...

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page 27

Lotus: Although it is within my reach, I have something to protect.

Lotus: And you don't.

Epsilon [in mind]: He killed her...?

Lotus: Forget about that girl, she was bitter to you.

Lotus: She wanted to kill you someday.

Lotus: You might not remember, but I guess you murdered someone in her family.

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page 28

Lotus: I see that you are like me.

Epsilon [in mind]: What do you mean by that?

Lotus: I'm getting hungry.

From that day...

I stopped killing.

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page 29

Lotus: Stay here, Ep.

Lotus: I'll go with Naoto.

Epsilon: I'm coming too.

Lotus: We're entering the elphis' residence, it's better going with just a few.

Lotus: Also, I have an important mission for you...

Lotus: Naoto will come back when the sun rises.

Lotus: With Coral...

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page 30

Epsilon: And you?

Lotus: I...

Lotus: I will be in a bit of trouble.

And after that... you will return?

Or you want to die using all of your power?

I know...

Your life...

Lotus: I'll say it again, at dawn Naoto will bring Coral...

Lotus: If something comes to pass, you will protect her.

What will happen?

What is he thinking?

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page 31

Lotus: Anything is possible with the flying dragon.

Lotus: Promise me you will protect Coral, Epsilon.

Lotus: I will destroy Orgos.

Epsilon: Does it mean many people will die?

Lotus: yes

Lotus: I told you I hate everything in this world, just like you.

Epsilon: I...

Epsilon [in mind]: I too...

Epsilon: I am not like you!

Epsilon [in mind remembering Lotus]: "I have something to protect."

Epsilon [in mind remembering Lotus]: "And you don't..."

Epsilon: I...

Epsilon: I too have something to protect...

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page 32

Epsilon: I want to protect you.

Lotus: Hmm...

Lotus: But I hate you.

Those were...

The last words Lotus said to me...

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page 33

After that...

He did not appear after sunrise...

Nor was Orgos destroyed, as Lotus predicted...

The sun rose to noon...

But when I was about to leave...

A boy with cat ears and a girl who looked like Lotus...

Appeared in front of my eyes...

Then I understood...

What Lotus meant...

Epsilon: Levi...

Epsilon: You... Don't remember anything of that day?

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page 34

Levinas: Yes... That is... But...

Levinas [in mind]: After remembering Coral's name...

Levinas [in mind]: I feel that little by little my memory is clearing...

Levinas [in mind]: That day...

Levinas [in mind]: Did I really kill Lotus with my own hands...?

Epsilon: Levi...

Epsilon: I remember...

Levinas: But...

Epsilon: Still...

Epsilon: I think Lotus could still be alive...

Euro: Levinas!

Euro: Epsilon!

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page 35

Euro: BUAAAAH!

Animal: KHUU {Animal makes sound}

Levinas: Euro!

Euro: At last I've found you!

Levinas: We are all safe, except for Naoto and Lucia.

Euro: Eh?

Levinas: Hey Camu.

Euro: Camu.

Epsilon: Camu.

Camu: I've been found.

Camu: Actually...

Camu: I have decided not to see you anymore...

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page 36

Camu [in mind]: Erase the memory of Naoto...

Camu [in mind]: I thought I would leave after this obstacle...

Euro: Camu...

Euro: And Naoto...?

Euro: What happend to him...?

Camu: He has been killed...

Camu: By me.

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[End Chapter 16]
Edited by rarehunter_555, Jun 21 2010, 01:19 PM.
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格好いいさん
Wow! I'm surprised you've been so busy while I've been away!
I don't know Spanish, but what you've translated looks pretty much like the Japanese version. It's good seeing another translation because I can see a few places where I messed up.

i.e. 
君に近づいていつかすきをみて殺す気でいたんだ。
(You wrote) She wanted to kill you someday.
(I incorrectly wrote) You'd be getting close when she'd see your killer essence.

There's a lot of other examples where I had to take a guess and was wrong. But for the sake of a more accurate translation, I'm glad we have someone who can read Spanish a lot better than I can read Japanese! And if someday you ever get stuck on the Spanish, tell me and I can upload a page so we can compare it with the Japanese section. XD
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thanks, xD now we can get different perspectives. I know I musta messed up in some places too. hah lol
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Right... i havent posted my revision

(rare's) She wanted to kill you someday.
(charizardpal's) You'd be getting close when she'd see your killer essence.
(Kiran's) She only got close to you waiting for a chance to kill you.

