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Fakey Teaches Good Writing Skills(Applicable to Roleplays); Just to show you all I'm not as dumb and hateful as you think.
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Alrighty, I've decided to do this because people often do things in the SSU2(I'd have preferred if it were called SNA) RP that are really big no-nos in writing. So basically, I'm here to edumacate you.

Lesson One: Good Characters and Bad Characters.


Good characters and bad characters.

What is a good character? Are they the hero? Sometimes, yes. It all depends on your moral standpoint. But a character's morals are not what makes a character good or bad. You could hate a character to death, but they still might be a good character. Hell, the reason you hate them might be because they're so well written.

To put it simply, a good character is a character that fits in all snug with the plot, and has consistent behaviors that match their traits and personality, while a bad character contrasts horribly with the setting and makes no sense whatsoever. (Looking at you, every 'speshul' furfag oc that isn't the natural colors of their species and is a total 'kawaii desu desu' sparkle shit.) Posted Image

It's like the difference between drinking fine wine(The Plot) with either crackers(Bad characters) or a sandwich(Good characters).

The crackers are unrewarding and are only there to serve as padding. They feel tacked on, and often unnecessary, and often leave you feeling like you could've enjoyed the wine better without them. Posted Image

But eating the sandwich, you aren't getting padding. You're getting a meal that feels rewarding, and often enhances how you feel about the wine. Sometimes it might be the sandwiches that make you come back for more wine, instead of the wine itself. Posted Image

So while good characters make a story feel fun and rewarding to read, badly done, or unexplained characters can detract from the story itself.

Or you could just be a fukken pig and eat it all...Posted Image

Say you want your characters to have some mystery and intrigue left behind. Wouldn't that mean you have to leave out details so you can make the mystery?

"Hey, I think I'll leave out some details to seems mysterious, and then make something up to fill the holes as I go." Posted Image

*ding dong*

"Uh, hello!?" Posted Image

*bwooip*

"GUESS WHAT ASSHOLE, YOU'RE WRONG!" Posted Image

*punch*

You never just 'make it up as you go'. As a writer, I have done this before, and it has made me abandon one story and put another on hiatus so I could write its prequel. YOU NEVER MAKE THE DECISION TO MAKE IT UP AS YOU GO, DO YOU HEAR ME!?

You should always fully plan out your character and then not tell anyone minor details that can make your character all the better. Now, don't make these details something shocking unless you want wild mass guessing to go on, and everyone winds up with a wildly different view of how a character thinks(Which can be very bad in a roleplay, as it'll start a huge shitstorm.). Not to mention that the details need to be consistent with a character's behavior and mentality. We'll do a little comparison.

Which one of these vastly different characters is more likely to give a heart-felt, long winded speech about your enemies and fighting spirit?(Study up on SSU2 to understand this next part. If not, then just nod and smile, because I will explain the choice made at the end.)

Bloodrunner Walking Heavy Metal Album Cover

Man-X Cartoon

Borys Possibly Depressed Ukrainian Man, Possibly Has Sand In His Buns


We can immediately eliminate Man-X as a choice, because his only real goal is to spread smiles and cheer. Even his powers reflect this. He can't kill, but he can pull several cartoony antics in order to get a smile or two. He isn't fit for the speech because it would be oddly out of place on a character that completely misses the point, sneaks up on it, and drops an anvil on it. Posted Image

Now the next one to be unlikely to give the speech is Borys. Borys would seem like a logical choice, given the other options, but considering his stoic attitude and rather depressing outlook on his own life means that it'll take years of therapy and education for him to accept that superpowers don't automatically turn someone into an abomination in the eyes of whatever deity he believes in. (Personally, I think he worships a great sky seal with crab pincers for eyes and nipples made of dog shit, but that's just me.)
So Borys is a long way from giving the hotblooded speech. Posted Image

"WAIT! WHAT!?" Posted Image "YOU'RE TELLING US THE OBVIOUSLY STUPID METALHEAD IS THE ONE WHO GIVES THE SPEECH!?" Posted Image

*punch*

"UH, YEAH. THAT IS EXACTLY WHAT I'M FUCKING TELLING YOU." Posted Image

WELL SHIT SON, LOOKS LIKE THIS STUPID METALHEAD MILITARY MAN IS GONNA SET YOU STRAIGHT.

Now I know most of the people on this website can identify patterns and generally fall into what I consider human. I say most of the people, because Miocene is clearly insane.
(Seriously, he keeps telling the site bronies that we're wasting our time. Each time we refute him and tell him we're sticking with it, he comes back doing the same shit, with the same faulty logic, expecting a different result. He makes a horse's ass out of himself, basically. Posted Image For those of you not in the know, the definition of insanity is doing something over and over again and expecting a different outcome.)

But yeah, I generally like to assume my brothers in the scientific arts aren't idiots. (And don't say speculative biology isn't art. It is, and you know it deep down to be true.)

But see, you have to look at the patterns to see why Blood is the most likely to give that hot-blooded speech. Right off the bat, without knowing anything beyond 'metalhead soldier', you can make deductions, like a fully-functioning braining thing should be able to.

"Alright, let's see. He's a musician, so he must love words. He's not as dumb as I thought. He's a metalhead and a soldier, so it makes sense to give a fiery speech. If he's a soldier and a musician, then he must really believe in freedom and fighting for it. So that must mean he'd give a fiery, long-winded speech about fighting spirit, because it totally does fit him, now that I see it." Posted Image

*ding dong*

"Hello?"

"IT'S ME AGAIN, ASSHOLE!" Posted Image

"OH, FUCK NO! WHAT DID I DO WRONG!" Posted Image

"I WANTED TO CONGRATULATE YOUR ASS ON A JOB WELL DONE! LET'S MOVE ALONG!" Posted Image



So yeah. Man-X is too cartoonish for the speech, Borys is too Borys, but Blood is just right.


Now let's go deeper and see Everything about a character, so that we can see more contrasts with how the world works. I will be using the same characters for examples, with one more to do so. So let's sort them shall we?

Good Characters: Bloodrunner, Borys, Man-X

Bad Characters: Sarge, Rianna/Ryan, Artie

Now let's go back to 'making it up as you go' and 'intentionally leaving out details'. This will make or break a character.

We'll use Blood and Sarge, who was created by Dial, for comparison. The detail being looked over is 'Mobility'.

Let's look at Sarge first. Sarge is a blind, old military man who was experimented on. The experiments gave him the ability to see through rats. Sarge is good at heart, but refuses to bend to the law.

Blood is up next. Blood is a member of a secret military unit called the Hellhounds. He protects and serves the American public, and is very vocal about freedom. He has fire and psychic abilities that allow him to make the best of his musical talent. Blood is hotblooded and rash.

Now Blood seems like a bad character, while Sarge seems like a good one. But if that is the case, then why did Dial abandon Sarge in order to make a new character.

when making a character, one needs to think about the setting.It just so happens that the setting is a massive alternate version of Louisville, Kentucky. Now which character would fit a giant city better? The feeble old man that walks through alleyways, or the hotblooded metalhead who tears through the streets on a motorcycle?

When on makes a character, they must give that character mobility, especially when the setting is huge. So now Sarge has restricted mobility, while Blood is free to dark from one place to the next. Because of his restricted mobility, he couldn't keep up with the other character when the left the city.

Dial was onto something when he gave his character the ability to command rats, but he shouldn't have stopped there. He should've given some forethought and gave his character some mobility. Daredevil is blind, but he doesn't let that stop him.

So Sarge isn't a bad character, just ungraceful.



Next up for comparison: Borys and Rianna. The detail being looked over is 'Neatness'.

Now, in creating Borys, Canis made sure to make everything about his character known to himself, and told almost everything about him, but withheld some info in order to keep some material for plots and conversations. Thus, Borys is a neatly made character who won't run into making any contradictory statements about himself anytime soon. Posted Image (Note to Canis: I really love this character, even if I had Blood give him the demeaning pet name 'Sandy'. I'd really love to see the fight scene between Vicky and Sandy. World War III just can't come quick enough.)

But in creating Rianna, Nano wasn't sure what he wanted, even changing his character from a male to a female halfway through writing the post, and then coming up with 'She accidentally changed from male to female in a power-related accident' and failed to give their character any real depth beyond 'OOH SHINY'. Thus, this character a big fat sign post that says 'My creator made me up on the spot and didn't put forth any real effort!' Posted Image



Finally, Man-X vs Artie.