Yea im revising with the chinese scans,
translator we have atm,
rare's spanish
charizardpal's japanese
kiran's chinese

i took the liberty in creative translation. im just waiting for my friend to finish the typeset
and as you could see theres indication of where the text goes... (what i think its intuitive direction)
lastly gimme an idea of what to put on the credit page
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Chapter 16: What Should Be Protected
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page 1
[right] It seems I have already forgotten... the pain of my tored up body... as well as why I am here...
[left]Seeing the sparkling bubbles risening from the darkness.
Chapter 16: Something to Protect (or What should be protected) either one works I dunno what sounds better
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page 2
[right]I'm not sure, but is that...
[middle]Coral?
[left]Am I at the bottom of the ocean?
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page 3
[top right]I can't talk...
[top]Lucia, at last I've found you...
I thought we would never meet again... Never would've thought I find you here.
[top]Here in this vast desert... Here at the bottom of the sea [top]
[top left]Generally speaking... if we got seperated, it would've been impossible for us to find each other!
[bottom right]So strange... Why can't I talk...
[bottom]But... I have always believed that we would meet again. [bottom]
[bottom left]Because... you and I are connected. [bottom]
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page 4
[top right]That is why... it can't be helped.
[top]Whatever you do, I will just follow.
[top]Because I...
[center right]Sorry about what happened... I'll just go along with it!
Whatever you do, we will still follow you...
[center left]Levinas, Epsilon, Euro, and Camu too... All like you very much...
[bottom]Dammit... Why can't I talk...
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page 5
[top right]Lucia...
[top]Why is it always at times like this?
[bottom right]Even though you are right next to me, why can't I speak out?
[bottom right]Lucia, Even if...
[bottom left]Even if you are just an illusion...
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page 6 and 7
I love you...
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page 8
[top]How fortunate... here at the bottom of the sea...
[bottom]these tears would just vanish with currents.
Kiran's note:It said bubbles instead of currents but that sounds stupid in english.
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page 9
Euro: ah...
Euro: It's filled with sand.

Euro: Naoto...
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page 10
[top right]Euro: I'm such an idiot...
[lower right]Euro: such a good for nothing...
[lower left]Euro: The only thing I can do is hinder them.

[top]Euro [in mind]: At the end, I couldn't find Lucia...
[bottom]Euro [in mind]: And when I returned, everyone was gone...

[top right]Mount: Hahh...
[top left]Euro: Something Definitely happened...
[bottom]Euro [in mind]: Everyone is gone...

[top]Naoto: "If I disappear one day..."
[bottom]Naoto: "don't look for me."
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page 11
Euro [in mind]: Naoto... but that's the only thing I can do!
Euro: Let's find everyone!

Euro: Please, take me to them!

He-yah!!
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page 12
Levinas: You said that Lotus...

Levinas: wanted to destroy this world?

Levinas: I don't think he's that type of person...
Levinas [in mind]: How is that possible... If so then maybe Lucia too...

Epsilon: Other than his sister...
Epsilon: Lotus hated everything in this world.
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page 13
Levinas [in mind]: Does that... include me?
Epsilon: That's how he was.

Unknown: nya...

[top right]Unknown: Hey! There's a fight!
{top left]Unknown: Didn't I say the three of them are here, Wanna go else where to eat?
[bottom]Unknown: Idiot, can't you see that the show just getting started!
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page 14
Unknown: Hey scrawny little brat... you think you can mess with me?!

Unknown: Brother, what should we do with him?
Unknown: How should we eat him?

Epsilon: I will...
Epsilon: kill the three of you first!
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page 15
unknown: Pity, that boy is still young...
Unknown: He just had to mess with those three...
Unknown: We're gonna have a show today... hehehe.

Unknown: h-- Hey...
Unknown: Isn't he...?

Unknown: T-- That is him, I'm sure of it!
Unknown: He is the "Swordsman of Death"...!
TL note: It literially say Deathgod swordsman, but that sounds stupid.

Unknown: Silver hair and a black cape...
Unknown: A handsome guy with a icy glare...

Unknown: This isn't good... What if we get involved and we get killed?
Unknown: so handsome...

Lotus: So he's the "Swordsman of Death"...
Lotus: they say the way he kill is pretty brutal.
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page 16
Unknown: From what I heard, even though he is handsome, [right]
Unknown: but he's suppose to be with long red hair... [top]
unknown: *Drool*[left]

Lotus: Hehe

Unknown: GYAAA!!!
Unknown: H-- How?
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page 17

Unknown: Bro...
Unknown: Bro...
Unknown: Brother?!!!

Unknown: A single...
Unknown: Instant...

lil girl: ngh...

unknown: ah...
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page 18 and 19
Unknown: GULP

Epsilon: *lick*
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Page 20
Unknown: Wow, you are strong!
Unknown: How about...