Now both of these characters we're created by Rex. The detail we observe here is 'In-Character/Out-of-Character Consistency'.

Man-X is a goofy ball of joy who you expect nothing but cartoony antics from. That is what you get.

Artie is sold to us as a character that takes things about as seriously as Man-X does, is popular at the orphanage, and would never try anything too dangerous. What we got was this emofag who isn't cheerful or goofy at all, sat alone at lunch, and did things that were extremely dangerous.

This is like the difference between giving a man sugar for his tea and giving him crack-cocaine and a straw.
That is what we call lying. And lying is BAD. Posted Image

So while Man-X is constantly in character, Artie is always out of character. You wanna know when a character is allowed to break character? When it's funny as hell, or leads up to a big "Oh shit, Dumbass had a point. How did we miss that?" moment. Posted Image

Basically, if you can't keep your character in character, go back and give them schizophrenia, because I'm getting really fuckin' tired of seeing characters getting robbed of their identities.





Keeping those in mind, let's move on to how you make a good character.

One should craft their characters in a process that all forms of art go through.
 


Rough Idea: In visual arts, this is sketching. In literary arts, this is jotting down your thoughts. In the performing arts, this is smoking ten joints and then raiding your neighbor's fridge because you're out of banana guacamole for your chicken banana guacamole with mayo sandwich.

Expansion: Build onto the idea to make it more whole.

Refinement: Take the whole and give it emotion.

Whittling: Remove things that seem unnecessary, and fill in the gaps left behind in a human way.

Refinement 2: Put on the finishing touches.

Final Look: The idea is finished, and has been completely fleshed out. You can stop now, or repeat any of the stages, so long as the end result isn't a big fat steaming pile of bear shit.




Now, to finish off lesson one, I'm giving you freeloaders homework.

I want you to use the method above for creating a character. You will send in the character to me and I will decided if you pass or fail.

The character can be anything you want it to be. Superhero, flaming homosexual, both Posted Image, or some turtle thing. It just needs to be a character.

Homework is due one week from now, on Thursday, June 7th. U.S. by Noon U.S. Central time. You can send it in any time before, but if it is late, you automatically fail the assignment. Posted Image


Now go forth and CREATE!

Send it to me via PM.
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But Sir? Why are you doing this for free!?! :D This is no Grammar School this is teh internetz ;)


Cheers Fakey :) Im still going to play as Jonah occasionally but hes going to be the all seeing eye and will step in when hes needed. I didn't want him to be uber mobile as I wanted to show that there are supers who are not physically able. I always imagined him like Xavier but smelling of piss and booze. With a great big bushy beard!


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...Ok, a few things.

1. Man-X can be capable of a dramatic speech. At the moment, yes, it would be out of place for him, but over time, Man-X was going to go through events that show off his lesser-seen dramatic side. Just because he’s a cartoon, doesn’t mean he has to be funny all the time, he just wants to be. There are moments, which haven’t come up yet, in which he would drop the funny act and get serious. It’s kind of like the 10th doctor. He can be silly and badass in the same scene
2. if you remember, Man-X was described with an evil twist to him, and a want to change the world to a cartoon by any means possible. That was dropped and Man-X is now a hero. No one seemed to care then. The 3 things that you point out in Artie are, in order.
a. he’s only grumpy because he was being harassed and later kidnapped by a flame man holding an ax to his neck. He’s being remarkably brave for a kid in that situation. He was happy before, mostly during the battle and interacting with Man-X
b. he sat alone because he was drawing, that’s it. Granted I also needed a reason for Max-X to pick him out from all the other kids, so a bit of bad writing, I admit. I’m hoping that when they meet up again, the chemistry between them will be clearer.
c. At what point did I say he wasn’t a risk taker? Yes, he was a shy kid before, but he changed after his powers set in.

Arties original concept was a springboard for jokes with Man-X. part of the reason I’m not writing Artie like Man-X is because I didn’t want 2 carbon copy characters. That sounds like bad writing. If you would rather see them like that, I’m willing to start. It’s also weird to write for a kid, sometimes I feel he’s acting a little to adult, which maybe where the risk taker thing came from.

Ironically enough, I was thinking that Man-X was the weaker of the 2. I’m afraid that I’m going to run out of jokes for him. I can only throw TNT sticks so many times before it gets old. I’m surprised he got as popular with you all as he did.

The point I’m trying to get to is that I’m not that confident a writer. I thought I was doing great with Artie and starting to fall through with Man-X. if you have any thoughts on how can improve them, and my writing in general, I’ll be happy for some help. Just please be kind about it and don’t go grammar Nazi on me, I know that already.

While were on the topic, I feel I must address something you didn’t. characters being to strong. Some of the characters are exhibiting powers and abilities that seem to give them an unfair advantage. The resent fight over invicagoop is a perfect example. Bloods ability to go supernova is something not matched in any other character. I know that’s been resolved, I just wanted to clear the air. Josephs access to technology also seems to be reaching unfair levels. He seems to have a weapon to counteract every super he meets. I don’t know if that’s 100% true, I’m just keeping my eye on it and you might want to do the same.
If a character is super powerful then there is no fun in watching them fight because you always know they are going to win. You would want people to feel that they could still fail, even if it is highly unlikely. That’s what I did with Artie. The power of creation is a big power to have, so I put a lot of restrictions on the power so it was still fair.

I’m not trying to say don’t do this and don’t do that, I just want this game to go as smoothly as possible, and the game has stalled over this issue. So please, just be careful with how powerful your character gets.
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I was just trying to counteract Fakey's insanely powerful abilities. We didn't do too well against the zombies or Artie, remember.

(Wow, I only just got the joke with Artie's name. :P )
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Understandable Russ, I’m just being careful to prevent these freezes from happening again.
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May 31 2012, 04:16 AM
But Sir? Why are you doing this for free!?! :D This is no Grammar School this is teh internetz ;)


Cheers Fakey :) Im still going to play as Jonah occasionally but hes going to be the all seeing eye and will step in when hes needed. I didn't want him to be uber mobile as I wanted to show that there are supers who are not physically able. I always imagined him like Xavier but smelling of piss and booze. With a great big bushy beard!




Ah. So like the guy who gives you the sword in the original Legend Of Zelda? So fun fun fun.

trex841
May 31 2012, 08:58 AM
...Ok, a few things.

1.Man-X can be capable of a dramatic speech. At the moment, yes, it would be out of place for him, but over time, Man-X was going to go through events that show off his lesser-seen dramatic side. Just because he’s a cartoon, doesn’t mean he has to be funny all the time, he just wants to be. There are moments, which haven’t come up yet, in which he would drop the funny act and get serious. It’s kind of like the 10th doctor. He can be silly and badass in the same scene.
2.if you remember, Man-X was described with an evil twist to him, and a want to change the world to a cartoon by any means possible. That was dropped and Man-X is now a hero. No one seemed to care then. The 3 things that you point out in Artie are, in order.
a.he’s only grumpy because he was being harassed and later kidnapped by a flame man holding an ax to his neck. He’s being remarkably brave for a kid in that situation. He was happy before, mostly during the battle and interacting with Man-X
b.he sat alone because he was drawing, that’s it. Granted I also needed a reason for Max-X to pick him out from all the other kids, so a bit of bad writing, I admit. I’m hoping that when they meet up again, the chemistry between them will be clearer.
c.At what point did I say he wasn’t a risk taker? Yes, he was a shy kid before, but he changed after his powers set in.

Arties original concept was a springboard for jokes with Man-X. part of the reason I’m not writing Artie like Man-X is because I didn’t want 2 carbon copy characters. That sounds like bad writing. If you would rather see them like that, I’m willing to start. It’s also weird to write for a kid, sometimes I feel he’s acting a little to adult, which maybe where the risk taker thing came from.

Ironically enough, I was thinking that Man-X was the weaker of the 2. I’m afraid that I’m going to run out of jokes for him. I can only throw TNT sticks so many times before it gets old. I’m surprised he got as popular with you all as he did.

The point I’m trying to get to is that I’m not that confident a writer. I thought I was doing great with Artie and starting to fall through with Man-X. if you have any thoughts on how can improve them, and my writing in general, I’ll be happy for some help. Just please be kind about it and don’t go grammar Nazi on me, I know that already.