Unknown: Ah...

Unknown: HIGYAAA!! {Unknown screams, duh}
Epsilon: You all have three seconds to get out...
Epsilon: I will kill whoever that stays.

[Countdown]: 3
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page 21
[Countdown]: 2
[Countdown]: 1
Epsilon: You wanna die?
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page 22
Lotus: Nice to meet you.
Lotus: My name is Lotus.

Lotus: So the rumor about you being handsome was true.
Lotus: But you will be even sharper when you are older...
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page 23
Lotus: ... You have nice eyes.
Lotus: Eyes... That hate everything in this world...
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page 24
Lotus: You are just like me.
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page 25
That was how I met Lotus...
After that, I was living with him...

And slowly I started to change.
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page 26
Epsilon: Lotus, have you seen Rune? I haven't seen her all day...

Lotus: You are just like me....
Lotus: But there's one distinct difference.

Epsilon: Lotus?

Lotus: Do you know what it is?

Epsilon [in mind]: That hair clip...
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page 27
Lotus: Although it is out of my reach, There's something I must protect.
Lotus: But... that is something you don't have.

Epsilon [in mind]: He killed Rune?
Lotus: Forget about that girl, she have always despised you.
Lotus: She only got close to you waiting for a chance to kill you.
Lotus: You might not remember, but aren't you the type of person who murdered her family.
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page 28
Lotus: So you are like me.

Epsilon [in mind]: What did you meant by that?

Lotus: I'm getting hungry.

From that day on...
I stopped killing.
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page 29
Lotus: Stay here, Epsilon. [top]

Lotus: I'll go with Naoto.

Epsilon: I'm coming too.
Lotus: We're entering the Elphis' domain, it's better if we went with a smaller group.

Lotus: Also, I have an important mission for you...

Lotus: Naoto will come back when the sun rises.
Lotus: With Coral...
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page 30
Epsilon: And you?

Lotus: I...
Lotus: I create a diversion.

And after that... you will return? {right]
Or you want to die using all of your power? [right]
I already know...[left]
You won't live long...[left]

Lotus: I'll say it again, at dawn Naoto will bring Coral here...
Lotus: Epsilon, if something happens, you will protect her.

What's gonna happen?
Is he really gonna...
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page 31
Lotus: Take her as far as you can with the flying dragon...
Lotus: Epsilon promise me... you will protect Coral.
Lotus: I will destroy all of Orgos.

Epsilon: So you mean... a lot of people will die?
Lotus: yes...
Lotus: I told you... I hate everything in this world, just like you.

Epsilon: I...
Epsilon [in mind]: I too...
Epsilon: I am not like you!

Epsilon [in mind remembering Lotus]: "There's something I must protect."
Epsilon [in mind remembering Lotus]: "But... that is something you don't have."

Epsilon: I...
Epsilon [in mind]: I too have something to protect...
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page 32

Epsilon: I want to protect you!

Lotus: Hmm...
Lotus: But I hate you.

Those were...
The last words Lotus said to me...
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page 33

After that... [right]
They didn't come back after sunrise...[right]
Nor was Orgos destroyed, as Lotus said...[right]
As noon approach... [left]

And I was about to give up...

A boy with cat ears and a girl who looked like Lotus...
Appeared in front of my eyes...

Then I understood...
Lotus has already...

Epsilon: Levi...
Epsilon: so you don't remember anything about that day...
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page 34
Levinas: Yea... Even though I can't remember...
Levinas [in mind]: After remembering Coral's name...
Levinas [in mind]: I feel that it's coming back to me...

Levinas [in mind]: That day...
Levinas [in mind]: Did I really kill Lotus with my own hands...?

Epsilon: Levi...
Epsilon: I've been thinking...
Levinas: But...

Epsilon: Lotus...
Epsilon: could he still be alive...

Euro: Levinas!
Euro: Epsilon!
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page 35
Euro: BUAAAAH![top right]
Animal: KHUU [top]
Levinas: Euro! [right]
Euro: At last I've found you! [bottom left]

Levinas: So... except for Naoto and Lucia, everyone from Desert Coral is here.
Euro: Eh?

Levinas: Hey Camu.
Euro: Camu?
Epsilon: Camu!
Camu: Damn... I've been found...

Camu: Actually...
Camu: I don't to see you guys anymore...
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page 36
Camu's though: I was gonna...
erase all memories related to Naoto, then disappear... [you could ignore the translation for panel one if you want]

Levinas: Camu...
Levinas: Naoto...
Levinas: What happened to Naoto?

Camu: I have already...
Camu: kill Naoto!
Edited by kiran, May 23 2010, 12:05 AM.
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