While were on the topic, I feel I must address something you didn’t. characters being to strong. Some of the characters are exhibiting powers and abilities that seem to give them an unfair advantage. The resent fight over invicagoop is a perfect example. Bloods ability to go supernova is something not matched in any other character. I know that’s been resolved, I just wanted to clear the air. Josephs access to technology also seems to be reaching unfair levels. He seems to have a weapon to counteract every super he meets. I don’t know if that’s 100% true, I’m just keeping my eye on it and you might want to do the same.
If a character is super powerful then there is no fun in watching them fight because you always know they are going to win. You would want people to feel that they could still fail, even if it is highly unlikely. That’s what I did with Artie. The power of creation is a big power to have, so I put a lot of restrictions on the power so it was still fair.

I’m not trying to say don’t do this and don’t do that, I just want this game to go as smoothly as possible, and the game has stalled over this issue. So please, just be careful with how powerful your character gets.



1. I'm not saying he can't be serious. I'm saying he can be serious, but you still can't take him seriously.

I imagine him looking like this for that very reason.

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a. A man who promised ice cream tubs is Artie behaved. By the way, only Kate is getting that tub of ice cream now.

b. Ah. I understand then. But if you wanted to write it better, in order to make sense, perhaps have a few kids watching him over his shoulder.

c. As a rule, kids aren't going to go out of their way to do anything that might wind up killing everybody they know. And they tends to listen to adults, and when they meet someone from the military, they never fight back. They only ask "How many people have you killed?" Which Blood would have gladly answered.

You want writing tips to make Artie not seem like an adult? Or tips to make Man-X not repetitive? I'll give them to you when you send in your homework.


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May 31 2012, 09:43 AM
I was just trying to counteract Fakey's insanely powerful abilities. We didn't do too well against the zombies or Artie, remember.

(Wow, I only just got the joke with Artie's name. :P )


Blood is not insanely powerful. He's a living heavy metal album cover. He's got a bike that drives up buildings, flies, and can turn ninety degrees and keep the momentum it has.

He's still as powerful as he used to be. He's not some insanely powerful monster. He's just using his powers in a way that makes him seem insanely AWESOME. If you can't tell the difference between flashy kills and over powered kills, then you clearly haven't been paying attention.

When he killed the infected, he could've just burned them all to a crisp, one by one. But to him, that isn't any fun. So he puts on a show. And just as you think the last infected is going to escape, he drives up a building and slices it in half with the motorcycle.

Blood's fire abilities are nowhere near the level of his mother.

The only reason I used solar temperatures is because you tried to use indestrucigoo. Even after I broke the transmitter.


You assume Blood wants nothing but bloodshed and killing. He just told you he would come peacefully if you gave him a beer and a new official Rainbow t-shirt signed by all the members of the band. If anything, this takes Joseph from 'super genius' to 'complete fucking retard'. Do you know how stupid you have to be in order to deny an offer like that?

Sure the goo would make him come in peacefully. At first. Then, when you free him, he rams it up a guards ass, takes the controller and cranks it all the way up, killing him. Then you realize you should've just given him the beer and t-shirt. And then your eyes have seen the glory of the coming of the lord, and HE. IS. PISSED.

Glory, glory hallelujah, Mighty Joe Young.


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May 31 2012, 10:08 AM
@Fakey's talk about Rianna: All true. Although, since she's just been put in a sane (AKA moody) mood, we may have just dropped in a very deep pool when it comes to depth.


Actually, even if you just drop into a pool, it may as well be the kiddy pool. It doesn't matter how much depth you add to them, if your character is shoddily made, no one will care for them.

You wanna know how many incarnations my pony OC Brain Storm the Megaloceros went through?

Nine.

Nine iterations until I got him just right.

Eight failures.

Of those, only seven were even deer at all.

Hell, even his appearance has changed with each incarnation.

Originally, he was a griffon without much depth. I never even drew this one.

Then he was a deer, but he still had no depth.

Then he was a deer and psychotic.

Then he was a deer and psychotic and PARANOID.

Then he was a psychotic scientist with an underground bunker.

Then he was a sad scientist with a gene-spliced daughter.

Then he was an scientific illustrator with a clone daughter.

Then he was a scientific illustrator with an actual daughter.

Then I went back to the drawing board and made him someone you could recognize as a person, instead of as his title. This is the current Brain.




I have no doubts in my mind that Rianna will fail miserably. And I'm so confident in it that I'm going to tell you this here and now.

Go make a new character, Nano. Create everything about that character BEFORE you post them. Don't make it up as you go. Trust me. I had a story die because I literally made it up as I went. This rarely ends well.

If you make a character, treat the character like a person. Someone with life.
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You know fakey, for someone who's 'only trying to help improve your characters', your kind of coming of as an @$$hole. You tell the new guy to the game that he is going to crash and burn. Nice. There’s criticism, then there's flaming. Also, this is big advice and orders your giving out for someone WHO DOSEN’T WORK ON THIS RP.

Just because Man-X is a toon, he can’t be taken seriously? The 10th docter did things like lick doors and people worshiped him.

“A man who promised ice cream tubs is Artie behaved” I’m not sure what that means. And I don’t care about ice cream. And I don’t think your getting close to Katie.

I’d think he would be distracted be shoulder lookers, but you do have a point there I admit.

I still don’t think he would warm up all that much to the man that STUCK AN AX TO HIS NECK!!!

“Blood is not insanely powerful.” YES HE IS!!! I don’t care if you were only aggravated at the goo, YOU REACHED THE TEMPERATURE OF THE SUN!!! And the knowledge that he can do that at any time, even if he finds that boring, makes things less suspenseful to read, because we know that he can blast away any enemy in a millisecond if he wanted to.

It’s hard to write for an RP. You have to get a post in good and fast before someone else dose and changes the situation. And you never know what might happen next, so that really important piece of dialogue you were holding on to or that special move that would have ended the battle might have to get dropped before it’s time or forgotten all together.

That post was the single longest post I ever typed here. In it, I admitted that I am not an experienced writer and that I need help. So saying you get help after you do my homework assignment, coupled with the fact that I really care for Artie and Man-X, and anything I create, really kind of hurts. I also understand that you have valid ideas and help to give out to people. Your just being to harsh about it.

Sorry if this seems chopped up, it’s late here.
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I'm not flaming. I'm telling the cold, hard truth. How about instead of a story as the example, I tell you what happen to characters I decided to make up as I went.

Midori Mark 1: Destroyed him because he ran into a wall with where I could take him. He was shallow and I only thought of him as a toy to play with. Not as a person.

The Crocodile: More well thought out, but irrational and messy. RP was cut short before I could dispose of him.

Kal Illusious: Gained power at the rate of a Bug-type Pokemon. Was a complete and total failure. Most likely the reason the Enter the Pilot roleplay failed.

Ozzy MacSabaton: Complete and utter failure. I killed him by making him overdose on LSD and kill himself by caving in the lake he'd blown open for the group.

Kathy: Too emotionless for a woman who lost her husband in a crash landing onto an alien planet. The first playthrough of RECON ended around the time that a bunch of Silent were chasing the group out of the Silent capital.


I don't know about you, but I'd warm up to someone who is basically my big bad bodyguard and then they offer to spoil me with ice cream and toys. I'd take that offer pretty quick, 'cus hey. FREE SHIT.

But then again, Artie must be one of those slow kids. Like Sweetie Belle.

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Face it, Sweetie. You're kinda slow in the noggin.


Hey, I never said he could reach the temp of the sun in his profile. I was getting pissed with Russ and his indestructible goop, and now that I think of it, I should have called him on his BS goop sooner. But then again, my competitive nature got the best of me. Damn hormones.


Bro, all teachers have their methods. some take the soft, pansy method of teaching.

I teach like Egoraptor.

Here, watch this.




SEE WHERE I GET MY TEACHING ADVICE FROM?
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AX! TO NECK! He isn't stupid; he knows that isn't any form of good.

Ok, what if he lets his creations fight for him, and he slinks into the back. But not to far, because he still needs to control them.
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Yeah. Sure.
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May 31 2012, 10:23 PM
But then again, Artie must be one of those slow kids. Like Sweetie Belle.

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Face it, Sweetie. You're kinda slow in the noggin.
My argument against is in this comic.
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She's also pink in the comic.
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